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Pokémon Pokemon: Lee's Kanto Arc Page 2

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Chapter 11: Death Stranded

Vermilion City

"Come on, just a bit further to the Pokemon Center."

"I know, but it hurts too much."

It had been a hard trek for Lee and Gray-the underground path and Route 6 had proven too much for Gray's beaten up body and a sprained leg. The two boys were now leaning on each other, barely walking into Vermilion with the energy that they had left.

It was a miracle they had made it to the Pokemon Center. The door opened for them, thankfully.

"Nurse! I need some help here, my friend is hurt!"

"Alright, bring him over here." The nurse took the weight off Lee, taking his friend and laying him on a gurney. "Chanseys, move out! We have a wounded!"

"Thanks Lee...I wouldn't have made it here alone." Gray grabbed Lee's hand tight. "I'll return the favor someday, I promise."

"Don't mention it, it was my pleasure beating up those Rockets." Lee replied, smiling at his friend. "You'll get more Pokemon and become stronger sometime."

"Yeah, I plan to...after I heal up that is." The brown-haired boy leaned his head on the pillow on the gurney, relieved that he himself was safe now. "I'll be back in action soon, okay? In the meantime, get stronger!"

"Take care. Gray."

Lee watched the Chanseys take the gurney away-his friend was in safe hands now, and he could worry about more...immediate matters. Next up was the Electric-type gym, headed by Lt. Surge, a battle-hardened Pokemon gym leader. He had heard Ground-type Pokemon were effective at taking down Electric types, but in his opinion he had so many reasons to be hesitant about that-Geodude? Too lumpy. Sandshrew? Not his type. Diglett? Don't even consider it. But then maybe, he did see in his map that, next to Cerulean, there was Route 9-with Rock Tunnel nearby. Maybe, in an area less traveled, there could be nice-looking, powerful Ground-type Pokemon he hasn't seen yet. Maybe. At least that's what he hoped. After punching the button on the vending machine, Lee picked up the dispensed lemonade-he'll recharge for a bit, then go back to Cerulean.

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Cerulean City-Route 9


The sun had started to set by the time Lee had reached Route 9. Still, during the walk he could reflect upon recent events, crazy things that happened after Team Rocket announced their return: the Charmander stolen from Prof. Oak's lab, Attack on the Museum, on Bill, on Gray...these guys were attacking everyone. Even the original Team Rocket wasn't like that, something was off, he had heard what the Rockets were like. A direct assault, to his knowledge, was not how Giovanni operated-

-his thought was broken up by his Wartortle tugging his pants.

"Hey, what's the matter, little guy?"

"Wartortle!"

Hydro, with a panicked face, pointed at people who were running towards the direction of Route 10. At the sight Lee froze in shock. Black uniforms, white gloves and boots, and the signature R on their chest-definitely Team Rocket! Lee could see they were carrying something in a hurry, but he couldn't see what it was as they were running too fast.

"War, wartortle!"

"Wow...Hydro, It's...Looks like they weren't kidding when they said they had "returned". Come on Hydro, whatever they're planning has to be stopped!"

Lee started running after them, to Route 10, with Hydro being put in his Pokeball as he was a bit slow. He had to get back at them for Gray, for Bill, for Professor Oak...for everything! The boy barely saw them run into the Rock Tunnel-what could they possibly want in Rock Tunnel?

"Okay, guys." The trainer gripped on his two Pokeballs on his belt. "Let's do this."

...but before Lee could step into the abyss, a massive boom shook the ground, and rocked his ears! The boy collapsed on his rear, as his head continued to ring from the explosion.

"Hnng!" Lee put his hands up on his ears-after a ringing came this long beep sound that sounded like a noise from a blooper, giving a pain that was akin to piercing his head before stopping. "Whoa...what was that!?"

BOOM! The question was left in the air as another explosion occured, shaking the cave and scattering little rocks down onto Lee's feet.

"Holy-What is wrong with them Rockets!? What are they doing!?"

Blinded by revenge, worry, and youthful stupidity, Lee ran into the darkness head-on, not caring anymore about the ringing that continued to ravage his ears.

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Rock Tunnel

But soon Lee realized that someone might have heard his swearing, and that they might get suspicious. He took a crouching pose and hid behind some boulders, before peeking out at the sound of footsteps to see a Team Rocket member on guard, wearing a helmet with a flashlight. He needed that if he was going to venture further into the pitch-black cave. That and, he also needed to take the guard out.

"Okay...think Lee, think. What could..." He couldn't dare to take out his Pokemon as, at this close distance, the sound of the Pokeball opening would be enough to alert them to the presence of an intruder.

"Yeah-that should work." Lee scoured the ground with his eyes, looking for anything. "This better work."

Picking up some small rocks, the trainer picked all of them up and took up a pose carefully-akin to what he would do if he were to throw a Pokeball. Boom-although he was a bit disoriented by the explosion, he threw the rocks at the same time to cover up his sounds. The rocks flew into the air and hit the intended target, breaking the flashlight on the helmet in the process.

"Hey!" The Rocket grunt cried. "You jerks, ease it on the excavation bombs! You're gonna make this place come down, then we can't mine the stones!"

"Yeah, whatever, Tory!" Another voice sounded from the farther side, this time a more familiar sound. The girl's father-Lee was sure of it. "Since when were you such a cloyster? How did you even get into Team Rocket!?"

"Ah, forget it! Just give me another helmet, this one's broken!"

The grunt called "Tory" walked away into the direction of the voices to get a new helmet, while throwing the "broken" one down onto the ground.

Yes! That sure worked! Lee thought silently to himself as he picked up and strapped the helmet onto himself. Now to stop Team Rocket, and the girl's parents...and maybe, if I'm super lucky, the girl herself.

He had to flick the switch a couple of times to make the flashlight come back to life. The glass was broken so he couldn't see far, but it was just enough light to see what was in front of him. And hopefully it would not alert the Rockets, as even people like that would react to a light shining in their face that the unbroken lens would create.

"Alright...Let's stop this mining scheme."

Into the darkness Lee went, and he tried to be as cautious as he could about staying hidden. His sneakers brushed against the cave rock, its wearer barely sneaking past unsuspecting minions carrying out rocks-maybe they had something valuable inside? Or were they valuable? The boy could not finish this mystery, as the light on his helmet flickered before dying completely.

"Come on, not now. Light up, light up..." Lee muttered to himself while flipping the switch repeatedly-his mind focused on getting the light up again before he accidentally runs into a goon. Unfortunately he bumped into something worse—a pile of wooden crates in front of him! A crate fell onto Lee, which he barely caught with his hands, but he lost his balance on his feet due to the kinetic energy of the crate! And then another explosion threw him off his feet, making him tumble down an almost-invisible slope in the darkness along with the box! The boy tumbled down along with the crate and a few rocks, and suddenly the slope ended and for a few seconds, Lee felt nothing but air under him-and gravity soon smashed the little kid and the box he rolling along with on the ground, sending sticks of dynamite that were in the crate flying!

"Umph!"
The boy landed hard on the ground and lay there in pain, covered in wood from the crate. If not for the helmet, he would have died; but that was not his most immediate concern. From what he could see in his downed position, Team Rocket-or their forces, which were here nevertheless-had stopped their job of placing explosives and looked at the direction of the racket Lee had caused.

"Hey! We got an intruder over here!"

Two grunts came running towards Lee, and before the boy could do anything his arms were grabbed and he was slapped in the face, making him look away in pain. The rest of the Rocket grunts came running, with a familiar view; Bonnie and Clyde, facing him again-but this time, in a completely reversed situation.

"...Well well, I wouldn't be surprised. This kid tried to mess with our operations several times. Lee, was it?" Clyde got uncomfortably close to his face.

"I don't know what you idiots are doing..." The trainer spoke out, despite the men in front of him being enemies that could mess him up. "...but you don't even realize what you're doing. You're scaring the Pokemon, you asshats!"

"Pokemon? What Pokemon?" Bonnie came closer to Lee. "Oh, the ones we drove out? Too bad, we Rockets are stronger."

"This passage is filled with evolutionary stones and gems that could have been sold for tremendous prices." The husband intervened, looking at the insurgent kid in the face again."You foolish people just turned it into an ordinary passage, saying that "pokemon could get disturbed". But then, we arrrived, and ta-daa! We just uncovered the potential of this passage, and all of this money will go to funding the righteous Team Rocket!"

"Righteous!?" Lee shouted. "You call this righteous!? If you're gonna go killing pokemon, I'll kill you first, right here!"

Lee kicked out both of his legs-although no one was hurt, the Pokeballs fell out of his holster, and before the Rockets could grab it, his pokemon were released!

"Wartortle!"

"Exeggcute!"

"Hydro! Eggshell! Help me out here!"

"You just messed with the wrong team, kid!" Bonnie threw her Pokeball out!

"Likewise! Get him, Ekans!" Clyde, without having to throw the Pokeball, just let Ekans slide from his neck and land onto the battlefield!

"Raticate, use Bite!" The Rocket member commanded her Rattata, who dashed furiously at the Pokemon!

"Ekans, Poison Fang on that Egg!"

"Look out, Hydro! Eggshell! Use Water Gun and Confusion!"

Being mauled by the enormous Mouse Pokemon, the Turtle Pokemon used this chance to jet water onto the Rattata's face, and Eggshell sent out a wave of confusing energy against the Snake Pokemon! Clyde's Ekans, confused by the hit, jumped away from the Egg Pokemon...but jumped elsewhere, to the direction of the yet to be installed explosives-the trigger! It had been connected prior to Lee's arrival! Both sides fruitlessly tried to revert the effect of attacks, but it was too late as the snake's weight pressed on the trigger! At that moment Lee felt the grip loosen on his arms as a chain of explosions rocked the cave, as the whole of Team Rocket started to run!

"Drop him, drop the kid! Get out of here, we're evacuating the premises!"

"The operation is a failure! Evacuate immediately!"

"Leave the kid here, that should eliminate him! No witnesses should remain!"

He lay on the ground, powerless and wounded, his enemies leaving him to die. Despite his hurt state, Lee's Pokemon desperately tugged his hand, to get his trainer out even if it meant sacrificing their lives-but their trainer had other ideas.

"Exeggcute! Exeggcute!"

"Wartortle! War-"

"I-I'm sorry guys...there's not enough time for all of us..." The trainer continued, grabbing each ball in his hands. "But I can keep you all safe..."

"WARTORTLE!"

Lee pulled out the Pokeball and quickly put Hydro and Eggshell back in before they could say any more about it, before hugging it and covering over his two Pokeballs. A massive, final explosion rocked the whole passage and the cave shook raining debris, and seconds later he felt something hard and heavy strike him in the head, knocking his glasses out and fading him out while causing his head to feel a sharp pain, followed by dulling of his senses.

Go to sleep. He swore he heard his mother call out to him, as darkness enveloped his sight. Silence.
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I thought this would be Lee going against Team Rocket family round 2, only for the chapter to end that way. I think Lee survived in the end there because this story would be much shorter if that's not the case haha. Still though, just ouch.

Grammar wise, what I noticed is you using hyphens instead of em dashes. Hyphens are used for putting two words together like "co-op", "check-in", and "state-of -the-art." Em dashes, on the other hand, are longer hyphens sometimes used for dramatic punctuation.

"Come on, not now. Light up, light up..." Lee muttered to himself while flipping the switch repeatedly-his mind focused on getting the light up again before he accidentally runs into a goon. Unfortunately he bumped into something worse-a pile of wooden crates in front of him! A crate fell onto Lee, which he barely caught with his hands, but he lost his balance on his feet due to the kinetic energy of the crate! And then another explosion threw him off his feet, making him tumble down an almost-invisible slope in the darkness along with the box! (etc)
The first hyphen there should em dashes. Your second hyphen though is correct. So the first bolded sentence goes:

Unfortunately he bumped into something worse—a pile of wooden crates in front of him!

Usually, em dashes are easy to make by having two dashes (--) and then the computer changes it to an em dash easy. The rules for hyphens and em dashes are a bit complicated, but I would take the time to check the rules out!

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Chapter 12: Taken Care Of

Lee opened his eyes again, as if he was waking up from a long sleep- he was in his room again, under a thick blanket on his comfy bed-all the things that happened to him, were they a dream? He looked up at the ceiling for some time, before getting the blanket off him and getting up on his feet. It was then the boy realized he was still in his adventure clothing, and only his bag was gone. All things aside-how did he get here? Where were his bag and Pokemon?

"Mom?"

The boy walked up to the door of his room and opened it, walking down the stairs to the living room and kitchen on the first floor. No one was here-not even a sign. All the lights were off in the house, but outside it was unusually bright-Lee shielded his eyes from the gleam, walking toward the door to see where this light was coming.

"Mom? Hydro? Where are you?"

Grabbing the door handle firmly, he turned the knob and closed his eyes as more light blinded his sight of what was there...

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Lavender Town

"Cubone! Cubone!"

The cry of the Lonely Pokemon echoed as the trainer slowly opened his eyes for real this time, before touching his face to make sure things were real this time-in reality he sure wasn't back home, although he was in bed. He saw an old man approaching, his Cubone by Lee's bedside.

"Are you alright, boy?" The old man sat beside the bed, and started checking on Lee's injuries. "You've healed fast, for a kid like you."

"I'm fine sir...I think." Lee replied, touching the back of his head which was in bandages. Rock must have hit me in the head...I must have been knocked out. "Where am I, sir?"

"Oh yeah, about that...You're in Lavender Town." The old man continued. "The Lavender Volunteer Pokemon House, to be exact. I'm Fuji, the owner of this place."

"Oh...Mr. Fuji, sir..." The boy laid back, relieved in the fact that he was alive and in safe hands. He had heard of Mr. Fuji as the kindest Pokemon caretaker in the region of Kanto, who took care of Pokemon even back in the dark days of Team Rocket's heyday. "Thank you for saving me..."

"No, there's no need to thank me, young man. I was just doing what was needed."

As Lee lay on the bed gazing into the ceiling, he suddenly remembered why he got here in the first place: those who destroyed the cave. Those that left him and his pokemon to die, and probably knocked out dozens more Pokemon before his arrival.

"Mr. Fuji, hate to ask you sir, but, did you see any Rockets?"

"Team Rocket? No, I've heard that they've returned but...not yet."

Darn! They slithered away. Lee curled his hands into a fist, before uncurling them. Too late for ass-kicking, and even if it wasn't, not in his state. But...his Pokemon! Were they safe? He had almost killed himself to protect them, they had to be okay! In a moment of panic, the boy lurched from the bed.

"Sir! What about my Pokemon? Are my pokemon okay?"

"Yes, I put your Exeggcute with the other pokemon...your Wartortle's still recovering, though."

"What?" Lee was visibly shocked-Hydro was hurt!? "B-but I swear I put him in the Pokeball...sir, how was I found?"

"I was walking Cubone on Route 10 when I heard this big explosion. And your Exeggcute came to me-it tried to alert me, to something in the cave. When I got there, you were buried in rubble with your Wartortle, and both of you were awfully wet." Mr. Fuji, recalling the peculiar condition of the accident, approached Lee in a moment of realization. "You said you put your Pokemon in the Pokeball?"

"Yes sir."

"Hmm...I think your Wartortle popped out of the ball and tried Water-type moves on the rubble before it completely covered you both."

"What?" The trainer gripped onto the bars of the bed in shock. His Pokemon just...popped out of his ball even though the master told them not to!? "W-Why?"

"It's happened to several Pokemon I know. Popping out of their balls out of rebelliousness, or to save their trainers." Mr Fuji grasped Lee's hand, helping him to sit on the bed after the period of shock on his body caused by the falling rocks. "But thanks to him, you only suffered some bruises and some bleeding on your head-you would have died should it not been for your Wartortle."

"H-Hydro..." Lee couldn't control himself-he started to cry, about how he didn't want to die, but most importantly how he didn't want his Pokemon hurt. "P-please tell me he's okay!"

"I had to get him to the Pokemon Center and feed him Oran Berries, but he's stabilized for now. You should stay here a bit, until you and your Pokemon is fully healed."

"Th-thank you." Lee said. "Can I see Hydro? The Wartortle..."

"You named your Wartortle 'Hydro'? You sure are a nice trainer, caring for your Pokemon and all." Mr. Fuji spoke as Lee got up from the bed. "I'll take you to see your Wartortle, follow me."

"Thank y-you."

Lee got up from his bed and wiped his tears away-he had to stay strong, for Hydro. As he walked following Mr. Fuji, Lee, in a passing glance, saw Eggshell was playing with Cubone and some other Pokemon, which comforted the boy on the fact that at Eggshell suffered no injuries despite helping him in a way. Soon they got into a room, where the old man opened the door to reveal Lee's Wartortle confined in a small bed for Pokemon. his body wrapped with bandages and barely moving.

"He just needs some time to heal. No need to worry too much."

"I don't know how to thank you, sir." Lee sniffed, still wiping his tears, before eventually calming down enough to pick up Hydro. "You okay, little guy?"

