The Galaxian Adventures: The Koros Saga

Started by The Confuzzler March 14th, 2009 8:32 AM
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New story, and it's gonna be great!

Genre(s): OT, adventure, mystery, war

Plot: When a young boy named Teko finds that more planets than just one exists in his solar system, he wants to find out what kind of Pokemon League they had set up, and what kind of Pokemon awaits him.

But as an evil, darker than any other arises, Teko, his Pokemon and his friends, are faced with a great catastrophe.

An adventure that spans childhood,manhood and beyond, an adventure unlike any other, this is, The Galaxian Adventures.

Characters: Teko-a young boy who's adventure begins when he finds of the new adventures awaiting beyond the stars, he knows catastrophe long before he knows any sign of winning.

Amara: a girl around Teko's age, a Pokemon expert, and always reminds Teko when he's acting dumb, seems to know a few mysteries of the Galaxies.

Mekora: Teko's best friend, joins Teko on the epic journey. Not knowing where he truly hails from, he wants to find out why his father suddenly disappeared.

Chapter list:
Prologue

Okay so without further ado, the Prolouge to the epic journey!

Prologue

As Teko sat in front of the TV, he stroked his spiky black hair, the greasy hair gel he had used rubbing off onto his fingers. He let out a sigh, before flicking through a few channels. PokeDance, blegh. Why was there nothing ever on? Teko turned around, to see his mum cooking dinner. Teko grinned, he could smell the delicious steak, so appetising. This is where Teko made a tiny mistake, having the TV up too loud. Because, you see, at that moment, an announcer's voice hollered through the cosy living room.

"BREAKING NEWS!"the announcer well..um.. announced. Teko jumped up abruptly, while his mother spilled the food. Teko smiled, trying to make her forget about what had happened. The announcer, with his rolled back blond hair and his goofy smile, began talking again. "Scientests have discovered new planets, and new galaxies, all Pokemon trainers MUST visit!"he shouted.

Teko grinned. He was starting his adventure the next day, his tenth birthday. His mum nodded, it seemed although she had been reasurring herself that Teko would be a good trainer. Teko jumped up, raising his fist in the air. Teko ran over to his mum, smiling angelically.

"Mummy, can i please get a Pokemon tomorrow?"he asked, exactly like a baby. His mother laughed,thinking over it a few times. She didn't want to let Teko go, her brown hair got in her face without her realizing it. She wanted what was best for Teko, and it was his dream to be a Pokemon master. Finaly, she made up her mind.

"Teko.. no way young man"she said. Teko was shocked, she refused. Teko stormed upstairs, furious with his mother.

Later that evening..

Teko could not sleep. The house was quiet, as Teko's mother had fell asleep. Teko shoved on his red shirt, his blue jeans and his black shoes, before writing a note to tell his mum where he had went. He crawled out the window, into the night. Teko thought for a moment. The launch site was not too far from his town - Twinleaf town. - It was just at Jublife Cit. Teko began to try find a camp site, so the next day, he coukd egt his Pokemon, and start his epic adventure.
Clickeh, or feel teh paaaaaain!

Neutrino

The Jelly-Stuff of legend...

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Well, i personally thought this story was good! If not, slightly rushed, okay, it was quite a bit rushed, the prospect of suddenly, a news flash appears and says there are planets trianers must go and visit, he just asks randomly, and she says no. It was a bit rushed, try and go into more detail ;)

Neutrino

The Jelly-Stuff of legend...

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Not to worry! I am rubbish at drawing new pokemon! I'm quite a whizz at copying them from pictures though. Anywhoo, so long as the chapters are a TEENSY bit longer and more descriptive, and they keep on hooking readers like a maggot on a fishing rod, i'm happy! ;)
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The beginning.. of a dream.

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Chapter 1 An.. odd battle and a shocking discovery!

