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Old September 10th, 2008 (6:53 PM).
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and his son, Layne (Buizel).
     
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    I've written a few songs, but I've always recieved comments on how these two are the best.

    Tell me what you think and please don't copy off me...
    NOTE: These songs can be very dark so if you are offended by explicit lyrics, you may not wanna read this.

    “Pawns of War”

    Gather forces from the street
    Talk them all out of defeat
    Regular people with no life
    Forced to leave their kids and wife

    Taking sons from weeping moms
    Your Little Johnny’s now a bomb
    Unprepared for incoming shots
    They’re sent back home in a box

    [chorus]
    The army we send out the door
    They are only pawns of war
    We spare the rich, but rape the poor
    That’s what disposable men are for

    Firing at the unknown force
    Generals showing no remorse
    Venturing out can be such a dare
    Safety ain’t found anywhere

    Machine gun fire is all I hear
    Whether it be far or near
    Death by gun or bomb or knife
    Anything it takes to steal your life

    [chorus]
    [guitar solo]

    Bullets are no longer rare
    Bombs are falling through the air
    Tanks are rumbling in the street
    Bodies are falling at my feet

    Soldier don’t you say a word
    We’re moving you across the board
    Soldier boy say your goodbye’s
    The time has come for you to die

    [chorus]
    [guitar solo to the end of the song]


    “Letter from No Man’s Land”

    [starts out soft and slow]

    [echoes] Mother........

    It’s not a secret anymore
    I have rotten to the core
    No one knows, what life has stored
    What the hell is this war for?


    Insanity traps me from inside
    War’s done nothing, but kill my pride
    Where I sleep, is a crimson tide
    It makes me want to run and hide

    [mini solo; still quiet]

    The stench of death looms in the air
    This insanity’s more than I can bare
    My life now, none shall spare
    Does anyone out there even care?

    Now I lay me down to sleep
    I pray the Lord, my soul to keep
    If I shall die before I wake
    I pray the Lord, my soul to take

    [mini solo leading to the bridge]

    [bridge; dynamics get louder]

    Death happens all around me
    It does nothing, but feed my inner insanity
    I no longer want to fight
    This just doesn’t seem all right
    I might fall in the abyss
    I just can’t take much more of this
    This all makes me want to yell
    Damn it all, damn it all straight to hell!

    ...mother please...I wanna go home...help me...

    [solo]

    [loudest point in this song]

    I just gotta flee this hell
    Peace, no longer can it sell
    Please, dear God, please hear my cry
    Take me with you, to the sky!

    Mother, I love you, I hope you know
    Love you, more than I could show
    I write this letter shedding tears
    I really wish that you were here!


    Mother I am freaking out
    I finally regain my right to shout
    This war itself has gone amok
    Yet no one seems to give a...

    [song ends abruptly as an explosion sounds followed by gunfire and war sound effects]
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    Old September 11th, 2008 (7:50 AM).
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    I rawr youu!!
       
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      Dude! Its sick!! I love letter from no mans land!! Its soo original XD
      Keep up teh good work!!
      Im looking forward to yer next one!
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      Old September 11th, 2008 (11:22 AM).
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        Canny good lyrics.
        Quite deep man.

        Id love to hear the music to these :D
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        Old September 11th, 2008 (7:16 PM).
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          ^ lol beatsprite.

          What genre does this song fall under?
          There's something about song that makes everything work.

          There are some grammatical and spelling errors, but that's not really that important.

          I might post a full review sometime.
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