Eliana

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Eliana: *looks around* what? Is there a problem
Lugia: yes eliana maybe there IS! Maybe, oh, I dont know.. WHERE DID THE STORY GO!
Eliana: ^_^; oops I forgot about thatim rewriting it..because it sucked. Yes it did. I even admit it no one was reviewing so im gonna change it a lotso here goes..

Legendary Trainers- Chosen of Lugia


Chapter 1
Location: Massachusetts, Elianas POV

Shes gone. Forever. My best friend disappeared. Her name was Rachel. We were both pokemon fans. She was found missing last night but I have to move on- thats what she would have wanted.slowly, I cry myself to sleep, but little do i know that my life will never be the same again..

Later

Sunlight poured down on my face. Nhhhh I groaned. I opened my eyes. AHHHHHHH! My scream shattered the silence.
WHY am I in the middle of a forest! I said out loud to no one. All I could se was trees around me. Okay I told myself. Stay calm. Dont panic. Im sure theres a logical explanation to this. Just find a path I sighed and started walking through the trees.
Dgeeeeeyyy! a voice echoed through the forest.
Strange I muttered. That sounded familiar I walked on. A river was flowing a few feet away from me. Suddenly, another voiced sounded. Ahhhh! there was a blue thing in the rivers current! Ive been a good swimmer all my life, so I did the obvious by jumping in and going after it. The river greeted my with cold water.
Almost there I thought. I reached out.
Got it! I said triumphantly. Suddenly, I couldnt move. I felt myself falling into blackness.
Those eyes..
Those bright yellow eyes
I opened my eyes. Wha? What happened? I expected my voice to be unanswered. How wrong I was.
Well not much actually
I jumped. W-whos there? I stammered.
Well if you cared to look down you may find out
I looked down and yelped in surprise. B-b-b-ut thats impossible! I cried. Y-y-your not supposed to be real!
Standing in front of me, was what appeared to be, a real, live pokemon. Totodile to be exact.
Well it is. It said as-a-matter-of-factly. Eliana, welcome to the Pokemon World

Eliana: >_< so sue me! Its a short chapter! Ive already started writing the others, which happen to be very long
Lugia: *snickers* she lying!
Eliana: how would YOU know!
Lugia: >_<
Eliana: stay tuned for the next chapter! Thanks for reading ^^
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Eliana

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yay! thanks swablu man! i even called you swablu MAN! il post the next chapter tonight ^^
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Eliana....this is gonna be a good story...well, it's better than mine...then again...mine's only 2 sentences long so far...XD But really this is gonna be a great story...
"The surface of the earth is the shore of the cosmic ocean. ... Recently, we've managed to wade a little way out, maybe ankle-deep, and the water seems inviting."

Eliana

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Thanks pk! i got the next chapy done!
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Eliana: Haha! You shall see this one will be long, and now my characters will be entering the story! Now in order of appearance I would like to welcome..
Electra!
Electra: Hey all! ^^
Eliana: and now. Jenna!
Jenna: What? Is there a REASON you said my name?
Eliana ^_^; right and now..Mia!
Mia: Hey..
Lugia: You guys are LAME
Jenna: WHAT DID YOU JUST CALL ME
Eliana: ^_^; on with the chapter!

Chapter 2
Eliana's POV
As much as I wanted to, I couldnt believe it. It just wasnt possible. Y-y-you cant be real I stuttered. It sighed.
If you must, go on, punch me. Im solid
I took my hand and poked the pokemon. Solid.
Im a girl not an it It- she said. I was dumbfounded.
Amazing I muttered. It really exists..pokemon really exists..but wait a minute I looked at Totodile. How do you know my name?
Your jacket she replied simply. I glanced at me jacket. There, in blue marker, was my name. I laughed. Suddenly, it came to me.
Um Totodile? How can you speak human?
She looked very confused. Um, Eliana- I hate to scare you but- your speaking pokemon