"Wartortle." Even with all its injuries, Hydro hugged Lee tight, still determined to protect his trainer from the harms that be.

"Don't worry, I'm here for you..." In response, the trainer could only hug the Pokemon, feeling his tears drop again... "I-I'm sorry I couldn't protect you like you did..."

"Wartortle..."

Both the trainer and his pokemon locked each other in a hug, for neither wanted to lose each other...no more...

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Several days later...

Lee flinched as Mr. Fuji undid the bandage on Lee's head. The boy, rather patiently, sat on the chair, watching the bloodied bandages drop to the ground. Looking to the left, the trainer could see Cubone was doing the same for Hydro, breaking the hardened bandages apart with its bone.

"I saw in your phone memo that you came to Rock Tunnel to find a pokemon that could battle against Electric-types."

"You looked in my phone, sir?" If it was someone else that looked in his device Lee would have been infuriated. But that someone was a nice, kind old man who cares deeply about pokemon-you'd have to be a psycho to be angry against someone like that for that minor of an offense.

"Nothing bad intended. I was just searching it to find anyone to contact." The old man continued, checking Lee's wound. "I called your mom and dad and told them about the incident and your recovery. If you're gonna continue your adventure, let me give you a piece of advice: you can go to Celadon City's Game Corner and get a Dratini. There's an underground path that leads there, not far from here, in Route 7."

"Thank you sir. I'm grateful for all the things that you've done for me and my Pokemon. If I weren't found by-"

That was when Lee's phone rang. The kid took it out of his bag, before seeing the caller-his mom. She was probably worried sick right now, even after Mr. Fuji called him.

"Hold on sir, one moment...Hello?"

"Lee! Oh thank god...you're safe! I heard from the nice Mr. Fuji-"

"Mom! It's okay...I'm perfectly fine, Mr. Fuji took care of me and Hydro."

"Thank god! I just wonder who would hurt my son!"

"Mom, like I said, I'm alright, but you have to calm down..."

"I know, Lee-Dad left work early to look for you when we both got a call from Mr. Fuji. But you should come home soon, you're worrying use all! What if-"

"Mom! Please, I know I'll come home sometime, but not as of now! I've got more gym badges to earn and more Pokemon to meet, and...I can't pin it exactly, but I've onto something important. I just need...more time."

"...I'm sorry, honey. I'm just so worried about you, just...promise you won't be in any more dangerous situations."

"I will, mom...I will. I'll call you more often, and I'll always come back home when things get too hard."

"Alright...take care, sweetie. And please...don't get yourself in dangerous situations, call us often."

"I will mom. Love you!"

Hanging up the phone, Lee soon hung the bag on his shoulders and reached for his cap, pushing them down all the way, hiding his scar, which was obscured by his black hair, even further.

"Thank you for taking care of us Mr. Fuji, I owe you sir." Lee gave a gentle bow to the elder-a display of gratefulness. "But I've got to go now. My journey's still a long way from ending and my friend over at Vermillion is probably panicking about me being involving in an accident like before."

"It was my pleasure. But if you do want to repay me, if you ever return here...visit Marowak's grave with me."

"I will, sir." Lee sighed. He had heard that a Marowak had been killed by a Team Rocket grunt, but he had never seen her offspring, which was adopted by Mr. Fuji, with his own eyes until now. Knowing that, he could understand Mr. Fuji-you can't save everyone, but you have to save whoever you can.

"Say, I don't think I've asked your name." The old man stopped Lee in his tracks with the question. "What's your name, young man?"

"Lee Hahn, sir-10 years old and going on my first journey."

With that answer, Lee started taking steps out of the room. But before leaving to find the underground path, Lee turned back to take a last look at the Cubone and his old trainer, before continuing his journey to face more adventures in front of him...

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Yeah I expected Lee to survive there. Luckily Mr. Fuji found him. Ouch over Hydro, though.

"...I'm sorry, my child. I'm just so worried about you, just...promise you won't be in any more dangerous situations."
The part during the conversation where the mother says, "my child," sounds so stiff. Maybe "dear", "honey", "sweetie" (which you used later) are more natural sounding.

Grammar wise, I still see you mixing hyphens for em dashes. Refer to my last review to get a basic idea of what I was talking about.

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Route 5

A slight wind grazed the tall grass patches of Route 5, rustling the flora and revealing the Pokemon that lived in it. However, the mons, quickly sensing danger, hid themselves among the taller grasses or ran into another patch. Through their eyes they could see an apex predator dragging their sneakers through the grass, but to Lee, who was at this point barely wading through the tall grass, nothing could be seen. This was bad-he was already wandering around the route lost in the big grass patch while looking for a new Pokemon to take up against Surge and Gray. Either I'm unlucky or I've done something to repel the Pokemon away...the boy thought as he pulled apart another part of the grass. No luck again.

"Where the heck are all the Pokemon!?"

Lee shouted out in frustration, only to see several bushes shaking away-he had just scared them away at the last moment, hadn't he? This just heightened the trainer's frustration, but for a 10 year old kid he gave up on going verbal-just not to scare away anymore Pokemon.

"Okay Lee...focus..." Lee spoke to himself, turning again to another patch of tall grass in the area. Maybe a dangerous Pokemon could appear, but at this point he's not even met any pokemon but this might be the risk that he might have to take for the Pokemon...well, the only problem with that was, considering the previous encounter, the possibility of finding a Pokemon was rated at a measly 'might'.

"Well, I don't think I'll be interested in catching Pokemon anymore after this patch...Here we go."

The trainer took another step into the grass, when suddenly a jet of flames shot up directly at his face, missing him by mere inches! The boy fell onto his bottom as the attacker revealed itself, its red fur evident from its swinging six tails as the Pokemon leaped in front of Lee!

A Wild Vulpix Appeared!

"Whoa!" Panicking, the 10 year old scooted back while trying to reach for his Pokeball!

"Vul! Vulpix!" The Fox Pokemon, encouraged by the panic of its prey, leapt at the boy for the attack!

"Hydro! Help!" Lee quickly hit the button on the red-and-white contraption device, releasing his own personal monster-his Wartortle! "Block the fire!"

"Wartortle!"

Both Pokemon, at the same time, fired both of their ranged attacks at each other-nullifying each other out! The Vulpix, having failed at the attack, still used its leap to get over behind Lee, where Hydro quickly waddled to defend his trainer, who took out his Pokedex in order to identify what mon he was fighting against. The device quickly scanned the Fox Pokemon.

Vulpix, Fox Pokemon. Fire Type-At the time of birth, it has just one tail. The tail splits from its tip as it grows older.

"Hey, that looks good..." Lee, regaining his composure and standing up, tapped on the typing chart, seeing that it could cause double damage to what his current Pokemon team was weak against-bug, grass, etc. He also had read that one of the most common Electric type-pokemon, Magnemite, was weak to fire, so maybe she could help with the gym too! "Hydro! Go easy, I want to capture that...ah, Vulpix!"

Looking back at its trainer, the Wartortle nodded-before, effortlessly, taking a hit from the Vulpix! The shell absorbed the shock, sending Hydro backwards skidding on the ground, who attacked back by shooting a jet of water at the wild Vulpix.

"Vulpix!" The Fox Pokemon stood its ground despite the debilitating water attack. Although it seemed like the pokemon was on its last legs, Lee could not be too sure, so he decided to take the chance, even if it meant there could be a sizable chunk of health remaining!


"Good job Hydro! I got this!"

Hydro's trainer quickly took out a Pokeball from his backpack, before throwing it full speed at the weakened Fox Pokemon. The ball quickly put the wild Vulpix inside, before shaking wildly, indicating that it hadn't given up yet or had much health left! One - Two - Three! Three shakes, and the ball settled-before, a click,, completely stopped the ball.

"Whew...that was close." Lee wiped the sweat from his brows and went to pick up the ball, before realizing he had forgotten one crucial thing. "...Good job out there, Hydro."

"Wartortle!" The Wartortle beamed at the praise, jumping in joy at the new friend he helped to make.

"Okay, let's introduce the others now...come on out Eggshell! Come out, little Vulpix!"

In a flash, all of Lee's Pokemon, Hydro, Eggshell and the newly-caught Vulpix came out of the ball, before Eggshell made its first move-surrounding the new Pokemon and jumping around it, which seemed to comfort the little Fox Pokemon.

"Okay now." Lee took out his Pokedex again. "What kind of Vulpix did I catch? Pokedex, analysis?"

"Vulpix, Female. Timid nature suspected through battle postures, no secret ability detected."

The trainer petted the Vulpix, which growled in pleasure. The boys in his team were going to have a grand time, and they sure were-Hydro rubbed his head nervously smiling at the Fox Pokemon, while Eggshell was just happy for some reason.

"Okay, little Vulpix, what should I name you..." To think about the little Pokemon's name, Lee sat down for a moment to think about the Pokemon's nickname, before huddling the Vulpix on his lap. "I got it! How about I call you Kitsu? It's a firebreathing Pokemon legend I've heard about!"

"Vulpix!"

The Fox Pokemon smiled in happiness. For a trainer, a new teammate was in. For a pokemon, there was now a new master to take care of her.

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Lavender Town

When Lee got back to Lavender Town, Lee thought if he had made the right decision by not deciding to catch a Ground Type Pokemon, but he shrugged. How hard could Electric types be? His worries floated away as Cubone ran up to him, with Mr. Fuji following the Pokemon.

"Cubone!"

"Ah, it's you! You're back quickly." Mr. Fuji looked at Lee's Pokemon, before looking at the trainer. He gently picked up the Cubone like it was his baby. "I suppose you didn't go all the way to Celadon?"

"Didn't have to go too far to find a beauty like this girl, Mr. Fuji." The boy watched as Kitsu eagerly hopped around Cubone, who played with her swinging his bone club. "She's a feisty one and there's the rest of my team too, it will take a whole heap of Electric types to kill our eagerness."

"You sure have confidence, Lee." Mr. Fuji replied to the child, seeing the eagerness of a starting trainer in his eyes. "You're going over to the Pokemon Center, right?"

"Yes sir." The trainer replied, rubbing one of his shoes on the ground. "I'm gonna rest up a while, heal my Pokemon, and figure out a way back to Vermilion. I could hitchhike a surfer and go back up the river, or get a ride from someone who has Fly."

"No need to, Lee. After the Rock Tunnel incident, many people who came from other towns, including you, are stranded. The Pokemon League will be sending over their professional trainers with Flying-type pokemon for an emergency transport operation. They'll be coming soon to the Pokemon Center."

"Oh wow, I didn't know that had been announced." A smile stretched across Lee's face as he signaled his other Pokemon to follow him to the Pokemon Center. "Thank you Mr. Fuji, I'll be taking the ride for sure. I'll come back for you and Cubone after I get the badges."

"It was my pleasure kid, good luck on your gym challenge!"

Thanks to the information he received from Mr. Fuji, Lee didn't have to worry about looking bad using other's transportation methods! Lee entered the Pokemon Center as quick as he could, soon joining the line of people who had joined here for the emergency flight...

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Oh, so Lee gets a Vulpix now! Looking forward to see how Kitsu will develop. I also like the idea of the Pokemon League sending some trainers to help out on some emergencies like what happened in Diglett Cave.

Some grammar nitpicks:

"Where the heck are all the Pokemon!?"

Lee shouted out in frustration, only to see several bushes shaking away-he had just scared them away at the last moment, hadn't he? This just heightened the trainer's frustration, but for a 10 year old kid he gave up on shouting out-just not to scare away anymore Pokemon.
You can combine that dialogue and the next paragraph together since shouted is a dialogue tag (said, reply, screamed, etc). Also I would replace the hyphen with a comma between "out" and "just".

"Vulpix!" The Fox Pokemon stood its ground despite the debilitating water attack-although it seemed like the pokemon was on its last legs, Lee could not be too sure-so he decided to take the chance, even if it meant there could be a sizable chunk of health remaining!
Here I think you can replace the first hyphen with a period and second hyphen with a comma, like this:

"Vulpix!" The Fox Pokemon stood its ground despite the debilitating water attack. Although it seemed like the pokemon was on its last legs, Lee could not be too sure, so he decided to take the chance, even if it meant there could be a sizable chunk of health remaining!

When Lee got back to Lavender Town, Lee thought if he had made the right decision by not deciding to catch a Ground Type Pokemon, but he shrugged-he would soon find out how actually hard Electric types are to fight against, I mean...how hard could it be? His worries floated away as Cubone ran up to him, with Mr. Fuji following the Pokemon.
I feel this sentence should be polished up. The "he would soon find out..." and "I mean..." contradict one another. So perhaps:

When Lee got back to Lavender Town, Lee thought if he had made the right decision by not deciding to catch a Ground Type Pokemon, but he shrugged. How hard could Electric types be? His worries (etc).

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Vermilion City

As the Golbat landed in front of the Vermilion Pokemon Center, the people, including Lee, got off as the Bat Pokemon took off for another run-so many people were trapped in their cities, all thanks to Team Rocket. Lee sighed at the thought-imagine when you try to go back to a city when you hear a news that your way back just got destroyed! The trainer shook his head and headed to the entrance, but soon saw someone coming out and stepped backwards. The person turned out to be none other than Gray, who now had a Pidgeotto on his right shoulder and a Sandshrew hugging his left arm. Luckily, the boy was quick to notice his friend!

"Hey! Lee!"

"Heyy!" Lee gave a light hug to his friend, with the Pidgeotto, clearly annoyed by the intrusion of space, used Wing Attack on Gray's head weakly. "I'm back!"

"You look beaten up! I heard the news." As Gray talked to Lee, he ordered his Pidgeotto to fly away for some time, who quickly submitted to his owner's orders and flew off. "I'm glad you're okay. Did you give the Rockets hell?"

"Yeah, I sure did. It'll take more than just some goons to kill me." Lee rubbed his head, now not feeling anymore pain from his former injury. "Let's look at the bright side, at least we're on the right track and you'll be able to fight a Rocket like me too!"

"Heh, I guess that surely is the best thing to come out of all this! So glad you've returned safe and sound."

Lee smiled at the friend's remark. They were friends after all. He soon noticed the new Pokemon on Gray.

"I see you've gotten new Pokemon too. Nice Pidgeotto and Sandshrew." Lee said.

"I know, right? I named the Pidgeotto Winger, and the Sandshrew Duggy. Just finished training them, we're so gonna rule the gym!" Gray responded, full of optimism-the Pokemon were too. "What did you get?"

"Oh, me? I got a good one. Come on out, Kitsu!"

With a flick of the wrist, Lee threw the Pokeball into the air, which dropped down and released the Fox Pokemon! Kitsu landed close to Gray, startling him a bit as she breathed out a bit of fire.

"Vulpix!" The tiny pokemon rubbed its snout against the ground before puffing up its tails as a defense mechanism. It seemed to startle the Mouse Pokemon, making Duggy run back to his owner.

"Whoa, hold on...you didn't get any Ground-type pokemon?" Gray looked at Kitsu, then at Lee who seemed quite happy about his catch.

"Ground Pokemon we can get right now are so bland. And I want myself a challenge."

When he said that line, Lee could see his friend's face contort through various emotions-from confused, to a smirk, taken aback, then back to confused again, before settling on a smirk and laughing at the situation.

"You've got to be kidding me! You're digging your own grave." The brown-haired boy laughed at his friend. "The Electric Types will decimate you without any immunities!"

"Heh, Like that powerless Sandshrew could actually take in some attacks!" Lee shook his head smiling at Gray's remark. "You're not taking any chances."

"Yeah...good luck with your team, I guess, if you can make it!" By this time Gray had burst into full out laughter.

"I'd have wished yours too if you didn't belittle mine." Lee put back Kitsu in her ball and put it on his belt. "Come on, let's stop bickering and get going."

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Vermilion CIty Gym

At the face of a challenge there was no distinction of friend and foe. Lee knew one thing though: he didn't know about Gray, but he was surely ready. He used his Water Pulse TM on Hydro for a stronger attack and was ready to use his main starter to his full potential. After all, although type immunities and effectiveness helped, battling was all about having powerful attacks that boost said type. The two friends, having set aside their childish jokes aimed at each other for the challenge ahead of them, walked up to the gym entrance, before stopping and looking at each other. The gym was exceptionally dark today...too dark.

"So, who challenges the Gym first? You know Gym leaders can't fight on double." Lee asked.

"You go first. I wanna see you lose!" Gray laughed, striking his back making his friend flinch.

Why can't there be a world without type immunities? Lee thought to himself as he shook his head at his rival's antic, and opened the doors of the gym.

"Hello?" He called out. The trainer expected the gym to be filled with sparks and arks, but apparently not, it seemed. You never knew Lt. Surge...well, that's what the league said about him. From what he read, he was never the same after he came back from the military-it had hardened him into a battle-ready Fighter pilot. Considering that kind of occupation involved shooting things moving in supersonic speed down while moving at supersonic speeds yourself there was no guarantee what in the world the Lieutenant was planning; That's how top guns work. As Lee stood in the dark deep in his thoughts, a sudden microphone squeal echoed across the gym, and Lee, in surprise, slipped on the waxed floor of the gym while taking a step back surprised at the sound, landing on his butt.

