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[Pokémon] Convergent Paths

nokyo-chan

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Status: Ongoing -_-

Basic Plot:
This is a story about friendship. Three girls, different as can be and living in three different regions, set off on their separate adventures. Along the way, they discover the darker, not-so-happy side of the Pokemon world...but it has its parodic moments. XD

Prologue:
The SS Anne cruised through the ocean, flashing in the sun. The on-deck pool was a bit crowded, but this was mostly because of the sunbathers lounging on the chairs around it. Fashionable sunglasses and wide-brimmed hats were common.

A nine-year-old girl (without sunglasses or a wide-brimmed-hat) stood impatiently by her mother's chair, staring down at her face. She wore a one-piece bathing suit and had her light green-blue hair in two rather unkempt ponytails on each side of her head.

"Momma, please watch me so I can swim?"

"Why don't you go in the kiddie pool?" Her mother gestured towards it without looking up. The girl scoffed.

"There are kids in the kiddie pool."

"Aren't you a kid?"

"I'm nine. Those kids are little."

The woman sighed. "Alyssa. Go."

Alyssa turned and stalked toward the kiddie pool.

A similar scene was happening further down, this time with a girl with honey-colored, shoulder-length hair and bright blue eyes. She wore a frilly two-piece bathing suit that she herself had picked out and clutched a pink towel to her chest. "Mother, I really would like to swim."

"Go to the wade pool, darling," the woman replied, adjusting her wide-brimmed hat.

"But those children are younger than I am! Much younger!"

"Cassandra, do as I tell you."

And just like Alyssa, Cassandra turned and weaved her way toward the pool. Unbeknownst to both of them, a third girl was going through the exact same situation. She, too, wore a two-piece. It had a red top and white bottom, making her resemble a Poké Ball. Her black hair was long and reached her waist, and she also desperately wanted to swim. She, however, got the same command as her two fellows.

"Belle, go to the kiddie pool."

And so Belle, Cassandra, and Alyssa arrived at the kiddie pool at the exact same time that fateful day, different as could be, with only a few things in common.

They stared at each other, each of them dumbfounded at actually finding someone their age. Alyssa spoke first, stepping in between them and sitting down on the edge of the pool as she did so. "My name is Alyssa," she said, thrusting her legs knee-deep in the cool water.

"I'm Cassandra." She sat down beside her.

"Belle." She lowered herself down on Alyssa's other side. "Me and my parents are from Cherrygrove City. Where are you guys from?"

Both Alyssa and Cassandra stared blankly at Belle. "Cherrygrove City?" Cassandra asked, leaning forward and tucking a strand of hair behind her ear. "Where's that?"

Belle cocked her head. "Well, where do you guys live?"

Cassandra sighed daintily and flipped her hair over her shoulder. "I live in the most beautiful town in the world…Verdanturf! Oh, every day I see the Contest building! Every day I wish that I could compete!" She sighed again and looked over at Belle and Alyssa, smiling broadly. Her smile faltered when she realized that they had no idea what she was talking about.

"Verdanturf?" Alyssa asked. Then she snapped her fingers. "Oh, we're all from different regions!"

"Oh," Cassandra and Belle said in unison.

"I'm from Johto," Belle said.

"And I'm from Hoenn," Cassandra piped up.

"I'm from Almia," Alyssa told them. "I'm from a place called Chicole Village. Well, right now I'm going to the Ranger School. I want to be a Pokémon Ranger when I grow up! What about you guys?"

"I would like to be a Pokémon Coordinator," Cassandra said, raising her arms toward the sky happily.

Belle pushed her dark hair off her neck. "I want to be a Pokémon Trainer."

And at the end of the day, they were all very best friends.
 
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Elite Overlord LeSabre™

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Well, this could turn out to be quite interesting. The fact that your protagonists are all girls initially caught my interest, and with them being from different backgrounds and with different aspirations, I think I'll enjoy seeing how you weave their trials and tribulations together in one story.

One thing I will note about your description of the girls... it doesn't flow and seems tacked on.
A similar scene was happening further down, this time with a girl with honey-colored, shoulder-length hair and bright blue eyes. She wore a frilly two-piece bathing suit that she herself had picked out and clutched a pink towel to her chest. "Mother, I really would like to swim."
Try making it flow better with the action and what they're doing, like this example of DOOM XD:
A similar scene was happening further down with another girl. Twirling her honey-colored, shoulder-length hair between her fingers, she glanced down at her frilly two-piece bathing suit as she clutched a pink towel to her chest. Looking up at the woman next to her with bright blue eyes, she said, "Mother, I really would like to swim."

It's just a little change, but it helps greatly with the overall flow of the story.

Anyway, it's hard nowadays for anyone to convince me to read a new fic, but there was a certain something that drew me to yours, and I look forward to the next chapter :)
 

nokyo-chan

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Thank you very much for reading my story XD. I don't have a lot of time to change my story right now (college is a you-know what), but I will look into changing that later...I took another look at it, and you're right, it does kind of interrupt the flow.
 

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Chapter One
The sun shone down brightly, casting light over the three people standing at the dock in New Bark Town. A ferry glinted in the distance, and all three peoples' eyes were on it. They were a mother and her two children, a sixteen-year-old daughter and an eight-year-old son. The mother grasped her son's hand firmly, her eyes watching the ferry with growing dread. She had raven-colored hair that tumbled in soft ringlets down her shoulders. Her lips were plump and red, and her skin was fair. She was beautiful, but her age showed in the lines around her eyes and mouth, made as much from worrying as they were from laughing. The son had dark hair as well, and he also watched the ferry with a bit of dread. He would miss his sister.

The sister in question stood as far up as possible on the dock without falling off the edge. Both her hands gripped the straps of her backpack tightly, and her blue cap shaded her eyes from the sun as she eagerly watched for the ferry. She wore dark khaki shorts and a blue T-shirt with a Poké Ball printed across her chest. Her hair was just as dark as her mother's, but the ends bobbed around her chin as she stood on tiptoe and shifted her weight to see the ferry.

"Belle," the mother called. "Could you please come back here with us?"

