Pokemon Mystery Dungeon: The Void Break

Started by ๒inaryקlastic July 13th, 2008 6:52 AM
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Age 27
In My Secret Cave looking over all of Pokemon Land...
Seen July 5th, 2009
Posted February 21st, 2009
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15.2 Years
Prolouge: http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/7528/prolougegm0.png
Episode 1: http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/4361/episode1iw0.png Impossible!
Prolouge: http://img137.imageshack.us/img137/5580/prolouge2bm9.png
Episode 2: http://img149.imageshack.us/img149/6139/episode2sr6.png Transmisson (look very carefully at frame 1 and 2)
Episode 3: http://img87.imageshack.us/img87/1204/episode3lw1.png Earthquake?!
Epsiode 4: http://img225.imageshack.us/img225/1725/episode4uc9.png The Base (Look VERY carefully at frame 4)
Episode 5: http://img66.imageshack.us/img66/4415/episode5ll6.png The Two Way Force Field
Episode 6: http://img227.imageshack.us/img227/1307/episode6yw2.png Weavile and Sneasile Snatchers

I have had a few comics in the past but they weren't that much of a hit. I hope this one is better. Please post your comments and please tell me how I could improve.

BIG HUMONGOUS Thanx 2 Aoh Nay for some of the landscape Sprites :D
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Fish Spaghetti Town
Seen May 18th, 2016
Posted September 17th, 2015
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Hm... I will stay tuned to see what happens next.
a rip in the universe seems like destructive fun >:D

you forgot the K in "know", but that's only a simple spelling mistake.
do what I do.

use spell check in microsoft word.

can't wait to see where this is going...
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Age 27
In My Secret Cave looking over all of Pokemon Land...
Seen July 5th, 2009
Posted February 21st, 2009
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The whole point I made this sprite comic is so I could destroy stuff :D YAY!!! it's gonna include alot of Legnedary Pokemon and loads of destruction... I'm currently working on the first episode.
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The whole point I made this sprite comic is so I could destroy stuff :D YAY!!! it's gonna include alot of Legnedary Pokemon and loads of destruction... I'm currently working on the first episode.
excellent!

I'm glad someone finally said "screw it" and made a comic full of destruction and lengendaries.

Good luck with it.
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super epic credit to Cilerba and Calis for OW Bases,
make sure you check them out as well!
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HM!!!!!!11111

You could work on text bubbles.
amybe a little more text could be used for better understanding.
but besides that, your going on the right track. :P
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super epic credit to Cilerba and Calis for OW Bases,
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Age 27
In My Secret Cave looking over all of Pokemon Land...
Seen July 5th, 2009
Posted February 21st, 2009
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It was only a little episode which explained that space looked different so it didn't contain that much speach so it could build suspense... There's some spoilers below so read them if you wanna find out what happens next

Spoiler:

There will be alot of destruction in the first chapter and in the second chapter Deoxys will appear on earth. There will be an episode in the first chapter and it will be of Kyogre and Groudon fighting... Oh and the Earth just moved
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And the rest went riding on.

In that cardboard box down the street.
Seen February 13th, 2011
Posted December 28th, 2009
802 posts
17.5 Years
Work on your grammar and spelling. Mainly, that's all. You might also want to not confuse us and explain via dialog a bit more, and have some sort of plot twist. Having Deoxys (Any other legendary) fight the rest of the legends combined and winning while some chosen one is elected is a tad overused. So don't do that :]

Good luck, you also might want to make sure you credit people from whom you borrowed stuff. K?

Gaah.
This signature is under construction.
But dun worry.
It will most likely stay like this FOREVAH.
Because I'm nowhere near as active as I used to be.
-[NP]

Kinuchio

A Panda PoKeMoN Trainer

Age 32
Ummm?
Seen May 16th, 2009
Posted May 12th, 2009
72 posts
14.9 Years
Work on textbubbles! That's really important. If someone doesn't like the way the text is displayed, then they probably won't read it.

Secondly, google up some tutorials on how to make proper fight scenes using sprites. Seeing as you have MS Paint, you're going to need a miracle to pull off effects. By doing this, you can make your upcoming GroudonxKyogre battle more epic-like and less bland.

Also, try to stick with Mystery Dungeon backgrounds instead of the GBA ones. They look bad if placed with the wrong sizes. For example, Lucario was way too big around all of those trees. If you haven't been, go to the Spriters Resource for backgrounds. They have a ton for Mystery dungeon. If you have been there, then stick to those.

And another thing, MS Paint has the most useful ability to resize sprites correctly. If you don't know, open MS Paint-Image-Stretch/Skew. (Control + W works also.) It should be a small window, where it says stretch, you can use 200/300/400/500. (ONLY THESE. OTHERS WILL DISTORT THE SPRITE) (And type the same two numbers in both boxes under the stretch option. At the bottom where it says Skew just leave alone.) By doing this nifty feature, you can make panels that are zoomed in. Adds more detail, trust me.

Don't be discouraged though. I was merely trying to help you out. I'm sorry that I killed your buzz by being the one to type a long list of complaints. It's just, I know how it feels when you think you're doing great and some guy pretty much says you're doing it all wrong. In my case though, they never help. I'm trying to help you improve. So, good luck with the comic. I hope you improve.
Awesomest Pokemanz comic evar. Nuff said.



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Pokemon Platinum coming soon and stuff
Age 27
In My Secret Cave looking over all of Pokemon Land...
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Thanks alot :)!!! The reason I didn't resize Lucario is because I knew it would get disroted... I've been on spriters resource (thats where I get most of my sprites) and I have already made some Battle Backgrounds but not many Move Templates :S... Thanks for being honest... You've really helped :)
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Kinuchio

A Panda PoKeMoN Trainer

Age 32
Ummm?
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Posted May 12th, 2009
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No pro-blem-o. Just follow that small little post up there and you can resize without worrying about distortion.
Awesomest Pokemanz comic evar. Nuff said.



Don't forget to check out my thread here

Pokemon Pearl Friendcode: 2535 6996 8244
Pokemon Platinum coming soon and stuff
Age 27
In My Secret Cave looking over all of Pokemon Land...
Seen July 5th, 2009
Posted February 21st, 2009
333 posts
15.2 Years
There's the next episode (look carefully at the first and second frame) it's just a little one... Oh and I've got new software so my comics are gonna be better from now on :)...
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Age 27
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Thanks Eeveeon and I drum. The Lucario bit will be explained in the NEW chapter. In the new chapter it will focus on individual characters for about 3 or 4 episodes. It will explain some of there past and what's gonna happen next. It will be in a weird time order though. It will tell one Pokemon story and then tell another Pokemons story from the very begining. There will also be more clues on this mysterious Pokemon that tends to appear so keep your eyes peeled (OW!)
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Age 27
In My Secret Cave looking over all of Pokemon Land...
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Thanks Aggronomer :)

There's the next Episode up

It has the first fighting scene in ^^

And sorry I haven't posted for a while, I'm beging to lose interest as no one is posting comments :(
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