Electras POV
Good morning Proffesor Oak! I called as I entered the lab.
Ah yes Electra its good to see you! How are you! Prof. Oak walked over to me.
I smiled. Im good but- theres something I need to ask you
And what might that be? he asked.
I took a deep breath I want to start a-
Pokemon Journey? Prof. Oak cut in and laughed. Why didnt you ask earlier? Follow me
We walked into a room with a few pokeballs on a table. He turned to me. There arent many left because some others came in the past few days but Im sure youl find one that appeals to you
I looked at him again. I was wondering if you had any electric types
Well.I dobut Electric types can be very tricky he then laughed. But knowing your name Im sure you can handle it!
My eyes brightened. Thank you sooo much!
No problem! he said as he got a pokeball out of his desk and released it.
Pikaaaa pi! a pikachu now sat on the floor.
Ohh! It sooo cute! I said admiringly.
It seemed to glare at me. Im NOT cute
I gaped at it, and then stared at Prof Oak. Did you just hear something?
Hm? No Im afraid not He said, appearing to be very confused.
Um okay can I have a pokedex?
sure! he said, running back to the desk and returning with a red device. enjoy!
I turned, with the pikachu reluctantly following me.
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Jennas Pov
Finish it off! A scorched Pidgey flew away. Coward! I yelled.
I glared at my Charmander. You let it get away!
He looked at me. Im sorry Jenna- it wont happen again
It better not I turned and started walking. He followed.
If you want to succeed, you shouldnt yell at your pokemon like that a tall girl with blue hair stepped in front of me.
Mia! I hissed. You again!
Well you wont be seeing me for long she replied coolly. I dont like to see people fail
I snarled. What makes you think you can do any better!
Did I say that? She laughed, turned, and started walking the other way. I was furious as I saw her walk away.
Who needs her anyway? Lets go
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Mias POV
I sighed. All this walking is making me tired I sat down on a stump.
Come on out Lapras! I sent out a pokeball.
Heya Lapras I called. You see, none of the pokemon I wanted were left, so the Professor was kind enough to let me train a Lapras he found from the wild. Thank goodness I was born able to talk to pokemon or otherwise she would be scared to death of me.
Hi! she said happily. Im hungry! she said.
Hmmm I said thoughtfully. I could have sworn that I had some berries in my bag I fiddled around my very messy backpack until a few minutes later.
Aha! Heres an oran berry! I threw her the berry which she took gratefully.
Yum! she said while chewing the berry. This is good!
I smiled. Glad you like it! I glanced at the darkening sky. Its getting late I looked at Lapras. We should rest she nodded.
Okay your right! Goodnight!
I lay back on the ground. Good night!"
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Eliana: HA!
Lugia:.. crud.
Eliana: and you thought it would be 5 sentences! HA! SEE YA next chapter!
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Eliana

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hmm? what do you mean> ^^ they are all going to be appearing throughout the story:
Rewrite of my other story. All of the legendary pokemon have children, but are taekn by Team Magma. They then take the children, put them in human bodies and brainwash them, and they dont remember they were ever pokemon......
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Eliana

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oop never mind i take that back its gonna be team rocket :P
heres the next chappy hope ya like it

Eliana: Im bacccck!
Lugia: from what?
Eliana: You take things WAYYYY to seriously!
Lugia: >_<
Eliana: *sigh* no reviews! Heck I should give it time! Here goes!

Chapter 3- Evil shows its face
A few days later.. Elianas POV
Hmmm.. I still need to give you a name I said thoughtfully.
Im surprised Prof. Oak didnt give you one
Totodile blushed. A day earlier, we arrived at Prof. Oaks lab. Turns out Totodile escaped from it. So Prof. Oak let me have her.
How about..JULIE! I suggested. Totodile smiled.
Sure! Thats a great name!
You know whats strange? I asked.
What?
That your in Kanto. You should be in Jhoto
Well that changed a whole ago Julie explained.
They kinda transferred pokemon around the world..
Interestingvery interesting. My voice trailed off as we walked on

POV: Unknown
John. Any news?
Yes, sir. It appears that legendary activity has increased in the Kanto region
Good- then get to work
At once sir
I hung up. I wont fail this time.

