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Started by ^^NICK^^ v.2.0 September 6th, 2003 7:57 PM
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Age 32
London
Seen December 28th, 2016
Posted October 22nd, 2005
11 posts
17.6 Years
'ello all,
I'm just dropping in for a quick say so. :D ff.net ain't bad. I've got a four stories on there and I (when I'm bored) sometimes go around and look into all the selection of fan fiction.
BTW, I've never heard of a 'rebel fanfiction.net' before. Only ff.net.
You have fallen.
And I cannot reach you.
Every step I willed you on,
Every moment I lead you to this.
You never left my mind,
Not once, not ever.

~LOTR:ROTK, Not Once, Not Ever
PA
Seen September 15th, 2017
Posted June 18th, 2008
117 posts
17.9 Years
Hello everybody! I'm a new fanfic auhtor here, and I have begun posting my fanfic 'Banov's Amazing Pokemon Adventure' as of today. It's quite popular on another forum, so hopefully you all can enjoy it as well!

My fanfic tells the story of a boy named Banov (*cough*), who goes on a quest to capture pokemon, until he one day uncovers a conspiracy. Before he knows it Banov is woven into a tale of good vs. evil, using everything he has to bring an end to the evil forces that reside in Hoen.

I'd really appreciate any and all comments, good or bad on it!

PC Brother- ProtrainerEon

Frostweaver

Ancient + Prehistoric

Age 34
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Canada
Seen September 11th, 2016
Posted July 30th, 2016
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I like FFNet, and I also back Fanfiction.net as a good place to put stories up. Really, if you do want to work hard in the field of fanfic writing, just post your story in any place that will accept your story under (if it's a Pokemon fanfic) the Pokemon section. Go sign up to the different forums, join FFNet and so on... the more places you post, the more likely you get known, and get reviews.

Again, I think we went through FFNet before regarding scriptfic... no reason to allow good scripfics to live for the sake of millions of eyes out there. People may end up upon the scriptfics with a probability of 199/200 that the scriptfic is bad.


As for Banov, welcome to the fanfic lounge where you see lazy and ignorant, self-centered people (mainly, ME) who live to complain. For starters, I am guessing that you haven't read the sticky in this forum regarding fanfic writing guide, which I strongly suggest you to do. From what you have posted here, I already see a suggestion of inexperienced writing.

(eg. "It starts out relatively bad but it will pick up!" A good writer will never say something like this, because a story of a good writer will be good all the way through. Why is the beginning worst than later parts of the story? Can't you make the beginning better? People can say something like this against you, and you will be left speechless in response to why this is happening to the story. We don't see professional authors say something like that on the back of their book.)

Yes, I'm very discouraging towards everyone, but do understand that you will benefit off of the toughness eventually. If you can and if you want to, please open fire back at me, because then it's a sign that people do know what they want to do, and know what they are doing ^_^

Frostweaver

Ancient + Prehistoric

Age 34
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Canada
Seen September 11th, 2016
Posted July 30th, 2016
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Oh no, the beginning isn't bad per say (did I say that?), but I'm saying that the story itself changes. I don't want to give too much away, though o_o

I totally don't mind your critisism though - I'm gonna need as much as I can get!
it begins as a regular trainer goes-on-journey-and-blablabla fanfic but it quickly changes into something very different.
it's implied that the beginning will suck but the later parts will be awesome... be very careful about your diction (diction = word choice) because what you are saying literally may not be what you really mean. What the wordings are implying is a much stronger definition.

Really, typical OT-adventure stories have to show promising changes from the "standard Ash Ketchum start" very soon to catch readers' attentions...
PA
Seen September 15th, 2017
Posted June 18th, 2008
117 posts
17.9 Years
Oh...

Well, hopefully people can look past the fact that the beginning has some stereotypes in it and enjoy the story. There are a lot of things that happen in the beginning that become pretty important in the future. I donn't want to change the beginning, because I'm afraid I'll omit something that I made important or mentioned later in the future o_o

I'm going to go back and edit that post though...

PC Brother- ProtrainerEon
Seen March 13th, 2022
Posted December 28th, 2018
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19.7 Years
Hello everybody! I'm a new fanfic auhtor here, and I have begun posting my fanfic 'Banov's Amazing Pokemon Adventure' as of today. It's quite popular on another forum, so hopefully you all can enjoy it as well!

