Googlebug's Adventures. {Super Short Fic}

Started by Googlebug August 22nd, 2007 11:53 AM
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Seen September 18th, 2007
Posted September 12th, 2007
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Ok I'd just like to add a comment this is my first fanfic EVER so dont be too harsh. These are meant to be super short so please dont rant on about the chapters being short because thats the idea of it and I do what I do. Any other critisism will be glady appreciated.

Pokémon Emerald
Googlebug’s Adventures.

Chapter 1
Mudkip or Torchick?

Googlebug closed the door of his warm house behind him out into a freezing cold day in Little root down. It was morning and Googlebug breathed in the air heavily. Today was the start of his Pokémon Journey to travel across Hoenn and become the Greatest Pokémon Master. To get all the gyms badges and enter the Pokémon League. That was his dream. His goal. He looked across the small town to see in front of him a large lab. This was Professor Birch’s Lab. This is where he could get his first Pokémon.

Quickly Googlebug ran across the grassy field and came rushing into the lab. An odd looking scientist stared at him in wonder.
“You are looking for Prof Birch I presume?”
“Yeh, where is he, shouldn’t he be here?”
“He’s out in the wild teaching his son the ways of Pokémon.”
“He has a son; I didn’t know he had a wife!”
“Oh yes his son, the name is Fazlah, clever child and he broke up with the wife.”
“Oh great I’ll go find him in the wild and get my butt kicked by some wild Zigzagoon because I don’t have anything to fight with.” The odd scientist frowned and returned to reading some papers in front of him.

Googlebug angrily left the lab and stood in front of the route that left his hometown and led to Oldale. A young girl, about the age of seven stood there.
“There are scary noises of Pokémon and chuckling out there, can you go see what it is for me?” Googlebug smiled at the cute girl.
“Sorry I don’t have any Pokémon with me, so I can’t go, anyway more importantly how about me and you go out sometime I mean your cute” The little girl kicked him in the leg.
“I have a boyfriend his name is Sam and he’s two years old, now if you want me that badly go and see what the noises are instead of moaning about not having any Pokémon, a trainer should have some you know!”
Googlebug huffed and stormed off limping from the kick in the leg and running towards the source of sound. There was Professor Birch sending out a Tailow while a young boy sends out a Treeko.

“Treeko, Scratch Tailow!” The Treeko a green frog like Pokémon on two legs jumped quickly and swiped the Tailow hard and the Tailow which was a blue swift like Pokémon squawked and fell onto the floor fainted.

“I win dad, you lose again!”
“Alright Fazlah don’t rub it in, your Treeko is very strong, ah yes look this is Googlebug, Googlebug meet Fazlah, Fazlah Googlebug is going to start training as a Pokémon trainer, Googlebug, you’re going to be a Pokémon trainer, Fazlah, Googlebug is your rival, Googlebug, Fazlah is your rival, Fazlah I’m going to give him a new Pokémon, Googlebug I’m going to give you a Pokémon. Now does everyone understand what I just said?”

“I don’t get It” Fazlah said scratching his head.
“I explained easily enough didn’t me!” Prof Birch shouted angrily.
“Take it this way kid, your dads mad” laughed Googlebug. Fazlah got angry and so did Treeko.
“You goanna pay for that!” Fazlah stood in a stance and Treeko was ready to fight.
“Now over there are the two Pokémon you can pick from, the red birdie is Torchick and the blue puppy water thing with orange nostrils sticking out of its cheeks is Mudkip.”

Who will Googlebug pick, which is weirder and will Fazlah beat him, find out next time!”

Chapter 2
The Battle

Googlebug thought about this and picked Torchick rather than orange nostril face. Torchick squeaked in delight and got ready before Treeko. Prof Birch started the countdown.

“Three, One, Two Fight!”
“Treeko Scratch!” Treeko jumped highly from the ground and Torchick ran around crazily trying to see where Treeko would land. The green frog came quickly soaring down from the air one hand ready to make the swipe.

“Torchick Ember!” Torchick grinned mischievously and a small flame came out of its little beak and hit Treeko in the stomach. The frog was bounced of out flight and hit the floor rolling backwards in the process. Torchick squeaked, clearly happy with itself for the moment. Treeko stood up quickly, ready for battle.

“Razor Leaf!” shouted Fazlah with anger.
“Treeko!” Treeko shouted angrily and grassy cut leaves appeared from nowhere swivelling their way towards Torchick.

“Torchick, Flamethrower!” A giant beam of swirling fire emitted from its tiny beak and burned the leaves to dust. Treeko jumped back in surprise.

