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pong08

Black & White... don't fail me

Age 33
California
Seen September 27th, 2010
Posted May 27th, 2010
334 posts
15 Years
ok people here's the deal. If you want to see the continued version of this story, it'll be on serebii.net. It's the same title. Go to shipping communities for forums and click on shipping fics(sub-forum). You'll find it there. I'm going to use this website to post short stories, not this epic and long one.
Crystal!!! Don't go away!!!!!!!

I am looking forward to use cyndaquil on HG!!

Sydian

fake your death.

Age 30
they/them
Georgia
Seen May 22nd, 2022
Posted November 29th, 2021
33,354 posts
15.2 Years
Before I read, I looked at it and screamed. Break that into paragraphs. I have enough eye problems as it is. Hit enter twice when someone new is going to speak.

Now, something that bothers me is that you have six chapters in one post. Six. And they're horrendously short at that.

ok people here's the deal. If you want to see the continued version of this story, it'll be on serebii.net. It's the same title. Go to shipping communities for forums and click on shipping fics(sub-forum). You'll find it there. I'm going to use this website to post short stories, not this epic and long one.
What? -facepalm-

Then why'd you post it here? Ah, nevermind that. I guess I'll take a gander at it there. That is, if it's in paragraphs.

Oh, and leave the font alone. Don't alter it. Just leave it as the forum default font. That's another problem I'm(and other readers) having in reading this.

-Silver
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