Hm. Well, for one, a question came to my mind: what kind of magic, and what kind of technology? These are terms that have gotten standards, over all the times they've been used. You mention water and earth, does magic have to do with the elements? On a different matter, apart from the setting, the plot seems... random, and quite normal. There is the hero, and the villain, by the looks and sounds of it. I suggest you find something to spice it up a bit; saying this, without knowing what you have already planned. Also, you place these characters as if they have to be used by others. Why not let others make their own characters? Overall, I'd say you could work on it a bit more, add some nice but crucial details that bind the setting with the plot, the magic and the machinery with the storyline.
I understand where you are coming from. I just used Momo and Lucus because this is actually a story I had to write for an assignment so I had to come up with a character or two who could take on the villain. I'm basically turning this story into an RP. I will let people come up with their own characters. Being the GM (I'll probably find someone else to GM with me) but I might use Momo or Lucus as my characters since I had to create them to begin with :P There will be different races to choose from as well. Humans and Drone are just two of the races. I'm working on the others.
The plot is where I am spending the most time tweeking. It is exciting in the story but I know I have to turn the plot into an RP plot since I won't know how my participants will "act" out the story. I'm trying to pick some major points out of the story that will help guide the RP and am putting them to the side. Once I feel like I have enough I'll combine them and see what kind of plot it is or if I have to end up making something completely new.
Right now I just wanted to see how people would react to the idea of a RP like this and if I would even have anyone join. It would suck a lot to do all this work for it and no one bothers to join. :\ But I guess that's the risk everyone takes when making RPs. :P
The magic will be elemental based: Earth, Wind, Water, Fire, and then Light and Dark. Earth beats Wind, Wind beats Water, Water beats Fire, and Fire beats Earth. Like in Pokémon the elemental order will determine how much damage is done in battle. All attacks will do some damage if they hit but if say a fire attack is used on a water magician the damage will be halved. Light and Dark beat each other but are neutral to the other four elements. They do the normal amount of damage to each of the four and the four do the same to them. I'm thinking about creating a new special race that are the only ones to use the Light and Dark elements.
As for the technology, I want the feel to be like the olden days but with advanced technology. There are cars/trunks/tanks/etc. There will be flying ships (no space ships) but only the rich and the military own them and the cars/trucks/etc. Farmers and others like that will have old, semi-broken down trucks to carry feed and stuff like that but it's the basic "poor mans" technology. So our heroes will have to walk everywhere until they can find (or fix up) a ship/truck/etc. There will be drones (robots basically) that have AI's that make them like humans. They are normally used by the Kingdom to keep the peace and are like the police. There are a few that are a part of the general population but only in the bigger cities (unless something brought them to a small village). There will be the technology to have mechanical limbs to if someone wants to have like a robot eye or arm they can. The technology will also be mixed with magic. Like the ships will be ran on Wind magic and characters can have weapons that are combined with magic. Like one weapon I came up with are two silver pistols that use fire magic and shoot fireballs as their bullets. Things like that.
There will be character classifications as well. Like magician, drone, mechanic, and medic. Normally there will be two classes to each character. Like Magician and Mechanic to help create new weapons that use magic and also so the mechanic can fight in battle more then they normally would. Those that choose to do a non-attack class can still participate in battle. They will just use guns or knives. Things that normal humans would use to fight with.
Magician ~ self explanatory, uses magic to attack or manipulate the environment
Drone ~ a mechanical robot with a human AI (have the main firepower of the group but slow)
Mechanic ~ fixes broken down weapons, armor, drones, cars, ships, etc.
Medic ~ self explanatory. Normally dual classed with mechanic to be able to outfit patients with mechanical limbs/eyes/etc.