Jennas POV
I dont like being around people. Thats why I am not walking on the path, but in the woods. I felt my cheek bang against something hard.
Ow! I yelled, glancing up, to see a familiar shirt which bore the letter R on it. Snarling, I broke into a run, not looking behind me.

Elianas POV
We walked into a sunlit clearing. Julie perked up.
Julie? Whats wrong?
Her response was in one, cold word.
Rockets
I knew what she meant instantly.
Where? I asked, feeling the pressure build up.
Somewhere in this clearing Julie said with apparent hatred.
Then what are you waiting for? Lets go get em! I said looking at the vast panorama of the clearing. I heard a howl of pain in the distance.
that way! I pointed to the left of me. We started running in that direction. In front of us, a Rocket member was standing in front of a Mightyena and what appeared to be a Poocheyna and a Trapinch. The Mightyena snarled at the Rocket. The Rocket laughed.
Your mine he said, taking out a pokeball.
I dont think so! I cried. The Rocket turned around and looked at me in surprise.
Get awa- Huh? A beeping noise was coming from his pocket.
What? he said in confusion.
It cant be! then he grinned.
Oh Great Guardian do you really think you can hide from me?
What! I cried.
Youre a whacko! Julie get him! Julie poised into a fighting stance. He laughed again.
You wont be needed to do the Guardian he said, turning to leave.
Once I get reinforcements you will be ours he left.
Wow, since when did rocket members become some whacko? I asked Julie in amazement. She shrugged. I then remembered the pokemon. I turned to the Mightyena.
Are you okay?
she looked amused.
A human speaking Pokemon? Interesting her face then turned more solemn.
And yes I am she looked at the two younger pokemon.
Ive been taking care of these two but- she hesitated.
The Rockets- they have been around here more often. Her voice trailed off. I got the message. I knelt down next to her.
I can take them- I promise I will take care of them to the best of my ability- and we can always visit!
She smiled.
Thank you She motioned to the young ones towards me. They nodded and went to me.
You wont be disappointed I promise! I said as we turned to leave.
We waved goodbye, and headed towards the next town..

POV: Unknown
I laughed.
Oh Guardian, you wont get away!

Eliana: Ooh creepy! XD
Lugia: Like you?
Eliana: shutup. See ya next chapter!
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Super Torchic

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LOL YAY I like it!!!...actually.......no I dont like it I love it!!!!XDLOL...could it trouble you to make it a little longer...^_^>_<...Anyways I like it...how you Talk to Lugia in the cegainning of everychapter its funnyXDLOL
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Eliana

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*sigh* thats my only problem..... is it REALLY short? sorry im trying to makeem a little longer
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Super Torchic

HEY!!!WHO AT MY SOCKS!!!

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hey its not THAT short........its short yes..but maybe more discription will make it longer^_^

~FireRyu~
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thankys!!!

Hi, I was once Fireflameryu, but I'm now Super Torchic^^;;; May you RIP FFR!

Oh screw this-_-; I'll Be FFR again on christmas...if I remeber><!!!!!

I support Ebil Shipping:P

Eliana

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I do describe things! Lol the first chapgter is very detailed
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I want to read the rest of this story...it's awesome, Eliana...I think I'm gonna work on my FanFic tomorrow so I prolly won't post...
"The surface of the earth is the shore of the cosmic ocean. ... Recently, we've managed to wade a little way out, maybe ankle-deep, and the water seems inviting."

Eliana

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lol ^^ i need to write somemore..... so i wont post for a while
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it's really a nice story Eliana.