"You there, maggot! Yes, I see you entering my gym! Get up! Atten-shun!"

Somehow following the commands of the voice in the dark, Lee quickly got up to his feet before hastily standing up straight, his hands behind his back.

"Alright...not too bad. At ease!"

"Um..." The boy nervously stood in the darkness and slouched after a few minutes. After all, he was just a 10-

"SOLDIER! Keep your posture!"

The microphone voice barked at him, which prompted the kid in the gym to return back into 'attention' posture.

"Alright...not too shabby! Name and rank, soldier!"

"Uhh...Lee Hahn, Mr. Surge-"

"SOLDIER! When you answer me, the only words to come out of your filthy sewer will only be 'sir'! Do you understand!?"

"Y-Yes sir!" Lee stuttered but quickly got the hang of the rule. However the tenseness in the voice scared Lee to the core, who was right now about to cry.

And at that moment, in front of Lee, a bright arc lit up the entire gym! Electric sparks started to fizz between metal coils, and the electricity moved toward several coils on the walls-moving ahead of Lee and finally illuminating a light on Lieutenant Surge, standing in his full military gear! The kid looking at the gym leader covered his eyes to shield them from the bright lights.

"So you dare to challenge me, maggot!" The Lieutenant took firm, strong steps toward the challenger who was shook up by this boot camp experience. "You've persevered well, most trainers wet their pants at my commands and turn around! But I will not force you to fight me. Turn around if you think you are not ready!"

"I'm not going to back down, sir!" Lee shouted against Surge's words.

"I can't hear you, soldier!"

"I'M NOT GOING TO BACK DOWN!" Lee shouted louder, using his pent up rage from Surge's earlier commands. "SIR!"

"That's the spirit! You are worthy of battling me!"

"I challenge you, Gym leader Surge!"

"It's Lt. Surge, soldier! I've seen your determination! I've seen your strength! Give me your best, trainer! Ooh-rah!"

Gym Leader Lt. Surge would like to battle!

"Tango spotted, Voltorb!"

"Get him, Eggshell!"

As the pokeballs hurled across the battlefield and opened up, Lee's Exeggcute and Surge's Voltorb faced each other!

"Voltorb, Sonic Boom!"

"Eggshell, Confusion!"

The powerful psychic energy of Eggshell psychically attacked Voltorb, but it didn't stop Voltorb-its let out a wave of ultrasound, hitting Eggshell too!

"Take that Exeggcute out, Go for Sonic Boom again!" Lt. Surge yelled out its commands.

"Eggshell, Leech Seed!" Lee knew Eggshell had to regain health, especially against the Sonic Boom attack that caused fixed damage!

Eggshell rained a barrage of seeds that rooted against the floor, which started to drain what was left of Voltorb's life force! Another Sonic Boom hit Exeggcute but it miraculously held on, yet looking very beat up like it was clinging onto the last of its life! Luckily the seeds kicked in, sucking out what health the Ball Pokemon had left.

"Argh! Come back, Voltorb!" Lt. Surge took back its Pokemon, starting to become furious at the defeat of his Pokemon!

"Good job Eggshell!" Hmm, what now? Lee thought to himself-Eggshell was at low health but he had just planted the Leech Seed. If he swaps Eggshell for another Pokemon now he'll lose the effects of the seeding, but he didn't want to risk his Pokemon being knocked out at the first hit either. So with a hard choice he pressed the button on the Pokeball. "Return back here!"

"You're just lucky, this ain't over yet! Go for it, Pikachu!"

"Get him, Kitsu!"

This time the Pokeballs collided with each other in a miraculous possibility-and released the Pokemon up in the air! Both the Vulpix and Pikachu landed on the ground hard, but on their feet.

"Deploy munitions! Pikachu, Iron Tail!"

"Pika!" Pikachu's cheeks flashed with excited Electricity, beforeshooting he swung his hard tail at Vulpix, slamming and throwing her back into the wall!

"Kitsu!" Lee shouted at the sight of his Pokemon being thrown back! "Are you alright?"

"Vul...pix!" The Vulpix staggered up, painfully taking up a battle stance!

"Good, hit the Pikachu hard! Ember!"

"Vul!" Kitsu spit out a fireball which flew into the ground under Pikachu, sending him flying!

"Tango is going wild, Pikachu! Thunderbolt!"

"Focus, Kitsu! Use Ember quick!"

Pikachu succeeded in hitting Kitsu with the Iron Tail, but at that moment he put himself right in the firing line of the Ember! Both point-blank attacks, respectively, knocked both out in the air and made them crash onto the battlegrounds!

"You're good, kid!" The Lieutenant smiled, trying to suppress his rage as a soldier that was building up for losing another Pokemon. "But this is the end of the line! There's no way you're beating my last Pokemon!"

"I'd love to see the performance, sir!" Lee breathed in trying to calm himself, now that the situation was balanced out. But he was heartbroken at Kitsu just lying on the ground, knocked out. "I'm sorry I knocked you out at the first battle, Kitsu...You still did a great job. Rest up!"

Both Lt. Surge and Lee both put Pikachu and Kitsu respectively back in their balls, before picking out their final Pokemon-Lee knew this was bad, Hydro having to go up against an electric type! But he was not going to give up now, not when victory's so close!"

"Alright, you leave me no choice...Go, Raichu!"

"Hydro! Get out there!"

Both the Raichu and the Wartortle took on battle positions, as the Raichu smirked from the realization from the advantage he had! Hydro bit down on its tongue, anticipating a hard battle.

"Oh, a water type? You've become desperate, soldier!" Lt. Surge "I'm still not gonna take it easy! Raichu, use Thunderbolt!"

"Hydro, use Bite!"

As Raichu shot out a jolt of Electricity, Hydro swiftly dodged it and bit Raichu in the tail! The Mouse Pokemon squeaked in pain and hit itself against the ground, sending the Turtle Pokemon skidding on the ground! However, when Lee expected his starter to get back up again, it collapsed onto its fours!

"Hydro!"

"Ohh, you've fallen for the oldest trick in Military history!" Lt. Surge declared. "Raichu's Ability-Static-paralyzes the enemy tango when touched!"

"What!?" Lee took a step backwards before looking at Hydro, who was clearly in pain at not being able to move from the shock! "Hydro! Watch out!"

"Raichu, he's down! Use Thunderbolt!"

"Hydro, Withdraw! WITHDRAW!"

As the gigantic jolt of electric energy headed towarded the Turtle Pokemon, Hydro painfully tried to put its body back in its shell, but the paralysis got to him-the shock hit him before the Turtle Pokemon could hide for extra protection!

"You can always surrender, son!" The Lieutenant shouted, as to discourage the child trainer that was on the other side. "If you're not good enough, it's not a shame to admit it!"

"No! I've come too far, sir!" Lee bared his teeth, as Hydro painfully stood back up again! "Hydro, just one more time! Water Pulse!"

Painfully looking back at its trainer, the Wartortle nodded and breathed in deep-and with a painful recoil, he spewed out a gigantic burst of water at the Raichu, which blew up in its face!

"Wh-what!?" Lt. Surge was clearly confused-a power like that came from a Wartortle he thought was susceptible to his type of attacks!

"I read this when I first scanned Hydro, sir!" Lee replied to Surge, as the soldier the gym leader told the boy to be! "Hydro has an ability called Torrent-and it boosts attacks when he's low on HP!"

And that wasn't the only problem-the Water Pulse had caused confusion! Confused, Raichu lunged at Hydro, who quickly hid inside his shell! He crashed into the shell and was tackled onto the ground, as the Wartortle's shell bounced off the wall and landed behind the Mouse Pokemon.

"Get up, Raichu, your back flank is exposed!"

"Hydro, Bite!"

Using the last of his muscle powers to beat the paralysis, Hydro grabbed Raichu's head and bit it-not afraid of the Paralysis anymore now that he couldn't be paralyzed in his current status! Both Pokemon fell to the ground, but Hydro had the last laugh before succumbing to the electric paralysis.

"Oh my god! We did it Hydro!" Lee, Elated, ran straight on the battlefield and picked up his little Wartortle up, hugging him tightly! "I'm so glad we won! You've done a great thing, you beat the Paralysis to follow my orders!"

"Hmph!" The gym leader could not help but feel a soldier-to-soldier comradery between the boy and his Pokemon-seeing them achieve victory together, and be happy together. "I will admit, Soldier-I am deeply impressed by your heart to take care of the Pokemon! A true attestment to the good trainer-who never leaves his Pokemon behind to take the hit!"

"I'm glad to hear a laudatory remark from you, sir!" With that, Lee did a impromptu salute to the Gym Leader he beat-who saluted back in an official soldier salute..

"Take the badge, and this TM, soldier-You've earned it...Lee!"

Lee Obtained the Thunder Badge! Obtained TM24 Thunderbolt!

"Much obliged, sir!"

With Hydro in his arms, Lee turned around and headed for the exit, seeing a shocked Gray walk into the gym in front of Lee.

"How did you win without a Ground-type pokemon!?" The rival trainer seemed astonished, at Lee's performance with his Pokemon.

"Hey, I don't show you fakes." Lee only replied with a grin at that question. "This should be easy for you with your Ground-type, no?"

"Come in here, Boy!" Lt. Surge hollered out to Gray. "I'll show you how a real soldier fights against ground-type monsters! Let's see if you're tough as your friend."

"Coming!...Uh, sir!" Gray awkwardly called out before turning to Lee. "Come on, Lee, don't bring that up like I'm a jerkass, I'm just trying to use some good type differences."

"Yeah, and I'm off...Noob." Having learned about the military spirit and having shown a in-your-face moment to his friend, Lee walked off to the Pokemon Center, leaving a shocked(and humiliated) Gray behind...

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Before I begin, I want to bring attention to the em dashes and hypens again. The reason I keep bringing that up is because it'll make your writing confusing on occassion. For instance:

From what he read, he was never the same after he came back from the military-it had hardened him into a battle-ready Fighter pilot.
The hypen between "military" and "it" is wrong because they're not two words joining together. Instead you would use the em dash:

From what he read, he was never the same after he came back from the military—it had hardened him into a battle-ready Fighter pilot.

"Battle-ready" is right though because you're joining two words together in similar fashion like "pick-me-up" and "short-term".

Here's one link on em dashes. If it's your keyboard unable to make em dashes, there are keyboard shortcuts you can use. Hope this helps!

As for this chapter, I think this is your best written chapter in a while. A bit amused at Lt. Surge's solider persona there and him screaming to Grey that he'll show him how he deals with ground types haha. I wonder if Grey knows Electric types aren't affective against Grass types considering Lee has Eggshell.

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Chapter 15: Buried in Time

Vermillion City

Leaning back on the bleachers, Lee watched with crackers stuffed in his mouth as Gray shook the entire gym with Duggy using Magnitude. It was nice and all, but he couldn't help but feel bored with the Sandshrew one-shotting the electric types while they weren't even able to fight back. Good for Gray, though. The boy thought to himself, as Sandshrew blasted Raichu with sand, making it faint with a thud.

"Not bad!" The Lieutenant spoke to Gray, throwing him the badge. "You fight as well as your friend back there, but truth be told-type advantages are nothing new! Don't take it too personally, kid, I'd still say that's a good strategy-the oldest one in the book if I ever saw one!"

"I'll try, Mr. Surge-"

"SOLDIER! What did I say about calling me!?"

"Y-yes sir!" Gray quickly straightened out before hastily running out of the gym. Lee quickly followed along, and both friends met outside the gym.

"Well, at least you liked the battle." The brown-haired boy let out a slight sigh before looking at Lee, who grabbed his hand.

"Hey, everyone's gotta fight one way or another. I just didn't like the options I was given, I fight with typing too in normal circumstances, to be honest." The trainer smiled a bit. "Sorry I boasted back there. I got a little too proud of myself."

"...It's alright." Gray weakly let go of Lee's hand. "After all, I was the one being arrogant with Duggy in my hands."

"Right, still...sorry." That was the only thing the kid could say right now, with his childlike humbleness now over him.

Friends forgive each other. I'm glad Gray's one of them. The boy thought, staying close to his friend. With their conflicts settled, both buddies took out their maps.

"So, where to now, Gray?"

"Next gym's at Celadon City, but ah...you know, the Underground Tunnel incident. I heard you got involved in that yourself." The brown-haired boy turned to his companion.

"Heck, don't even mention it! If it wasn't for Hydro I wouldn't be here." The trainer boy clutched harder onto Hydro's Pokeball. You can't thank someone enough for saving your life, whether that be human or Pokemon.

"Fortunately, I've got Winger! Once you get to Lavender Town you can continue onto Saffron and Celadon, but after them you'll need Surf if you want to go to Cinnabar Island."

"We can worry about Surf later, I've got a viable option." Lee patted his pokeball with Hydro in it. "What are we waiting for? Let's fly! We got badges to gain and Team Rocket to stop...again."

"Agreed." Gray threw his pokeball high up in the air. "Go for it, Winger! Use Fly, get us to Lavender Town!"

"Pidgeotto!" The Pidgeotto popped out of its ball, and spread its wings wide before flapping to take off! Rising swiftly into the sky, the Bird Pokemon grabbed the two trainers with its talons, before flying into the sky.

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Lavender Town

Swooping low, Winger gently put the two trainers down in front of the Pokemon center, before flying onto Gray's side and taking a look at the Radio Tower. For some reason Lavender town looked desolate today, with black clouds gathering in the sky that was quickly fading out of blue.

"Well, I think I'll continue on to Celadon before I get wet." Gray said to his friend, calling back his Pidgeotto back into his ball. "You?"

"Go on ahead and wait for me." With a somber look, Lee, his sight focused on the House of Memories. "I have something to do with Mr. Fuji—I promised him."

With this weather it was slightly scary to look at the building too. What used to be the Pokemon Tower was converted to a Radio Tower some years ago, and the graves were moved to the House of Memories, even though reports of "ghost" sightings continued in the radio tower. It was time to put the restless to sleep...especially in a time of chaos like this.

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Volunteer Pokemon House

"Ahh...well, if it isn't you and the Wartortle!" Mr. Fuji stood in front of the Volunteer House, with Cubone by his side. "You did come back!

"Thank you sir. You said we were going to visit the grave of Cubone's mother?"

"Never forgot the promise, boy." The old man started walking, and the boy followed suit. "You know what happened to this poor Cubone's mother, right?"

"Who wouldn't, Mr. Fuji?"

"You would be surprised, Lee." Mr. Fuji looked sort of surprised, although Lee couldn't make out his emotions hidden beneath the kind, benevolent smile. "Youngsters these days often forget the dark days."

Not me. Lee thought to himself. He had heard countless stories of the Cubone and his mother, who was killed by Team Rocket in their pursuit of profit. Its spirit haunted the Pokemon Tower, before being calmed down by Red. And here he was, with the offspring and its parent, Mr. Fuji, to see the mother's grave for himself. Everyone died a bit inside back then. And to think the ghosts of the past are out to kill again...

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House of Memories

"Three flowers, please. I'll pay."

Lee got three lilies-one for everyone including the little Cubone, before Mr. Fuji could say he should pay the price, As Lee walked to the Marowak's grave passing several graves and visitors, a sudden thought struck him. What would his pokemon do if he died, or vice versa? What if he died back in the cave, or in a similar accident by the evil forces that be? What would happen to Hydro, Eggshell and Kitsu? He felt a chill down his spine as he tried to forget that horrible thought. Some thoughts are better left forgotten. At least for now.

"Well, here we are."

Mr. Fuji said, arriving at Marowak's grave. The tombstone of the maternal Bone Keeper pokemon was dull and gray like those of others—the representation of death itself. Mr. Fuji took out a Pure Incense from his pocket, and lit it, making a calming scent rise up into the air. Lee got onto his knees.

"Rest comfortably, Mother Marowak."

Lee then put the flower down gently, in front of the gravestone. Rest in peace. Your child will be well. The boy closed his eyes for some time, before getting back up again with a heavy heart.

"Say, Lee." Mr. Fuji said, putting Cubone on the ground. "Why don't you help the little guy put the flower?"

"Of course, sir." Lee replied with a nod, taking Cubone gently onto his arms. The little Lonely Pokemon simply put the flower in front of the tombstone, which left the trainer feeling heartbroken; the Lonely Pokemon was still too young to know death, and it would be so painful to tell him the truth.

Getting back up with Cubone, Lee could feel sadness taking over his heart as Mr. Fuji bent down and placed the final third flower, and knelt there for a long time. The boy could not help but notice Mr. Fuji's hand moving across his face—tears. That drove Lee over the edge as he felt a gut-wrenching feeling of genuine sorrow that turned into rage: rage against the Rockets that committed such an atrocity.

"Come now."

Lee was only broken out of that trance by Mr. Fuji, who tapped him lightly on the shoulder.

