Pokemon The Elite Journey

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Pokemon The Elite Journey

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This is the begining of a journey for one kid, Shivi, and his pokemon. Trying to make his way through the Hoenn Region, while making new rivals, friends, and struggles along the way. Shivi's dream is to be the very best and make his family proud, but he will soon realize that, it isn't about being THE best, but being YOUR best.

Rated: PG

Book One Chapters:
Chapter One: Stop Lagging, and Get Going!
Chapter Two:Wash it All Off, With a Water Gun!
Chapter Three: Let The Journey Begin!


Prologue:

The sky was bright that early morning and nothing could be more perfect than today, to get your very first pokemon and begin your journey as a Pokemon Trainer. Well, except for the case of sleeping in too late!

“SHIVI!!! Get up, if you are any second later than you are now, I swear you’ll be going no where!” That was the cry of a worried mother. Sharon, everyone knew her as a Top Pokemon Coordinator; Champion of the Johto and Hoenn Grand Festivals. She had long, silky, dark chocolate hair, her eyes glistened like honey when the sun struck her well balanced face. She wasn’t the tallest of all ladies, but she was very intelligent and dressed gorgeously in her own style. Today, on the fourth of a lovely Spring month, May, Sharon was found wearing a natural white top and loose fitted house jeans. Her hair was loose and tame as a cat.

As for Shivi, he was a pretty tall kid, had straight hair like a pin, and he couldn’t help but stop smiling from time to time. Don’t even get him to laugh, he just won’t quit! Anyway, Shivi was now the age of ten, his birthday was yesterday, and though it was a great day for him, he would soon find out that today would be the start of his fanatical adventure.
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Chapter One: Stop Lagging, and Get Going!
Now that Shivi was all up and ready, and his mother, now fully calm and relaxed, Shivi couldn’t help but fantasize about getting his very first pokemon. “Oh mom! I just can’t wait anymore, the day has finally come where I can choose my very first and official pokemon. Unlike, those rentals back at the Pokemon Trainer’s School in Rustboro City.”

“That may be all fine and dandy, but have you decided on which pokemon you are going to choose as yet? I mean you don’t want to keep the professor waiting all day with you having a hard time to make up your mind you know?” Sharon stated, as she picked up Shivi’s breakfast dishes and placed them in the sink.

“Oh yeah, um, I decided that I’ll go in with Treecko, because not only is it cool looking, but is fast, and has a huge advantage on lots of gyms out there!” While saying that in a grateful tone, Shivi slid on over to the fireplace and took a glimpse at all of his mom’s trophies and ribbons. “Mom, you are really lucky to be known as such an amazing coordinator, and Dad being a gym leader back in the Kanto region. Oh, and Shinell, my annoying and pesky little sister, well, actually she hasn’t achieved anything yet…But, you have fun with her mom! Shivi quickly ran towards the door, slipped on his shoes and picked up his things, “Bye Mom! I’ll miss you, but don’t worry I’ll be perfectly fine!” Shivi just then, grasped the silver door handle and bolted his way through the door.

Meanwhile, Sharon picked herself up from leaning on the black, granite countertop, and walked her way to the door. “Oh Shivi, you may have gotten through basic teaching at school, but you have so much more to learn.” Unexpectedly, a large, red, brisk pokemon flew its way right next to Sharon. “Why hello Charizard, you must be pretty hungry this morning, along with all the other pokemon, lets get something fixed up for all of you.



“Charrr…zaaaard!” Charizard roared, spreading his large red and blue wings and swiftly flew its way over to the next side of the house. Sharon and Charizard go a long way back, since Sharon herself began on her pokemon journey back in the Kanto Region, making both their way to the top of the Contest Hall after a long and challenging adventure. Together, those two seemed invincible, and when seen in action, it could be breath taking. Today though, these two rest peacefully at home in Littleroot Town, taking care of the house and the other many pokemon out in the backyard. Oh yes, and it is very safe to assume that these many pokemon not only belong to Sharon, but to her husband, Brian as well.


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On the other hand, making his way along the path of Littleroot Town, Shivi quickly found himself at the front door of Professor Birch’s Laboratory. As he put his hands on the door, he couldn’t help but stop and think, WOW, this really is the day, where I finally get to start my very own journey. Oh, I promise you Mom and Dad, I’m going to make you proud! Little did he know, what was behind that door, was something so unexpected, it could change the way his journey was ever thought out to be!