Me: MUST HAVE MORE!!!!
Deoxys: Are there something wrong with you
Me: No i just want some more of that story
Deoxys: Oh, then get Eliana to irte some more
Me: Ok, Eliana write some more please
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Eliana

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^^ thanks....but someone who reviewed twice at fanfiction really hurt my feelings.....but i will go on.... :) im still writing chapter 4 though!
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Eliana

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Thanks! ^^ i should be getting around to typing chapter 4 soon
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Eliana

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Lol im not done typing it..... :P i will be shortly ^^
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Eliana

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done! ^^ sorry for double posting!
Eliana: Agh! well Ive been trying to write a little better
Lugia: Yeah, cuz you cant write at all! Your so busy listening to Perfect over and over and over again!
Eliana: Hey.dont diss that song -_-
Lugia: *laugh* I will!
Eliana: QUIEEEEETTTT! >_<

Heres the next chappy!

Chapter 4- The Ruins
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Elianas POV- Somewhere on the way to Celadon
Well, here I am, 3 gym badges. I also have a new pokemon with me- tailow- her nickname is Garuda. So we are all just sitting here, not doing anything, until Amaroq, my Poocheyna, barked.

What is it Amaroq?

Look theres a cave! Amaroq motioned to a cave not to far from our location.

Cave!? Kuro, otherwise known as Trapinch said while jumping up and down.

Where! I wanna go into a cave!
I laughed.
I guess its okay!
I said.
Lets go!
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Mias POV
Grrrr
I grumbled.
I stood outside. There was supposed to be a tour and Im getting a little impatient. I wasnt alone. There was a tall girl with yellow hair, and two younger kids who appeared to be siblings. The boy had blue hair and the girl red hair. Oh wait- another girl just walked up. She is also pretty tall with brown hair.
You look troubled
Pidgey, one of my pokemon said to me.
I sighed.
Its nothing
I lied. There IS something bothering me. Its like.I met these people before somewhere
If we are all ready we will start the tour
A lady wearing a black dress came out of the cave. We all seemed to be ready.
Im coming to
I knew that voice instantly.
Jenna
I said grimly.
Mia what a surprise!
she said, with apparent hatred in her voice.
If you would all follow me
the tour guide turned and walked into the cave. We followed.
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Electras POV
As we entered the cave, I watched the girls who were fighting earlier. Ive seen them around the area I used to live but didnt really talk to them. My thoughts cleared as the tour guide began.

The ruins here tell a legend- or a prophecy about a legendary pokemon I looked around. The walls depicted letters which I couldnt understand, and there was a lot of broken statues as well.

Long ago She continued.
The Guardian Of The Sea- otherwise known as Lugia- guarded an important artifact- The Crystal Of The Sea- a crystal that held powers which only Lugia can posses.
the legend says, if Lugia is about to be killed, it will transfer the crystal- physically and spiritually- into another whos fate is to hold it
The girl with the red hair snorted.

We dont know where the Crystal is now she concluded.

But hopefully it is still in Lugias possession. Feel free to look around
I looked around the ruins for a while, and slowly everyone cleared out.

