Є•~Acha's Super Awesome Comic Factory~•Э

Started by Weatherman, Kiyoshi December 13th, 2007 11:37 AM
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Male
Fish Spaghetti Town
Seen May 18th, 2016
Posted September 17th, 2015
3,543 posts
17.7 Years
Yes, I've decited to start comic making again :P
And, I ring to you:
the most awesomeness filled Comic you ever hoped for:


I hope you enjoy these comics, cause I sure as hell don't like how they take so long to make XD

[AGELIMIT]Whatever the perticular comic is rated, from G - PC-15 ratings[/AGELIMIT]

Character Bios:

Spoiler:


(From left to right)

T
Pokemon: Magikarp
Bio: Usually The Boss of things, accepting only what he thinks is right. His sister is Riley.

Weebo
Pokemon: Whismer
Bio: Has no mouth, so he speaks in muffles. He happly goes along with his friends, no matter how stupid thier plan is.

Gary
Pokemon: Ralts
Bio: Being Sarcastic and Agrevated most of the time, He is the most annoyed one of the group. His best friend of them all is Weebo, since he is the only one who goes along with his way.

Sam
Pokemon: Skitty
Bio: Extremely rich, and Happy-go-lucky. She can support the group the most, and is always concered about her friends.

Riley
Pokemon: Staryu
Bio: She's the kind of type who will be the voice of reason. Her brother is T, who she must control so he dosen't get in his own way.

Jeeves
Pokemon: Dusclops
Bio: the Katz family butler, who was sent to go along with the group. He will help the kids, especally risking his own life to save them.

Mr. Mecha
Pokemon: Porygon
Bio: Pokemon scientist and Inventor, He is probably the most handy of the group. MOST of his inventions work like a charm.

Hunter
Pokemon: Sneasel
Bio: Sarcastic, Territorial, and sometimes can be emo and go sit in a corner.

SOS
Pokemon: ???
Bio: Is a Red "Special Offence solider". Always takes any objective and treats it like if he was deactivateing a bomb.

???
Pokemon: ???
Bio: ???


Comics:

Rating system: G PG 14+

1: Cliche and Haggy starters? well, maybe...
2: Freakin' Ghosties
3: An exciting rescue? Nope. Not enough Panels.
4: MEH EYES!!! *Blood Splat*
5: Blue Scadoos?!
6: Don't Piss Off Jeeves
7: You got mail!
8: Watch out for the fangirls, Gold!
9: Lets see what's behind Door Number 2!
10: WTF IS THAT?!
11: My Girlfriend who lives in Canada!
12: The truth that's going on with the weather... or the affair, depends...
13: It's poorly made, BUT IT STILL BURNS!!!
14: Note to self: Don't make sandwiches for hikers
15: Ladies and Gentlemen, I think we have a spaz
16: Life's gonna suck when you grow up
17: HOLY BAJEBUS!
18: Floating Lotads? 0.0
19: Kisuke is a sammich head!
20: Fate loves irony
21: You rock old man!
22: What Floaty does when he's offscreen
24: If you value your life, you will not ask



[Entry image for The "Lendgendary" Trio to come :D]

[agelimit]14+[/agelimit]

Character Bios:
Spoiler:
Coming soon


Comics:

[1]: "Importance"
[2]: "Personal"


SCRAP HIATUS COMICS

"LOL PC"

Mozilla Vs. Internet Explorer Saga
1: Brokeback Xairmo
2: Falling to pieces (Literally)

Fan Stuff:

Burst Ninja
I swear... I've seen you somewhere


Charchic

Sprite Credits:
Tinypic (for hosting)
The Spriters Resource (For sprites)
Tbone (For set up)
Paint
Microsoft Word
My friends (For support)
Burst Ninja
Blue Guy
Tutti
Avenue Q
Gymleaderlily
Klippy
Photoshop
Collection DeviantART Pokemon

super epic credit to Cilerba and Calis for OW Bases,
make sure you check them out as well!
Seen January 14th, 2008
Posted December 21st, 2007
6 posts
15.5 Years
I mean to sound mean. this is a very bad comic, in more than one way.
Humor
I can see the humor that is supposed to be funny, but it turned out very very corny, crude, intollerant, and un-funny. I give it a 2/10.