Notice: If you want, Chapter II will come soon, but first I want to know if it is worthy enough to continue...

Haza

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Not trying to be a critic but is this in Hoenn or Sinnoh? Littleroot and Professor Rowan?

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Not trying to be a critic but is this in Hoenn or Sinnoh? Littleroot and Professor Rowan?
Professor Rowan? What are ya talking about??? lol, thanks I fixed that mistake...and I also want you all to know Chapter Two is pretty long!!! well not pretty long, really long...so before I post it up I want to make sure it doesn't have too much mistakes...I'm still open for more feedback...I know there are many FanFiction PC Members out there...

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I liked it.
You're quite good when it comes to description and telling the story well, but I think all of that is going to waste.
It is waaay too short to leave a mark on any reader, if it wasn't for you asking me... I never would have read this, simply because it's so short.
Sit yourself down and write, write, write. Don't stop until you've got at least a few pages sitting in front of you.
That's when you can say; "This is a really good chapter."

What I do to write more is; first I'll write up a few dot points on what I want in that chapter and, once I've got about 7 or 8 of them I'll start writing and delete them as I write each bit. I also try to write at least 4 pages for each chapter and, about, 6 at the most.

Overall, it's a great start to a story and I think the only thing you need to work on is length.
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Alright thanks Kev XY, well I took your advice and chapter two is quite lengthy, but first I want to give others the time to read my first chapter and hear what they have to say about it, and I am also proofreading the 2nd chapter before posting it up...but it is long, and you'll see it sometime later today!

EDIT: By the way, just for a little hint, I posted up the title of Chapter Two!!!

Here it is Chapt. Two...

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Chapter Two: Wash It All Off, With a Water Gun!



Everything was just all wrong! Two tall and lengthy people stood right in the center of the large and messy room. One was a male with dirty blonde hair that seemed ruffled up a bit wearing this black straight jacket, and his eyes glistened so bright, sending shivers down Shivi’s back. His smirk made him look fearful, but then there was the girl who stood right beside him. She too was quite tall, her hair long, curly, and brown. Her lips perfect like nothing ever seen before, her posture so steady and proper. She too was wearing black clothing except a skirt was dressed upon herself.

“Who are you?” sneered the man, who suddenly turned serious all of a sudden, with his evil smirk wiped off.

“Whatever, it doesn’t matter, lets just get out of here!” The girl, seemed impatient, and was jerking at the guy. Both seemed like crooks to Shivi and he wasn’t about to let them get away.

“I may not know who you are, but there is no way you’re leaving here without an explanation!” Shivi, looked beyond the two and saw Professor Birch, fallen on the floor, ruffled and tired as it seemed. Along was another man, his hair as white as snow, and his face aged, but still he looked like he had energy stored within him even if he was old. “Uh, Professor Birch, what happened!?”

Just then, the two criminals urgently rushed towards the door, shoving Shivi off to the side of the floor and making their grand escape. “NO! I let them get away!” Shivi quietly said sadly as he skedaddled his way up and ran over to the two men on the floor.

“Oh boy, thank you for helping us, but sadly those two crooks you saw was able to get away with the three Hoenn starters, which of one of those were supposed to be yours,” Professor Birch dropped his head down, feeling ashamed for allowing this to happen.

“No! How could this be? Now I’ll never be able to get my first pokemon!” Shivi grew frantic, not knowing what to do, he quickly dropped in a nearby chair.

The other old professor, walked along to the door and suddenly sighed, “Well, Professor Birch, looks like they are long gone, and I don’t think we will be able to catch them at all.”

“I guess you’re right Professor Oak,” Birch couldn’t help but feel disappointed, seeing as it was his responsibility to keep a hold of those three pokemon for all beginner trainers.

“Professor Oak? Are you really THE Professor Oak?” Shivi couldn’t believe his ears.

“Why yes, yes I am. Why do you ask?”

“I’m Shivi! The son of Sharon and Brian. Do you remember them? My mom is a famous top coordinator, and my dad is a gym leader back in the Kanto Region. You’ve got to remember me, don’t you?” Shivi was astounded by this, he couldn’t believe he was meeting this man of pure genius.