Coughing, Teko arose, the morning's golden sun greeting him. It took him a few moments to figure out where he was, and what he had been planning to do. Teko looked through his backpack, a few clothes here and there, a hat, ah! His hair gel and comb! Teko grabbed the comb, splattered a bit of the hair gel over it, and began combing it through his black haired mess. Teko got changed into the clothes he'd been wearing yesterday, and continued on. Teko folded up the tent, and shoved it in his backpack. Teko thought. If he was going to start his journey, he'd need a Pokemon, so he'd have to look carefully.

Teko walked, groaning as he passed various houses. You couldn't really tell they were different, they looked the same. He suddenly realised, the ship launch was in three days! Teko launched towards the nearest alleyway, trying to find anywhere that might be of use to him. As he wandered about, he tried to keep his bearings. It was hard task, especially without a map. Teko finally caught site of a a few Pokemon, cradling in amongst each other.

A few Meowth sacttered across the floor, as Teko realised sopmething wasn't right. Why were these Pokemon just lying down? They were still as those statues at the museum, but they just jumped back life. Very odd. Teko walked through, before a certain Pokemon caught his eye. A small Shinx playfully clawed at the walls, as Teko grabbed the one pokeball he had from his backpack.

The Shinx noticed Teko though, and shot forward, trying to knock him over. Teko jumped, but went slightly off balance, crashing to the ground. The Shinx laughed, using leer. Now, usually this would lower a Pokemon's defece, but because Teko was a human, this scared the young boy. Shinx took the chance to tackle him again, sending teko to the ground.

Teko jumped up, and flung the pokeball, but it missed Shinx completely. "Why wont you be caught!!"Teko shouted, grabbing the pokeball, and flinging it through the air.

One..

Two..

Three..
*click*

Teko jumped up in the air, and began dancing like an Ambipom. He grabbed the pokeball, and raised it up to the air. He then began walking out the alleyway, when he noticed to people whispering to each other.

*whisper"yeah.. we'll disrupt the launch.."*whisper the smallest one whispered.

"Yeah..the boss will love us"the other one replied, keeping his voice down. The two people walked away, as Teko was schocked. Were they disrupting a very expensive project? And for what purpose.

Teko, being the wannabe hero his is, followed them; He followed them stealthily, hiding behind the walls, and watching. Then, the two men crept towards the bank, shouting:

"Hands in the air, this is a hold up!"Teko was shocked. He had to help the people in that bank...

Neutrino

The Jelly-Stuff of legend...

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Hiya! ^^ I just read this chapter. It was a very interesting start, although I must admit I had small troubles remembering where he was, then I realised he had escapaed-ed. anywhoo, not too many problems, very scarce rather, although there were a few I stumbled upon:

Teko, being the 'wannabe hero' he is, followed the men, stealthily hiding behind the walls, watching, as the men began walking to a bank, and shouting
There seems 2 B too mant commas in here. try something like this:

'Teko, being the wannabe hero his is, followed them; He followed them stealthily, hiding behind the walls, and watching. Then, the two men crept towards the bank, shouting'

And something along those lines. Of course, that's just a suggestion, I mean, you don't have to use it, but something similar, if you folow my meaning. And there was another bit, which I didn't quite understand:

"Hands in the sir, this is a hold up!"
Hands in the sir?

apart from the other bit, and this... strange mis-typo, this story is really getting intruiging, and i'll be awaiting the next chapter! ;)
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Okay.. chapter 2!

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Chapter 2 Shinx's Debut!.. Kind of

As Teko crept behind the thugs, he called Shinx out of the red, circular device they call a pokeball. Shinx growled, and suddenly shot forward at Teko, and pounced at him. Teko slowly put Shinx down, it obviously was still annoyed at him. but what was really bad, was that the thugs had noticed Teko, as they turned, sjirachiing.

"Pathetic, pipsqueak!"the large, round one exclaimed. the shorter, and considerably stumpier one of the two snorted, patting his friend on the back.

