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Old March 12th, 2008 (2:48 PM). Edited March 22nd, 2008 by mcrc.
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    The clock starts ticking
    His heart starts flipping
    In his head he’s got a twisted belief
    That killing the infidels will bring him relief
    Bring him peice, help him seek
    Glory…and paradise
    This is the image he has in his eyes


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    The Prophet once said that in a time of war
    We shouldn’t destroy property
    We shouldn’t destroy kids
    We shouldn’t destroy women
    Yet they’ve employed all of this
    Don’t understand the books properly
    The let there minds bottle and fizz
    And the peaceful light is dimming
    They’ve made all their hits


    8

    Now you think your such a g?
    These kids learn to kill
    Probably before they can even read
    They’ve already been implanted with a seed
    That gives them their twisted belief
    That killing is Jihad and that gives them relief
    Because in their eyes that’s what’s cool
    As they get up and kill the infidels and fools


    7

    Gear up, strap on a bomb its time to let them know
    That this Jihad, this belief will forever flow
    But yo, Jihad isn’t a struggle against the infidels
    It’s a struggle within, the process of whiting out the ink of hell
    Its written in our books so clearly see
    Yet they cling to their twists so endearingly


    6

    Suicide is a sin in itself
    The call them martyr
    They think that their actions will help
    They believe they have charters
    But once the hits have been dealt
    Muslims are killed along with the infidels as well


    5

    The ink of a scholar
    Is worth much more
    Then the blood of a martyr
    Yet the sacrifices go farther
    And we now live in a world
    Where Islam is viewed as the fuel
    Of a feud that’s been spewed
    Upon the earth
    that’s how the media portrays
    Islam to be worth
    In this struggle where the two
    Biggest sides are simply wrong
    Its us on the sideline who need to stand strong


    4

    The culture behind Islam was once held so high
    The calligraphy the architecture the amount of ideas that would fly
    From our scholars our thinkers who had their hands held high
    In Spain all those years ago it wasn’t too hard to try?
    So why can’t it be done now? Why?


    3

    I’m not here to preach
    I’m not the best one to teach
    What Islam truly is
    I’m not the greatest Muslim you see
    But I know for a fact this isn’t
    What Islam is supposed to be

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    Now were back to him with that bomb
    Strapped to his back
    Focused on destruction
    As he’s pacing through his track
    I wonder what exactly is going through his mind
    Does he see paradise on the other side?

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    The cycle goes on and on
    Until…

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    Old March 13th, 2008 (4:59 AM).
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      Old March 13th, 2008 (5:39 AM).
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      Yeah nice critizim ^ :\

      Anyways, Deep Deep poem.. Could even factor out a song with it if made.. I like how you made the poem not a bland poem about ten seconds, you actually count down and not really about ten seconds at all. I thought it flowed well, and told a story.

      I also enjoyd how you fit your words in there making some imagery. I thought there were some mispells Im not sure what

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      All and all, a great peom indeed. I enjoy'd reading it and overall was a well put together poem.
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      Old March 13th, 2008 (1:50 PM).
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        thanks for the comments and well the thing is this is actually a rap song lol, the part where i say "you think you such a g?" i'm reffering to the more "ghetto" type of people basically saying that you guys arent so tough just take a look at these kids and the type of things their doing, basically saying stop with the act, hopefully that explains things lol
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        Old March 13th, 2008 (3:26 PM).
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          Yeah i like the rap songs!!,
          I enjoyed reading it and i like to make poems too, but all in spanish because my english is too bad...
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          Old March 13th, 2008 (3:51 PM).
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            yea thanks for the comments ^^
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            Old March 21st, 2008 (4:02 PM).
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              I've commented your work before, and it gets better everytime. Your political rap on the religions last time was really interesting, as is the one I just read. Who knows, maybe someone out there will listen to the continual outcries of halting the violence. Great job, dude. 10/10
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              Old March 22nd, 2008 (1:37 PM).
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                thanks romance hero great to see you like my work ^^
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