“Of course I remember you, well at least I do now! Ha, I knew your face looked similar, you have the appearance of your dad quite a bit. I’m very sorry to hear that you won’t be getting your first pokemon anymore,” Professor Oak squabbled as he then too took a seat.

“I truly do apologize about this Shivi, but you might just have to go off on your own, to catch you own pokemon by yourself. I really do apologize, but if you now will excuse me, I guess the Professor and I should get cleaning with the lab, wouldn’t you agree Professor Oak?” Birch then began to pick up a few loose papers around the room.

“Oh yes lets get to doing that right away!” Oak quickly pranced up and began to help.

Shivi felt so discontented at the moment, he couldn’t believe how this day had turned out to be. “Well okay then, I guess I better get going then, I hope you two can handle this mess on your own,” Shivi said as he was about to walk out the door, empty handed.

“Oh have no fear, the assistants will help out, once we get in touch with them. Good Luck my boy,” Professor Birch said with a slight smile.


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As Shivi walked off to Route 101, he couldn’t help but worry about what he was going to do now. He had nothing but a supply of food, a change of clothes, a map, and just a few other necessities his mother packed for him.

“Can this day get any worse?” Shivi shouted as he kicked off a stone into the bushes. Just then, no second later the bushes began to shuffle and a strong spray of water blasted off to Shivi’s spot.

“NO!” Shivi shouted as he suddenly tripped from all the pressure, landed in the dirt, and not with just being soaking wet, he was now filthy with dirt all around him.



“Squirtle-Squirt!” It was a little turtle-like pokemon, the shell an orange-brown color with a great shine to it. The skin of the little pokemon looked even healthier, but the face of the pokemon looked angry, and Shivi noticed a little bump on the poor pokemon’s forehead.

“It’s a Squirtle! But, what would you be doing around these areas? Oh, and I’m really sorry about the bruise you got, I honestly didn’t mean to kick that rock at you!” Shivi pleaded, hoping he wasn’t going to get washed down once more. “I’m really sorry, but you know what? You’re really rare around these parts, and I’m going to catch you! Besides, I don‘t have any pokemon as a starter, so you‘ll be just perfect!” Shivi quickly threw off his jacket and started running towards the little Squirtle.

Just as Shivi was about to grab the pokemon, a thick net flew over and got a hold of the Squirtle and Shivi too.

“Yes! Another one for the capture, the boss is going to be pleasantly pleased with this!” It was the same woman from before, but this time she seemed more confident and free of any thing else.

“Yeah, but I don’t think he would want a kid with any of the pokemon either!” The guy from before too was here, but he looked unpleased, as he saw Shivi caught in the net with the Squirtle.

“NO! It’s that same pest from before. What are you doing here kid?” squealed the girl with her loud yet bold and confident voice.

“Listen here you two! I want to get out of this net right now! And those pokemon you stole from before, you better return ‘em right away as well! One of them belong to me seeing as this is my start as a pokemon trainer. Now who are you and why are you stealing all these pokemon?" Shivi grew tired of his day spoiling every minute and wanted answers.

“Idiot! It’s not stealing if the pokemon don’t have an official owner! But any who, I am Crystal!”

“And I am Cole”

“And together we are the Deviant Twins! Here to take you out and bring the gift of all, to the Man of all!”

“Right, well you’re not taking me out anywhere, and as for your whole intro, it’s kind of plain, boring, and a waste of my time,” Shivi wasn’t going to let these two trample on him again, he immediately turned to the squirtle for help, “listen here Squirtle, I want to get out of here as much as you do, but I’m going to need your help. Do you think you can bite through this net?”

“Squirtle-squirt!” the little turtle then began to gnaw at the net, easily cutting the binding ropes and freeing both prisoners.

“Ew, how is this happening?” Crystal was so annoyed at the moment. “Fine, you want to play it like that, then let it be!” Crystal quickly pulled out her very own poke ball and urgently called out her own pokemon, “Go! Zangoose! Use Crush Claw!” Crystal began to laugh, there is no way a little Squirtle like that can compete with something this good.