My fanfic tells the story of a boy named Banov (*cough*), who goes on a quest to capture pokemon, until he one day uncovers a conspiracy. Before he knows it Banov is woven into a tale of good vs. evil, using everything he has to bring an end to the evil forces that reside in Hoen.

I'd really appreciate any and all comments, good or bad on it!
Sounds a bit cliche to me~ but we'll see.

And Frostweaver, I wouldn't assume that at all o_______o; But that's just me.

Frostweaver

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Seen September 11th, 2016
Posted July 30th, 2016
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Errr...well seeing as everyone has some kind of 'clichephobia' I'll speed up the updates until the story deviates from the basic OT story. Then maybe SOMEONE will give it a chance...
Clich is unliked, because an original sentence is copied so much to the extent that it is overused. When sentences are copied to this extent, it becomes clich. Clich is a negative term, so of course it's unwelcomed. Writing clich sentences in your exam essay paper will surely make your mark suffer.

Don't have to worry too much about update speed. Just make sure that the quality is good and even an OT can live if its quality is good enough. The unfair edge against OT is that its standards are much higher from readers in comparison to other genres (darkfics have the lowest standards, I think.)
PA
Seen September 15th, 2017
Posted June 18th, 2008
117 posts
17.9 Years
It's ok Katsuro, it happens to me too -_-"

In other news, can't ANYBODY leave me a comment on my fanfic topic? I know double psoting is allowed as long as your posting a chapter, but I think triple posting my be pushing it.

Please, somebody, say SOMETHING about my fanfic! Pleeeaaaase...... >.<"

PC Brother- ProtrainerEon
PA
Seen September 15th, 2017
Posted June 18th, 2008
117 posts
17.9 Years
You can post however many times in a row you want~ as long as they're quality chapters.

I'll take a look at it if I get time. Right now I'm doing a science report. x.x;
Thank you Katsuro, I mean it! Feel free to take your time, however.

And you don't have to worry about the quality of the chapters...i've written up to chapter 25, actually o.o"

And I can quote many, many people's comments on them (from another forum) if you want assuance that they're quality work.

PC Brother- ProtrainerEon
Age 34
Australia
Seen June 26th, 2014
Posted November 21st, 2006
218 posts
17.6 Years
I'm the owner of an RP, created by a friend who dropped out and put me in charge.
However, I suppose I could write a fanfic here on some of the story.

The is called Pokemon Wars. When it was first constructed, the idea of having a war was perposterous.
However, after I joined in, things elevated to a new scale, and I quickly became the main villian of the RP.

The story, related to my character, is as thus:

This takes place around a green Sandshrew, who has named himself Dark Quill. He seems peaceful enough on the outside, untill he spots a human and challenges them to a battle. Yes, he can speak, and has many other unique traits as well.
Dark Quill was captured by Team Rocket while young, and had been their lab rat for 18 years. For the past year, he had been living a free life which had been long delayed from him. He made friends, and even found love, but that was when the hand of man striked.
His girlfriend was shot and killed brutally by her owner, causing Dark Quill to let himself drown in his sorrow.
Eventually, Dark Quill evolves into a Sandslash (That'd be him in my avatar), which is when the fun begins.
Dark Quill decides to test his newfound strengths and abilities on the residents of Cerulean City. A very vicious and gory onslaught ensues, which ends with the city being evacuated, while the rotting corpses and blood-stained Sandslash give farewell to the sunset, and Dark Quill realises the magnitude of the task he has vowed to undertake.
He declares war against the human race.
Proud owner of the most powerful Sandslash ever. Wait for Diamond/Pearl release, so you can get your butt kicked in style XD

