Rayquaza's Betrayal

Started by Mako64 November 30th, 2007 9:01 AM
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Seen November 10th, 2012
Posted August 13th, 2008
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15.7 Years
Rayqaza’s Betrayal


Rated: PreT-T
Blood, some simple swearing, graphic violence and gore

Prologue

It has been many years since the Dragon Pokemon of the sky had calmed Kyogre and Groudon. Although Rayqaza has done right in its own odd way, it could not help but have a hint of doubt. Rayqaza had once been known as the most powerful Pokemon in the regions. However, that all changed when it faced the almighty Dexoys. The alien Pokemon nearly overwhelmed the great dragon, if it had not been for the one called Ash Ketchum and his friends. After the battle, Rayqaza went into exile in the sky. It focused its time on training and attuning deeper into its Dragon-type. Many months past, Rayqaza left its tower refuge after the urging of a trainer to stop the battle of Groudon and Kyogre. With a new-and-improved Hyper Beam, the Pokemon of the sky sent the two enemies back into resting. However, this victory over the two Pokemon did not satisfy the dragon. It experienced many restless nights, tortured by the facts of its inability; making its life a living hell. Finally it came to a decision. It would prove its ultimate superiority over the world, Pokemon and humans. Rayquaza trained day and night for another year.
Now, another year has past, and the dragon is ready to show the universe, the ultimate power…





Part one

It was a beautiful day in the land of Hoenn. The rivers flowed, the air was calm, and Pokemon and humans were sharing it all perfectly. But all of this would soon change. Rayquaza hovered above the clouds, trying to sense Groudon and Kyogre’s life force.
‘I know they are here. They cannot escape me.’ It thought.
At that time, a travel plane was zooming above the clouds. A drunken and the assistant pilot were swinging gulps of alcohol and laughing about what a good time they had last night. The pilot was listening in, hoping to hear something juicy.
The plane, unknown to the humans, the plane was heading straight towards Rayquaza.
However, the dragon’s sixth sense warned it of the plane.
“Foolish humans.” Rayquaza said.
It tilted its head back and prepared a Dragon Pulse.
The pilot turned to glance at the ****-pit window, only to see Rayquaza fire the Dragon Pulse.
“What the Hell!?” The pilot tried to dodge the attack, but it was too late.
The blast made contact and the plane exploded into millions of pieces; taking the lives of all those on board.

The Pokemon merely went back to finding Kyogre and Groudon’s energy, ignoring the plane shambles crumbling in the air.
Finally it found Groudon’s energy.
“You cannot hide from me, Groudon.” It said.
The sky Pokemon zoomed down towards the earth.

Groudon slept in the misty Terra Cave. After its battle with Kyogre, the large Pokemon needed much rest. Suddenly its slumber was interrupted when Rayquaza open fired Dragonbreaths on the cave.
‘What?’ Groudon thought. ‘Who dares attack my resting place?’
The dinosaur Pokemon stood up and dug its way to the top of the cave.
When it reached the top, it was shocked to see that its attacker was Rayquaza.
“Rayquaza, you betray me?” It demanded.
“Yes.” The dragon said. “You are a ravaged monster that desires only destruction. You will not be missed.”
“Enemies of Groudon must die!” The continent Pokemon roared.

Groudon sent a Mud-shot flying at the dragon.
Rayquaza merely dodged the attack and zoomed in with a Dragon Claw.
The strike slashed Groudon across the chest, leaving a bloody scar.
“Grr…” Groudon growled. “You will pay for that dearly!”
The ground-type Pokemon began to glow a deep red.
“Die!” It shouted. Groudon released a powerful Eruption at Rayquaza.
The dragon quickly used Dragon Dance and evaded the attack.
“This is the end for you, monster!” It cried. Rayquaza began to charge up a full power Hyper Beam attack.
“I will not let you!” Groudon fired Flamethrowers at Rayquaza, who dodged every one of them.
Rayquaza used several Dragon Dances to get up close to the monster.
Finally the Hyper Beam was ready.
Rayquaza zoomed right up to Groudon.
“This is the end, Groudon!” It shouted.

Rayquaza fired the Hyper Beam. The blast was so powerful and up close that it burst into Groudon’s whole stomach and came out through its back.

When the devastating attack ended, Groudon’s eyes were wide and still, its body was trembling. The dinosaur slowly tilted back and fell.

Groudon was dead.
Warm blood flowed from its body across the cave roof. The hole in its body was red with fresh flesh and blood.
“You are done… monster.” Rayquaza said.

The moment Groudon was killed, Kyogre flinched. It was like the water Pokemon had done something very wrong.
‘My mortal enemy is dead.’ It thought. ‘Killed not by my hands.’
Kyogre had sworn that it would defeat Groudon and gain more control over the lands.
“If I seek to defeat Groudon now…” Kyogre started. “I must kill the one who killed Groudon.”
Kyogre swam out of its Marine Cave and headed towards the spot where Groudon’s life force vanished.

Rayquaza was pleased when it sensed Kyogre’s life force heading strait towards it.
‘Kyogre must believe that it can defeat the one who defeated Groudon.’ Rayquaza thought.