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“Hey, sis don’t suck out all the fun from this! Go, Vigoroth! Use Slash and tear them apart!”

“Squirtle, quick do something! Use water gun like you did before!” Shivi couldn’t help but think of something fast, so he picked up the bitten net and flung it towards the two rampaging pokemon, hoping it would get the caught, but they both easily shredded it apart.

“Squirtle! RUN!” As Shivi said that, Squirtle took action, withdrawing in his shell and letting loose a free spiraling water gun attack. “Awesome, that’s so cool!” Shivi was in aw, except he grew a bit frantic when he noticed that the other two pokemon dodged the attack and both slashed Squirtle to the ground.

“Squiiiiiiiiiiirtle!” the poor little guy was being beaten and Shivi couldn’t help but feel responsible. Like always he never had the courage to speak up and do something, but now he had to stop this, so Shivi picked himself up, and ran toward Squirtle grabbing him up, while taking a big beating from the two pokemon too.

“Aw, look who’s trying to be a hero! I just love it when the bad guys win!” Crystal laughed.

“Oh yes, nothing could be better than this!” Cole sneered as he walked closer to where the pokemon were.

Shivi was getting tired and severely bruised, but all he could think of was rolling out of the fight, and getting Squirtle somewhere safe. “I have to get up! Squirtle, please use Water Gun, once more!: Shivi snapped, he didn’t know what was going to happen if he allowed this to continue.

“Squirtle-Squirtle! Squiiirtle!” Just then, out of no where, Squirtle found the strength within to bring up a large blast of water from its small mouth. Nothing was bringing it down now. Zangoose and Vigoroth couldn’t handle that much power and was easily shoved off to the front of Crystal and Cole.

“Get up you two, there is no way something as small as that is going to show you two off! Get up right now!” Crystal shouted, but it was no use, the two pokemon were down and out.

“Ah! Whatever Crystal, we got what we came for, lets just get out of here! “

“Uh, fine! But listen here kid, don’t think this is the last time you’ll be seeing us! And trust me, we’ll get a hold of that Squirtle too! Ha”

“I dare you! The next time I see you two, you’ll be getting a large smack in the face, because there is no way I’m letting you all trample on me or these pokemon like that ever again!” Shivi grew the confidence he needed to stand up to these two fiends, the question was, will he have it again when it was really needed?

“Oh sure!” The two twins ran off in the bushes after returning their pokemon back in their poke balls, laughing along the way, but soon gone like the wind.


“Squirtle lets get you to the Professors, they’ll help you heal up after all that damage,” Shivi insisted as he picked up the turtle pokemon and ran his way back to Littleroot Town, trying to ignore the pain he felt all around him.


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“What happened boy?” Professor Birch was bestowed upon how badly damaged Squirtle was, much less for Shivi himself.

“It was those two crooks from before, I bumped into them when trying to catch this Squirtle, but instead they caught us, and it went into a world war by then. Sadly, they got away and I wasn’t able to obtain the pokemon they stole either,” Shivi took in a deep breath and rested his head on the cool, wooden desk that rested in front of him.

“Well my boy, I want to thank you, because if you hadn’t tried to stop them, then they might have gotten away with my little squirtle as well.

“Your squirtle? What does that mean Professor Oak?” Shivi was now tired, hurt, and confused.

“Well, you see I brought this pokemon from the Kanto region with me, along with two others, a Charmander and a Bulbasaur, the three of them managed to escape before those two criminals were able to catch them, like they did with Torchic, Treecko, and Mudkip,” Prof. Oak took in a breath, “the other two pokemon returned not too long ago, and I guess you managed to find Squirtle along your way, am I right?”

“Yes that is correct, and Torchic and Mudkip, those are the other two Hoenn starters, am I right?” Shivi asked, as he began to feel much better resting rather than getting beaten up so vaguely.

“You are correct as well, by the way did you manage to get the name of those two villains? I want to make sure and get them reported,” Prof. Birch responded.

“They said they were Crystal and Cole, the Deviant Twins. They also had this terrible motto, but anyway, will Squirtle be alright?” Shivi asked immediately after.