"Let's let the dead rest."

"Yes sir, Mr. Fuji." Best not to overstay one's welcome in a place of peace for the dead. He thought.

As the boy turned around, he started walking to catch up with the old man and his Cubone, now walking out of the door. But he felt something—a hand touching on his shoulder. Yet when he turned around there was no one, and the trainer, in confusion, touched his shoulder, before a ghostly, female voice whispered into Lee's ear:

"Make the world safe for my child."

Snapped out of his confusion by the void, Lee looked around behind him, but there was only the Marowak's tombstone and several other ones by its side.

"...Lee? Come on, let's go."

"......"

"...What's wrong?"

"......It's nothing, Mr." The trainer barely opened his lips to utter these words before turning toward the door.

But he agreed. Whoever that voice was, she was right; this world must become a world where a Pokemon does not have to be murdered in cold blood...

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Friends forgive each other. I'm glad Gray's one of them. The boy thought, staying close to his friend. With their conflicts settled, both buddies took out their maps.

"So, where to now, Gray?"

"Next gym's at Celadon City, but ah...you know, the Underground Tunnel incident. I heard you got involved in that yourself." The brown-haired boy turned to his companion.

"Heck, don't even mention it! If it wasn't for Hydro I wouldn't be here." The trainer boy clutched harder onto Hydro's Pokeball. You can't thank someone enough for saving your life, whether that be human or Pokemon.
I feel this part is read weird where you described the characters as epithets (brown-haired boy, trainer boy, etc). It's fine to overuse their names.

I liked that Lee and Fuji went to put flowers next to Marowak's grave. And aw Cubone doing that too. =<

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Chapter 16: Against the Odds

Underground Path


Through the dark tunnel, Lee trudged on, wondering what would be awaiting him at Celadon City. In this place with no one but him, there was plenty of time to think without getting interrupted. As far as he knew the next gym was a Grass Type, and he was fortunate as he had Kitsu with him. He had completely forgotten about the gym order back when he was preparing for Lt. Surge, and he had gotten lucky. Maybe if his luck continued, he could win a TM for Ice Beam, or another Pokemon, at the Game Corner. Who knows? Celadon was a city full of opportunities, no one knew what was to become of them. Lucky, unlucky...only a very, very fine line stood between them. Going up the stairs and opening the door, he could immediately see a sign that read Route 7->Celadon City, Lee could only hope for one thing in his heart; this time he should be lucky. No one should be in danger, or get hurt. He shouldn't meet the Rocket girl and her parents again. He should be safe, and so should his pokemon...

Celadon City

Celadon City-bright lights, the Department Store, the Game Corner-a City that is packed with people that never sleep. A place where every event catches everyone's eye and goes viral. So initially, Lee wasn't surprised when he saw some people running toward somewhere, shouting something he couldn't make out, reckoning them as people who saw something new to experience. But as the trainer walked to the Game Corner, he saw a flock of cruisers blaring its sirens, heading towards the direction opposite the crowd - consistent with his own! His footsteps slowed down and turned into a mad dash the other way, as Pin Missiles struck the ground he was about to walk into!

What's going on!? Lee thought to himself as he panicked and started running away! The Pin Missiles were indiscriminately targeting everything in its range, from cars parked on the street to bystanders who had no idea what they had walked into! It was a miracle Lee was here running away, as he saw some peoples' Pokemon get blanketed by the attack-he could only hope they would be okay. The trainer quickly jumped into an apartment complex, before slouching against the wall-Lee tried to breathe slowly to calm himself down, but it was hard considering the shots from the Pin Missiles were still ringing outside.

"Hey! Lee!"

A voice called out from the other side of the hallway-a familiar voice he had heard before.

"Gray!"

"Stay there! I'll come to you!"

The friendly rival ran toward Lee, joining the boy in watching the officers hiding behind their cruisers.

"What's going on over there?" Lee asked his friend, peeking out as the officers' Growlithes popped out of their balls.

"Not too sure." Gray replied, taking a bite out of his nails in a show of anxiety. "But something dangerous is going down at the game corner, that's for sure."

"You thugs in there, you're surrounded! Surrender now!" An officer shouted through the megaphone, but the force was met with a barrage of Pin Missiles! The police returned fire with Embers from their Growlithes, and attacks barraged both sides, shattering glass and destroying some street property.

"They're in trouble alright." Lee got back into hiding, now that this was a dangerous situation to be exposed to. "But the police, I think they have this situation under control-"

"They're in trouble though, we gotta help them! Come on!"

Without a warning, Gray ran toward the officers, amidst the hail of Embers and Pin Missiles! Lee could see the projectiles miss his friend by inches, yet Gray never even flinched during all that.

"Hey! Let the professionals handle it! Don't just run in!" Lee started running after him, but he was a slightly bigger target than Gray and had closer calls. The trainer ran through the barrage but a Pin Missile grazed him in the process, cutting a bit off his right sleeve! Praying that the next shot misses his skin too, Lee dived behind an abandoned car and opened its rear left door, providing a bit more protection from the attacks coming from the Game Corner. However the distance between the vehicle and the cruisers was far too wide, and Lee was virtually trapped with only a door to protect him! He had to get closer-fortunately, amidst the firefight, Gray came out of nowhere, to his aid!

"I was okay for now, you know!" The boy shouted to Lee as he dived into the left side of the car alongside Lee, before opening the front door and pulling the handbrake lever, disabling it. "You're good! Push!"

"I can't go back home with you in ashes, you know!" Lee rebutted Gray, before heeding his advice and pushing the car with all its might along with his friend. The car inched toward the police, before they got it close enough to the force for both kids to dash behind the lead squad car!

"Sir, we want to help!" Gray said to the Police officer, who turned around shocked at what he was seeing: two 10-year old trainers willing to help with this volatile situation!?

"Get outta here, kids! This is a very dangerous-" The officer shouted before taking a closer look at Lee. "Hey...aren't you the boy that tried to stop Team Neo Rocket, back in Pewter? Lee, was it?"

"Yes sir. But...Team Neo Rocket, sir?" Lee replied, not being used to this moniker on the villainous team.

"That's the name we use for the new Team Rocket, to differentiate from the previous one." The officer explained, making sure the kids were safe from the Pin Missiles. "I could use your help, alright...is that friend of yours trustable?"

"Yes sir." The boy nodded. "In fact, Gray-my friend-he's the one who suggested that we help."

"Okay then, I guess we could use both of your help. Here's the situation..." The officer peeked out and pointed at the Game Corner building. "Those Team Neo Rocket thugs have taken over the damn building, and are demanding to return the ownership of the Game Corner back to them. We're more than ready to send in our finest, but they've got hostages-the clerk and the gamblers who were in there when this started. If you two could draw their attention so we can infiltrate the site, that would be the best act of helping out."

"We'll do our best sir. But how do we get close to the building?" Gray asked, ducking from the onslaught of Pin Missiles now smashing the cruiser's windows.

"Glad you asked that, kid. We'll lay down suppressive fire and turn their attention towards us-that should be enough to distract them away from you boys. There's a door in the back of the building, use it!" The officer then reached into his car, taking out a handheld transceiver connected to the police radio.

"Alright men, new plan! Provide covering fire, voluntary units are moving in!" He then patted the two kids' backs. "Go! Go!"

"Let's do this!" Gray shouted, and Lee nodded, and both friends started running for the backside of the building. The police officers' Growlithe squad replied to the Pin Missiles with the Puppy Pokemons' vicious Ember at the front, The Team Rocket thugs had to fall back into the building! And with the grunts busy with the enemies in front, they had no chance of seeing the two kids approaching the back door.

"You ready?" Lee held Hydro's Pokeball firmly in his left hand. "You took the risk for me earlier, I'll go in first this time and make things easier for you."

"Go for it, I got your back." Gray took out Poison Ivy's ball.

"Alright, On 3. Ready? One, two...three!"

The 10-year olds, with Lee in front, slammed open the door, as the Rockets turned around in surprise!

"Go for it Hydro! Water Pulse!"

"Protect him, Poison Ivy!"

Hydro's Water Pulse flushed some goons out, while safely whizzing by the hostages, as Poison Ivy wrapped its vines around some of their feet and smashed them into nearby boxes of prizes! As the Pin Missiles flew at them, the Wartortle shot a drizzle of Water Gun at it, deflecting them safely into a nearby wall! While the hostages they were once guarding made a run for it during the commotion, Lee and Gray, who were holding the rockets back, were in a whole heap of trouble now! As Lee threw his balls containing Kitsu and Eggshell, Gray was knocked down by a Team Rocket member holding a glass shard!

"I'll kill ya, you runt!"

"Lee, I need help here!" Gray shouted, as he was overpowered onto the ground desperately holding the glass from stabbing him!

"Don't worry, I'm coming! Hydro, fire!" Lee shouted, and at his command, Hydro fired his Water Gun into the air, which pressed the buttons on Gray's Pokeball holster! Winger, Gray's Pidgeotto, flew out of the ball and fired an airburst right on the Rockets, flinging them away like an artillery shell had crashed onto the ground! In an ironic turn of events, the Rocket goon that tried to kill Gray was thrown against the slot machine, which started spinning from the shock-netting a 7-7-7, making coins spill onto the unfortunate goon's face.

"Ha! Jackpot!" Lee laughed at the event, before helping Gray up. "Nice job, you raised your Pokemon well."

"Same to you, Lee." Gray replied, calling Winger back onto his shoulder. "I'll call the officers out there."

"The honor's all yours." Lee smiled, thinking about how he wouldn't have been the selfless person today without Gray. Like fish in water, he needed Gray-and vice versa. The boy got up and stood behind gray, with their hands raised to avoid false assumptions, and walked out as Gray delivered the good news.

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The kids watched as the last of the police transports drove away, with the Team "Neo" Rocket minions locked up behind them. But the police officers would remain at the scene for a few more hours, to ensure the safety of the people. Meanwhile both trainers were leaning by the side of a patrol car, contemplating about the events that led to this-especially Lee. To think his first experience in this city starts like this-perfect, just perfect. How the Rockets are thinking of doing stuff like this is just insane. They never did give up being evil, did they? They say the nature of a man is like that of a Pokemon-it cannot be changed. It is even worse for people though, because Pokemon have no bad natures. Of course, maybe the preconception that all Rockets are evil may have not helped with the former Rockets' sentiments against society, but there must have been some more healthier way of dealing with this sort of discrimination-

"Good battling you showed us there boys." The officer who briefed them earlier patted their backs, breaking apart Lee's train of thought again. "I'd hate to think what direction this could have gone without you two."

"Thank Gray especially, sir." Lee remarked, hiding his annoyed sentiment at having his peace of thought shattered. "Like I said, If it were not for him I would have stayed in hiding."

"You boys will make great people in the future." The police officer walked away with that statement, leaving the two boys to be consumed by a disturbing feeling coming from the event that they put down.

"Lee, what now?" Gray sighed. "The Rockets, they're trying to take back what they owned..."

"I know, this is big trouble." The friend replied. "A full-fledged attempt to revive Team Rocket is what we're seeing here, directly in Kanto...just like years ago, and..."

...and with that Lee was at a loss of words. The complications were way over their heads this time. The feeling of going through what the earlier generation went through was a highly startling revelation that refused to be described by words. Yet the kid felt it-the sentiment that the two of them were up against a goliath was real, and it was pressing down onto their hearts, more than what they could handle.

"...Should we step back?" Lee spoke up with a bit of self doubt. "Maybe we're embroiling ourselves in bigger trouble."

And for a few minutes, silence filled the space between the friends before Gray, with much less doubt than Lee, spoke up.

"...You know, that's pretty cowardly of you right now." The boy spoke to his friend. "You were the one who suggested that pact, two years ago!"

"......"

"Remember? When you suggested that, we find Giovanni and end the strife of Kanto once and for all, when we went on our first pokemon journey? You can't just back out of that now, Lee! I know you're not like that! This is just a bigger fish that's about to be reeled in with our small bait, and you can't just back out of this jackpot! That is a disgrace to you, me, our parents and the whole of Kanto!"

"......"

"Red wasn't afraid when he took up the challenge of fighting Team Rocket!" Gray continued. "You look up to him? Be like him!!"

"...You're....right." Lee barely managed to spit out the words. "I just had this doubt about whether we can make it."

"We're together. We'll more than make it if we can mend each other's weaknesses." Gray held his friend's hand firmly, to the point where Lee felt like his hand was in a crusher.

"Yeah...thanks Gray. You've got a strong will...you're right. I've decided-I'm not stopping until those who hurt Pokemon are buried!"

"That's the spirit! But speaking of burying, let's worry about their plans later, right now we gotta get to a Pokemon Center or our hurt Pokemon are toast."

As both kids, with newfound resolve of justice in one of them, turned around to get to a Pokemon Center, the Game Corner clerk ran over to the two kids, quickly recovered after being liberated from being a hostage.

"Hey! Kids!"

"Mr.!" Gray turned around, clearly concerned if he was okay after watching 2 kids take down a squadron of grunts. "Are you alright?"

"Alright!? I'm feeling super good! Both of you, back there, you kids saved my ass! Here, I've prepared presents for both of you." Said the clerk, as he took out two Pokeballs and walked over to Lee. "You, kid, I'll let you choose first. "Which Pokemon do you want? A Dratini, or a Porygon?"

"Lee! Can you spare me the Porygon?" Gray asked. "Please? I really want it."

"Sure, it's the least I can do for an encouraging friend like you...that and, I wanted a Dratini anyway."

Lee obtained Dratini!

"Thank you so much, you two! I'll be able to go back to my wife tonight!" The Clerk continued, before taking out two TMs. "And as a bonus present, for your travels ahead..." The clerk then walked over to Gray. "TM Psychic, or TM Ice Beam?"

"Mmm..." The brown-haired kid thought for a little while, before picking Psychic. "I do need Poison and Fighting coverage."

"Great! I needed Grass coverage for Hydro." Lee smiled, imagining what Bulbasaur would look like if frozen.

Lee obtained TM13 Ice Beam!

"Thank you, sir!" That is what the kids could only say. Nothing less, nothing more.

"Look, just take good care of them for me, alright? And put that phony Rocket leader into the ground someday!" The clerk said, before waving them goodbye. The kids were left with their newly-received Pokemon and TM.

"Hey, what are you going to name your Porygon?"

"Hmm...Still thinking." Gray replied. "What about your Dratini?"

"Me too. I'll see it in person, then decide."

"Yeah...see you at the Pokemon Center!"

"Yeah, be right there pal!"

As Gray left, Lee threw the Pokeball with the Dratini in it, before throwing the rest of his Pokeballs to release his Pokemon for an introduction. The Dratini came out of the ball in a coil, and slowly opened its eyes-Hydro and Kitsu was fascinated with the new Pokemon, but the interesting part was that, when the Dratini saw Eggshell, it started getting closer, before hugging it like a snake! The eggs screamed in panic.

"Wow, didn't know that it was female!" Lee said. "Hey! Come here little girl, let me give you a name!"

The Dratini coiled up again on Lee's lap, purring like the cute Dragon she was.

"Well, aren't you the cute Dragon-type?" Lee said. "You'll grow up to be a magnificent, graceful dragon...hey! How about the name Grace? Do you like it?"

The Dratini tilted its head trying to understand the logic behind her name, before nodding in happiness.

"Alright, little Gracie."

With that, Lee held up Grace, the Dragon Pokemon that was soon-to-be-pseudo-legendary, in the air-to welcome the new Pokemon into the world!

"Welcome to the team!"

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"Hey! Let the professionals handle it! Don't just run in!" Lee started running after him, but he was a slightly bigger target than Gray due to being a bit more fat! The trainer ran through the barrage but a Pin Missile grazed him in the process, cutting a bit off his right sleeve! Praying that the next shot misses his skin too, Lee dived behind an abandoned car and opened its rear left door, providing a bit more protection from the attacks coming from the Game Corner, however the distance between the vehicle and the cruisers was far too wide, and Lee was virtually trapped with only a door to protect him! He had to get closer-fortunately, amidst the firefight, Gray came out of nowhere, to his aid!
First thing I want to mention is the "being a bit more fat" part seems unnecessary since you mentioned "bigger target" from earlier.

Second thing is I noticed in that paragraph and throughout the rest of the chapter you used exclamation points a lot. I get that this is a more action and faster paced chapter, but overusing exclamation points can make your prose more humorous than intended and make the reader not take it seriously.

To be honest, I don't blame Lee for feeling he and Gray need to back off a bit. They're kids after all. Hopefully they'll have some help from adults and not do this on their own. And Lee was quick to have a Dratini there. Would be interesting if you have Lee having a hard time raising Dratini.

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Thanks for your inputs throughtout my story! I plan to keep writing Pokemon stories so your criticisms will help me out in the long run(although I am a bit busy sometimes and unable to upload for some time, quite frequently).
I do have this problem though: I plan to go to other regions too after this arc. Do you think I should keep using Lee, or should I come up with individual characters for every region? I fear Lee may become an Ash-type character in the former option, although I plan to keep his expertise gained in his adventures.

