Grammar Mistakes:
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a unique storyline compared"
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pok?mon"
(you wrote it correctly in the starting journal so I decided to mention it here)
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which you can find at Route 3" or "
and you can find it in Route 3"
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it's one of the rarest". "Most rarest" is incorrect.
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criminals called Team Voltage tried to catch it for years"
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use it for their own goals"
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They also want to steal some energy from a Power Plant called New Freesia so they achieve by forcing a Pok?mon to Mega Evolve." //
What is this supposed to mean?
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A career is not something that "takes place", it's an occupation that you have or that you aim for.
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I've always dreamed of becoming a Pok?mon Trainer" and I suggest you to end the sentence with "but I don't have the courage to do so"
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if you're about to go to that cave" and I suggest you to proceed with "in order to find my son" instead of "and find my son"
-I suggest you to change this dialogue to "
Which one of these pok?mon would you like to take?"
-I suggest you to change this dialogue to "
I wouldn't get into that cave if I were you kid."
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Your pok?mon look tired[.] You should give them a rest"
-I suggest you to change this dialogue to "
Tobias: Oh [player]! You scared me!"
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So you found me, huh?", "you've find me" is incorrect.
-You... didn't really put that much thought into the dialogues, huh..? I feel like each new message is filled with tons of grammar issues. Seriously, just read this: "
I've heard some noise while I'm training my Zorua so I have a little look of what's going on and found some guys dressed in yellow trying to kidnap some rare Pokemon that I've never seen before."
Where should I begin: the lack of commas, the incorrect "I'm" instead of "I was" or the weird "I have a little look" expression that barely makes sense?
I suggest you to replace it with something like: "I've heard some noises while I was training my Zorua, so I decided to take a look and was able to see some guys dressed in yellow trying to kidnap a pok?mon that I've never seen before."
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I don't think that it's a good idea to go through this path yet"
I think I'll just stop with the grammar issues right here because I can already see that this hack will be plagued with many more of these. I seriously encourage you to overhaul all the texts at some point down the road.
Weird things:
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What is "this pok?mon" you're talking to me about? I can't see anything.
-The fanfare that is played when choosing your starter pok?mon plays before the "[player] received [pok?mon]." message and that shouldn't happen.
-The playable character's mom should be able to heal their pok?mon.
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I mean.. this is probably one of the weirdest ways of blocking the Player's path that I ever seen. I mean, this is literally a school, for pete's sake.
-Back to Begonia Village after defeating some Grunt in the Begonia Cave, I noticed that I was able to get into the school but the kids have no msgboxes and the teacher looks like freaking Lorelei.
-Begonia Village, Route 1, Route 2, Amaryllis Town, the 2 maps of Begonia Cave, Route 4, Route 3, Columbine Town, Heather Town, Route 6, Route 7, Aster Town and I have yet to find one hidden item. And by that, I mean that you didn't put any.
-If you go to Route 3 from Route 6, there's this "I don't think it's a good idea to go through this path yet." msgbox that doesn't allow you to go back, which doesn't really make any sense.
-The 1st trainer in Route 7 says "Go Roggenrola go!" but he only has a Makuhita.
-Pretty sure my character's head should appear where Aster Town's point in the Town Map is, instead of having Leaf's head appear in the middle of nowhere
-There's 5 icons in the bag's UI even though there's only 3 pockets.
-When you find Charlotte in the Aster Tower after having defeated her in Aster Town's Gym, she looks entirely different than before.
