Haiku Chain by Midnight Winged

Started by Eos Aduro December 15th, 2007 6:41 PM
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Eos Aduro

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Hey, I write a LOT of poetry, but have never acrtually postsed here. So here is a Haiku Chain :P.

Solemn Creation
Continuous Movement
Bird: with mother wind

Reach not Summits Sky
Before dark storm erupts now
Tonight, thunder barks

Oh, fly below bird
Lightining fears no sad song
Solemn Creation

So yeah. Chain about a bird I saw trying to fly in a storm.
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Ooh, I quite like it! It's just how a haiku (chain) should be I think. They're about nature, making them true haikus and they're abstract in the sense that you didn't really say anything directly, which I like, especially in short poems like haikus because if you make everything obvious, then there's really nothing left for the reader's mind to ponder.

Anyways, I thought they were breathtaking and beautiful, I love the words and phrases you used, they created in vivid images. And I thought the actual subject of the poem, [a bird trying to fly through a storm] was poetic and deep in an of itself!

Ack, sorry if it sounds like I'm like sucking up, but I really enjoyed this piece, it's so rare to find stunning haikus these days! =D

Keep up the good work, you should post more of your work! =D

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Eos Aduro

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Thanks, Im glad youy liked it so much. Wait till I finish the narrative ballad I've been trying to write. So far got 2 pages, but Im hoping to wrap it up by 5
Never doubt that a small group of thoughtful and dedicated people can change the world... because its the only thing that ever has
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Jeezy creezy!!! That's a long ballad!!! The one I wrote was only like 2 pages and a half maybe... Ok, so ballads are supposed to be long and all that good stuff... Anyways, I'm looking forward to it! I'm sure it'll be beautiful! =)
Bill Bandai: Everyone will by my seemingly innocent toys and pay their hard earned money for them!
Bill Clinton: So then the toys will rise up and destroy them?
Bill Bandai: No you ninny! They just SIT there, people will go mad wondering WHEN the toys will rise up and destroy them!!!!


The greatest thing, you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return