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Thanks for your inputs throughtout my story! I plan to keep writing Pokemon stories so your criticisms will help me out in the long run(although I am a bit busy sometimes and unable to upload for some time, quite frequently).
I do have this problem though: I plan to go to other regions too after this arc. Do you think I should keep using Lee, or should I come up with individual characters for every region? I fear Lee may become an Ash-type character in the former option, although I plan to keep his expertise gained in his adventures.
Glad my input is helping you out so far! I thought I'm becoming a bit too hard on you lately, I comment the way I am because I want to see you improve. And don't worry about being busy, I've been slow updating my own story too haha.

As for your question, to be honest that I can't say and only you can decide. If you do decide to continue to use Lee, you're right some readers might be tired of him and harder for him to develop. Him keeping his expertise is a good step, though. If you want a different character, I would go with someone a different personality than Lee. These are just my thoughts!

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Chapter 17: Flowers in the Wind

Celadon City


Is this what I should be doing right now? Lee asked himself, again, and again. standing at the door of the gym for 10 minutes now. His newfound resolve had dried up at the face of a challenge that stood before him. Ever since he failed to act decisively as he had hoped to, back at the Game Corner, and Gray had to take action for him...he now had something he had never felt before he went on this Pokemon adventure: doubt. The feeling that a greater force was at work, threatening everyone including him, and that he was up against that power was something that was heavily disheartening. And that pervasive sense of doubt kept eating away at his determination, despite encouraging words from Gray. The trainer was no longer sure if hunting Giovanni would be the romantic, heroic adventure he hoped his first journey to be. People and Pokemon' lives were at stake, and that was not a risk he was willing to take. He wanted no one innocent getting hurt.
That was when Lee felt a hand on his right shoulder — and, surprised at the sudden touch, he turned around to see a girl in a kimono, who had a mystic smile on her face as if she knew what Lee was suffering from. Enclosed in his thoughts, it took a solid 5 seconds for Lee to recognize who she was; Erika, the gym leader of Celadon City.

"What brings you here today?" Erika said, in a soothing voice, the velvety kimono wrapping around Lee. "It is a rare sight to see a lone wanderer hesitating in front of the gym. Most people just walk in without doubt."

"Oh! Uh...G-Gym leader Erika." Lee sputtered out his words, feeling awkward and unsure about his current situation. "I just...It's this sort of problem I've had these days, and...well-"

"There is no need to explain." The gym leader just softly smiled, confusing the trainer even more and yet soothing him in a weird way. "I can see a blight across your face, something that plagues all of the flowers around us today. It is related with the Rockets, is it not?"

"Uhh...I, um, guess you could say so." With that, Lee could only let out a sigh. "I...it's hard to explain."

"A calm mind helps you elaborate your problems into a tangible source, for both people and Pokemon." Erika spoke softly to Lee, her words soothing the 10-year old. "Why don't you come inside? I'll give you something to clear your mind."

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Celadon City Gym

Flowers of all kinds of scents and color bloomed in the gym, with Grass-type Pokemon frolicking in the pretty scenery. However the scenery comprised of bright colors and the fragrant atmosphere failed to solve Lee's problems, who was sitting on the grassy ground by a blooming bush, looking down at the half-empty cup of floral tea that Erika gave him. His heart full of worries, the trainer took another sip from the mind-clearing drink again, refreshing his head as the warmth struck him. At that moment Erika came over to Lee, and sat by him with another cup of tea in her hands.

"So, have you cleared the clutter in your mind?" Erika asked.

"It sure helped. Thank you, Gym Leader." Lee replied with a far calmer voice, and took a final sip from his cup. "You see, I started this whole adventure because, I had this sort of fantasy, that...I could finish what Red started. Bring Giovanni to justice. My friend, he...thought the same thing as me. We both made it through all sorts of stuff in our adventures, saw new Team Rocket members spring up now, for some reason...but at this critical moment, he acted. I couldn't, I was...scared, for the first time in my adventure."

"Go on."

"I'm afraid of what's happening right now. All this rise of a new Team Rocket, and I'm here with my Pokemon team that even I sometimes feel it's not good enough. And the risks keep getting higher and higher and more people and Pokemon get hurt. I'm afraid to act, because I'm afraid of the possibility that I might...fail. There's so much at risk."

A moment of silence enveloped the field of flowers, and only the calls of Pokemon could be heard in the gym for that moment.

"...Lee, you should not be afraid." Erika finally spoke up, breaking the silence. "I know you have just started your adventure, but I have heard through the league that, a trainer powered through 3 badges without trouble - that trainer was you. And the people you've saved-they'll forever be grateful to you, Lee. As far as I can see, you have more than enough power and resolve. Your inaction is what is stopping you."

"But what if people get hurt? Because of my actions?" Lee got up from the grass patch he was sitting on, his frustration and worry further elevated by the slightly unclear answer.

"Not doing anything will get more people hurt. Violence always festers in the path of least resistance." Erika replied, getting up much more gently from her seat. "But these words, I see, are not enough to console you, even when given by someone close like your friend. You will have to see your strength - your potential when you choose to act - for yourself, and choose to fill your heart with hope instead of doubt."

With that, Erika turned around, and walked away from Lee, making some distance between them, before she softly, turned around with a Pokeball in hand.

"Lee...I challenge you to a Pokemon battle."

"...Gym Leader Erika..." Lee, intially taken aback at the sudden challenge, clenched his teeth and took out his Pokeball. He was not gonna benefit from acting like a wimp anymore. Erika and Gray was right-he had to be brave. He had to try. For Cubone's mother. For Red.

"...I accept your challenge."

Gym Leader Erika wants to battle!

"I choose you, Victreebel."

"Go for it, Kitsu!"

The Pokeballs criss-crossed across the battling field, as both Lee's Vulpix and Erika's Victreebel both turned around to face each other, starting out calm in a battle that was about to heat up.

"Victreebel, Acid."

"Kitsu, Ember!"

The Flycatcher Pokemon closed its hole, then spewed out a purple liquid that drenched the Fox Pokemon! This severely weakened Kitsu's defense, slightly melting away her protective fur. But nevertheless, she simply shook it off before letting out a wave of flames from her mouth! The super-effective type attack made Victreebel cry out its name in pain.

"Hold on, Victreebel. Poison Powder!"

"Kitsu, use Ember again! Dodge it if you can!"

The Victreebel, again, spouted out a burst of poisonous powder from its mouth! The wide spread of the powder meant that it would hit Kitsu inevitably wherever she was, but it takes some time for poison to spread into the body-and Kitsu was still full of health! And in that time, Kitsu torched the Victreebel again, leaving the Pokemon with a nasty burn! But the attack did enough damage, making the Victreebel fall to the ground unconscious. Still, Lee bared his teeth at the result: Kitsu was poisoned, and he knew that one wrong move could cost him his chance of effective attacks since he had Grass-Psychic and Water in the roster, which could prove slightly weak against the Grass-type enemies. So he decided to keep going with Kitsu, by healing her poison.

"I hope you are seeing this, Lee...you are powerful!" Erika, in the heat of battle, became ever more determined. "I'm giving it all, and I'm hoping the same from you! Go, Tangela!"

"Kitsu, c'mere! I got something for you!"

The Tangela, a curled-up Grass-type pokemon, viciously showed its tentacles in an attempt to intimidate! Meanwhile, Kitsu ran back to Lee, who sprayed her with an Antidote! Lee would use the potion in the next turn, hoping that Kitsu can hold on with her current HP.

"Get them!"

"Vul! Vul-pix!" Kitsu growled, before taking a battle position! Its body trembled, knowing its low health and a poisonous close call.

"Tangela, Bind!"

At Erika's orders, the Vine Pokemon grasped the Vulpix! Squeezing her, it kept giving pain to Kitsu until it could take no more, with the drained HP.

"Kitsu! No!" Concerned at the knockout of his Pokemon, Lee quickly used his ball before the Tangela could further do anything to her! "Return!"

Not now! Lee thought to himself. There was no way out of this one. A quick Pokedex check confirmed his worst fears; the Pokemon was completely Grass-type only unlike other Grass-type Kanto pokemon, meaning that there was no way of taking it down effectively and quickly before it did any more damage. Unless...

"You're up! Hydro!" With great apprehension, Lee threw the ball containing his Wartortle, and the Turtle Pokemon rolled onto the ground, its bushy tail and ears shaking as it landed on its feet. He would take double damage if the Tangela attacked, but he had a trick up his sleeve-thanks to the nice Game Corner guy he helped rescue!

"Tangela, Constrict!"

"Hydro! Ice Beam!"

Hydro, just as the Tangela was about to use its vines to wrap the turtle, fired a beam of ice against the Pokemon! The Tangela completely froze in place, giving time for the Wartortle to back off!

"Tangela! Tan-" The pokemon could only cry as Hydro bent its knees, and jumped!

"Hydro! Tackle!" Lee was not counting on the attack to freeze the Pokemon solid, but the gambit worked and now he had this under control. Hydro smashed into the frozen Tangela, making it fall backwards! The ice shattered, leaving an unconscious Tangela on the ground.

"You're doing great. But you're not giving your full power!" Despite losing her Pokemon, Erika was enthralled watching the child battling her finally be free of his concerns and become someone who can battle, without fear or doubt of his abilities... "I would love to see more, of what you can do. Return, Tangela!"

"Will do, Gym Leader Erika!" Lee nodded, with a confident look on his face. "Come back, Hydro!"

Both trainers called back their wounded Pokemon and threw out their last Pokemon! Lee's Exeggcute and Erika's Vileplume flew into the arena, and faced each other in a final showdown!

"Eggshell, Confusion!"

"Vileplume, Stun Spore!"

As Eggshell's psychic energy hit Vileplume at full power, it released toxic powder that reached Eggshell! Its faces were visibly pained, struggling to move as a zappy feeling took over their every move.

"Vileplume, Petal Dance!"

"Eggshell! Come on!" Lee crossed his fingers-although Paralysis drops Eggshell's speed and has a chance to make Eggshell unable to do anything, he still had a chance. One more Confusion-just one more! Yet this turn, Eggshell's paralysis took effect, leaving it unable to do anything. The Petal Dance ripped through the Exeggcutes, separating the eggs and causing massive damage despite the effectiveness being halved due to the typing effectiveness!

"Petal Dance never stops-until the Pokemon runs out of energy." Erika explained without resorting to shouting, despite all the chaos surrounding her. "A state of confusion will eventually kick in, but until then the attack continues."

"Eggshell, just hold on!" Knowing that the rest of the team would not be able to defend against the Vileplume if Eggshell were to go down, Lee desperately gave out his commands. "Try to use Confusion!"

One of the eggs, the broken one in the back, acted up trying to defeat the paralysis, crying in a high-pitched voice, as pink waves of Psychic energy gathered around it-the Confusion! Through a psychic power the Eggs, separated by the ensuing Petal Dance, joined together and fired off a Confusion attack, which hit the Vileplume at the last moment of the Petal Dance! Both Pokemon closed their eyes and fell to the ground, having knocked each other out in their attacks. Another moment of silence came between the two trainers, who, both silently called back their Pokemon to their balls.

"...I concede defeat. But it is my duty to be a ladder to those who wish to climb up." Erika softly smiled, having calmed down with the battle's end. "Here's hoping that you realized the full extent of what you can do, if you are courageous enough to act."

"You're right...I started this whole adventure because I wanted to act." Lee could finally speak with conviction, as he had now seen his power for himself. "My Pokemon want to act. Giving up would disappoint them, and myself-because we both didn't do our best. I'll keep that in mind-Thank you, Gym Leader Erika."

"No, thank your Pokemon. It is them who represent your will." In light steps, Erika approached her challenger, and put her hands on those of Lee's-before letting go, leaving a badge in his palms. "Take this as a memoir for your lessons-so you may cherish and never forget your potential."

Lee got the Rainbow Badge from Erika!

"And please...take this too, for your Grass-type Exeggcute. It will further help him with his potential."

Obtained TM21 Mega Drain!

Obtained Leaf Stone!


"The Leaf Stone will make your Exeggcute evolve...please use it when your heart is ready."

"Thank you."

His path from now on was clear. To stop at nothing for justice, to fulfill his dream of catching Giovanni. The boy closed his eyes, and bowed down as a honorable "thank you" to Erika.

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I do like your characterization of Erika in this chapter, having her talk with Lee over his worries with Team Rocket. The battle itself is paced fine, but I did notice you overusing exclamation points again that makes some actions more dramatic than necessary. There was also one reference to Kitsu's HP being sapped out which sounds a bit too mechanical.

At Erika's orders, the Vine Pokemon grasped the Vulpix! Squeezing her, it managed to completely wring out whatever HP Kitsu had left!
Instead of "wring out whatever HP Kitsu had left", maybe describe how Kitsu's starts getting tired and running out of energy there.

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I do like your characterization of Erika in this chapter, having her talk with Lee over his worries with Team Rocket. The battle itself is paced fine, but I did notice you overusing exclamation points again that makes some actions more dramatic than necessary. There was also one reference to Kitsu's HP being sapped out which sounds a bit too mechanical.



Instead of "wring out whatever HP Kitsu had left", maybe describe how Kitsu's starts getting tired and running out of energy there.
I'm not sure how I can stop using exclamations so much. They all seem...needed. Could you give me tips on them?

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I'm not sure how I can stop using exclamations so much. They all seem...needed. Could you give me tips on them?
I would read your work aloud and pay close attention to how the sentences with the exclamation points sound. If it sounds too dramatic to you, then you should replace the exclamation mark with the period. I can see you try to have it similar to the games's writing style, but in prose form it's silly. I would maybe read a book with lots of action and note how the writing didn't need the exclamation marks. Hopefully this helps!

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Chapter 18: The Reserves of the Day

Celadon City

Sitting on a bench, two boys, none other than Lee and Gray, put down their drinks for a moment and watched as the lights from all the advertisements, buildings, and cars brighten the night sky in a dark shade of rainbow.

"So you're telling me, that Erika taught you a lesson through the battle?" Gray asked his friend, who was sitting next to him.

"Yep. She made me realize my potential in that way. A practical application of her battle skills." Lee replied, taking a sip from his can of Lemonade. "I don't wanna brag, but I just saw what me and my Pokemon could do. I don't feel scared anymore, instead, I feel...confident."

"Well, I'm glad you're back to your old self. That's the Lee I'm friends with." Gray talked about it happily, before getting up from the seat. "Now it's my turn to challenge Erika, I guess. I'm gonna go shop at the mall before I go challenge the gym, then after that, I'll hit the bunk. Wanna come with me?"

"Sure, I need more supplies. I also need some Super Potions and Full Heals too." Lee couldn't agree more with his proposition. It was that time to restock on supplies again-he was running out of food, for both himself and his Pokemon, as he continued his journey and spent the clams. His backpack also had a slight zipper issue which almost tore a part of his sleeping bag a few days ago, and his clothes needed washing, having been dirtied from the rough times the wearer went through(and at this point Lee was amazed at how all trainers from Kanto to Unova went through their adventures with just one set of clothes). To all the trainers who needed things, the Poke Mart always gave answers to their problems, but Lee knew that, since they would now be visiting a super-store with much more in stock, in both quantity and diversity, they would get more than just answers - now they would get extras.

"Just try not to overspend, okay Lee?" Gray laughed at his own joke, having seen how Lee spent every cent for traveling supplies.

"Yeah yeah, I'll try not to buy too much." In contrast, the other trainer shook his head-he just cared for his pokemon, why laugh at it? "Lead the way, Gray."

"With pleasure. On me."

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Celadon Department Store

Inside the Department Store, an endless line of products stretched out in front of the two boys, as busy shoppers went back and forth buying things they needed from various shops also set up in the building. A stream of advertisements flooded the screens in the tv store, while details about today's sales flowed out on the speakerphone. In fact, there was so much to see to the childrens' eyes, that they could not focus on one thing.

"Alright, which section first?" Lee asked Gray excitedly, eager to see what different stuff the mall could offer.

"Hmm, I think we should designate our roles of buying stuff, since our cash is limited." Gray tapped his foot against the ground, thinking about how to avoid a potential economic crash that could put both trainers out of commission. "How much do you have?"

A quick check of their respective wallets commenced for both kids.

"About 100,000 Pokedollars. Spent a lot on potions and Revives to use on the road." Lee gave out his reply before slightly grimacing at his financial situation. Maybe it was a bit early to get enthusiastic about shopping. At least he was better than those he had beat on the road-those who had to pay. "You?"

"I went frugal on supplies, that leaves me 150,000 Pokedollars." Gray said, putting the wallet back in his bag. "Like I said, we should designate our roles-I have the fatter wallet, so I'll pay for the food and any repairs we need. Can you get the necessary supplies? Pokeballs, potions, Revives, stuff like that."