Frostweaver

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Posted July 30th, 2016
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This takes place around a green Sandshrew, who has named himself Dark Quill. He seems peaceful enough on the outside, untill he spots a human and challenges them to a battle. Yes, he can speak, and has many other unique traits as well.
Dark Quill was captured by Team Rocket while young, and had been their lab rat for 18 years. For the past year, he had been living a free life which had been long delayed from him. He made friends, and even found love, but that was when the hand of man striked.
His girlfriend was shot and killed brutally by her owner, causing Dark Quill to let himself drown in his sorrow.
Eventually, Dark Quill evolves into a Sandslash (That'd be him in my avatar), which is when the fun begins.
Dark Quill decides to test his newfound strengths and abilities on the residents of Cerulean City. A very vicious and gory onslaught ensues, which ends with the city being evacuated, while the rotting corpses and blood-stained Sandslash give farewell to the sunset, and Dark Quill realises the magnitude of the task he has vowed to undertake.
He declares war against the human race.
Brutal comment: Thank you for telling me this story. Now I don't have to go read it myself.


Seriously now...

When a summary reveals way too much about the story, the readers lose interest in the story because the readers simply know too much. Read the sticky thread about Pokemon Fanfiction Writing Guide, and look under the summary section for more details about what I mean...

K I feel so compelled to add something in that guide against human-speaking Pokemon... changing canonic materials, such as Pokemon language, can't happen just for the heck of it people. Where's the explanation for this mysterious power to speak human for the Pokemon? >>;
PA
Seen September 15th, 2017
Posted June 18th, 2008
117 posts
17.9 Years
assurance~ And don't worry, I'll be making my own judgements ;D But...I'm not the softest reviewer, so you're forewarned oo;

BTW- How long are the combined 25 chapters?
Errrr.....About 100 pages (in word), give or take. I do actually have them all complied in Word as one document, and that thing is 110 pages long...but for each chapter I start a new page. (note: I combined 'fic' chapters in many cases to form actually chapters in my full comilation, so right now there are about 16 1/2 chapters in it.....so about 8-10 pages are lost in starting new pages for new chapters.)

And FYI, the thing is still going! By the end of the fic there will be many more than 25 chapters, although 25 chapters is defenetley more than halfway through the series as I have it planned out.

EDIT: And also, some of my early chapters were quite short - so I have actually complied a couple chapters into one when I posted chapter 2 here, and I plan to do so for a while until my chapters became a suitable length.

PC Brother- ProtrainerEon
Age 34
Australia
Seen June 26th, 2014
Posted November 21st, 2006
218 posts
17.6 Years
Well, that's only a basic summary of the frist two chapters. The story itself spans well over 200 pages. (Counting on Microsoft Word)
If you hate speaking human, then you'll hate the rest of it as well.
Of course, I have explinations for everything, but all of that is connected to the main plots and such. If I tell you the reasons why, I'd be giving away more of the story, which as you said, makes it uninteresting.
However, if you MUST be convinced that I give you a reason...

As said before, Dark Quill is an experimental Pokemon operated on by Team Rocket. By using a series of special technological implants which have been surgically equipped to the inside of himself, Dark Quill has an array of unique abilities.

Some of these include abilities such as:
The ability to converse with humans in their native tongue.
A sort of permanent Rage attack.
Faster healing and boosted immunity systems.
Boosted reflexes and impulse systems.
A crystal-clear memory. (Not particularly good in his case)
A special Team Rocket TM, which taints the target Pokemon's soul and forces it to learn a few Ghost/Dark moves, such as Faint Attack and Shadow Ball.


I didn't create this RP to appeal to everyone. I don't expect anyone to fully understand the subtlety and delicacy of the pieces I write, but DO try and refrain from any form of critisism directed towards me. I'm not the kind of person who takes negative comments well.
Proud owner of the most powerful Sandslash ever. Wait for Diamond/Pearl release, so you can get your butt kicked in style XD
Age 36
Seen February 14th, 2012
Posted February 1st, 2009
446 posts
18.7 Years
K I feel so compelled to add something in that guide against human-speaking Pokemon... changing canonic materials, such as Pokemon language, can't happen just for the heck of it people. Where's the explanation for this mysterious power to speak human for the Pokemon? >>;
To be fair, it's not exactly changing canonic material considering that in some of the manga (Pipipi Adventures, Pocket Monsters or more commonly known as the "Scary Clefairy manga", etc.), almost all Pokemon can talk with humans. However, maybe it is a different case considering those manga do it for comedy purposes and really don't need much background so long as it makes people laugh, unlike a dark fic.