“Oh yes, he’ll be just fine, after a good night’s rest Squirtle will be hyped up and ready to get going, no doubt,” Prof. Oak said, as he let loose a pleasant smile. “Shivi, I would like to thank you again, and I would like to know, do you think you will be able to return here again tomorrow? I would like to give you something that will be quite useful in your long journey ahead.”

“Oh yes, certainly, I’ll just go home and rest there for the night. I don’t think it’ll be to safe for me to be out there in the wild without any pokemon to protect me!” Shivi smiled, as he let loose a little giggle.

“That sounds like a good idea to me,” Prof. Birch smirked, “Tell your mother hello for me while you’re at it as well, okay boy?”

“Definitely, and I’ll make sure to tell her all about how I got to meet the amazing Prof. Oak as well, she is sure to be surprised by that! It‘s probably been a long time since she met up with you Prof. Oak,” At that very moment, Shivi took one last glance at Squirtle while it rested and said his goodbye to the two men, as he walked out of the building and made his way back home.

Notice: Chapter Three Will Come Be Coming Soon!

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It was very good...chapter one was a little shrt but u improved on chapter 2! :D
If I had to rate it from a scale 1 to 10 I give it a 9! :D

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Hey thanks Pokelover10! I'm still working on chapter three making it longer and trying to work out the things that need improvements, but if you look on my original post you'll see the Chapter Three title revealed!

Either by tonight or tomorrow morning Chapter Three shall be posted up for all of you to read. I'm hoping for more feedback from people, since over 100 of you all viewed this...C'mon, when you all leave comments or such it improves my writing!...

EDIT: Alright here you go everyone, The full layout of Chapter Three...ENJOY! As I start cooking up something for Chpt. Four...

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Chapter Three: Let The Journey Begin!


The next morning was like any other, except on this particular day, Shivi had managed to rise up before the sun and get his things ready for his official start on his journey. After reaching home yesterday evening and explaining everything to his mother, Shivi had grown so tired, that he was knocked out for the night and never even knew it. Today though, he was ready for anything, he had his clothes ready and set, his hair free as a bird’s wings, and as black as smoke could get. His eyes filled with excitement, his smile reaching ear to ear. He had on a simple shirt with a blue and black summer jacket over it. He also had on a pair of semi-loose fitted jeans and blue, white, and black sneakers. He had his watch set and ready to go, and his belly filled by his mom’s great early breakfast.

“Alright, world watch out, because I’m coming for you, with nothing to stand in my way!” Shivi was pumped and ready.

“Son, this time I want you to be careful, okay?” Sharon gestured, as she gave her son a tight hug, and finally let him go out on his own.

“Don’t worry Mom, I’ll be fine. Take care of Shinell Mom, and make sure she tries to keep up with my record I had at the Pokemon School,” Shivi laughed, as he eagerly ran out the house.


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Today was going to be his day, nothing was going to ruin it, especially not that Crystal and Cole from before. Shivi wasn’t even too sure that he might ever meet up with them again. "Hah, if I ever do, I’ll show them who’s boss! Shivi quietly said to himself. Wow, this lab never seems to be far away at all, I guess I’m always in a rush," Shivi let loose a little giggle as he came closer to the door.

“Good Morning everyone!” Shivi said as he ran his way over to Prof. Oak and Birch at the other side of the lab.

“Oh, well you’re here very early, aren’t you young lad?” Oak said as he was seen in his same white coat, light blue shirt, and brown pants. Today he didn’t look as messy and was seen with a bright smile on his face.

“Ah, you’ve made it, great! Now we can really set you off on your journey. we’ve got everything right here for you my boy,” Birch too, was in a white coat, but he wore short, brown pants and hiking boots.

“Yep, I made sure to get here as early as I can and make a fresh start on my journey. May I ask, what are all these things you talk about?” Shivi inquired as he grew even more excited by the very second.

“Oh yes, as you can see here on the desk, we have six poke balls for yourself, along with this, a Pokedex,” Prof. Oak explained, handing the items over to Shivi.

“Thank you, I really appreciate this. I know what the poke balls are for, but what about this?” Shivi asked, as he placed the poke balls in his bag.
Prof. Birch tried to explain everything possible about the Pokedex and how it was used to get all sorts of information on pokemon around the world. It was truly a necessity to have, and Shivi was one of the few lucky enough to have it in his possession.