"You're the wiser spender here. While you're at it, could you get my bag fixed? Zippers keep jamming." The trainer nodded at his friend's plan, and took his Pokeballs and wallet out of his rucksack before giving it to Gray. "How about we meet at the laundromat on the 5th floor, when we're done?"

"That's a great idea. See you in about an hour."

Gray gave Lee a thumbs up before walking into the crowd, and off to the food section on the lower floors to buy the MREs he and his friend needed. Lee, after giving another thumbs up as a reply, made his way to the escalator to get to the second floor, where the Trainers' Market was located. It's funny how things had changed-years ago, when he was young and Red had just solved the Rocket problem, he and his parents would come here to shop. Back then there were only stairs, and there were fewer people and fewer sections. Now, however, the department store had grown into the biggest shop in the Kanto region, directly competing with that of Veilstone in Sinnoh. Lee could think of a reason for that-danger past, god forgotten. There was nothing to worry about not being able to spend money for your Pokemon again now that those who would make that unavailable were gone. Maybe that forgetfulness caused the ruckus about Team Rocket's return? Lee could only wonder.

2F: Trainers' Market

Lee stood there for several minutes looking at a "Buy 10 Pokeballs, get a Premier ball" deal, after commanding his Pokemon to look around for things they wanted. Was 2000 Pokedollars worth a commemorative ball? To get answers to his question the boy looked at his shopping basket again; so far, a bunch of potions, 10 Ultra Balls, 20 pieces of Revive, 30 cases of Super Potions on sale, and 20 Great Balls. Lee knew full well from experience that even supplies this much could all be sent in several days, even by one person. Yet the total estimated price of all these products meant that almost all of his hard-earned cash would go flying out the window for something he would halve with his friend. He reluctantly put down the Pokeballs. Maybe next time. But the thought about his finances was broken up when Grace started pulling at Lee's pant sleeve.

"Dratiini." The Dragon Pokemon softly let out its cry, a Poke Toy curled up in its grasp.

"Hold on, Gracie," Lee muttered, trying not to let his anger about his money spending be transmitted to his Pokemon. "Let the others choose too."

"Wartortle! Wartort-"

"VUL-PIX!"

The loud cries, clearly the sounds of his pokemon, not only turned Lee's but everyone else's heads around! The Pokemons' trainer saw that Hydro and Kitsu were fighting over what they had picked was better! Hydro had chosen a Fancy Blue Bow while Kitsu had chosen a Fire Stone. It was a Pokemon fight waiting to happen, and Lee couldn't have that.

"You two, quit it! Go back to your balls and think about what you two have done!" Lee quickly took out two of his Pokeballs, before pressing the buttons respectively. "Sorry, everyone...sorry..."

Now I know what mom and dad felt when I threw a tantrum at the mall. Lee thought to himself as he quickly picked up the items that were held by the Pokemon. It took some doubt, but he decided to buy whatever his Pokemon wanted if it means stopping more fights. Even if it does mean now more than 80% of his allowance would be decimated, he knew individual happiness was an important thing that could affect battles. Slightly late to the party, Eggshell soon arrived, the eggs all carrying a TM for Reflect. At least one of his Pokemon picked something useful.

"Great job, Eggshell." Lee petted his Exeggcute, but Grace was clearly not happy about this preferential treatment. As soon as Lee put the TM in the basket, the Dratini weakly performed a Slam on the Egg Pokemon. Eggshell was not amused, soon retaliating with a Hypnosis that made Grace flop to the ground.

"...Scratch that." The trainer sighed as he just put all his Pokemon back in his ball. Raising Pokemon is like taking care of kids that don't listen to you, he thought again, reminding himself not to get angry with them, for they are monsters from the wild that were tamed into humans' pockets. But at least with the troubles behind him, now he was finished shopping, so...that's that. All in all, Lee did expect the life of a nomad to be hard. He just didn't expect it to be this hard.

5F Accessories/Miscellaneous

The Green t-shirt, white longsleeved shirt, blue jeans, and black-and-white shoes tumbled in the dryer as Gray sat on a nearby seat and waited for his friend to arrive while dressed in a backup t-shirt and gym pants. And soon enough, out of a nearby elevator, Lee soon appeared with his shopping basket full of toys and Pokemon stuff.

"Hey, you're done shopping?" Gray turned his head toward Lee. "I paid for your spot. It's right next to mine, to the right."

"Thanks. Let's split the stuff we bought before we get going on our own ways." Lee sat down and, with the help of his Pokemon, started separating the products that came in bunches, in equal halfsies for Gray. Of course, the Premier Ball went to Gray, for Lee found no use for a Pokeball painted white. But other than that, all Pokemon-related supplies were now fairly distributed.

"This is a lot! And you only had 100,000 Pokedollars?" Gray asked Lee, while putting the supplies in his bag carefully for maximum capacity after giving Lee's rucksack to its owner.

"Yep. I have only three grand left now." Lee replied with a look of worry on his face, as he received his bag from Gray and tested if the zippers had been fixed properly, before packing his share of the medical supplies. "I'm gonna undress and switch to my backups real quick. While I do that, you can give me the foodstuffs you bought."

"Alright, prepare to be amazed then."

The joking reply was left in the air as Lee walked over to a nearby dressing room, before taking off the sweaty, dirt-ridden clothes and quickly switching to loose shorts and a t-shirt. As he threw his clothes inside the washer and hit the button, Gray revealed the foodstuffs he had bought for himself and Lee; a pack of bottled Fresh Water, a six-pack of Lemonade, 50 bags of MRE meals with various flavors, two big bags of Pokemon food that fit into both trainers' bags, and some light snacks such as crackers, candy, and hardtacks.

"You did great with 150,000 clams, I have to admit that." Lee marveled at Gray's efforts, before taking a look at the MRE bags to choose a flavor he wanted. Mac-and-cheese, Slowpoketail stew, Galarian tikka masala, etc...to think he nailed variety too with a limited budget.

"At a price though. I'm down to one-fifteenth of my original wealth. Turns out inflation kicked in while we were on the road." That's when the rosy tint shattered for Lee as the economics of the world hit both kids hard. "I'll beat more roadside trainers for cash, but it's gonna take much more time getting back what I originally had."

"I think that applies for all of us." Lee spoke out bitterly, letting out a sigh at the end. "Oh well, you gain a few, you lose a few. That's how money works."

"At least I'll get to see the face of Erika when I buff my Pokemon with your medical supplies. All thanks to you, Lee." Gray got up from his seat slightly smiling and took out his clothes from the dryer. "I'm gonna get changed and go battle the gym. The motel key to my room is in your bag, so do whatever you'd want to do with that-just open the door for me when I come back."

"And I'll get to fill my stomach for another day thanks to you. Good luck, Gray."

And to think another day ended just like that. Both trainers that day felt like they were in the same predicament as their clothing-tossed around by the outside forces in every aspect.

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Back then there were only stairs, and there were fewer people and fewer sections. Now, however, the department store had grown into the biggest shop in the Kanto region, directly competing with that of Veilstone in Sinnoh. Lee could think of a reason for that-danger past, god forgotten. There was nothing to worry about not being able to spend money for your Pokemon again now that those who would make that unavailable were gone.
I like the reference of the Celadon City store changing. The "danger past, god forgotten" sounds awkward though. Did you mean, "danger past long forgotten" instead?

The loud cries, clearly the sounds of his pokemon, not only turned Lee's but everyone else's heads around! The Pokemons' trainer saw that Hydro and Kitsu were fighting over what they had picked was better! Hydro had chosen a Fancy Blue Bow while Kitsu had chosen a Fire Stone. It was a Pokemon fight waiting to happen, and Lee couldn't have that.
Besides this part, I noticed you used exclamation marks way less this time, so keep up with that. This is a cute scene nonetheless.

The Green t-shirt, white longsleeved shirt, blue jeans, and black-and-white shoes tumbled in the dryer as Gray sat on a nearby seat and waited for his friend to arrive while dressed in a backup t-shirt and gym pants.
Don't think you need to describe all of the clothes like that. You can just say something like "After putting his clothes in the dryer, Gray sat on a nearby seat (etc)."

Not too much happened in this chapter, so I don't have too much to comment on this time. I will say though that yes it's more important than ever to save money for supplies there heh.

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Chapter 19: Corporate Siege, Part 1

"...ennekin News would like to stress that intervening in a police case is dangerous and should not be practiced by unprepared professionals. Meanwhile, as the situation worsens, the League has announced that recent cases will now be investigated by the International Police as a response to this Team Rocket crisis that has..."

That was what Lee heard when he woke up sprawled on his bed in the motel room in his underwear. Yesterday's memory was a haze-he didn't even remember how he opened the door for Gray. All he remembered was that he fell asleep on the couch with Tyranitar: King of the Pokemon on the air. But the sun was shining down on him and there was no more time for sloth, no more going back to sleep in the morning. The trainer got himself off the couch and found his clothing messily piled next to his backpack, and put on his jeans again after checking for Gray. The pants bit down on his waist, sending a slight jolt of pain as he readjusted to being hugged by the tightness. And just when he was thinking about that, he heard movement from the other bed, where Gray woke up in his white shirt and boxer pants, his brown hair messed up.

"Hey, Good morning to you," Lee spoke first, fighting the drowsiness that threatened to overcome him.

"Hey Lee," Gray spoke to his friend, scratching his head as he struggled to completely open his eyes. "Morning. Could you tell me the time?"

"Sure, just let me check my phone." Detaching his phone from a motel-provided charger, Lee took a look at the device's screen. "10:00 in the morning, still early if you ask me. By the way, did you win at the gym yesterday night?"

"Lee, Gyms are made to be broken. Of course I passed that challenge, or my name isn't Gray Falsom." Gray replied, in a slightly drowsy bragging tone that still tried to sound nice. "Wake up our Pokemon, I'm feeling good enough to make breakfast. Do you mind if I use a few bags of your MREs?"

"Suit yourself. As long as you don't muck up the cooking."

The boys both got out of bed, ready to start another day of their adventure. It had been a long journey and more troubles probably awaited them, but there was no reason to stop now. They knew that they would be surrendering should they stop their mission and adventure. As Gray left for the kitchen, Lee looked down at his phone while pressing all of the Pokeballs' buttons, one by one. It had been some time since he had received or made a call from/to his mother...she was probably worried sick by now. Maybe I should give her a ring, the boy thought, plopping back on his bed, before Grace, and all his other Pokemon, jumped onto him for petting.

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"Hello?"

"Mom? It's me, Lee."

"Oh? Is there anything wrong, sweetie? You sound...fatigued."

"...Don't worry, nothing's wrong, mom. It's just that all the battling has made me tired. I've got my fourth Gym Badge and I'm going to head to Fuschia City, and...I thought I'd call you in the meantime. It's been a while."

"You're heading to Fuchsia City?"

"Yeah, the fifth Pokemon gym's there."

"...You must be at Celadon now, then. Are you?"

"I am, mom. Why?"

"You're near Saffron, right? Why don't you stop by Silph Co. and visit your dad, before you head for Fuchsia?"

"...I just thought of that, too, mom. I'll do that for sure. I'll call back later after I meet dad. Love you!"

"Be safe, honey!"

Lee, outside the motel, put his phone back in his bag and sighed. To think he had completely forgotten about his dad. Yet for the past few weeks of his adventure dad had never called him. The last time he called was when he was injured from the cave incident, and Mr. Fuji took that call instead of him. But in a way, Lee understood him-working at the Silph Corporation really took much of your time. Although he made big salaries and rose to the rank of General Director of the Silph IT Division, he barely came home when Lee was awake and rarely answered his family's messages or calls. Lee knew his dad loved his family. He was probably worried about his son too, although he was probably so buried in work that he had no time to care. So the option of visiting his dad in person...that'd be a nice surprise for him. When the mountain can't move to Arceus, Arceus must move to the mountain, bearing holy gifts at that too. Now, Lee thought, Gray had left before him for Fuchsia, and morning was quickly transitioning into afternoon. If he wanted to spend time with his father before heading immediately to catch up with Gray, then lunchtime would be his best bet-in fact, as far as he knew, it was his only bet, in that his dad had to return to work immediately after the meal break. He had to hurry.

Route 7-Saffron City

Nearing the entrance of the city, Lee remembered the rumors told by past adventurers, that the gate guards around this part were notorious for demanding something to drink every time someone passed. Lucky for him it had been years now-things could have been set right in the following years. And Lee's assumptions proved correct as by the gate, the guards, stationed on the other side separated by a counter, welcomed Lee while drinking their tea.

"Welcome to Saffron City, good sir!" One of the guards waved before getting up from his seat in sudden realization. "Hey, you're that kid who battled the new Team Rocket! Lee, was it?"

"Yes sir." Lee cleared his throat, feeling a curse about not recognizing Gray trying to claw its way out of his heart and out of his mouth. "My friend helped me a lot though, not gonna lie. If it wasn't for him I would not be here."

"Yeah, that friend of yours was a badass too!" The second guard spoke up. "Gray, was it? He hasn't passed through here yet if you are looking for him."

"I know, sir. He'll be passing later though, could you welcome him too when he gets here?"

"Of course, Lee, no worries about that."

You and your quick thoughts, Lee. The trainer thought to himself, barely having steered away from an interpersonal disaster. But despite his success at defusing relations, he shook his head in regret; he should have said Gray was his teammate, not someone who helped. Still, it was good that they knew the whole story, that Gray had his friend's back at the time.

"Thank you all. Have a nice day!" Lee waved at the guards before heading into the city, his hair bristling from the slight wind blowing at the other end of the gate.

Saffron City

Entering the city, the trainer saw why the city was named Saffron: everywhere he looked, the place was a bright shade of yellow. The kid had nothing bad to say-after all, he liked the yellow theme that was going on. It went along nicely and provided a bright feel to the otherwise slightly boring city, after all. It was still the busiest city in Kanto, and it had only gotten busier ever since it opened the new magnetic train station and the Fighting type "gym" reprised itself as an actual dojo that taught martial arts. Every change made to this place basically melded itself into the busy lifestyle of the people here, and the changes only added so much hecticness that it seemed like nothing had changed at all-it gets hard to notice things when every day is the same busy life, change or not.

But enough of sightseeing-lunchtime was almost ending and if he didn't have his lunch with his father now, there might not be another chance at even trying that again until tomorrow afternoon, 24 hours that he could not afford with Team Rocket trying to make Kanto the hellhole it once was and Gray trying to one-up him. If there was one thing Lee wanted to do, it was spending some quality father-son time before he got on the road again, because he would be unable to see him and mom until the end of the adventure. Making a U-Turn toward the Silph Co. building, Lee pressed all the buttons on his Pokeballs, letting Hydro, Kitsu, Eggshell and Grace out to explore Saffron and Silph Co. He would be returning, sure, but that would be a long time from now.

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Silph Co.

In just several years after Team Rocket went down, the Silph Corporation had become one of the largest conglomerates in the world, boasting a wide line of products from something as simple as Pokeballs to smartphones and vehicles. And true to its reputation, its headquarters was now expanded into a skyscraper that looked like a building out of an SF movie. As Lee and his Pokemon, the latter 4 excited with the new scenery, got closer to Silph Corporation's HQ, he was disturbed at the level of security at the gates-heavily armored guards, clad in Pokemon bite-proof armor, surrounded the place with Arcanines stationed next to every guard. The boy couldn't blame them-after all, Team Rocket did a number on this place back in Red's day, in which a Master Ball was almost stolen. But the staff looked scary, and Lee couldn't help but think that this show of force was bad for PR. Especially when he met the security for himself at the entrance.

"Hey, kid! Only Silph staff and relatives of said staff are allowed in the building. Don't loiter around in front of the building, get out." A security guard spoke to the boy, clearly annoyed at having to deal with someone trying to enter.

"Wartortle!" Hydro was not happy at his trainer being treated like a bum, and so was every other Pokemon of his.

"It's okay guys, I got this..." Despite having been insulted by unwelcome security, Lee suppressed his anger and took a few deep breaths, before walking up to the rude guard. "I'm here to see my dad. He works here."

"Oh really? What's your dad's name?"

"Uhh...Damien Hahn, head of the IT division."

"And what would your name be, kid?"

"Lee Hahn, I'm his son, a Pokemon Trainer." Lee barely suppressed his rage as he handed his Trainer ID to the guard he was talking to, who took a close look at it for some time.

"I hope you're telling the truth, runt." The guard replied, as security officers converged on Lee, one taking his bag and checking for dangerous stuff while another security guard patted Lee on the vest and legs, to make sure there was nothing hidden under his clothes, and the other one checked on his pokemon, who were clearly annoyed at the procedure. The guard that spoke to Lee held up a walkie talkie, and talked into the device. "We have a visitor, claims he's the son of an executive, by the name of Damien Hahn at IT. Please confirm status, over."

Lee closed his eyes in frustration, not liking this whole suspicion around him. Were these guards gonna really frisk a 10-year old for risks of terrorism? He knew they were being careful, but this didn't make any sense at all. Like, what harm could a 10-year old kid do to them? But then, in the deepest part of his mind, he remembered Belle-who was 10 years old according to her Trainer Card. Still, there had to be a lot more innocent teens like himself, and this just seemed wrong.