"Aw, Mom!" But Belle turned and dutifully walked back to stand with her mother and little brother.

The boy said nothing. He didn't even complain that he was being made to hold his mother's hand, or that she was squeezing too tight. He didn't trust himself to talk; he was blinking back tears already. His sister was leaving on her Pokémon Journey…what was he to do?

"It's getting closer!" Belle said excitedly, turning to look at the ferry again. She bounced on the balls of her feet, making her newly-shortened hair wiggle.

"I don't know why you had to cut your hair," Belle's mother said sadly, reaching out to touch the back of her daughter's bouncing head. Belle jerked away quickly.

"You can't have long hair on a Pokémon Journey, Mom." Her tone was dismissive. She glanced down at her little brother, who had finally torn his eyes away from the quickly-approaching ferry and was staring instead at his feet. "Hey, Derek. You okay?"

He looked up at her and met her eyes. Just like always, it startled Belle to look at them—they were the same crisp blue color as their father's. Belle had gotten her mother's dark brown eyes. He was like a little piece of her father, who had died in the Sinnoh region not long after Derek was born. Derek had never met him.

"Couldn't you start your journey in Johto?" Belle's mother asked, not giving Derek enough time to answer his sister.

"No. I wanted to start in Kanto because…well…Dad started there." She lowered her eyes to Derek's again, but he was looking at the ground. A strange silence descended upon the trio, broken a few minutes later by the loud bleat of the ferry's horn.

"Sweet!" Belle cried, punching the air as she turned to look at the ferry, but her arm slowly lowered as she took it in.

From far away it had looked gleaming white, but up close it seemed dingy, almost gray. The name on the side was illegible. A tired-looking man came out and tied the boat off before standing awkwardly at the back of the ferry, looking in their direction. It bobbed in the water, which now looked more gray than blue—was the boat polluting it? Belle bit her lip and turned back to her family, forcing a smile. She didn't have to try too hard; even though the boat looked bad, she was about to embark on her Pokémon Journey!

"Well, Mom…this is it. This is good-bye for right now."

Belle's mother tore her eyes away from the ferry. "Are you sure you want to ride this…thing? We can pay for a Lapras ride, it's—"

"The ferry's already here, Mom. I'll be fine."

She sighed heavily and nodded. "As you wish, dear. Just…be careful." She reached out and hugged Belle tightly, closing her eyes. Belle allowed herself a small snuggle before breaking the hug.

"Derek," she said, getting down on her knee. "Can I have a hug from you, too?"

Derek plunged his hand into his pocket and pulled something out, which he thrust at her and looked away. Belle took it from him and he put his arm down by his side as she inspected it. It was a small plastic Charizard toy, poised with its wings open and head thrown toward the air as if it were roaring loudly. The paint was chipped in some places from being played with too much. "Your Charizard figurine, Derek?"

"I want you to have it," he mumbled, the first words he'd spoken all day. "So you won't forget me."

Belle almost burst into tears. Charizard was his favorite Pokémon, and this had been his favorite toy. She hadn't been allowed to touch it until now. "I could never forget you, Derek."

He fidgeted. "Just in case."

"I'll keep it with me always," Belle assured him, tucking the toy away in a pocket of her backpack. She reached out and pulled him toward her, hugging him. He returned the embrace, and she allowed a few tears to slip onto her little brother's back. She had tried to be a companion to him. There weren't a lot of little boys in Cherrygrove, and she had tried so hard to be interested in boyish things with him. She would miss him very much.
Belle finally stood, discreetly brushing away some tears. "Okay…I love you both." She turned and went to the ferry. The tired man reached out and helped her onto the boat before untying it from the dock and going in the cabin to inform the captain. Belle gripped the rail with one hand and waved with the other. Clouds began to roll in as the boat pulled away, covering the sun as she got further and further away from the dock. Her mother and little brother were reduced to colored specks in the distance before it finally started to rain.

This was not the way she had planned to begin her Pokémon Journey.


Dear Cassandra,
I'm writing to you from the ferry that's taking me to Kanto. My journey didn't really get off to a good start. I expected to be standing on the deck of a boat, enjoying a gentle breeze and some sunshine while I talked to other budding Pokémon Trainers, not sitting alone in the rain under a smelly poncho that I borrowed from the not-so-boyish cabin boy. I guess I found out why that ticket I bought was so cheap.
Anyway, hope you're having more luck starting out than I am!
Love lots,
Belle
 

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Hmmm... She's nine in the prologue, and sixteen when she first starts out on her journey? Any reason for the long wait, especially when most start training at 10 or 11? (Yeah, I know the character in my fic started at 15, but she has the "brainiac who went to college first" excuse XD) I mean, it's okay if she has a reason to do so, or if policies have changed regarding the minimum training age.

Your use of description is improved in this chapter, which really helped. I liked the heartfelt send-off by her family - much more detailed than the "rush out the door" beginnings I've seen too often. Given this, I ope the mother and brother don't fall off the face of the earth once the journey gets into full gear - I hope Belle remembers to check in with them every now and then (this is advice for later in the story, actually). And you accurately portray the pitfalls of going budget - you get what you pay for, in this case a rickety old boat of questionable safety.

Well, I think I'll end this reply by saying that I liked Belle's starting off. It felt real, with her family worried about her but at the same time wishing her good luck. Even if the conditions aren't the best :P
 

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Chapter Two
Cassandra's palms were sweating and she thought she might have a fever.

Not too long ago, Cassandra and her mother had taken the trip down to Littleroot Town to collect her first Pokémon. Her mother had wanted her to import a different type of Starter Pokémon from Kanto, Johto, or Sinnoh ("Oh, dear, why don't you get a lovely Piplup? You know, I hear Bulbasaur are loyal little things. What's wrong with a darling little Cyndaquil?"), but she had wanted to start out in her own region. She had chosen Mudkip and named him Finny, and she thought he suited her just fine. He was a friendly little creature. Not too long after that, she had been successful in capturing a Swablu on their way through Rustboro, which she had decided to enter to use as her first Contest Pokémon.

