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Old December 15th, 2007 (6:41 PM).
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    Hey, I write a LOT of poetry, but have never acrtually postsed here. So here is a Haiku Chain :P.

    Solemn Creation
    Continuous Movement
    Bird: with mother wind

    Reach not Summits Sky
    Before dark storm erupts now
    Tonight, thunder barks

    Oh, fly below bird
    Lightining fears no sad song
    Solemn Creation

    So yeah. Chain about a bird I saw trying to fly in a storm.
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    Old December 16th, 2007 (7:09 PM).
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      Ooh, I quite like it! It's just how a haiku (chain) should be I think. They're about nature, making them true haikus and they're abstract in the sense that you didn't really say anything directly, which I like, especially in short poems like haikus because if you make everything obvious, then there's really nothing left for the reader's mind to ponder.

      Anyways, I thought they were breathtaking and beautiful, I love the words and phrases you used, they created in vivid images. And I thought the actual subject of the poem, [a bird trying to fly through a storm] was poetic and deep in an of itself!

      Ack, sorry if it sounds like I'm like sucking up, but I really enjoyed this piece, it's so rare to find stunning haikus these days! =D

      Keep up the good work, you should post more of your work! =D

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      Old December 17th, 2007 (5:35 PM).
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        Thanks, Im glad youy liked it so much. Wait till I finish the narrative ballad I've been trying to write. So far got 2 pages, but Im hoping to wrap it up by 5
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        Old December 17th, 2007 (7:06 PM).
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          Jeezy creezy!!! That's a long ballad!!! The one I wrote was only like 2 pages and a half maybe... Ok, so ballads are supposed to be long and all that good stuff... Anyways, I'm looking forward to it! I'm sure it'll be beautiful! =)
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