“Thank you, Thank you so much. But where’s the Squirtle from yesterday? You said he would be all better by morning, am I right?”

Professor Oak began to chuckle, “Oh yes, I completely forgot, in one of those poke balls, lies something within, maybe you should check it out!”

“Um, okay then,” Shivi quickly replied. While opening each of the poke
balls, he finally got something out of it on his fifth try.

“Squirtle, Squirtle!” The little pokemon did look a lot better, with all the bruises and bumps gone, and his shine back on and his little young face bright as the early day’s sun.

“Oh wow! Does this mean? Um, are you saying that? Is this really happening?” Shivi’s eyes began to tear up.

“Yes my boy, last night the Prof. Birch and I decided on giving Squirtle to you, the two of you seemed to share something rich and joyous. Please, I hope this will make up for missing out on your opportunity at getting one of the three Hoenn starters, Treecko, Torchic, and Mudkip,” Prof. Oak said as he lifted up the young turtle, “You may or may not know this, but Squirtle is still very young, and having the privilege of growing with you, will create a strong bond between the both of you.”

“Oh yes, there is no doubt about it, I worried about Squirtle so much last night, this is just so, oh thank you! Thank you both Professors,” Shivi joyfully took Squirtle out of the Professor’s hand and asked calmly, “Squirtle, do you want to go on this long journey with me?”

As squirtle, let loose a small smile, he couldn’t help but jump up and shout, “Squirtle, Squirtle-Squirt!”

“Seems to me Squirtle couldn’t be any happier, I congratulate you Shivi, on your first step on beginning your journey,” Professor Birch said, as the two men, Shivi, and Squirtle walked their way out of the lab.

“Well, seems like I made it just in time to see my boy go,” Sharon unexpectedly said, meeting up with the three guys as they just exited the room. “Oh wow, Professor Oak, it really is you! It’s been so long!”

“Mom! Look, I got my first pokemon! Squirtle!” Shivi said, as he picked Squirtle up from the ground.

“I see, Squirtle, you know of course, that that was the same pokemon your father started off with as well, way back in the Kanto too you know,” Sharon replied as she rubbed her son’s head.

“Well that’s right! Your father did choose a Squirtle as his very pokemon, you know my boy, I can see a lot of bright things in your future,” Oak said as he greeted Sharon after years of not seeing one another.

“Well, that makes me proud, but if you all don’t mind, I’m ready to go off on my own with Squirtle, and be the best trainer there can be!” Shivi calmly shouted, as he waved everyone goodbye.
“Good Luck out there young lad,” Oak shouted back at the boy who was now quickly running at the start of his journey.
“Try your best, and never look back!” Birch yelled forward, smiling as he sees another new trainer start their journey.
“And be careful! And I love you!” Sharon screamed as her eyes began to water.


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This was the start, of not only a new beginning, but the start of a new friendship as well. So much is left ahead of Shivi and Squirtle, so much more to learn, and so much more troubles to face. Now is the start of something new, with the day just beginning, so much has happened already.

“Alright Squirtle, together you and I are going to make it to the Hoenn League and win it all! sound good to you pal? Shivi asked as he smiled at the little squirtle resting atop his head.

“Squirtle!” he cheered, waving his little blue hands a bit, trying to prevent himself from falling off.

“That’s the spirit, but first we’ve got to get some experience and catch new friends as well! So, the question is, where do we start?” Shivi pondered for a bit, then quickly took a seat on a large boulder he saw resting at the edge of a large umbrella-like tree.

“Squirtle-squirt?” Squirtle had seemed to sense something was near, and in the blink of an eye became on guard.

“What’s wrong Squirtle? Is there...” Shivi was about to ask Squirtle, as he suddenly was bombarded by a stomp on the face, “Uh! What was that?” Shivi soon looked up to see what had abruptly jumped on his face out of no where. “No way! It’s a Zigzagoon! Squirtle this could be our first capture, so lets make ourselves look good, alright?” Shivi soon got into a strong standing position with Squirtle right in front of him.



The little squirtle wasn’t backing out of this one, just like his trainer, he too was pumped and ready to go, “Squirtle!”