Speech Bubbles
use them...un-panel text screams noob comic.

Characters
very un-original recolors along with a idiot in the comic that seems to just be a clone of Kenny from South Park. for character design 2/10.

Grammar
this may sound hypocritical, but improve your grammar, spelling, and puncuations. I choose to type like this, but I dont make comics. While on this topic, in comics dont have an all capitolized sentence. it looks very un-proffesional. 1/10.

Lack of credit
you totally took the magikarp in your banner from tSR. i suggest you credit Timmeh. and Im betting you didn't rip your OW's that you editted your characters for, or the maps. no real rating, just dissapointment.

no need for a complete calculation, you get and F in my book.
Age 31
Seen March 2nd, 2011
Posted March 2nd, 2011
923 posts
16.4 Years
I mean to sound mean. this is a very bad comic, in more than one way.
Humor
I can see the humor that is supposed to be funny, but it turned out very very corny, crude, intollerant, and un-funny. I give it a 2/10.

Speech Bubbles
use them...un-panel text screams noob comic.

Characters
very un-original recolors along with a idiot in the comic that seems to just be a clone of Kenny from South Park. for character design 2/10.

Grammar
this may sound hypocritical, but improve your grammar, spelling, and puncuations. I choose to type like this, but I dont make comics. While on this topic, in comics dont have an all capitolized sentence. it looks very un-proffesional. 1/10.

Lack of credit
you totally took the magikarp in your banner from tSR. i suggest you credit Timmeh. and Im betting you didn't rip your OW's that you editted your characters for, or the maps. no real rating, just dissapointment.

no need for a complete calculation, you get and F in my book.

I Think your being a little too harsh, you should be giving advice instead of being negative.
Seen January 14th, 2008
Posted December 21st, 2007
6 posts
15.5 Years
I Think your being a little too harsh, this is his first attempt and its ok if its not perfect when its a first try, you should be giving advice instead of being negative.
Bzzzzzt! panel says youre incorrect. this is like his 10th comic in 2 years and he fails to learn after all this time. its about time someone tells him what he's doing wrong. and it IS advice, you do notice that the things that are pointed out ARE pointed out for a reason?! if everyone tells someone "ITS TEH BOMB" and it's really horrible, they just want to be nice, the creator never learns.
Male
Fish Spaghetti Town
Seen May 18th, 2016
Posted September 17th, 2015
3,543 posts
17.7 Years
I mean to sound mean. this is a very bad comic, in more than one way.
Humor
I can see the humor that is supposed to be funny, but it turned out very very corny, crude, intollerant, and un-funny. I give it a 2/10.

Speech Bubbles
use them...un-panel text screams noob comic.

Characters
very un-original recolors along with a idiot in the comic that seems to just be a clone of Kenny from South Park. for character design 2/10.

Grammar
this may sound hypocritical, but improve your grammar, spelling, and puncuations. I choose to type like this, but I dont make comics. While on this topic, in comics dont have an all capitolized sentence. it looks very un-proffesional. 1/10.

Lack of credit
you totally took the magikarp in your banner from tSR. i suggest you credit Timmeh. and Im betting you didn't rip your OW's that you editted your characters for, or the maps. no real rating, just dissapointment.

no need for a complete calculation, you get and F in my book.
Hm... To sound mean...

Humor:
Yeah... um... It hasn't really gotten funny much, so.. yeah. I have better material than this. And if you don't think it's funny, then... Don't read it.

Speech bubbles:
First of all: HEART SPEECH BUBBLES. I rather perfer to make them with boxed text at the bottom, they are extremely better in my taste. I worked with speech bubbles in paint, and the comics I made looked exactly like pokechow setups, but they took up too much space.

Chariters:
Very Un-original? I don't see anybody else making these OWs, and About Weebo, He's not an idiot, he doesn't have a mouth. But I must agree with you for the kenny simalairity, but he has a personality of his own.

Grammer:
Hey, Everyone makes spelling mistakes. If you admitted it that you make mistakes.
BTW, Professinal is not my aim.