Now she was registering for the Contest in her own town of Verdanturf. She couldn't say why she was so nervous; it was just registering, after all. But no matter how much she told herself that, she couldn't help trembling as she stepped up to the desk. The woman looked down at her and smiled warmly.

"Just sign your name under which date you'd like."

Cassandra picked up the pen and pulled the sheet toward her, looking down the line. There was one in three weeks…but was that too soon? She had been training both Finny and Swablu, but would they be ready in three weeks?

Yes, said the strong, confident part of her brain. They will be ready.

Cassandra shook some more. But what if they're not?

They will be ready.

Trying to steady her hand, Cassandra signed herself up for the contest in three weeks. Under the column heading "Competing Pokémon", she wrote down Swablu.

The woman took the sheet back as Cassandra pushed it toward her and looked it over. "Okay…and may I see this Swablu? I have to make a small inspection."

Should I be worried? Cassandra wondered, pulling Swablu's Poké Ball out of her purse. She tossed the Ball into the air with a slight flourish; she had been practicing for being a Coordinator since she was small, and this was now a habit. Swablu burst out of it and crowed happily before descending slowly to land on the desk. This was Swablu's habit, having been practicing this very thing for days on end.

"Very impressive," the woman at the desk told her. She put a hand on Swablu's head and touched her wings. After a while of looking her over, she nodded to Cassandra, looking at her full in the face for the first time. "You're done." Then she frowned. "Say…aren't you that girl that lives in the house not far from here? Oh, what's her name…Joanna's daughter?"

"Y-yes," Cassandra replied, speaking for the first time. "I'm Cassandra."

The woman laughed. "Well, it's about time I'm seeing you in here! I've seen you out in your backyard since you were tiny, practicing your Coordinator moves. I'm glad you've taken your first step!"

Cassandra blushed furiously. "Thank you…" She returned Swablu to her Poké Ball and turned to leave.

"Oh—Cassandra!" the woman at the desk called.

Cassandra turned, pushing her hair away from her face. "Y-yes?"

"Your hair is really long. If you keep it that way, it could be your trademark."

And with a huge, satisfied grin, Cassandra left the Contest building, her thick, waist-length hair swaying with the bounce in her step.


Dear Alyssa,
Isn't it almost time for you to graduate from Ranger School? Belle and I should make arrangements to come see it! Tell us when it is!

What's your Partner Pokémon going to be? I know that you don't really catch and train Pokémon like Belle and I do.

My first Pokémon is Mudkip. I named him Finny. I caught a Swablu! I didn't name it anything, because soon it will evolve into Altaria, and that's a pretty enough name. I registered for my first Contest! The lady at the desk told me that my hair could be my trademark. I'm so excited! Finally, my dreams are starting to come true!

Hopefully I'll get to see you at your graduation!
Love always,
Cassandra
 

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Hmmm... I thought this chapter was a bit short. Perhaps after registering, a scene with Cassandra expressing her worries with her Pokemon and seeing their reactions would have been nice. You could have had her find a bench outside of the Contest Hall, sit down, release her Pokemon out of their Pokeballs, and have her talk with them a little. It's not much more plot-wise, but it would help develop her character a bit more.

But what you do have is good. You show that the prospect of a first contest is daunting for Cassandra - so much so that even the process of registering three weeks in advance is making her nervous. She's worried that she hasn't got the time to train her Pokemon sufficiently for her debut contest. That gives a realistic side to her character. And that is one of the strengths of your story so far - believable characters with real emotions that makes the whole that much more interesting.

I will be looking forward to the next chapter :)
 

nokyo-chan

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Thank you so much. ^_^ The reason for the length of the chapter is that they're actually broken up; I used to have a scene with all three girls in each chapter before I moved on to the next, but the length was getting ridiculous. I had about five chapters, and when I broke them up to give each girl her own chapter, I had fifteen. 0.o I figured the length would be more manageable this way.
 

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Chapter Three
It was, indeed, almost time for Alyssa to graduate from Ranger School, and she knew it. She stood in her dorm room, hurriedly throwing her hair into its usual ponytail as she grabbed her Styler.

Alyssa was famous. She was at the top of her class. She was pretty. She "captured" Pokémon extremely well with her student Styler. And, above all, she was nice. Alyssa was always willing to lend a helping hand to anyone, and she did so without asking for anything in return. It was just her nature. Everyone knew Alyssa, even though she didn't know everyone else.

"Alyssa!"

She turned, tightening her ponytail, as one of her roommates came in. Casey had light brown hair that she kept in a bun, with two ringlets falling on either side of her face. She was taller than Alyssa; in fact, she was one of the tallest girls in the school. She was studying to be an Operator, not a Ranger. Her father was a Top Ranger, making her famous as well.

"Yeah?"

"We've got to get down to homeroom. They're briefing us on final exams."

Alyssa groaned. "Those aren't till next week!"

"Yeah, but they're giving us the schedule. I haven't been home in a really long time," Casey added a bit sadly as they left the room together. She lived in Pueltown, which was farther away from the Ranger School than Chicole Village was.

"Have you gotten any letters from your dad recently?" Alyssa asked.

"Yeah. He's in the Fiore region right now."

"Will he be able to make it to your graduation?"

Casey shrugged. Alyssa found this extremely sad, so she decided not to question it any further. Her father was a farmer and her mother was a homemaker, so there was really no doubt that they would be making it to her graduation. She hadn't told them that she was at the top of her class, and she had asked the teachers to follow suit. She wanted her parents to be surprised when she got up to make the valedictory address.

As if Casey had been reading her thoughts, she asked, "Have you thought about what you're going to put into your speech?"

Alyssa shrugged. "I guess something about your dreams coming true, and how you can achieve anything through perseverance."

"Cool."

They arrived at their homeroom and entered. Alyssa and Casey sat beside each other. On Alyssa's other side was Greg, a small, rather geeky-looking kid. He was number two in the class, and because of this, he had never liked her. He had never told her if he wanted to become a Ranger or not, and he had only spoken to her in sharp growls. He deeply resented her for making better grades than he did, and this made her very sad every time she came upon him.