"Clear, he's got nothing." A security officer finished frisking.

"Clear, nothing dangerous in his bag too." The other officer gave Lee his bag back, albeit with the order of supplies now messed up from the re-packaging. The boy could not help but feel an MRE package's sharp corner jab his backside.

"Standby, awaiting permission." The rude guard, it turns out, seemed to be the whole leader of the security group, or so Lee thought. It was no surprise that a misanthrope security chief like that was picked, as the guy would repel anyone coming into the company, which would result in less annoying matters for the company. Some words he couldn't make out from the walkie talkie's buzz responded to the guard's earlier reports. "Roger that, will do. Over."

"Can I go in now?" Lee asked in a clearly annoyed voice.

"Watch your language, runt." The guard gave the 10-year old the death stare, and the boy responded with a glare. "You're clear to go inside."

The security gate opened, and immediately Lee walked in, not looking back at the self-proclaimed "defenders"-more like tormentors. Inside, free from the bureaucratic frisking, the trainer felt more relaxed with all the action happening in the place; employees rushing to their duties, the flow of company news being displayed through the main electronic board on the wall close to the counter, Silph ads dominating every screen that showed everyone a new product, and intercoms barking at the workers on what to do and what not to do. Taking a full elevator that quickly filled up with more employees, Lee, crammed between a fat executive and a janitor, wondered how his father worked so well at a crowded and busy place like this, as the doors closed to take the people to their respective workstations.

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Silph Co. 7F

Ding! The boy dug himself out from the crowd of the elevator before the doors could close. If the floor description in the elevator was correct, he was in the IT Department, but finding his father in the middle of all these employees was going to be like searching for a needle in a haystack. Thankfully, though, judging by the time, lunch break had started not too long ago and most people were leaving their seats to recharge. Lee knew his father-he once said that he was busy a lot of the time and often had lunch late, so as long as he can find a familiar figure not heading for lunch, Lee had a chance of finding his father.

Navigating through the cubicles, the trainer's ears were ringing with the loud sounds of the office coming all around from frustrated employees, telephones connected to fax machines, advert tests, customers coming and leaving, and many more that drowned out just about all sense of hearing. All the while, Lee, quite limberly(if he were to say so himself), squeezed through the gaps between all the employees carrying documents, boxes, products, even drinks, all things that could cause serious trouble for the people involved should he crash or disturb into one of all those people. As "Watch it!"s and "Whoa!"s ensued, Lee finally saw the person he was looking for at the other end of the office, talking to another employee.

"...and I want a full scale report on the performance test of the new drivers. Our team needs a PPT ready by the end of the month." Damien Hahn, the head of the IT division, talked to the employee, who, listened to him with utmost respect. Caught in his business, he failed to notice his son who was standing close to him now after so much trouble.

"Dad?" Lee called out softly, attracting the attention of his father. The old block finally noticed the chip, before turning to the employee again.

"...Alright, you've heard what you have to do. Get lunch, I'll join you soon and we can talk about this further."

Damien patted the employee in the back, and with that, the rookie scampered off, leaving the father and son.

"...Well, I can't believe my eyes, my son-now with his own Pokemon." The executive hugged his ten-year old son. "I was worried about you, Lee. It's so good of you to come here."

"I missed you too, dad." Lee hugged him too. "Mom said I should visit you before I go to Fuschia City. And...I'm so sorry I didn't call you, and..."

"She did? Well, she was very thoughtful." The son watched as his father took a quick look at a family photo, taken when Lee was around 7 and didn't know about Pokemon at all. "And don't worry about me, I'm always fine, although busy. What I am worried about is you; you're the one who's out on an adventure with Pokemon. I almost had a heart attack when I heard that you battled Team Rocket, and that they almost killed you."

"There are more incidents than just that, dad." Lee sighed and rubbed his head, feeling again that the part where he was struck still hurt. "They've also terrorised Gray and terrorized the Game Corner. They actually hurt other people too, dad."

"That is worse." Damien slightly frowned in concern reminiscing a bad memory from long ago, looking out a nearby window which showed the whole of Saffron City from the seventh floor. Some time passed between the father and son, both burdened by the memory of the terrible things that had happened to the people around them.

"What's wrong, dad?"

"It's nothing. Just had some bad memories...Lee, do take good care of your Pokemon.'

Lee felt genuine sadness from that statement, feeling what those who had to experience the reign of terror of Team Rocket had to go through. Although Lee knew that his father and mother went through that dark period, they never talked about it and Lee didn't ask either, for good reason. Whatever happened back then, this the reason his mom was so protective of her son. She did not want to go through the loss she had been through in her life, something that will crush even an adult's heart, and even more so a 10 year old's.

"I will, dad." Lee muttered clutching his Pokeballs, overcome by a feeling of grief. "I'll make sure the Pokemon are safe, and not only mine."

Never was a forcefully broken link between mon and trainer happy. A moment of silence existed between father and son for some time before Lee, carefully, broke the ice.

"......Dad, I was wondering...if we could have lunch together. I want to spend time with you before I head to Fuschia City."

"I'm afraid I have some business to attend to at lunch, Lee. I'm sorry." The Silph executive shook his head, but then he weakly smiled, a shadow of his guilt remaining, in a moment of sudden epiphany. "But now that you mention it...I may have some time after lunch. How about a friendly father-and-son battle then?"

"Dad, you have a Pokemon now?" Lee gasped in surprise, as he had not seen his father come home with a new Pokemon in a while. And how a busy man like him got the time to catch a Pokemon was a mystery.

"To be exact, the company gave this guy to me in recognition of my services. Would you like to take a look at him?"

With that word, Damien took out a Hyper Ball from his bag and pressed the button, and with a metallic screeching noise, a Pokemon popped out of the ball! It was shaped weirdly, with several steel orbs with eyes, all connected with magnets on its sides, with a big screw on the top that was continually turning.

"Whoa! What is that?" Without hesitation, Lee quickly took out his pokedex.

Magneton, the Magnet Pokemon. Steel/Electric type. A linked cluster formed of several Magnemite, it discharges powerful magnetic waves at high voltage. They frequently appear when sunspots flare up.

"That is so cool, dad!" Lee was intrigued by the new Pokemon, and an evolved form at that! The kid slowly approached his father's Magnet Pokemon, and softly, petted it on its left magnet.

"Magneton!" The pokemon growled in joy, shaking at the feeling of a human touch.

"He's been a great partner of mine, and he helps me get through the technical issues in our products. I'd be nowhere without him." Damien spoke to his son, patting his Magneton in the back, before, realizing something, he quickly looked at his wristwatch. "Well, look at the time! I'll be back in about an hour, Lee. There's a break room with snacks, so do help yourself while I'm gone. I'll be back for the battle between you and me."

"I'll be here, dad. Come back quick."

The words were left hanging in the air as the last of the employees, including Damien, started leaving for lunch break. Lee sighed, leaning on a desk-clearly, if someone is this busy, maybe it was a bad idea to come and visit. But he was his dad, and Lee felt guilty for practically ignoring him for the last few weeks. The trainer felt that, while this job had good conditions, the long hours of work and separation from the family was killing his father from the inside. What he needed was a vacation. A long one at that, with the family-him and his mother. Lee started wondering if his father actually loved the job despite all its flaws, or if he was forced to do it for his family. As he got back up and headed past the leaving employees to the window to take a look at the great view for himself, he could see an orange speck in the sky stood out between the blue sky and the yellow building. Squinting, the boy found the speck getting larger, and larger-until the speck was no longer a tiny speck, but a gigantic orange beast, breathing fire and flapping its wings, with a pink-haired figure riding on it; it's her!

"Oh, shoot..."

Lee froze in fear as Belle's Charizard fired its flamethrower at the building, and in the intense heat, the glass shattered, sending a burst of hot air towards the boy! He felt his body float for a second, before gravity dragged him down onto the floor again and crushed him against the ground. The glass, glistening in the air, rained down onto the whole of the office, and the boy was left on the ground, dazed by the shock. Slowly, as the dust from the debris gathered, Lee slowly got up on all fours, coughing, a continuous ringing in his ears as alarms started to blare in the building.

"LEE!"

The trainer picked up his cap and glasses, now slightly cracked on the right eye, when he recongnized the frantic voice, and he knew he had to respond; he needed to get out of this mess and find out what is going on!

"DAD!" Barely, the kid got up on his feet, trying to figure out where the call came from with an impaired dusty sight. "Dad, where are you?!"

At that moment, Lee felt an arm grab him in the back, and soon recognized the velvety feeling of the arm as his father's suit. Amidst the settling dust, Lee barely saw that he was being taken to an office, but the Charizard mercilessly fired its Flamethrower at them! The fire enveloped the entire building as Damien hastily closed the glass door, barely preventing the flames from coming into the office.

"Are you alright, Lee!?" The father quickly checked his son for injuries, finding light scratches from the glass on his neck and body and a bruise on his right arm.

"I-I'm fine dad...mostly." Lee mustered his words, still flabbergasted by what happened. "W-What's going on?"

"I'm not sure. But the alarms are going off, saying the company's being besieged by hostiles..." Damien, with shaking hands and panic evident in every action, took out a first aid kit from a nearby cabinet. "Let me see the wounds, we need to patch you up and evacuate."

"......No." With great thought, Lee managed to spit out his words, his hands in fists, as bandages were applied on his wounds by his father. "I need you to get away, dad. But as for me, I saw her."

"Her?"

"This girl I know. Someone who's in Team Rocket-keeps threatening people around me." Lee spoke to his father, seething with anger. "I know this is dangerous, but I have my own strong Pokemon. And this time, it's personal. I can't let her and the team to get away with today."

"...Lee, I know you want to fight, but this is too dangerous!" The father raised his voice, in fear of his son getting hurt.

"Dad, I have to do this!" Lee rebutted his father's claims with his will. "If they're not taken out, the entire Team Rocket will gain traction from them, they're powerful people with powerful Pokemon! And I let them get away too many times, but not this time-not with messing with you, dad!"

Only Lee's heavy breathing could be heard in the room, before Damien barely opened his mouth to speak something.

"...Alright. But we'll do it together, I can't live with sending you out onto the dangerous battlefield alone." With that, Damien pointed across the hallway at a patch of green on the gray floor. "That Charizard-it looks overpowered, but if we can drag it down to the first floor, the Security team will be able to engage it. There's a warp panel over there. We use that, we warp into the floor underneath us...but we're gonna have to be very quick, you saw what the Charizard can do."

Lee could only nod. After all, his dad was the smarter person in this room, and if he was going to act together he had to adapt to him!

"Okay." Lee said after taking a deep breath with conviction, before heading for the door and grabbing onto the handle. The father and son both got ready by the entrance, as Lee peeked through the glass to see Flame and his trainer intently looking for their archnemesis outside the building. They had to move very quickly, and they had one chance!

"Go!!"

Lee quickly opened the door as he and his father made a run for it! The Charizard spotted them, and without his trainer's orders he spouted out fire into the building, almost incinerating Lee who was right behind Damien! The trainer could see the green square ahead that was the warp panel, and both men fearlessly jumped into it, teleporting themselves to lower floors. But Flame was quick to notice what has happened and the Pokemon quickly notified his trainer. Behind the glass, Lee barely understood what Belle was saying to her Charizard, but clearly it was nothing good!

He had to hold off Flame, no matter what, before the flames would come to torch them again. In the midst of running, Lee, with his right hand, quickly pressed on the buttons on two of his Pokeballs, releasing Hydro and Grace. And with the other hand, Lee hastily unzipped his bag and took out the TM for Thunderbolt, he had received from Lt. Surge!

"Grace, come here! Good girl!" Lee yelled at the general direction of his Pokemon trying to run by him, especially toward Grace who was trying her hardest to keep up! The trainer held the TM low. "Come on, faster! Hydro, cover us!"

"Wartortle!" The Wartortle, while running at fast speed, used Water Pulse aimed at Flame, the attack which broke through the glass and toward the Flame Pokemon. However, the Fire/Flying type Pokemon effortlessly dodged the attacks in mid air!

"It's gonna take more than that!" Belle shouted at her adversary, through the broken glass.

"Come on, Grace, faster!"
Lee shouted in desperation as his father and him jumped to get into a Warp Panel-and at the same time, Grace jumped and hit the TM CD mid-air, breaking it and learning the move. The two Pokemon, their trainer, and the trainer's father spawned on the floor below, as Lee, his eyes on the Charizard catching up with them, quickly formulated a plan now with Grace who now knew Thunderbolt, and Hydro, his trusty Wartortle!

"We gotta stall her!" Lee yelled out in his full volume, catching up to Damien side-by-side, to tell him his plan. "The Charizard's too fast! It's never gonna run out of power, we have to take it down and earn some time!"

"With your Dratini and Wartortle!? You're not gonna generate enough power to take it down! Magneton, get out here!"

With Lee's nod as a sign that he understood the plan, both father and son skidded to a halt in their tracks, and Damien let out Magneton out of its ball. Belle, realizing the situation, pulled Flame to a stop too and hovered in front of the broken windows! Both sides looked at each other to make the first move before...

"Flame, Use Flamethrower!"

"Hydro, Water Pulse! Grace, you're with Magneton, fire!"

"Magneton, Thunderbolt!"

"Magneton!" Realizing the situation at its trainer's urgent voice, Magneton, with Grace shot out a bolt of electricity at Flame, fazing it with the sudden jolt. And at that moment, Hydro's Water Pulse hit the Charizard along with the electric jolt, amplifying the electric effect and making Flame spin out of control-but the wave of flames still hit the building, striking everyone inside the corridor at that time, blasting them backwards into the wall!

"GAH!" Lee was knocked back into the wall, and it felt like someone struck him hard in the back. Recovering from the impact amidst the smoke, the trainer felt a searing pain on his right shoulder-and he saw that his right shoulder of his vest had caught fire! In surprise, Lee quickly patted the clothing frantically, bringing the flames down to a smolder. He then proceeded to check under the clothing; thankfully his skin wasn't burned, but that was a close call...his dad! If the flames struck him, and his Pokemon too...

"Hydro, Grace! Dad! Magneton! Where are you!?" Lee barely got up and yelled out, not being able to see anyone in the thick smoke and debris. He had no idea of finding out what happened to them, nor could he find out about the Charizard. But through the smoke, he saw figure similarly flopped against the wall, with three Pokemon gathered around him, the shapes of the Pokemon.

"DAD!"
Lee shouted in panic and ran over to the figure, finding Damien slumped against the wall with multiple burns on his clothes. Magneton, even while badly hurt, floated around his trainer, clearly worried about him, while Hydro and Grace, also hurt and burned, returned to Lee, clearly a look of pain on their faces as they had lost HP from the attack. Luckily, the boy found his father conscious, but he still feared the possibility of wounds caused by the fire.

"Dad, are you okay? Did the Flamethrower-"

"Lee, I'm alright, what happened to the Charizard?"

"I'm not sure, dad." Lee shook his head. "Are you sure you're okay?"

"I am! And thank your Wartortle for that. I did catch on fire a bit, but he spouted water just in time, before the flames could burn me." With that, Damien painfully got up, his suit now dusty. "But there's no time to talk about that. We still need to get down to the first floor before that Charizard comes back!"

Both father and son looked at each other, before running into another panel, for they knew what was happening in the bigger picture and that they had to go down there...
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Silph Co. 1F

The green square spawned the two men on the first floor, but not before a goon was thrown in their direction. The first floor was a warzone, as Pokemon and human alike struck each other with its powers! Security guards battled for control against the invading Team Rocket goons, actually beating them with the batons they had. Madness and chaos reigned as Lee ran ahead of his father, through a chaotic hallway and into the wide lobby. But in all that commotion, Lee saw the pink hair among the crowd, and instinctively started running in that direction much to the confusion of his dad, who had no idea where his son was running to. And he soon saw it, as among the crowd, Lee stood facing a man, a woman, and the girl he was talking about, now having wounds on her left arm and legs, with some blood on her lips and nose.

"You again! And who is that old man, your guardian?" Clyde remarked smugly, crossing his arms in front of Lee whose anger was evident in his face.

"Hey! He's not old, he's my father! I thought you Rockets had the common sense of not messing with someone's parents!" The 10-year old rebutted back quite bravely at the insult, as his father joined him to see what was going on.

"Lee! Who are they!?" Damien looked at Lee, then at Bonnie, then at Clyde, before focusing his eyes on Belle.

"That's the girl. The one who keeps coming after me, with her stupid parents too!" Lee pointed directly at Belle, making her come out in front of her parents.

"You and your old man almost killed me! What did you think would happen to a person if she falls at the 7th floor in almost freefall!?" The Team Rocket girl got up close to Lee and poked him directly in the heart, making the boy take a few steps back. "And Flame is down and out, all thanks to your stupid butt showing up to mess up our plans!"

"Get your hands off him! That's my son!" The father could only take so much of Lee taking flak, which made him slap Belle's hand away! "First you attack my company, now THIS!"

