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Citrinin

Nephrotoxic.

Age 26
Male
New Zealand
Seen August 2nd, 2010
Posted July 19th, 2010
2,778 posts
13.9 Years
And when your title suggests some kind of hope...

You hate it. XDD;

But seriously, the improvement from Faith to Torn and Shattered is incredible. :D Don't cringe from your mistakes, though - they represent a learning experience. :)

My title is just a reference to the central antagonist. XD;
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Misheard Whisper

I also happen to be a model.

Age 28
He/They
Nimbasa Gym
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Posted September 27th, 2022
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14.3 Years
That's very true, and I'm glad the improvement wasn't just an empty fantasy I've been sustaining in order to supplement my narcissism after all.
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Citrinin

Nephrotoxic.

Age 26
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New Zealand
Seen August 2nd, 2010
Posted July 19th, 2010
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13.9 Years
Not at all. Shattered is, as I've said before, an incredible fic. ^_^

Which brings me to a topic, which, interestingly enough, I'm unable to answer due to me still being on my first fic.

How much have you improved since your first Pokémon fanfic? In which ways did you improve the most? Do you still retain some of your early weaknesses?
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Misheard Whisper

I also happen to be a model.

Age 28
He/They
Nimbasa Gym
Seen October 3rd, 2022
Posted September 27th, 2022
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14.3 Years
*blushes* You're too nice. I'm just an amateur.

How much have you improved since your first Pokémon fanfic? In which ways did you improve the most? Do you still retain some of your early weaknesses?
Earlier weaknesses . . . hmm. I still have a tendency to go into great deal describing one setting or character, and then by the end of that chapter, I've completely forgotten about it and I carry on with minimal or no description. Also, I tend to ditch fics after just a few chapters. Hopefully not happening this time around.

And I get more and more narcissistic every day.

I'm talking like an old-timer here, but in reality, it's only been seven months (as of yesterday) since I posted my first fic. Fanfiction, although it is a pastime I indulge in 'under the radar', as they say, has taught me one hell of a lot in such a short time, more than I've learned in English since I started high school. ^_^ Plus, it brings me closer to having something resembling a social life. I actually talk to people! Real people!
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Do you frequently use Internet Slang and or Emoticons in your daily Internet life? Such as IMHO, OMG, ect.
I use smilys like XD and :O a whole lot. XD; As for abbrievations, the only ones I used were WTF, OMG, and IMO.

How much have you improved since your first Pokémon fanfic? In which ways did you improve the most? Do you still retain some of your early weaknesses?
I think I improved a lot from my first fic. I would have a lot of problems with grammar. Compare to my latest fic, most of the grammar problems were taken care of, but I still get those pesky awkward sentences and tense problems once in a while.

Description I think I did a lot better too. First time around it would be all listy and chunky, but now I'm able to have the setting and emotions described gradually.

And Sparkling Dragon, I too learned English much better here than the courses in my high school and university. Plus, it's fun talking to the writers here and in other forums :D
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Miz en Scène

Everybody's connected

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The Wired
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14.7 Years
EDIT: 500 posts in less than a month!
*Gasp* I joined last year and I'm just reaching 200.

Thoughts on Titles
I can't say my titles have been any good. A bit cliche to say the least.

How much have you improved since your first Pokémon fanfic? In which ways did you improve the most? Do you still retain some of your early weaknesses?
I think that I've moderately improved since my last fic. Though, I still have a problem with comma splices and logic. I'm working on it.
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How much have you improved since your first Pokémon fanfic? In which ways did you improve the most? Do you still retain some of your early weaknesses?\

I have written a few fan fics, and they did not turn out good. I don't really write much now, but I think that if I was, it would be better, but still not good. My grammar is shoddy at best, my spelling is sub-par and my vocabulary is just plain lousy.
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I also probably wouldn't be your pair/family member unless I know you :O Shocking!

Misheard Whisper

I also happen to be a model.

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He/They
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Yeah, there's nothing that will help you get better than actually trying! /anti-sarcasm
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I love anti-sarcasm. I just invented it, but I'm sure it already exists.
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My grammar is shoddy at best, my spelling is sub-par and my vocabulary is just plain lousy.
Yeah, like SD and Citrinin said, try writing again. Conjure a suitable plot then get a Beta.
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ARGH, this hiccups won't leave me alone! Gone, here, gone, here, gone, here. It is driving me nuts.
Try drinking water, slowly.

Side note: Chapter 3 of The Chronicles of Neo Groudon is up.
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Misheard Whisper

I also happen to be a model.

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Nimbasa Gym
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Please share! I don't tend to get hiccups a lot, but when I do, they last for ever.

And Citrinin, when was the last time we dedicated any vestige of effort to maintaining the outward appearance of sanity?
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Ok, but before you look at it, you must sign this waiver entitling everything you own to meremember to listen your brain.
Spoiler:

Step 1: Start by inhaling through your mouth until your lungs feel full (when it feels like you cannot inhale any more.... your lungs will basically stop taking in air).
Step 2: Swallow. You are not really swallowing anything but it seems that without this act, it doesn’t work.
Step 3: Now inhale some more until your lungs feel full again. You may not be able to inhale a lot, but do get some more air in. It will start to get difficult to do this as you go, but keep trying. You obviously can’t suck in as much air as you did initially, but just a little will do (think of it as taking a “sip” of air).
Step 4: Swallow again. This too will start to get difficult as you go.
Step 5: Repeat steps 3 and 4 (inhale and swallow) until you cannot swallow again. While it seems you can almost always suck in just a little more air, it is the swallowing that gets to be impossible. When you feel like you cannot swallow again, swallow again anyway. It will be hard to do, your face will probably turn red, and you may make squeaking sounds. But you CAN swallow one last time. By this time, your lungs should also be quite full and it should be difficult to get much more air in as well. While you should try not to let any air out, if you have really repeated steps 3 and 4 as many times as you can, you probably will end up letting a little out before you can take that last swallow. If you find that air keeps escaping out of your nose even early in the process, try squeezing it shut with your fingers.
Step 6: Exhale.
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And Citrinin, when was the last time we dedicated any vestige of effort to maintaining the outward appearance of sanity?
The random insanity is the very essence of the FFL. If this insanity were to suddenly dissapear, the FFL would be no more. And yes, that is the side note, since not many people read it.
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Nimbasa Gym
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Posted September 27th, 2022
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~They're coming to take me away, ha-ha, they're coming to take me away. But I'll be happy to see those nice young men in their clean white coats and they're coming to take me away, ha-haaaa~!~

It's not Rammstein or whoever, but it still fits.
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~They're coming to take me away, ha-ha, they're coming to take me away. But I'll be happy to see those nice young men in their clean white coats and they're coming to take me away, ha-haaaa~!~
They told me that if I went there one more time, I'd get an Asylum coupon.
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Misheard Whisper

I also happen to be a model.

Age 28
He/They
Nimbasa Gym
Seen October 3rd, 2022
Posted September 27th, 2022
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14.3 Years
I tend to do that. No-one gives a mukake mushroom, so why should we pretend we give a mukake mushroom?!!!1!!?1!!!!8!!twohundredthousandmilliononehundredandseventyfourthousandthreehundredandtwentysixpointfivesevennineonesevensixpeanuts!

I just love the mushroom distorted euphemism.
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