Their homeroom teacher came to the front of the class and began informing them of next week's testing schedule. Alyssa felt a familiar fluttering sensation in the pit of her stomach. She got this feeling whenever she started thinking about graduating and leaving the Ranger School. It was a mixture of dread, apprehension, and overwhelming excitement, and it always made her fidget in her seat.

The bell rang for first period, and Alyssa left the classroom with a piece of paper outlining the schedule for exams as well as graduation practice on top of her books.


Dear Cassandra,
Do you know how we're supposed to get up with Belle now that she's traveling? I'm not sure, and I really want to send her the date of my graduation. It's not till sometime next month, but still…I really, really want you guys to come! And you need to make plans to stay for more than just a day; at least stay for a week!
It's really cool that you got a Mudkip and a Swablu. I don't know what I'm going to get for a Partner Pokémon; I don't choose, really. It's not like they make me decide between a Mudkip or a Chimchar or a Bulbasaur, or whatever it is that you guys pick between. It's whatever Pokémon I meet in the field.

I have to start studying now. I may be really busy for the next two weeks, so I might not get a lot of time to write. Break a leg in your first contest, and if you get any word to Belle, tell her good luck on her journey!

Love you bunches,
Alyssa



 

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This chapter was good, but personally I felt that the introductions of the other two girls were done just a bit better. It's hard for me to explain why... it just felt that their intros were more personal. Not that hers was badly done - I like how she wants to keep her achievements a secret and surprise her parents, and her uneasiness around Greg (who I'm thinking will play a fairly big role in the story - but don't spoil it :P ). And her personality, character, actions, and words seem every bit as believable as her friends'. But we don't really get into her head and her personal thoughts like with the other two girls. Of course, we never got any alone time with her, so that may be the reason for this. And that's understandable. She's caught up in talking to her roommate while getting ready for class, and that situation doesn't really allow for too much self-reflection.

I guess I'll close by saying that I'll look forward to getting to know Alyssa better in the coming chapters. As well as getting to see how the three meet up, and where things go from there. I'll be looking forward to it!
 

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Chapter Four
Belle hadn't realized that she got seasick. She gratefully stepped onto the firm, solid ground of Pallet Town with the help of the tired-looking man who served as cabin boy. She had never spoken to him enough to learn his name, and on her whole one-day journey, she had never seen the captain.

"Thanks for the poncho," she told him.

"No problem," he replied in his gruff voice. He saluted her briefly and turned back to the boat, walking away to tell the captain to take off. Belle reached into her pocket to make sure she still had the Charizard toy before turning away.

Pallet Town was very small. It was smaller, even, than New Bark Town. The only remarkable thing about it was the huge building on a hill, with pastures extending behind it. From here, they looked to be full of Pokémon, so Belle assumed that this was the Pokémon Lab, and therefore where she needed to go.

She picked her backpack up off the ground and slung it over her shoulder. The sky was still overcast, but at least it wasn't raining anymore. It was a long walk to the Lab, but she finally came to the door and entered.

People in lab coats where bustling around, making notes on clipboards, talking animatedly, carrying Pokémon and Poké Balls. Bookcases stretched from the floor to the ceiling. Belle walked forward slowly, a bit nervous. Now that she saw all the people, she wasn't sure if she was supposed to be in here.

"Can I help you?" A busy-looking person caught Belle by her elbow. It was a tall, dark-haired man with glasses. He peered down at her in an accusatory way.

"I…uh…was looking for the professor…I need to get a Starter Pokémon," Belle tried to explain.

The man narrowed his eyes. "Uh-huh. How about I just show you to the door, and you can call later…"

"Where are you taking that girl?"

The man stopped and looked up. A boy with black hair and an orange headband was standing there, a sketchbook under one arm. He frowned at the man as he walked forward.

"I was just showing her the way out," the man told him.

"She said she needed to get a Starter Pokémon," the boy said. "I'll just take her with me."

"But—"

"If she needs a Pokémon, she'd better see the professor. I'll take her to him."

The man appeared to be gritting his teeth. He relinquished his hold on Belle's elbow finally and nodded. "Take her, then." He then turned and bustled off.

"Sorry about that," the boy said, taking hold of Belle's other elbow and guiding her through the lab. "The aides get a bit touchy sometimes, him in particular. He seems to think people starting their Pokémon Journeys distract the professor, but it's part of his job. He's not very trusting, either. He's usually under the impression that whoever comes in here wants to steal something." He smiled and glanced down at her. "My name's Tracy, by the way."

"I'm Belle."

"Belle? It's nice to meet you." He took her to a large room. Towering bookshelves lined the walls. In the center of the room was a counter with three Poké Balls, and in the corner was a desk and a computer. Sitting in front of the computer was a gray-haired man in a white lab coat, and beside him was a giant purple blob.

"Professor?" Tracy called. "We've got another starter."

The professor swiveled his chair around and stood up. He had large eyes and thick, bushy eyebrows. He smiled broadly as he walked over, but the giant purple blob suddenly came to life and threw itself upon him, wrapping purple arms around him and making some sort of loud sound.

"No, Muk!" the professor yelled, and he grabbed a Poké Ball that had been lying on the desk. He returned the strange Pokémon to its Ball, which he set down. "So sorry," he said, panting as he walked toward Belle. "Muk is a tad affectionate. I am Professor Oak! And who are you?"

"I'm Belle," she replied. This was Professor Oak? He didn't look anything like she expected. He wasn't skinny and gangly with big square glasses, not at all like Professor Elm.

"And would you like Squirtle, Bulbasaur, or Charmander?" Oak walked over to the counter and gestured to each of the three Poké Balls in turn. Belle frowned. This was the hardest part.

Which Pokémon did she want? This would probably be the one she would grow closest to, the one she would spend the most time with. Her very first Pokémon…how could she choose?

