The Road To Palantria Page 2

Started by Neo Pikachu September 4th, 2004 9:32 PM
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Frasier says it best

Age 32
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London, UK
Seen September 29th, 2017
Posted July 12th, 2017
11,344 posts
19.1 Years
Ooooh - suspense at the end! This has certainly been an informative chapter, with not much action - but that's still good. We can't have action all the time in fics otherwise it just gets really boring. It's also nice how we see the story from another point of view that is. Many people when faced that amount of dialouge would have literally left it at the point where there was little description (when talking to the harpies that is), and have just wrote: "???" said, "???" said blah blah blah. Instead, you spiced it up a bit with some more background information. Well done.

The only thing I didn't really like in this chapter was the flying scene. Surely Chris would have been more than happy and at least in awe that he was flying. He's like the only person in the world that can fly, and he's just treating it like it's a walk in the park. If it was me flying, I'd be shouting "I CAN FLY!!!" all the time, and never really get tired of it. His reaction seemed kinda vague to be honest.

Well, another good chapter - if not the liveliest - in this very good fanfiction. ^_^
Age 38
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Seen October 15th, 2004
Posted October 8th, 2004
85 posts
18.7 Years
incredible. that's basically the only word i can describe your work. your descriptions are beautifully painted in my mind. it feels like i am there as i read.

the only thing i was hoping for was maybe some shifts in the story. say right before something exciting is about to happen to Chris, the story shifts over to Kenneth or Eric, and then shifts back accordingly.

please keep up the great work. you def put a lot into this, and it shows. =D
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