Lack of credit:
Oops, forgot about credit.
Now it's fixed.

Bzzzzzt! panel says youre incorrect. this is like his 10th comic in 2 years and he fails to learn after all this time. its about time someone tells him what he's doing wrong. and it IS advice, you do notice that the things that are pointed out ARE pointed out for a reason?! if everyone tells someone "ITS TEH BOMB" and it's really horrible, they just want to be nice, the creator never learns.
10th comic?
lets see... Miny Clip, Pokemon Truth, Ghost hunters, Pokemon Weird, Super Cheesy Adventures of the Kirby Brothers, and x2 Adventures were the ones before this one.
Everyone except Pokemon Weird was a FAILURE, that's why I stopped making them.

Fail to learn? During my inactiveness as a comic maker, I was making comics with speech bubbles, with different text forms, different custom chariters, I've learned, I just perfer this style the best. "It's about time"? exuse me... but WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN MY INTIRE PC LIFE?! did you just join to search my profile, then rant about how my comics suck using the failed comics as your defence? If people compliement, it's nice, I'll continue making them, and if you think they're horrible, don't come back to rant each time there is a new comic. I've learned, you just weren't there. And How dare you Come in here and be mean towards my friends. You have absoulutely NO right to do so.

In conclusion, You don't have to read them, your advice sucks, and you can go back into the dark corner and cut yourself reapetively saying "The world sucks" Now. >:|
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Male
Fish Spaghetti Town
Seen May 18th, 2016
Posted September 17th, 2015
3,543 posts
17.7 Years
Well, I have tried putting them inadvanced bubbles as so;



I've tried different sizes of boxed text, but I like this the best. The comic is just the way I like it.

BTW, comic 4 is done:
MEH EYES!!! *Blood Splat*
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Male
Seen 5 Days Ago
Posted August 21st, 2021
5,853 posts
17 Years
Perry!, Burst Ninja and Hackrex, your posts are lacking in the constructive department. Try to state the reason behind your opinion of the comic.

That said, Arceus123, as valid as your points may be, they are needlessly harsh and in the end, do not actually achieve any greater good. In fact, it seems that you are simply trying to deter people. If you really wanted to help people out with your comments, we'd see you posts of yours commenting upon the strengths in people's work - constructive crit isn't all about pointing out the faults.

That said, if you're going to comment on the grammar of others, it would be best to worry about your own first, since most people intentionally use good grammar here.

Achamo-chan, do not censor bypass - that's why we have the censors in place. Furthermore, constructive crit, no matter what way or form it's presented, should not be taken to heart, so don't react as such in the future. Furthermore, only ratings up to PG-15 are permitted, so anything more will be removed.
Male
Fish Spaghetti Town
Seen May 18th, 2016
Posted September 17th, 2015
3,543 posts
17.7 Years
Perry!, Burst Ninja and Hackrex, your posts are lacking in the constructive department. Try to state the reason behind your opinion of the comic.

That said, Arceus123, as valid as your points may be, they are needlessly harsh and in the end, do not actually achieve any greater good. In fact, it seems that you are simply trying to deter people. If you really wanted to help people out with your comments, we'd see you posts of yours commenting upon the strengths in people's work - constructive crit isn't all about pointing out the faults.

That said, if you're going to comment on the grammar of others, it would be best to worry about your own first, since most people intentionally use good grammar here.

Achamo-chan, do not censor bypass - that's why we have the censors in place. Furthermore, constructive crit, no matter what way or form it's presented, should not be taken to heart, so don't react as such in the future. Furthermore, only ratings up to PG-15 are permitted, so anything more will be removed.
did I censor bypass?
hm... I don't remember putting a swear in thier without covering it up with *'s...

anyway, I must thank you for one thing of telling me about the rating thing-
I wasn't planning to make MA comics anyway.
I'm only twelve :/

I'll promise this will not happen again.
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Australia
Seen October 1st, 2010
Posted September 15th, 2009
471 posts
15.8 Years
apart from having pokemon sprites the comic have nothing much to do with pokemon.

they look good and are quite funny though.

good job achamo-chan


I'm currently playing: Prince Of Persia Sands Of Time, Conkers Bad Fur Day, Banjo Tooie, Kirby 64 and Super Smash Bros Brawl.
Male
Fish Spaghetti Town
Seen May 18th, 2016
Posted September 17th, 2015
3,543 posts
17.7 Years
Thanks for the compliments guys. :3

Updated:
New Chariter bios
and Comic 6!