"I'm not quite sure," she said, putting her hands in her pockets and dipping her head. Her fingers closed over the Charizard toy in her pocket, and suddenly she thought of Derek. What if she brought home a Charizard? How cool would that be? Derek would be so impressed, and it might even inspire him to go on his own Pokémon Journey. And anyway, Charmander was a really good Pokémon. She looked up and smiled. "Actually, scratch that. I want Charmander, please."

"Charmander?" Professor Oak nodded and went to the table, picking up a Poké Ball. It opened in his hand and a Charmander appeared in front of him, tail flaming brightly.

"Char!" it cried happily. Upon seeing Belle, it became quiet and cocked its head.

Belle knelt down on the floor. "Hi," she said to it. "I'm Belle." How many times was she going to introduce herself today?

The Charmander eyed her for a second before taking a tentative step forward. Belle reached her hand out toward it very slowly. "I'd like you to come with me on an adventure," she told it. "I'd like you to be my friend."
It came toward her, and inquisitive look in its eye. "Would you like to come with me? Would you like to be my friend?" She leaned forward ever so slightly, and the Charmander reached out with its tiny little claw and touched her fingertip. She drew in a breath and held it. Silence descended upon everyone in the room, which seemed to consist only of Belle and the Charmander.

And suddenly, the Charmander cried out happily and threw itself at Belle, hugging her. Belle laughed as it toppled her over, and she hugged it back. "You wanna be my friend?" she asked, and it cried out again. Finally it let her up and she sat up, stroking its head lovingly. "Hm…how about I nickname you…Charmy! Do you like that?"

"Char!"

"You do, huh?" She tickled it.

"He seems to like you quite a bit," Professor Oak said.

"He? Charmy is a he?" Belle asked, scooping the Pokémon into her arms and standing.

"Yes. Is that a problem?"

"No…it's just good to know." She tickled Charmy under his chin. "So, the next town is Viridian City, right?"

"Right," Tracy said. "You'll want to stop there to rest for a while and buy some Poké Balls."

"I don't have enough money for a hotel room," Belle said uncertainly.

"Trainers are allowed to stay for free at Pokémon Centers," Professor Oak told her. "You look familiar…do you have any older siblings, by any chance?"

"No, but I have a face like my father's." Her stomach lurched. Did Oak perhaps know her father?

"What is your father's name?" Oak asked her.

"Uh…my father's name was Daniel," she told him. "His first Pokémon was a Bulbasaur." She remembered being five years old and clambering all over the flower on Venosaur's back.

Oak frowned. "His name was Daniel? Is he…"

Belle took in a deep, shuddering breath. "He died when I was eight. He was continuing his Pokémon Journey in the Sinnoh region, and a bunch of cult freaks killed him in some quest for a better world."

"I remember him," Oak said softly, putting his hands behind his back. "He often sent me updates on Venosaur." He sighed. "I would like to give you, young lady, a Pokédex."

Belle watched Oak go over to his computer and pick up a red thing that had been lying next to it. "A Pokédex?"

"Yes. It's an encyclopedia of sorts. It records information on Pokémon. It's quite useful."

"It's kind of a high-tech encyclopedia, then?"

Oak sighed. "I'm so tired of using those words, but yes." He handed her the red thing. It was rectangular. She placed Charmy on the ground and opened it up, moving it so the little lens on it was fixed on her Charmander.

"Charmander," it said, startling her. She jumped and almost dropped it; instead, she shut it and tucked it into her backpack.

"Here's Charmy's Poké Ball," Tracy said, handing the Ball to Belle. She took it from him. "Charmy goes inside it."

"Right. Uh, return, Charmy!" A beam of red light shot from the center of the Ball and enveloped Charmy. Charmy was sucked back into the Ball. Belle blinked. It was strange to be doing this herself; she had seen her father do it so many times.

"Well, good luck on your journey," Oak told her.

"Thank you," she replied. "And thanks for the Pokédex. Can I hook it up to my laptop?"

"Yes, if you have a USB cord."

"Okay. Well, I guess I'll see you later, then. I can transfer Pokémon I catch here, right?"

"Yes. And I'd love to get them."

"Cool. Okay, well, I'll see you guys!"

"I'll walk you out." Tracy opened the door for her. He looked over his shoulder at Oak. "That way, a certain aide won't pick on her."

Oak sighed. "I really need to have a talk with him."

Tracy smiled reassuringly at Belle as he led her out of the Lab.


To:
dancing_through_life@pokénet.com, [email protected]
From: dingdongbelle@pokénet.com
Subject: How to get in touch!
Hey girly-girls,
From now on, you guys will have to send me e-mails. I'm going to be on the road, so there won't be a physical address to send any letters to. I'm going to send you guys e-mails too, so CHECK IT OFTEN!!!!! I don't want to be ignored!
Alyssa, you're graduating soon, right? I'd better be invited! Also, you REALLY need to ditch the student e-mail address and get your own.
Cassandra, when's your first Contest? Break a leg! (That's what artsy people say instead of good luck, right?)
Okay, girlies, I need to go on up to Viridian City, so I'll write back later.
Love you both,
Belle
 

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Good job on the chapter Nokyo. Good pokemon choice with Belle, it fits her rather fiery personality. I still think Cassandra is my favorite, though I kind of like Belle. I for one think that everyone will have a character that they can connect to his this story, creating some sort of link with the reader. At any rate, keep it up, Nokyo-Chan.
 

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I noticed this:
It's spelled "Venusaur."

Personally, I'm not a big fan of Tracey showing up given my hatred of the anime, but that's personal preference and has nothing to do with the quality of the story.

I do like, strangely enough, the one moody lab employee. Where it's often shown that all lab workers are these friendly, happy people, it's somehow refreshing to see one who isn't coping well with the stress and everything. Again, it adds a touch of realism to the whole setting.

"I don't have enough money for a hotel room," Belle said uncertainly.

"Trainers are allowed to stay for free at Pokémon Centers," Professor Oak told her.
Why is there no love for the major hotel chains in Pokemon fan fiction? Am I the only one who pays due respect to Quality Inn and Sleep Inn in their fic XD?