"And that's my daughter, you insensitive prick!" Bonnie stood in front of Belle, irking Damien a bit. "I'll have you know that our great leader requires something that this company has, for a great purpose you'll never understand!"

"That's not gonna happen!" Lee yelled out, taking out Eggshell's ball, before giving his father a Super Potion. "When we're done, Security will be all over you and the goons!"

"Okay then, you've made your decision! You and your father will be dying today!" Clyde, with clear hostility, readied his Pokeball.

"You'll pay for what you've done to my daughter!" And Bonnie stood by him, ready to fight too. As chaos unfolded around them, the two families were embroiled in their own chaos, which was about to burst by just one, single, move...!

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Chapter 20-Corporate Siege, Part 2

"Get out there, Eggshell!"

"Go, Magneton!"

"Get out there, Arbok!"

"Take them down, Raticate!"

Two Pokemon from each side popped out of their balls, ready to fight with each other for their trainers, who went through hell and high water for them.

"Eggshell, use Confusion on Arbok!"

"Exeggcute!"

Lee ordered his Egg Pokemon to strike the Cobra Pokemon, wanting to cover for his father who was applying the Super Potion to Magneton.

"Arbok, Poison Fang!" Clyde quickly ordered his Arbok to move in for the strike, before the Psychic energy could be fired. The Pokemon hissed at his command, and lunged at Eggshell immediately! The Eggs fired the energy of Psychic energy before spreading out to avoid the attack, and in the process only one of the eggs were hit resulting in minimal damage, but the measure to avoid the attack also made the Confusion miss. However that was the least of Lee's problems, as the Poison condition started spreading through Eggshell!

"Raticate, Use Hyper Fang on that Magnemite!" Bonnie commanded its Raticate, aiming to cut down Magnemite's HP to half! Although the Rat Pokemon opened wide, and sunk its teeth into the Pokemon, the Steel typing of Magneton prevented the teeth from actually piercing its defense, doing essentially no damage on the Magnet Pokemon.

"Magneton, Magnet Bomb on Raticate!"

"I got you dad! Eggshell, help Magneton, use Mega Drain on Raticate!"

Glaring at the Raticate, Damien's Magneton raised several clumps of magnets and fired them at the Rat Pokemon, which exploded on impact and threw Raticate backwards into a group of Team Rocket grunts, making them pile out onto the floor too! Quickly, the Exeggcute sucked out what remained of its life energy with the Mega Drain. But Lee could see the pokemon visibly recoil in shock from the Poison, it was getting worse...

"Grr! I shouldn't have relied on a given Pokemon like this!" Bonnie frowned before forcibly putting Raticate back into the ball.

"How dare you! Arbok, now, attack!" Clyde, at the moment when Eggshell was occupied with Raticate, took the moment to attack the boy's pokemon before he could use an Antidote. The big snake quickly surrounded Lee's Exeggcute in a coil, before squeezing Eggshell and giving him pain along with the poison damage he was taking.

"Eggshell! No!" This was bad-Eggshell was taking damage by time from both his condition and the squeeze! But this was a dual battle and Lee realized he had help-he had to use it. "Dad!"

"I got you!" Damien quickly got ahold of the situation, and looked at the current situation before commanding his Magneton. "Magneton, Thunder Wave!"

The electric energy sent by the Magneton was enough to make Arbok become paralyzed, as the shock coursed through its senses. In that moment, Eggshell got out of the grasp and fired a wave of Confusion again before fainting, hitting the defenseless Arbok and knocking it back! But the Arbok still refused to give in, even though it looked completely out of HP, and all the while Lee could see that neither Clyde nor Bonnie was using a potion on their Pokemon; typical of Team Rocket grunts.

"Okay, I'm down to my last healthy Pokemon." Lee said to himself, before taking out his last ball-time to test how strong his new Pokemon is. "Get out here, Grace!"

"Dratini!" The Dragon Pokemon stood in front of the Snake Pokemon, taking a coiling position to counter against Clyde's Arbok. Arbok, noticing this, took a battle stance too, albeit painfully at the paralysis and the damage it had taken.

"Useless snake! Get back into the fight!" Clyde barked at his Arbok, and Arbok, after taking another look at his trainer, hissed loudly at Grace! This surprised Lee-a Pokemon was willing to sacrifice for a Trainer that abuses him? But now was not the best time to ask questions, it was time to kick some butt. Looking through a Pokedex, Lee scanned what moves his Pokemon could use, before finally selecting a move-

"Dratini, Dragon Rage!"

At his trainer's command, Grace focused on Arbok and squinted its eyes, accumulating all the rage she had in the battle, before focusing it into an orb of power. Then she proceeded to fire the orb at the enemy Pokemon, dishing out a certain amount of power that would do damage all the same! While it seemed like the attack didn't knock Arbok out of the battle, the Snake Pokemon maintained its posture for a few seconds-before flopping onto the floor lifelessly. All the while Security finally got an upper hand over the Team Rockets.

"That's what happens when you focus on one Pokemon only." Lee called Eggshell back to his ball, reminding himself to visit the Pokemon center after this immediately. "Go to hell, you Rockets..."

"Language, Lee." Damien reprimanded his son, but not too harshly-they knew these Rockets deserved whatever curse that was coming. And now, with control over the situation, he could find out why this had happened in the first place. "Now, you'll tell us what made you come here, and-"

Before Damien could finish speaking, a massive blast rocked the building as two security guards were flung onto the floor! The entrance had been breached, and expecting someone to appear in the smoke, all the security staff got their Pokemon ready to fight any backup forces. But only the silhouette of a man could be seen, with another silhouette of a big Pokemon behind him. Seeing the threat, the staff immediately fired attacks using their Pokemon, but with a "Persian, Power Gem!" a barrage of rocks hit each and every security guard and their Pokemon, knocking them all out! Lee and his father watched in shock and awe as the man, ever so calmly, walked right into the building without any fear nor care for his own self. And when the smoke cleared, all those who were here to see this event could only doubt their eyes: a man in his mid 40s with short, military style black hair, with a smug, evil look on his face, donning a pitch black suit-the look that only bring fear on the faces of all Kantonians.

"Boss!" In one unified shout, all Team Rocket members, who had been previously subdued by security, kneeled before him, as Lee just stood there with his father, a look of distress on his face. Visibly shaking at the appearance of the honcho, the trainer was frozen in place, dumbfounded that his enemy appeared so suddenly like that, as Giovanni, menacingly, made his way toward Lee. The head of Team Rocket then proceeded to look down at the kid, who, despite trying to be brave, was, in all honesty, scared.

"......Hm, either I seem to have a useless Team or you are a very strong trainer." Giovanni remarked, watching the 10-year old in front of him bare his teeth, all the while trying not to shiver. "I always hate kids like you-bed wetters who think they're big heroes trying to save the day. First Red, then that pesky Gold, then my own son, now you. I could have had a nice word with the president about the Gene, but you had to spoil our ointment, had you not?"

"...You hurt my dad." Lee managed to spit out these words, which was a feat by itself considering who he was talking to.

"Excuse me?"

"You hurt my dad!" Lee yelled, half out of defiance, and half out of a desire to come over his fear. "I always hated you ever since Red let you go! Your organization, kidnapped, killed and sold Pokemon! And whatever schemes you planned, they always hurt me, my friends, my Pokemon, and now, my family! I was not going to just stand and watch while you tried to recreate a reign of terror like years ago! No one would have!"

"......" Giovanni listened to all of that, and after a moment of silence he drooped his head, before breaking out into a laugh. For quite some time the laughter continued, which unnerved everyone inside the building.

"Ho! I love your spirit, you actually fight to beat me, not for a stupid cause like common good! You are, what I call, a worthy kid to beat up personally." Giovanni then shifted his focus to Damien, who was similarly unnerved like Lee. "You, sir, are lucky to have a professional battler as your son, I wonder who he takes inspiration from?"

"Why are you doing this!?" Lee yelled out of frustration, not knowing why Giovanni was here himself. "Why did you come back!? So you can continue to kill, sell, and hurt Pokemon and People!?"

"Shut up!" The boss yelled louder, effectively shutting up Lee. Giovanni then turned his attention to the Team Rocket family. "Now, let's talk about you three. Two of you were one of the best grunts I ever had back in the old days of Team Rocket, and I repaid the favour for you and your child by making all of you as Administrators instead of those idiotic four followers of mine I once called "administrators". And you get pummeled by that weak kid, not just once or twice, but three times!?" It was scary to see the once-hypocritically kind leader of Team Rocket turn into a beast when confronting with his underlings!

"W-We're sorry, Boss!" Clyde nervously spoke up, still at kneeling position. "We fought valiantly, but the kid was armed with a Psychic type Pokemon! And-"

"Dad didn't give me enough berth! I could have whopped him with my Charmander, boss." Belle suddenly spoke up. "And none of my parents even used Potions in battle to counter the HP Loss!"

"Belle! Shut it!" Bonnie hissed. "Boss, Pokemon are tools. That's the official Team Rocket doctrine, and my daughter, she openly violated it by-"

"ENOUGH! We'll talk this over back at base, all three of you. Now, if you people..." Giovanni started speaking in his previous tone, now turning his eye to the remaining defenders, Lee and Damien. "...will excuse me, I will be peacefully exiting this place with my men, all of them. But mess with my exit and I will have you all crushed with rocks. Questions?"

No one said anything at that moment, except for Lee, who, with trembling hands, clutched onto his Pokeballs. He clearly could see that his Pokemon were leagues behind Giovanni's, and that with HP damages sustained from his last battle would make the fight one-sided. But his rage boiled inside him, against the man who spoke of massacres like nothing.

"Oh, and before I go, boy, what's your name?"

Although the trainer did not want to answer this question, he clearly knew that he would answer anyway, either by one peaceful way, or the other alternative.

"Lee......" The boy sputtered.

"Lee?"

"......Lee Hahn."

"Lee Hahn...I'll remember that name. Do come fight me when you have healthy pokemon that are as strong as mine-let's see if you crush me, or if I will be crushing you. Ta-ta!"

As the Rockets all left one by one following their so-called great leader, Lee's shaking legs collapsed by itself onto his knees, and the trainer couldn't help but sob in rage, letting out his frustration in not being strong enough to defeat him right on the spot......

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Although the mess was almost cleaned up now, Lee sat on a bench still shaking in shock. Giovanni had truly shown himself, and by that, the boss imprinted himself in his feeble mind as a being that was superior compared to him. He thought he had seen the last of the fear of Team Rocket. But he never did realize, that he had not seen genuine fear. Not from the man that he wanted for so long. It wasn't normal fear-it was hopelessness. That a stronger being was over him.

"Lee." His father soon came to his aid, holding a cup of cool water. "Drink this. It'll calm you."

"Thanks, dad." Lee barely managed to hold the cup, before tilting it to drink its contents. "It's just...I saw a monster today. A monster that I wanted to hunt it down so badly, and...at that moment when I saw him for myself, I...couldn't..." Lee sniffed, barely holding himself back from bursting into tears.

"And you stood up against it. That's good enough for now-you'll get stronger." His father could only encourage Lee with hollow words, having been unnerved himself too. "If it's too hard you can always come back home."

A warm pat in the back slightly eased the boy's concerns, but the scare had already settled in Lee's heart, to become a blight that would plague him in the future. Lee could only sigh at this turn of events, and wipe the last of his tears from his eyes.

"Thanks, dad..." The trainer curled his hands into a fist, before releasing his grip and letting out his frustration. "But I've come too far. I'm...If I don't face him, I have a feeling I'll get even more scared."

As Lee took deep breaths to calm himself down, a large group of security guards caught Lee's eye, who were approaching him at the other end of the hallway. Most of them, having participated in the battle, had scars and wounds on their faces and body, but the boy knew they fought valiantly, even when the odds were clearly against them. But that aside, why were they coming for him? Before the trainer could assess the situation, his father did so faster and quickly got up from his seat.

"Oh...Mr. President, sir!"

Company president? Why would the Silph Co. President come here for? Lee wondered to himself, but now was not the time to ask. He got up straight and took another deep breath, hoping to make the best impression on the President, who soon revealed himself, an aging man with graying hair, from the army of escorts surrounding him.

"At ease, gentlemen. You did a great service to our company, by keeping it safe." The President kept his eyes on both Damien and Lee as he also took a look at the boy's Pokemon too. "That's the quality I expect from the head of one of our leading tech divisions, and it is a quality I have not seen for a very long time. Not only that, but your son was also very brave and helped in the fighting."

"Thank you, sir." Damien calmly replied.

"You'll be rewarded accordingly, in the meantime do your best like you did today." The president then moved onto Lee. "You're a very plucky boy. And you are also very fortunate, growing up under a father who holds a great position in this company. What's your name, son?"

"Name's Lee, sir. Lee Hahn." Lee spoke with as much determination he could muster, trying to suppress the new worries that threatened to show his weak side in front of the president himself.

"Ah, you are definitely the chip off the old block! A boy like you can only get braver, so don't worry about what happened today. Everyone flinches at some moments." The president spoke patting Lee's shoulder, and the boy nodded as a sign he understood the message. "Anyway, I would love to repay the favor for what you did today. I searched you up on the Pokemon League records, and I find that you're working your way through the gym badges, correct?"

"Yes sir." Lee nodded at that information.

"Well, how about this: our security team will be moving what the Rockets came for, and they're heading to Cinnabar Island. I'll let you catch a ride with them all the way to Route 15, as long as you don't ask what they're carrying-Company secrets."

"I won't say a word, sir."

"Excellent! I suggest you get ready, for they'll be leaving soon. Security, accompany this fine young man to the convoy."

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"...Well, I can't believe my eyes, my son-now with his own Pokemon." The executive, without doubt, hugged his ten-year old son. "I was worried about you, Lee. It's so good of you to come here."

"I missed you too, dad." Lee hugged him too. "Mom said I should visit you before I go to Fuschia City. And...I'm so sorry I didn't call you, and..."

"She did? Well, she was very thoughtful." The son watched as his father took a quick look at his wallet, a family photo taken when Lee was 7 and didn't know about Pokemon at all. "And don't worry about me, I'm always fine, although busy. What I am worried about is you; you're the one who's out on an adventure with Pokemon. I almost had a heart attack when I heard that you battled Team Rocket, and that they almost killed you."
The bolded parts with the epithets there sounded weird. I would just refer Lee and Damien as their names there. I also noticed you refer Damien as executive and such several times.

Lee froze in fear as Belle's Charizard fired its flamethrower at the building, and in the intense heat, the glass shattered, sending a burst of hot air towards the boy!
Seeing you using exclimation points again throughout the two chapters. Yeah, pretty much cut back on that because it's making me not taking the action seriously. Best way to fix this is replace exclimation points (except in dialog) with periods.

"Raticate, Use Hyper Fang on that Magnemite!" Bonnie commanded its Raticate, aiming to cut down Magnemite's HP to half! Although the Rat Pokemon delivered a cutting blow, the Steel typing of Magneton halved the damage, actually whittling 1/4th damage on the Magnet Pokemon.
This is too technical there. Instead describe how Raticate's fangs sunk into part of Magneton's coating but only left some marks there, and such. Also Bonnie that's a Magneton not Magnemite lol.

So, I'm going to be honest. I only skimmed read the big battle from last chapter because the exclamation points happening almost every second sentence really bothered me. I actually almost missed Giovanni's appearance because of this. As I already mentioned, too much exclamation points just makes your actions more amusing than exciting. You managed to held back on that a couple chapters before, so I'm confused why you suddenly went back to so many exclamation points. This is something I would highly consider since your story will be heavy battle focused and I don't have time to point this out each time.

I do genuinely like where you're going with Lee and his father's relationship though and hopefully we'll get more of that down the line.

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The bolded parts with the epithets there sounded weird. I would just refer Lee and Damien as their names there. I also noticed you refer Damien as executive and such several times.



Seeing you using exclimation points again throughout the two chapters. Yeah, pretty much cut back on that because it's making me not taking the action seriously. Best way to fix this is replace exclimation points (except in dialog) with periods.



This is too technical there. Instead describe how Raticate's fangs sunk into part of Magneton's coating but only left some marks there, and such. Also Bonnie that's a Magneton not Magnemite lol.

So, I'm going to be honest. I only skimmed read the big battle from last chapter because the exclamation points happening almost every second sentence really bothered me. I actually almost missed Giovanni's appearance because of this. As I already mentioned, too much exclamation points just makes your actions more amusing than exciting. You managed to held back on that a couple chapters before, so I'm confused why you suddenly went back to so many exclamation points. This is something I would highly consider since your story will be heavy battle focused and I don't have time to point this out each time.

I do genuinely like where you're going with Lee and his father's relationship though and hopefully we'll get more of that down the line.
Not gonna lie, I got a bit sloppy this time and forgot to check for exclamation points. I'll try harder next time, and right now I'll see what editing I can do. Thanks for your continued criticisms, I don't want to lose you.
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