First Fan Fic!

Started by KMANN2 September 13th, 2007 1:33 PM
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Here is the first chapter of my first ever pokemon fanfic. This entire adventure is titled 'The Chosen One!' :nervous:

The Chosen One

What? Where am I? Cried Keith as he awoke from a deep sleep. The area around him was an aura of colors as he was suddenly lifted into the air. After being lifted down, Keith wiped the cold sweat from his forehead and looked around. The colors had changed and he could see through them. There was his home town. He stared down in amazement. Suddenly a man appeared, he had a fluffy white beard and was slightly balding. “Ah!”, yelled Keith, “Wh-wh-who are you!” Keith.. You are the chosen one.
It took Keith a while to think about but it finally clicked. He remembered a man similar to this man in front of him one day telling him to be carefully while Keith was standing on the edge of a bridge. Suddenly the man grabbed Keith’s arm and they both were lifted higher and higher until finally they slowed to a stop. Come through this door, to the pokemon world. Keith’s jaw suddenly dropped. He had watched the show Pokemon everyday after school, loving the concept of little creatures living alongside humans and battling against others. Before Keith could even open his mouth the man grabbed his arm and him and Keith jumped through the open door.
Keith opened his eyes, he looked around at the area. “What is this place”, he said. “This is Twinleaf Town, and my name is Frances”. “This is the world of pokemon and you have been chosen to come here.” Keith was in udder amazement!
After explaining to Keith the basics of pokemon, he handed Keith a watch. “Keith this is your pokevice”. It will determine which pokemon you will have with you on your journey to defeat the Elite Four. “You mean, I cant just catch them?” wondered Keith. “Sorry but this is the way it works kid”, whispered Frances.
“We cant run the risk of a trainer from the human world coming here to do bad things in the pokemon world, therefore we restrict the human trainer to just 6 pokemon and 6 pokemon only. “Oh awesome! I want Charizard! And,and, Pikachu! And, and…-Frances spoke up “Sorry but the pokemon will be chosen randomly using your poke vice. Now, press the button on the side of your pokevice to have it choose your first pokemon. The pokemon it chooses will be very important in your journey to be the best, and save us from the evil team galaxy. “Alright, yelled Keith, pokevice go!!!”
A colorful array of colors shot out from his poke vice… Keith and Frances watched as a glowing figure appeared. Suddenly the colors disappeared and there standing in front of them was a…

The end of chapter 1..

Chapter 2 coming probably tonight sometime…

CHAPTER NOTES:

I am actually playing along with this fan fic using my DS… the random pokemon will actually be random because I will be using a random numerizer from a website, and my action replay DS to create the pokemon and put them on my team.

Hope you enjoyed it and are looking forward to the next chapter!
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"The Chosen 1 Chapter 2”

It’s a..a..a…Swalot! Keith’s poke vice started vibrating. He looked down at his wrist as his watch spoke aloud. Swalot the poison type. Keith and Frances looked at this large creature as he bobbed about. “Swalot look I am your owner now!” yelled Keith! Swalot turned… and suddenly fell asleep. “Ehh what is he doing!” screamed Keith. “Wahahahaa!” chuckled Frances. “What a bust! Swalot just wants to sleep!” Keith cried. This next pokemon better be better! “Pokevice go!!!” The pokevice shot out the colors and the atmosphere become bright again. Keith stood there with a determined look.
Suddenly a Rhyperior appeared! “What a great pokemon! Shouted Keith!” “Rhyperior is a very strong pokemon” said Frances. Keith stood in shock as the pokemon lifted his arms and let out a large growl. His stone body and horns almost sparkled as he shook his head at a passing butterfree.
“This team is pretty good, or at least half of it” muttered Keith. Swalot snored as the pokevice again began glowing and shot out colors as far as Keith could see. Suddenly a Nidoran(female) appeared! “Darn another weak pokemon!” Keith said as he grimaced in Frances’s direction. “Lets get on with the next one” he said. The process repeated, but this time a Relicanth appeared! It barely opened its eyes to the sound of Keith bickering about this new pokemon he had received. “Only 2 more they better be good ones too!” screamed Keith! Relicanth’s eyes shut as the longevity pokemon began to shake in fear. Keith pressed the button, yet again, and waited for the process to end. He was getting very nervous about his team…
Swablu was the next pokemon to appear from the aura of lights. “This is just crazy! Cried Keith, I’m not getting any good pokemon except Rhyperior. The pokemon, Swablu, began flying about with its cotton puff wings as Keith complained to Frances. “Don’t worry said Frances, your pokemon will evolve eventually and become much more powerful, and you still have 1 pokemon left!” Keith looked up into the sky and prayed as he hit the button on the side of his pokevice. The lights appeared, and a Kangaskhan appeared! Wow! He looks tough! Said Keith as he smiled.

Keith’s team was complete and he was off to the first town, Sandgem Town to explore the world he was chosen for, and train his pokemon of course!
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errr... ok idc about grammar and stuff I just wanted to make a story...

i just wanted to tell a cool story about a kid who gets random pokemon and what i was going to do is actually play out the adventure on my DS and kind of narorate it without it being like

"keith walked to sandgem town"
Keith got a potion
Keiths swablu got 50XP


i wanted to make it like a story but i guess i will stop writing
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errr... ok idc about grammar and stuff I just wanted to make a story...

i just wanted to tell a cool story about a kid who gets random pokemon and what i was going to do is actually play out the adventure on my DS and kind of narorate it without it being like

"keith walked to sandgem town"
Keith got a potion
Keiths swablu got 50XP


i wanted to make it like a story but i guess i will stop writing
Its a good idea, and one I've sometimes touched on but never tried, but I think you should get some writing experience first at least. However its just an opinion.

Try and flesh it out more. It still sounds a bit like the style you are trying to avoid. Breathe some more life in it if possible. I can at least see your trying however...and lastly don't be afraid to ask for advice, help, opinions from those who review. Most people here who know a bit about writing are willing to help you with things, as long as you're attempting to improve thyself.
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