But on the whole, another enjoyable chapter. It's interesting to read about these three different characters, each with their own distinct personalities, and how each of them has their own quest to embark on. Still too early for me to say who's my favorite, though :)
 

nokyo-chan

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Thank you much for correcting my spelling. I was having a major brainfart while writing this chapter and forgot how it was spelled. So thank you!! ^_^

As for Tracy, I actually HATE Tracy. But as this fic is an anime/game hybrid (as will become evident in Cassandra's Contest chapters), I felt the need to pay due homage to the anime. On a side note, the reason I really hated Tracy was because he replaced Brock...and I had the biggest crush on Brock.

And Sgt Shock, thanks much for the review!! I'm glad you like Cassandra. XD
 

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Chapter Five
Cassandra came downstairs to the kitchen quickly. She paused by the window and looked out; it was barely light outside. Good. She grabbed an apple for herself and some Pokémon food for Finny and Swablu, scribbled down a note for her mother, and went out the front door.

Route 117 was usually full of people training for some elusive triathlon that never seemed to happen, but now it was just Cassandra and her Pokémon. She let Finny and Swablu out of their Poké Balls and settled down in the grass to eat her apple. Swablu had taken to perching atop Cassandra's head, making her look as if she was wearing a large, fluffy hat. Finny simply cuddled against her leg as he ate.

"We're going to start training every day around this time," Cassandra announced to them. "Now, even though I've chosen to compete with Swablu, you'll be training just as hard, Finny. I'm going to act as if I'm competing with both of you." She looked down at Finny, almost tipping Swablu off her head. "That way, you two will be at the same level."

Swablu chirruped softly. She had finished her food. Cassandra polished off her apple and checked to make sure that Finny was done before standing up. "Okay, you two. First things first. We're going to review the way you come out of your Poké Balls. Okay?"

She only spent fifteen minutes on this, seeing as they had already worked very hard on it, before she moved on to actual moves.

"Swablu, Astonish! No, do it gracefully. Gracefully! While your moves need to be strong, they also need to be beautiful!" She ran her fingers through her hair briefly. "Try it again!"

And they did. Swablu did Astonish so many times, it finally chirruped feebly and fluttered to land on a nearby fence. Cassandra sighed. "I'll work with Finny now, okay? When we get back to you, we'll use Wing Attack. How does that sound?" She fed Swablu a Poké Block and planted a kiss on its head.

"Go, Finny!" She tossed the Poké Ball into the air. Finny leapt out and did a perfect front-flip before landing gracefully on all fours. "Excellent! Now, use Water Gun!"

It was lunchtime before Cassandra called it quits. She carried Finny home in her arms and let Swablu rest on her head. "You two did very good work today," she told them. "I'm so proud of you. If we go on at this rate, we'll blow everyone away at the contest!"

Finny made a happy noise and snuggled into her chest. She giggled and tickled him under his chin. "I love you guys," she said.

The cook was making lunch in the kitchen when Cassandra came inside. "Hello, Dorothia," she greeted her.

"Welcome back, Miss Cassandra," the cook replied. "What were you doing all this time?"

"Training, of course. My first contest is in three weeks!"

"So soon? Didn't you just sign up yesterday?"

"Dorothia, it is not your place to question my daughter's motives," said a voice from the stairwell. Cassandra's mother, Joanna, descended from the stairs. She wore a lavender dress and a large hat made of white straw with a matching ribbon. "I'm taking Staraptor up to Lilycove to do some shopping. Care to join me, Cassandra?"

"No thank you, Mother," Cassandra replied through gritted teeth.

"I will be back around suppertime. I promised Nancy I would meet her for lunch, otherwise I'd stay until Dorothia was done cooking. She does make some fairly decent dishes."

Cassandra tried hard not to say anything. She hated it when her mother talked as though Dorothia wasn't in the room. Her mother hardly treated Dorothia like a person.

Finny noticed that Cassandra's body had gone rigid and tense, so he sat up in her arms to find the source. Swablu noticed the change as well.

"I need to train some more," Cassandra told her mother. "Surely you can understand that?"

Either Joanna ignored the sarcasm dripping in her daughter's voice or she didn't hear it at all. She nodded and took her large sunglasses out of her purse. "I'll just be going, then. Do well, dear." She turned to leave, but stopped in the doorway and looked over her shoulder. "Cassie dear, why are you wearing those clothes?"

Cassandra looked down. She was wearing a knee-length, pleated pink skirt with white designs tracing up from the hem, and a white peasant blouse to match.

"They're so…common." And with that, Joanna swept out the door.

Cassandra moved to the table and allowed Finny to jump out of her arms onto it. She sat down heavily in a chair. Swablu fluttered off her head and perched on the back of the chair next to her.

"I hate it when she calls me Cassie," Cassandra said. "I'm really sorry about her," she added to Dorothia, turning in her chair to address her.

"It's no problem, really, Miss Cassandra." Dorothia poked something in a frying pan with a spatula. "I've been working here for a very long time. I'm used to her. What she says doesn't affect me anymore."

"Is Dad coming home for lunch?"

"He has a business lunch to attend, so no," Dorothia replied.

Cassandra's father was an executive for the Devon Corporation. He was often away on business, but he adored Cassandra. He sent her souvenirs from wherever he happened to be. Once he went on a business trip to Johto and popped in on Belle. He had taken a picture and sent it to Cassandra enclosed with a letter saying he would be bringing Belle home with him. It made him visibly sad when the company sent him away, but he needed to put food on the table.

"So, it'll be just me and you, then!" Cassandra smiled.

"And Finny and Swablu," Dorothia reminded her.

Cassandra patted their heads. "Yeah. As long as Mom's not here, they can eat at the table."

And so Cassandra, Dorothia, Finny, and Swablu all had lunch at Cassandra's large dining room table.