Finally Kyogre reached Groudon and Rayquaza and swam to the water surface.
It stared at Groudon’s bleeding body.
“Rayquaza, who has done this deed?” The sea Pokemon commanded.
“I have.” Rayquaza answered. “I am glad you are here Kyogre.”
“What?” Kyogre wondered.
“I will do whatever it takes to prove my superior, even if it means killing all Pokemon.” It said.
“You are insane.” Kyogre said. “What of Pokemon like Mew and the Regis? You cannot defeat them.”
“I have gone into intense training after the conflict between you and Groudon.” The dragon said.
“Now I am the strongest Pokemon of all time!”
“If this is true,” Kyogre said, “Then let us see the fruits of your improvement!”
“Very well.” Rayquaza replied.

Kyogre shot a Hydro-Pump towards Rayquaza.
To the dragon’s great surprise, the attack blasted it high in the air.
“Ha! I expected you to be better Rayquaza!” Kyogre said.
“Do not mock me yet!” The sky Pokemon replied.
Kyogre fired another Hydro-Pump at Rayquaza.
This time the flying Pokemon was able to avoid it and counterattacked with a Twister.
The technique sent Kyogre flying out of the water.
Rayquaza charged forward and came at the water-type Pokemon with a flying slam.
The strike slammed Kyogre right into a large rocky cliff, shattering the mountain and burying the water Pokemon the rubble.
The sky Pokemon did not give Kyogre a chance to get up from the damage.
It fired a Hyper Beam right at the rubble, causing a large explosion.

When the dust cleared, Rayquaza hovered down to the wreckage, and in front of a dirty and battle-damaged Kyogre.
“I am surprised that you survived.” The dragon said.
“You have made a grave mistake Rayquaza.” Kyogre said. There shall be no more mercy for you in this battle!”
“Good.” Rayquaza said. “I would not want to kill you so easily.”

This remark enraged Kyogre.
It quickly leapt from the rubble and into the water; and dove deep under.
“You believe that I cannot follow you?” Rayquaza asked.
The dragon flew high into the air and zoomed down into the water.
But it was a trap!
Kyogre quickly surrounded Rayquaza in a Whirlpool.
With the help of the water, the vortex was more powerful.
“Your fate is sealed!” Kyogre began to close the Whirlpool in on the dragon.
Eventually it would be drowned!
‘It cannot end like this.’ Rayquaza thought.
It slowly formed a Twister inside the vortex.
“What?” Kyogre cried.
The vortex finally burst!
But Rayquaza knew that the battle was not over.
It swam below Kyogre and blasted the Pokemon of the sea with a Dragon Rage.
The water Pokemon was rocketed to the surface and burst into the air.
Rayquaza flew up after it with a full-power Dragon Claw.

The dragon zoomed upward until it was next to Kyogre.
It slashed the water Pokemon several times with Dragon Claw, leaving a large cut gushing with blood.
When the blood shedding flurry ended, Rayquaza zoomed high in the air while Kyogre, half-dead, fell to the water, leaving a large stream of blood.
Rayquaza stopped high in the air, below a Pokemon that was dyeing the sea red.
“I shall put you out of your misery!” Rayquaza said.
It tilted its head back and charged a full-power Dragon Pulse.
Kyogre floated above the water, on the brink of death.
It weakly opened its eyes upward and saw Rayquaza fire the Dragon Pulse towards it.
“Damn you Rayquaza…” It weakly said. Before the Dragon Pulse made contact and caused a fiery holocaust.

The sea created large waves, forming a giant circle where the Dragon Pulse hit Kyogre.
In the middle of it all, was the large blue body of Kyogre.
It was tattered, scabbed, and crumbled.

Kyogre was dead.
Rayquaza hovered in the air.
The first day of its mission had just begun.
The death of Groudon and Kyogre was just the beginning of the horrors.

To be continued…
Seen September 3rd, 2008
Posted April 30th, 2008
464 posts
15.6 Years
Right, there is a lot of work that cold be done on this. Also, it looks very rushed - no offence.

Ok, lets see...

What is a Rayquaza, Groudon and Kyogre? You really can't just say that they were the sky, earth and water Pokemon, because, lets be honest, that doesn't describe them at all.

Groudon sent a Mud-shot flying at the dragon.
Rayquaza merely dodged the attack and zoomed in with a Dragon Claw.
The strike slashed Groudon across the chest, leaving a bloody scar.
“Grr…” Groudon growled. “You will pay for that dearly!”
The ground-type Pokemon began to glow a deep red.
“Die!” It shouted. Groudon released a powerful Eruption at Rayquaza.
The dragon quickly used Dragon Dance and evaded the attack.
“This is the end for you, monster!” It cried. Rayquaza began to charge up a full power Hyper Beam attack.
“I will not let you!” Groudon fired Flamethrowers at Rayquaza, who dodged every one of them.
Rayquaza used several Dragon Dances to get up close to the monster.
Finally the Hyper Beam was ready.
Rayquaza zoomed right up to Groudon.
“This is the end, Groudon!” It shouted.
That is really not needed, I mean, the talking between them.

I would recommend that you visit the lounge and look all the writing guides there.

And you do it for the next twenty or so paragraphs. Trust me, fics that contain only talking don't get very far, I learned that firsthand.

This really needs to be edited... Less talk, more descriptions, it isn't that hard.

If you have any questions you can PM me.