6: Don't Piss Off Jeeves
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Male
Fish Spaghetti Town
Seen May 18th, 2016
Posted September 17th, 2015
3,543 posts
17.7 Years
Thanks burst,
it's always good to have support.

Now, I got some updates:
Updated chariter bios!
New comic!
7: You got mail!
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Male
Fish Spaghetti Town
Seen May 18th, 2016
Posted September 17th, 2015
3,543 posts
17.7 Years
:P

Well fans, I gotta another comic for ya to read.

But I must warn you, because of it's language, it is rated 14+
There is alos new updated bios, and a rating system in place.

Here's comic 8:
8: Watch out for the fangirls, Gold!
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Australia
Seen October 1st, 2010
Posted September 15th, 2009
471 posts
15.8 Years
the chararcters seem to be very aware that they are in a comic.
thats interesting.

still not msuch pokemon involvement!?!!!

The cameraman was very good.

MAybe that couple should consider not making out. Then they might not die!


I'm currently playing: Prince Of Persia Sands Of Time, Conkers Bad Fur Day, Banjo Tooie, Kirby 64 and Super Smash Bros Brawl.
Age 31
Male
Where Giving Up Is Not An Option
Seen December 1st, 2014
Posted November 14th, 2010
947 posts
17.6 Years
Well, well well. This comic is gaining a lot of hype, but I have to put my two cents in. Btw, I have a lot more to complain about (Constructively of course) than praise, so be prepared:

- First off, TUP (Text under panel) is not the best style to use in comics IMO. I found that using speechbubbles shows extra effort on the author's part, and the presentation is somewhat better - I mean, you don't see comic artists over the world writing everything underneath the panels do you? Just a recommendation on my part.

- Layout of the comics is decent enough - a little big, but that's cool. The heading is a well done piece of pixel art I must admit. My next problem is how the first post is set out - I don't think having the bios above the comic is smart - what if a new reader comes by, and those bios are loaded with spoilers maybe. They read it, and it just kinda ruins it. I would suggest either putting them down on the post, or putting a Spoiler Warning tag around them.

- Sprites: Nothing horrible, nothing horribly original. Mainly just recolours of paste jobs, maybe some quick pixel removing - nothing groundbreaking. Okay, my next problem is the mixing of generations and Pokemon scaling. As in mixing of generations, I mean mixing RS with FRLG sprites. The styles don't really match, and things might look better with one style. As for Pokemon scaling, I noticed in Comic 6 that a Whismur, Magikarp, Porygon, Dusclops, Staryu and Skitty were bigger than the character's sprites and then some. My suggestion is too make the people bigger (As in zoom in), and the Pokemon stay the same size as before, making them appear smaller than the characters.

- Next one: Humour... is a little off, if I touched apon what Arceus123 said, I'd say that it needs work, mostly relying on the crude (yet unfunny) kind. The 4th wall humour (Characters using words like panel, author and comic - as if they know they're in a comic) is kind of unoriginal nowadays, and is kind of lame.

- Grammar and Spelling: I'd have to score you down for this one. Spelling mistakes kind of appear at least once in your comics at some point, I've noticed a few times when you double-typed one letter and you use chatspeak occasionally. Simple little mistakes fixed by turning on spell check in Word, or buying a dictionary. :D

- Storyline/Plot: Original enough, if not slightly misguided and random. It's too early to say yet, because I don't know if this is supposed to be random and funny, some kind of obscure storyline, or a journey comic. The characters aren't too 3-D yet, but it's still early days, and I can't judge so quickly (Although I have already).

- Final verdict: Hard to tell. The kind of bad parts seem to overule the kind of good parts, and this is like your 10th comic... So I voted the "Kinda bad for my taste" category in the poll. Keep it up, if you're up to it.