“Treeko Mach Punch!”
“Torchick Head butt!” The two Pokémon jumped forwards at each other, Treeko fist first while Torchick head first. Treeko came soaring right towards Torchick but his Mach Punch had been aimed too high and Torchick head butted him bang in the belly. He fell backwards and scraped itself on the floor. Tired and beaten. Torchick was a little dizzy and rubbing its head from the hard bash into Treeko’s Belly.

“Wow Googlebottom wins!”
“It’s Googlebug you spanner!”
“Sorry” moaned Prof Birch. Googlebug was about to take Torchick to Oldale town simply walking away from them without a word until Fazlah stood in front of him.

“You’re strong lets be friend!”
“Right Fazza listen up and listen good, your strong too but I don’t really want to take partners at the moment, because then I’ll know your strong points and weak points and it’d be no fun, we’ll meet one day probably I’m going to Oldale, see you later.”

“Oh well I’ll just get strong and beat everyone on one day” Fazlah yawned to himself returning Treeko to his poke ball. Prof Birch then came running after Googlebug.

“What now Birch?”
“You need this pokedex and poke balls, this one is to keep Torchick in the others are for catching new ones, the pokedex tell you everything about Pokémon you see and their attacks and strong bits. Have a fun adventure.”
“Thanks” replied Googlebug taking what he was given.

Halfway through the route to Oldale Googlebug spotted a Ralts.
“Hmm I want one of them.”


Googlebug's Adventures. Chapter 3: In Petalburg

Googlebug flicked open his Pokedex.

"Ralts: A small psyhic type pokemon. If trained well this pokemon can learn and produce powerful psyic attacks. In its evolved stages it will become a very powerful and hadny pokemon. It is always easy to catch as it's first stage."

"Go Torchick!" Torchicke came flying out of it's pokeball charged and smashed into the Ralts knocking it over.

"Raaalts!" It tried to get up and run but Googlebug was too quick.
"Ember!" The small flame made a burn on Ralts and it squealed in pain.

"Go pokeball!" Googlebug's pokeball came spinning out and quickly captured the small pshyic pokemon. Torchick was already running after something else. It was a Lotad.

It was weakened by something else already so Googlebug captured it and took all his pokemon to the Pokemon Center in Petalburg.

Googlebug looked across the street and to his delight he saw a gym. It was the Gym Leader Firas's Gym. He would go challenge him.

Googlebug took no notice off the Gym TRainers and bravely walked to the back of the gym where Firas stood proudly.

"Are you ready to fight me boy?"
"Course I am, and Im gonna pound you!"
"Ok, now pick two pokemon to fight." Firas pulled out two pokeballs with a smile and Googlebug picked Torchick and Ralts.

"Go Voltorb!"
Go Torchick!"

Who would win the battle? And how strong are Firas's pokemon? Find out next time!
Age 31
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Santa Isabel, Mexico
Seen July 7th, 2018
Posted February 2nd, 2016
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First, it's obvious you didn't get a beta reader. What's a beta reader? It's basically someone of your trust that proofreads your work and honestly criticizes/fixes it. So, tip #1: Always get your work betaed.

There are some spelling errors. Spelling and grammar is important to create a good and clean impression for the reader, and mantain your story as clean as possible.

ex: "Torchick" should be Torchic, and "Treeko" should be Treecko.

Then, punctuation comes to maul you. This factor, if misused, can often change the meaning or direction of a sentence and thus make things confusing. Watch the commas, periods and semicolons mostly.

ex:
“He has a son; I didn’t know he had a wife!”
should be
“He has a son? I didn’t know he had a wife!”
Also, watch the verb tenses!
Googlebug huffed and stormed off limping from the kick in the leg and running towards the source of sound. There was Professor Birch sending out a Tailow while a young boy sends out a Treeko.
Remember the PFF section has its standards, so make an effort to improve and you'll be fine!
虎穴に入らずんば虎子を得ず
Age 31
Male
Santa Isabel, Mexico
Seen July 7th, 2018
Posted February 2nd, 2016
4,000 posts
18.9 Years
It can be anyone, as long as they have certain writing experience. I could beta your fic from now on; however, you'll have to take your time, analyze your mistakes and write the following chapter more calmly. I don't beta rushed writes!
虎穴に入らずんば虎子を得ず
Seen September 18th, 2007
Posted September 12th, 2007
100 posts
15.7 Years
Googlebug's Adventures. Chapter 3: In Petalburg

Googlebug flicked open his Pokedex.

"Ralts: A small psyhic type pokemon. If trained well this pokemon can learn and produce powerful psyhic attacks. In its evolved stages it will become a very powerful and handy pokemon. It is always easy to catch as it's first stage."

"Go Torchic!" Torchic came flying out of it's pokeball ready and charged then it smashed into the Ralts knocking it over.

"Raaalts!" It tried to get up and run but Googlebug was too quick for it. He was on his feet his next moves in his head to be made into action.
"Ember!" The small flame made a burn on Ralts and it made a high pitched squeal of awful pain.