The overactive and hyped up Zigzagoon, who had many stripes on it, with spikes up light and dark brown fur, seemed anxious and wasn’t stopping for nothing, because it suddenly came charging at squirtle with a full on head butt.

“Alright Squirtle, dodge it quick! And go in with a Tackle!” Shivi commanded.

Squirtle wasted not a single second, it pushed off its tiny blue legs and made its way in the air, dodging the head butt from the Zigzagoon, who was left confused.

“Zig-Zagoon?”

“Squiiirtle!” out of nowhere, Zigzagoon was smashed brutally by Squirtle’s quick counter attack.

Still not giving up the Zigzagoon picked itself up and came charging again at Squirtle.

“Okay, this time slow it down with a Water Gun, just like you did before with that Zangoose and Vigoroth!” Shivi yelled, the heat of the battle was getting to him, as he noticed a slight bit of sweat running down his face.
“Squirtle, squirt!” just as he was told, just so he did, but this time Zigzagoon had the advantage, as it dodged all the water attacks running in a zig zag pattern.

“Uh, how?” Shivi questioned.

“Zig-Zagoon!” just then, Zigzagoon smashed into Squirtle’s shell and sent him crashing towards the previous boulder Shivi had recently been sitting upon.

“No! Squirtle are you alright?” Shivi asked as he ran his way over to where Squirtle laid.

“Zig-Zagoon!” Zigzagoon, feeling like he just won, eagerly ran off into the thick, dark, green forest.

“Squirtle, you better get some rest in your poke ball. When we get to the next closest town, I’ll make sure and take you to the Pokemon Center.

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As the night came closer and Shivi had seen no close city near by he decided to set up camp and camp out for the night.

“Alright Squirtle, come on out!” Shivi picked out his poke ball and called his trusty new friend out and about.

“Squirtle, Squirtle!” squealed the young Squirtle as he comforted himself near the warm fire.

“It’s the wind that’s making it a bit chilly tonight, no worries though, considering how much ground we covered today we should arrive in Odale Town soon,” Shivi said, reassuring his pokemon.

“ Squirtle?”

“There’s a town nearby, I checked the map earlier today, it’s called Odale Town, not much is there besides a few houses and so, but the good news is that there is a Pokemon Center there, where we can get you back to full health. Also, there is a Pokemon Market where I can stock up on some more supplies for us,” Shivi answered, smiling with his eyes twinkling in the light created by the warm fire.

“Squirtle! Squirtle-Squirt,” overjoyed of the good news, Squirtle leaped into Shivi’s lap, resting his little body.

“Oh Squirtle, I’m really glad I bumped into you the other day, if not I might not be here right now with you by my side,” Shivi remained quiet as he peeked over the little brown shell, “Ha Ha, looks like you are really tired my friend. You better get some good rest, we’ve got a long new day ahead of us tomorrow,” Shivi whispered to himself.

.........


The rest of the night remained a bit cool with the Spring breeze flowing through the dark moon-lit forest of Route 101. Shivi and Squirtle both rested in a neat blue and black sleeping back, with the debris of the fire traveling its way through the fresh outside air. “Until tomorrow Squirtle,” Shivi yawned, his eyes slowly shutting.

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Age 27
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New York City
Seen March 19th, 2023
Posted November 7th, 2022
11,676 posts
14.7 Years
Man.... That was not good...... IT WAS GREAT!!!!!! An Epic piece of work, flash! I loved your description of the characters, the plot so far is amazing, and... well... IT WAS AWESOME! No really, I congratulate you on a good piece of work. Keep working on the rest!
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Age 29
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Seen March 10th, 2023
Posted August 22nd, 2022
3,482 posts
15 Years
Like the sprites. Anyway, good so far. Some minor typing errors, like unnecessary commars,
(such as “Oh, well you’re here very early, aren’t you young lad?” Oak, was seen in his same white coat...)

A few spelling errors, due to a bit of rushing ,
(like “Zig-Zagoon!” just then, Zigzagoon smashed into Squirtle’s shell and sent hi crashing towards the previous boulder)

But all in all, this is great so far! I'll keep reading!


Temmie vibrates intensely.

awwAwa cute!! (pets u)

OMG!! humans TOO CUTE (dies)

can't blame a BARK for tryin'...

RATED TEM OUTTA TEM.