To:
dingdongbelle@pokénet.com
From: dancing_through_life@pokénet.com
Subject: My Contest and Pokémon!
Belly-Belle,
My contest is in three weeks, thank you for asking. Yes, break a leg is what us "artsy" people say instead of good luck. And I'm a bit upset with you. If you're in Kanto already, that must mean that you have your first Pokémon and YOU DIDN'T TELL US WHAT IT WAS!!!!!
…ahem. Please inform your friends of what Pokémon you have. I started out with Mudkip. His name is Finny. I caught a Swablu, and I didn't nickname her. YOUR TURN!!!
Lovingly angry,
Cassandra
 

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*Clap* Very Nice I Am Now Begging the third Chapter I Don't know why i didn't give you Props for this Before because this is very good
 

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Cute chapter. Yeah, not much happened, but we got a little glimpse into Cassie's (oops, Cassandra's, forgive me XD) family life.

She only spent fifteen minutes on this,

It was lunchtime before Cassandra called it quits.
These seem rather abrupt, as if you're in a rush to skip over these parts. While I can understand not wanting to go into agonizing detail about every bit of the training, I would have liked to seen maybe three or four sentences (a short paragraph) spent on briefly describing the training going on before skipping on to the next phase of training. It adds a bit of depth to the story, and gives readers a feel for how Cassandra conducts training and how well her Pokemon are prepared for the upcoming contest.

Still, I'm liking this so far, and Cassandra may be my "character" becuase she's from a well to do family just like my own fan fiction character. Plus so far she has the best fashion sense out of the three :P

Just work on expanding some of the details a little bit, and you should be just fine. You've got a great start so far, and I'm looking forward to seieng where things go from here :)
 

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Chapter Six
Alyssa brushed her bangs out of her face as she marked the last answer on her test triumphantly. She gathered all the papers into a pile.
The teacher smiled as Alyssa approached the desk and brought the papers. This was Alyssa's second final exam, and she only had three more—they had scheduled one for each day. She grabbed her messenger bag as she passed back by her desk and left the room. Greg glanced up at her angrily as she passed his seat, but she smiled rather than let him bother her today.

The atmosphere in the hallway was so much less stifling than that of the classroom; Alyssa breathed deeply, filling her lungs with non-test-room air. She was free for the rest of the day. She knew she should be studying, but instead she went up to her room and changed into her bathing suit. She had an itch to go to the beach.

Alyssa packed a towel into her mother's old canvas tote bag and slipped on a sundress she never wore. She packed her Styler just in case and headed out, putting on her sunglasses as she went. The sun felt good on her shoulders. The sky stretched above her, amazingly blue, with only light, wispy clouds. It felt so good to be out.

She pointed herself in the direction of Vientown. It wasn't a long walk to get there, but it was the beach to the west that she was headed for. Her trek took her past the Vientown Ranger Base, and she paused in her walk to look at it. It was a round building; that alone had always attracted her to it, even as a child. She would tug on her father's hand and point at it as they passed, saying, "Look, Daddy, that one's shaped like a circle! All the other ones have corners!" Inside were Pokémon Rangers doing good work to help people. She sighed happily.

The door opened and startled her. A Ranger stepped out. He couldn't have been that much older than her; he had dark brown hair and slightly tanned skin. His Ranger uniform fit him well. He was at least a head taller than she was, and he looked so dashing as he placed a hand on his hip and looked around.

He spotted Alyssa. She blushed furiously, embarrassed, as he walked over and offered her a hand. "Hello. Do you need some assistance?"

"Oh—uh—no," she said quickly. "I was…just…" But words failed her, and she couldn't tell him what she was just doing.

"Where are you going?" he asked. God, he was handsome. He smiled, revealing a huge dimple. Alyssa almost swooned; he had such a gentle look in his eyes.

"The beach," she said finally. "I'm going to the beach."

"You look awfully familiar," he told her. He put his fingertips on his chin and tapped them thoughtfully. "Hey, wait…you look about sixteen. Shouldn't you be at school?"

"I go to the Ranger School. It's final exam week, and—"

"The Ranger School!" He snapped his fingers. "I graduated last year, so I know all about final exam week. Of course. That hair…" He reached out and pulled the sunglasses off her face. Alyssa stiffened as he did so. "You're Alyssa Thompson! I didn't recognize you without the uniform!"

Alyssa blinked in the sunshine. This extremely handsome boy knew her name? She really needed to start paying attention to who knew her. He grinned broadly down at her as she tried to remember him.

"You probably don't recognize me," he said. "Last year about this time, I was running to make it to an exam and I dropped my bag, and all my papers went everywhere. Everyone was rushing to their class, but you stopped to help me get all my papers. I'm Ian Walton. I, uh, wore glasses back then." He put his thumb and index finger together to make a circle and held them up to his face. "And I was a lot shorter."

And then it clicked. Alyssa remembered handing some papers to a scrawny-looking kid half her size. They did, indeed, have the name Ian scrawled across the top in untidy handwriting. She had thought he was a freshman. "I do remember you…I thought you were a freshman."

He laughed and rubbed the back of his neck. "Yeah, I was little."

"Wait—did you say your last name was Walton?"

"Yeah."

"You wouldn't happen to have a younger brother, would you?" Alyssa pulled the tote bag off her shoulder and set it on the ground beside her. Walton was Greg's last name.

"Yeah, I do. Greg. You should know him. He's always complaining that you're the top of the class, and he's only number two." Ian laughed appreciatively. "I don't know why he's so worked up. It's not like he's living in my shadow or anything; I wasn't top of my class, either. I was more into video games than studying, but I had a strange knack with Pokémon. I wanted to be a Ranger so bad. Greg only wants to be a Ranger for the money." His face darkened. "I guess there's a few people like that, but…I just wish I could talk him out of it."

"Greg wants to be a Ranger?" Alyssa shook her head. "I never knew. He seems more like the Operator type."

Ian laughed. "He does, doesn't he? Hey, listen…I have some down time right now. Can I walk with you to the beach? We can reminisce about old times that we never shared."

"Sure!" Alyssa grabbed her tote bag, but Ian beat her to it.

"I'll get that for you. Oh—here." He handed her sunglasses back to her, and she smiled as she put them on.

They walked to the beach, talking and laughing. When they arrived, Alyssa spread out her towel and they sat together on the sand.

"It's really nice seeing you again," Ian told her.

"It's nice seeing you too," she replied. It would be nice to see you anywhere, she thought.

