CONSOLE WARS EPISODE 1: THE CONSOLE MENACES

Started by dumbpikAchu March 13th, 2009 7:46 AM
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dumbpikAchu

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Posted July 8th, 2011
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CHARACTERS

A man

Bally

...RCA

Phillips

...Nintendo

Stay Tuned For a hillarious story about consoles!
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dumbpikAchu

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Making sure that Charizard is still in my butt
Seen December 30th, 2017
Posted July 8th, 2011
222 posts
14.6 Years
New Title: CONSOLE WARS EPISODE 1: THE CONSOLE MENACE

Rated PG.

CHARACTERS

A man

Bally

Phillips

...Nintendo

...Sega

The rest are just their logos.

Stay Tuned For a hillarious story about consoles!
Sorry about the quoting, didn't mean to.. but oh well. Live and learn, I guess.

PART 1
Once upon a time, A Man, with a beard, and a moustache, and no hair woke up. He looked at the TV in his room and thought about playing chess on it somehow. That idea was what started consoles. After he had made a prototype, he went to Bally, and asked him if he wanted to help him.

"No, I'll have to kick you out." So while the man was flying in the air, he saw the RCA building and swooped down so he could hit it. When he got in, he asked RCA the same question.

"No, that's such a stupid idea you'll have to go out the airlock." so the man went out the airlock, and smashed into the Phillips building.

"Holy smokes!" The man asked Phillips the same question, and showed him the rusty Brown Box.

"Well, I suppose so, but I will have to make it under the name of Magnavox, for various reasons. You don't want to know." So after it was finished, They put the life into the Magnavox Oddessey. So the Oddessey quietly went out the door, and got it's fanbase set up.
But right before that, there were enemies. But the Oddessey looked them in the eye, and they fell back. Nintendo's attempt to make a racing game and Atari Pong arose and tried to defeat the evil, but unsuccesfully.So the winner was the Oddessey.

Part 2 coming soon!
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You really shouldn't sacrifice quality for humor. You shouldn't list your characters the way that you did in the first post, but introduce them in the story. You should describe more than what you did, because the chapter is confusing and unable to be followed.

I suggest that you take more time on writing your chapters and actually listen to the advice given to you.

Closed for not meeting the standards of OW.