"Go pokeball!" Googlebug's pokeball came spinning out with speed and quickly captured the small pshyic pokemon. Torchic was already running after something else. It was a Lotad.

It was weakened by something else already so Googlebug was already behind it with force. He wasted no time and threw the ball. It spun with greta speed twirling through the air opening and sealing Lotad inside. After that he put lotad in his backpack and took all his pokemon to the Pokemon Center in Petalburg.

Googlebug looked across the street and to his delight he saw a gym. It was the Gym Leader Firas's Gym. He would go challenge him staight away with no hesitation. This kid had no fear.

Googlebug took no notice off the Gym Trainers and bravely marched to the back of the gym where Firas stood proudly.

"Are you ready to fight me boy?"
"Course I am, and Im gonna pound you!"
"Ok, now pick two pokemon to fight." Firas pulled out two pokeballs with a smile and Googlebug picked Torchic and Ralts.

"Go Voltorb!"
Go Torchic!"

Who would win the battle? And how strong are Firas's pokemon? Find out next time!

OK. I've edited alot of it, given more detail and fixed as many spelling mistakes and grammer I can. I know the chapters are short but if thats a problem then I'll lenghten them. Also I would like to give credit to Careful With that Axe, Pichu. He's my beta reader and a great one. He's told me how to fix it up and I've tried my best. I've done plenty better than this.

Thanks everyone for reading next chapter will hopefully be up in about four to five days. Maybe sooner if im lucky.
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Posted September 12th, 2007
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Chapter 4
First Gym Leader

Pokedex: “Voltorb, the electric poke ball type. It can disguise itself as a large poke ball. It can use powerful electric types and explosions. Approach with extreme caution.

“Shock Wave!” Voltorb stopped and floated in mid air then releasing a mighty powerful electric attack that sizzled, made a popping noise and striked its way towards Torchic like furious thunder. Torchic didn’t move in time and was hit by the blow.

“Oh come on” laughed Googlebug loudly. “Gym Leaders should know type weaknesses and effectiveness!”
“What do you mean?” Firas asked a little astonished. “Like water is good against fire?”
“Exactly and fire isn’t good against electricity but electricity isn’t that good against fire either. Which means this battle is going to be a drag.”

“Ok, we’ll just have to stick it out, Voltorb sonic boom!” A quick rush of air and smack struck Torchic and this time alot harder. Googlebug felt angry and was fed up with being hit, so he took his first move!”

“Ok Torchic end this, use Peck!” Torchic nodded at him with pure confidence. It jumped forward and pecked the ball. It caused little pain.

“Oh” muttered Googlebug angrily.
“Not as strong now?” Firas asked laughing a little.
“It’s not over yet, I’m just goanna have to use force!”

“Torchic, use your best flamethrower! Torchic sighed and dodged a few sonic booms Firas had ordered. Then with a large breath Torchic let out a spiralling twister of flames that spun and then toasted Voltorb knocking it out in one go. Torchic was out of energy it fell on its back exhausted.

“Torchic return!”
“You the same Voltorb!”

“Ok, this one is the decider” Firas said pulling out a poke ball and throwing it.
Out came a large yellow figure. Quickly Googlebug checked his Pokedex.

Pokedex: Elekid. The pre-evolved form of Electrabuzz It arms are like spinning windmills. Despite its childish look it can make surprisingly strong attacks.

“As you may have guessed I’m use lots of electric type Pokémon.”
“No problem” sighed Googlebug.
“Go Ralts!”
“Wow” said Firas plainly a little shocked. “I’ve never seen one of them! I’ll try my best!”
“Don’t bother I’ll beat you anyway!”

Earlier on in the day Googlebug taught Ralts Shockwave, but would it be useful in this situation?

“Ok Ralts Confusion!” The slow and painful attack slowly hit Elekid and then pushed it back. Elekid looked around clearly now confused. It started electrocuting everything in sight. Small lines of electricity were spitting across the arena. Both Firas and Googlebug had their hands over their heads hoping they wouldn’t be hit.

“Ralts, Shock Wave!” A far stronger wave of electricity blew through the arena and pushed into Elekid knocking it backwards with strength. All the static died down and no more moves were being used.

“Hey little buddy your strong!” Googlebug was immensely surprised at how well Ralts obeyed him as a new trainer.

“Y-you beat me! I should have seen this, I should have not accepted your challenge, but it was fun, I’d like to do that another time!”

“I wouldn’t now just give me the badge!” Firas handed over the Electric Badge with no regrets and proudly Googlebug walked out of the stadium and into the Pokémon Centre.

Now I know it not much longer but its very hard for me to make a fanfic that was intended to be short.
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