Ok, in serious need of editing:
It was one day when i noticed that Dawn was eating grape and said to me "give me a napkain" it was the nicest thing a girl ever said to me.My name? Ha i laugh at it,Since i was a boy people called me "Brock" with a silent "b" but when they did call me that name i would sent out geodude to sack them, I would tell geodude to boulder smash their balls when they have the best chance and when i would fight a water type i would just say self destruct and kill the pokemon.Well lets go back to reality, I knew that it was love in first sight.I was spying on Dawn but always seeing Ash with her, I figured they were just friend's so when Ash was gone i stepped up to Dawn and said " I love you Dawn, will you be my first hand woman for the rest of my life"? Dawn replied " I cant i only love Ash and only Ash ".
thats when I decided to eliminete Ash.
It was one day when i noticed that Dawn was eating grape and said to me "give me a napkain" it was the nicest thing a girl ever said to me.
It was one day? When I noticed that Dawn was eating grape and said to me "give me a napkin"?
Ok, what is up with this?
One day I noticed that Dawn was eating a grape and she said to me; "give me a napkin." It was the nicest thing a girl ever said to me.
Lets be honest, which version looks better, mine or yours?
Ok, I'm going to stop now because I'm fairly sure this'll get moved to the revision bin and then this post will be deleted.