The Hermit

Started by Careful With That Axe, Pichu! February 4th, 2008 9:19 PM
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Age 31
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Santa Isabel, Mexico
Seen July 7th, 2018
Posted February 2nd, 2016
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18.9 Years
A man in the maze, a roundabout vision,
in foretime we met as dim faith, in precision.
I had heard a death call, my name in the wood;
the song of a blackbird no traveler withstood.

He looked as to tears of tomorrow, temptations--
he led me to gaze at his hollow creations;
his cloud-cradled moon, requiems began
with laughter to curse upon age to the man.

The hermit seemed ailing and mournful, depressing.
Whoever should come across, mourning his blessing
had not halted journeys, together with pride,
and wed down to greed, aversion for bride.

Upon this I cried, the man looked with graces,
I smiled to his long dreams to faraway places;
my life’s light begone, a wise soul not taken
A grateful farewell, indulgence forsaken.
虎穴に入らずんば虎子を得ず

BeachBoy

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Age 31
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Texas
Seen November 17th, 2016
Posted November 16th, 2016
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15.3 Years
Beautiful, Oni. Really.

This is professional poetry. I'm simply amazed. There's nothing wrong with it, as far as I'm concerned.

Bravo.~
I completely agree! It was in my opinion, flawless. I enjoyed reading that wonderful poetry. The words flowed well through out the poem, which I marvel as well.

Excellent.
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Age 28
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New Jersey
Seen September 3rd, 2013
Posted October 1st, 2011
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15.3 Years
I completely agree! It was in my opinion, flawless. I enjoyed reading that wonderful poetry. The words flowed well through out the poem, which I marvel as well.

Excellent.
Agreed with. Not one flaw anywhere throughout the whole poem. Amazing, simply amzing.