He laughed. "Yeah, but you didn't have a crush on me for a year."

Alyssa blinked. "What?"

Ian was blushing, and he leaned back on his hands and looked up at the sky. "Everyone knew about you, Alyssa. You're smart, really friendly, and very beautiful. People who would start out being jealous of you would end up really liking you. I saw you in the hallway every day, and once I saw you capture a little girl's runaway Skitty and give it back to her. You smiled at her so comfortingly and acted so surprised and happy when she gave you a hug…" Ian smiled and looked over at her.

Alyssa blushed fiercely and looked down at her ankles. He had called her very beautiful, and that had only been the beginning of his compliments. She remembered that little girl's Skitty. It hadn't been especially tough. She had thought no one had known; the little girl had wandered onto the grounds looking for the Skitty, and she would have gotten in trouble if anyone had found out.

"I had a huge crush on you from that moment on," he said, and then he laughed. "But you never noticed me. I guess that happens. Now I'm a Ranger, and I'm really happy! You're becoming a Ranger too, right?"

"Of course!" Alyssa replied, happy that the conversation had turned lighter. "I love Pokémon, and I love helping people!"

"Well, hopefully you'll get stationed in Vientown with me. Usually they try to station people close to their hometowns…where's yours?"

"Chicole Village."

"Ah."

"I have a friend who lives in Pueltown…does that mean she'll get stationed there?"

"Probably. That's what they try to do, unless the person requests otherwise." Ian stretched. "What's your friend's na—"

Just then, a Zigzagoon came crashing through the underbrush near Marine Cave and scrambled across the beach, a scared look in its eyes. A rather large Krabby was chasing it, clicking its claws threateningly as it went. Ian leapt to his feet, pulling out his Styler as he went.

The Krabby waved its claws around angrily when it saw Ian step into its path. Alyssa sat up on her knees as the Zigzagoon rushed around to cower behind her, pushing its warm body against her back. It trembled pitifully. She tried to turn around to pet it, but it backed away from her hand. "I don't want to hurt you," she told it, but it wouldn't listen; it whimpered and backed away from her, towards the water. Hoping to calm it down, Alyssa pulled her Styler out of her tote bag and proceeded to use it. She captured Zigzagoon easily, and it cuddled up to her happily as she stroked its head.

"Good work," Ian said, walking up to her. The Krabby followed behind placidly. "I'm going to go see what upset this Krabby so much. You stay here with that Zigzagoon."

He turned to walk away and Alyssa crooned over the Zigzagoon until he got back, this time without Krabby. "Apparently Zigzagoon over there accidentally got too close to Krabby's nest. I saw the tracks. The Krabby got angry and chased it away. How's it doing?"

"Just fine," Alyssa replied. "He didn't mean any harm, did you, Ziggy-pie?" She scratched him lovingly.

"They sure are funny Pokémon," Ian said, putting his hands in his pockets. "He seems pretty attached to you already."

"Oh, he's just grateful." Alyssa kissed the Pokémon between the ears.

"Yeah, that's how it starts. The next thing you know, they're your Partner Pokémon."

Alyssa looked up at him, astonished. Did he really think that this Zigzagoon would want to be her Partner Pokémon? "Hey…what's your Partner Pokémon? And where is he?"

"Oh, I have a Prinplup. He's taking a nap at the base. I met him as a Piplup, all alone and abandoned near Puel Harbor, being terrorized by an Elekid. He started following me around, and the next thing you know…he's my partner." Ian shrugged. "It's that random." A beeping sound issued from his Styler. "Oh—excuse me, hold on." He picked it up and examined it before giving a tired sigh. "I've got to get back to the base."

"I'll walk with you!" Alyssa said brightly, jumping up. She folded up the towel and pushed it down into her bag.

"Oh, but you didn't even get to swim."

"It's okay!" Alyssa threw her bag over her shoulder and leaned down to pet Zigzagoon good-bye. "I have to go back to school now, okay? See you later!" She turned and walked off the beach with Ian. Zigzagoon scurried off into the bushes, but two beady black eyes watched her as she left.


To:
dancing_through_life@pokénet.com, dingdongbelle@pokénet.com
From: [email protected]
Subject: SQUEE!!
Oh my God, you guys!!!!!
You know I don't normally send e-mails to both of you at once, but OMG I have to tell you guys something!!

I MET A TOTAL HOTTIE TODAY!!!!

His name is Ian. I've met him before, but he was really scrawny and little then. He's a Ranger stationed in Vientown, and he graduated LAST YEAR!! And get this…drumroll, please…he said he had a crush on me for a year!! O! M! G! He is sooooo hot, and I don't mean kinda hot, I mean REALLY hot, like a thousand-white-hot-suns hot. Hopefully I get stationed in Vientown so I can get his crush going again! Ooohhh boy!

Oh, and another small, trivial piece of information that means nothing to you two, I'm sure…my graduation is the second Saturday of next month. That is one week before your contest, Cassandra, so I'm SURE you can make some time to stay for a while. HM? HM?
I'm expecting you two to stay with me for a while, so DON'T DISAPPOINT ME!!

Love your totally obsessed Ian-lover,
Alyssa

P.S. Belle, I think my student email is just fine, thank you. It works, doesn't it?!?!


 

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Aww, somebody's got a crush too :) It's kinda surprising how much Ian's looks had changed in a year, and even more surprising how he and that jerk Greg are brothers. I might suggest going into more detail on the capture process... as someone only vaguely familiar with the Ranger series (and more familiar with the Ford Ranger, lol) it would help to visualize what happened with the Zigzagoon and Krabby scene.

But I thought this was a pretty good chapter, and it reminded me of many a romantic anime episode. I'm looking forward to the next chapter! And sorry for the short, late review...
 

nokyo-chan

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Ha, the capture process is so hard to explain because you do it by drawing a circle around the Pokemon. I'm totally unsure as to how to explain that.

Actually, speaking of that, if anyone knows how a ranger actually captures Pokemon, could they tell me so I can stop being all vague in my story?? Thanks! XD
 
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