Out of the Ruins, Elianas POV
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That was so cool!
I exclaimed to Julie. Julie blinked.
"You must really like Lugia huh?
I nodded.
Uh- Eliana- look
Julie pointed. That red headed girl was headed our way.
You she said.
Your on. 4 each. Lets go
I looked hesitantly at Julie. Could we do it?
Your on! I called.
Go Garuda! My Tailow came out.
Go Spearow! The vicious bird pokemon appeared.
Garuda Peck! I called
Peck it back! The red haired girl ordered.
Then, the birds were pecking at each other without end. I had an idea
Garuda! Peck it from behind! he nodded a flew behind the Spearow. Unfortunately the Spearow was ready.
Row! It screeched as it pecked Garuda. With a thud he fell to the ground.
Garuda return! I cried. He tried his best. She also returned her pokemon.
Amaroq go! Amaroq came out.
Scyther! The bug pokemon with scythes towered over Amaroq. We could do this. Although Scyther DID have an advantage. Scyther was faster. But I had a plan.
Scyther quick attack!
Amaroq Sand Attack!
Just as Scyther was about to attack, Amaroq sent a spray of sand at Scyther.
Now Amaroq bite Scyther!
He jumped on the Scyther and began biting it.
Amaroq try biting Scthers scythes! Just dont hurt yourself!
Fortuantely, Amaroq somehow bit Scyther on one of his scythes. My plan worked. It fainted! I had a theory that Scythers scythes would be its sensitive spot!
Way to go Amaroq return! I called.
We were halfway left.
Okay Kuro go!
Go Charmander!
A starter pokemon. This girl must have gotten a pokemon from Prof. Oak.
Charmander ember!
Kuro sand attack!
The fire went right through the sand, and hit Kuro.
Pinch! she cried in pain.
Kuro Faint attack!
Kuro had no time to attack. Charmander rammed right into Kuro. Kuro fell.
Kuro return! I gritted my teeth as the girl returned her Charmander. We each had one left. I looked at Julie. She nodded. She stepped out to battle.
Go Gyarados!
I gaped at the dragon in front of us. This was gonna be REALLY tough.
Gyarados, bite!
The great snake lunged toward Julie. Luckily enough for both of us, she managed to dodge the snakes huge fangs.
Julie mudlsap!
Julie sprayed very dirty water at Gyarados. I winced. No damage. At all.
Awww crud I muttered.
Gyarados, Finish it off! Dragon Rage!
It happened so fast. The light, and the impact.
JULIE! I cried. The light slowly faded. She lay there. But she was still there. She didnt appear to be fainted. Then the light came back. It was engulfing Julie! I was in awe. With the lights disappearance, so was Totodiles. Totodile no longer existed. Croconaw was born.
J-julie? I asked.
She nodded. I grinned.
Lets do this! I cried.
Julie! Slash!
I watched as she jumped, and slashed the Gyarados right across the face. It must have been a critical hit because it fainted. The girl looked disgusted.
Y-y-ou got lucky! she snarled, and ran away.
Julie I cant believe it I muttered.
She walked over.
I couldnt let you LOSE now could I? she winked.
Thanks Julie

Mias POV
I watched the whole battle. I smiled. This girl wouldnt fail. She had the potential.

Eliana: O_O oh my god.that is the longest chapter I ever wrote!
Lugia: Is it because perfect isnt good?
Eliana: would you shutup!
Lugia: HEHE
Eliana: okay now I might need time to write the next chappy! See ya then!
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Super Torchic

HEY!!!WHO AT MY SOCKS!!!

Age 29
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Seen September 22nd, 2005
Posted July 15th, 2005
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lOVED IT!!!...its better but I still cant tell where i left off and end up reading it over could you please skip teo lines when the charaters talk like this

"hello" some on esaid

"WHat!!!wo are you???"

like that...it would make it easier to read

~FireRyu~
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thankys!!!

Hi, I was once Fireflameryu, but I'm now Super Torchic^^;;; May you RIP FFR!

Oh screw this-_-; I'll Be FFR again on christmas...if I remeber><!!!!!

I support Ebil Shipping:P

Eliana

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lol allright i started to but i got bored XD
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Eliana

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Age 32
www.thepeopleunited.net
Seen February 18th, 2010
Posted April 25th, 2006
17,195 posts
19.5 Years
Grr *revives* just to tell you all il try to start getting chapter 5 soon but i cant promise
[A N T I -F L A G]
T H E I R | S Y S T E M | D O E S N ' T | W O R K | F O R | Y O U

WE'RE TIRED OF LIES WE WANT THE TRUTH. [Turncoat]
[Sanity is not Statistical] --1984
No, I'm not back, I'm just laughing at the mediocrity of corrupted 'authority'. <3

Super Torchic

HEY!!!WHO AT MY SOCKS!!!

Age 29
...gee...somewhere in the solar system...
Seen September 22nd, 2005
Posted July 15th, 2005
928 posts
18.9 Years
>_< school has started so I haven't been on line...welll HURRY UP and get the chapter done...I am waitingXD
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thankys!!!

Hi, I was once Fireflameryu, but I'm now Super Torchic^^;;; May you RIP FFR!

Oh screw this-_-; I'll Be FFR again on christmas...if I remeber><!!!!!

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