Baby Don't Cry

Started by Lumine November 6th, 2007 5:18 PM
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Reading some of Romance Hero's magical poems inspired me to spend a bit of my time writing some, so here's mine, not really a poem but more of a song.



Throw me on the cold hard ground,
Send a shiver through my soul.
You're holding me in captivity,
But please won't you let me go.
I can't stand the suffering,
But I still don't want to know.
Grip the bars and loll my head,
My baby's sad at home.

It's so hard to forget,
That three summers ago,
I woke up in the dead of night,
To answer the call from a prison phone.
Alone and desperate,
I'd listen to you sob,
Asking yourself,
Why it was a policeman you had to rob.
So suddenly the world,
Turned from black and white to grey.
My faith in love seemed gone for good,
But my baby made it seem okay.

Two bricks hold my eyelids down,
Ropes constrict my chest.
A light cascades onto my face.
I'm only hoping for the best.
A rusty screech soon fills my ears,
And freedom shows itself.
Now I'm racing down route 106,
Turning right and leaving hell.
When it comes to love and kids,
The patient always fall.
I quickly snap the handbrake down,
Slam the fly-wire through the frame.
Then I see my baby there,
I've been breathless till today.

Oh baby don't cry
I'm gonna be home soon.
Endless oceans won't hold me back,
From coming home to you,
Please baby don't cry,
I know it's hard to do.
What with mummy gone,
And no one to rest your shoulder on.
But be strong,
And baby don't cry.
Oh, baby don't cry.
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The robbing policeman line seemed alittle out of place, to me, but I think it was a really good poem in the end. I was trying to sing it as a song, but I couldn't find a beat :(. Still it was good!
Of course I'm like the farthest thing away from an expert here.

I do know what you mean by Romance Hero's inpiration.
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Age 33
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¬_¬ I asked you never to say that.
Alright fine I'm not going to argue there, ¬_¬ <-- I © this on MSN remember? =P


The robbing policeman line seemed alittle out of place, to me, but I think it was a really good poem in the end. I was trying to sing it as a song, but I couldn't find a beat :(. Still it was good!
Of course I'm like the farthest thing away from an expert here.

I do know what you mean by Romance Hero's inpiration.
Cheers bud, I know I had to be a bit uncreative there, it was basically talking about how the child was at a rebellious age if you get me, the poem was meant to imply and show a strong love between a parent and its children.
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*Glomps Danny-kun* Hi. ^_^ I really liked it Danny-kun. And I can't belive you think it's crappy.
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I think you did put a lot of thought into this, and I know, it's not easy bringing together a few words in artistic form. I did my best to feel this poem, and I must say, it was definitely one of the most descriptive and heartful poems I've read. (don't think I haven't read my good share of pieces)

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I think you did put a lot of thought into this, and I know, it's not easy bringing together a few words in artistic form. I did my best to feel this poem, and I must say, it was definitely one of the most descriptive and heartful poems I've read. (don't think I haven't read my good share of pieces)
That's true. Well you're the expert, eh? =P

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*Glomps Danny-kun* Hi. ^_^ I really liked it Danny-kun. And I can't belive you think it's crappy.
Aww *hugs* thankies Momo, I'm currently writing another one.


I think you did put a lot of thought into this, and I know, it's not easy bringing together a few words in artistic form. I did my best to feel this poem, and I must say, it was definitely one of the most descriptive and heartful poems I've read. (don't think I haven't read my good share of pieces)
Yeh I did really it took me a while, descriptive? uhmm kinda, but I have to agree that this is quite heartful xD, thanks bud


That's true. Well you're the expert, eh? =P
He is really, don't mess with him if you value your life jkz =P, enjoyed the poem I showed you on MSN the other night btw?
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He is really, don't mess with him if you value your life jkz =P, enjoyed the poem I showed you on MSN the other night btw?
I did =D It...made me cry. You're really sweet, Danny :)

EDIT: Can't stay long >.< damn, I shouldn't be making a habit of this...

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I did =D It...made me cry. You're really sweet, Danny :)

EDIT: Can't stay long >.< damn, I shouldn't be making a habit of this...
It did? are you serious? o.0
Rebel *cough*, are you back from school yet?

Going to post my other poem probably tomorrow..
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nice... really nice!

=)
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