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Old June 18th, 2008 (8:04 AM).
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    Heyas! OK, this time I've found a bunch of poetry I wish to stick here, all of it's at my deviantART page like all my stuff, so please read and comment! Pwease? :"D

    Poem (c) Ikitsumi



    I have something I want to say about Love.

    Love is the one thing that drives me forward.
    Only once in this life could I ever hate Love; when Love decides to leave me.
    Veridicous to my own Love, I'd never leave Love
    Everlasting to me and living in my heart.

    Yesterday's troubles are finally at an end.
    Only Love could help me control myself.
    Until the day I die, I will be with Love.

    Guess the one time that my heart will be empty?
    Anytime that I'm without Love, my heart will be empty.
    Really, I just miss Love is what I mean.
    You'll be able to tell when you see me without Love.
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    Old June 18th, 2008 (9:55 AM).
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      Cute poem Ikitsumi~
      I think it describes love very well.

      I like your style. Eh, sorry I'm not being a very good critiquer right now. I really did like it~
      and I do hope you post more! :3
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      Old June 18th, 2008 (10:59 AM).
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        i like how you put the word love in bold

        sweet!
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        Old June 18th, 2008 (11:02 AM).
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          that is such a great poem i loved it hope you post more
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          Old June 18th, 2008 (6:29 PM).
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            that is a cute poem and its true. really nice hope to see more
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            Old June 21st, 2008 (1:37 AM).
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              It's a great poem Ikitsumi..
              It's about my favourite subject It describes love in a good sense..
              Keep writing!
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              Old June 22nd, 2008 (4:06 AM).
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                Quote:
                Originally Posted by Ikitsumi View Post
                Poem (c) Ikitsumi

                I have something I want to say about Love.

                Love is the one thing that drives me forward.
                Only once in this life could I ever hate Love; when Love decides to leave me.
                Veridicous to my own Love, I'd never leave Love
                Everlasting to me and living in my heart.

                Yesterday's troubles are finally at an end.
                Only Love could help me control myself.
                Until the day I die, I will be with Love.

                Guess the one time that my heart will be empty?
                Anytime that I'm without Love, my heart will be empty.
                Really, I just miss Love is what I mean.
                You'll be able to tell when you see me without Love.
                I love this style.
                One of the best personification I have ever seen Although I Dont read Poetry alot.. Its still excellent

                A little Analysis to those people who just breifly read this.
                • This is a very good form of personification. (like I said before xD)
                • Love can be replaced with anyone's name, which aids to its originality.
                • In the last stanzas, 'Empty' is repeated, which shows us how much he/she loves 'Love,' and how much he/she misses 'Love'
                • The poem begins and ends with 'Love'
                Well.. Thats it from my two-minute analysis. iiLove this Poem Iki =)
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