"chaw haw haw!"they laughed together. Teko and Shinx just stood there, mistified, as the visitors at the bank tried to hide. Slowly, Teko whispered to Shinx.

"Shinx, you think you could try for leer?"Teko asked. Shinx snarled, and not obeying his trainer, shot forward with a tackle.

"Shinx shi! (no way, freak!)"Teko shook his head, as the thieves drew out a.. pokepistol? Either way, it was a gun with a pokeball trigger.

"Now, unless you run away, this trigger is pulled"the thieves snarled. Teko stood, sweating like a pig. The large one took his finger, and pressed it down. At that moment, Teko braced himself for the worst. He covered his face with his hands, as Shinx hid behind his trainer's feet. Then the trigger was pulled and..

*squeak*

"It's a fraud! It's a fake toy gun!"Teko shouted, as all the visitors, including Teko and Shinx, fell to the ground laughing. The thieves looked at each other, before running into the yonder. Shinx just turned from Teko, still annoyed with him. the visitors all carried on, as things continued to run smoothly.

Teko returned shinx, and began running to Route 201. As he ran, he realized something, something that may, in the near future, become very grave, very grave indeed.

Shuttle launch site..

Shuttle completion, 50%

As a few scientests ran about, scoping out blueprints, and trying to find maps of the stars, the shuttle, titled 'RR6, project Star' was being built, it was an extremely busy day. Well, that's what they thought, until a group of thugs - about 10 of them - came running into the building. They dashed to the rocket, destroying the computers, and overcrowding the rocket. The scientests were helpless.

Shuttle completion.. 60%

And the one thing the scientests heard, the one name that was planning to put a halt to the shuttle launch, the evil team..

Team Black Hole.


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Chapter 2! Okay.. so.. yeah..
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Chapter 3!

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Chapter 3 Lake Verity and the journey to Sandgem Town!

As Teko yawned, he ran along. Shinx was in his pokeball, as Teko thought for a moment. He would be leaving forever, so there was one thing he wanted to do. Teko walked calmly to Verity Lake, which had quite a legend about it. in fact, that's one of the reasons Teko wants to go to space. Because, something happened years ago, in Sinnoh. Something catastrophic, and odd, a legend of sorts. Teko knew it well.

One day in Sinnoh, the evil Team Galactic threatened to destroy the world. The three legendary pixies of the lakes, Mespirit of Lake Verity, Azelf of Lake Valor, and Uxie of Lake Acuity all had to stop the three titan's wrath.

The three titans, Dialga, the governor of time. Palkia, the render of space. And Giratina, the guardian of the distortion world.When a giant battle assumed, one of Teko's great relatives put a stop to it, by doing the unthinkable. He risked his life in the Distortion World, and fought Cyrus, Team Galactic's evil leader. He defeated Giratina, and saved the universe.

The pixies returned to their lakes, but for some strange reason, they fled to the outer reaches of space. Giratina, now resides in a rift in space, a secret passage to the Distortion World. Nobody knows what became of Dialga and Palkia.

Teko stared at the beautiful lake for a few minutes, a bundle of thoughts clouding his curious mind. Teko nodded, walking back to route 201. Shinx followed Teko.

Teko walked along the quiet route, before a Starly appeared. Teko sighed, nodding slightly. Shinx growled in battle stance, as the starly ate some berries. "Shinx"Teko whispered. "Start with a tackle"he ordered. Shinx sighed airily, before bounding at the peaceful bird Pokemon, striking fiercely.

the young bird Pokemon stood up, and flew at full speed, sending Shinx crashing into a tree. Shinx stood up slowly, growling. Teko was worried, a sweatdrop forming behind his head.

"Shinx, leer!"Teko exclaimed. Shinx shook its head.

"Shi shin! (No way!)"Shinx retorted. Shinx tackled again, but it kept on being shot into the tree. Teko shook his head, frowning. Shinx jumped up, before using leer.

Finally, Shinx Teko thought. Starly's defense fell, but Shinx still was being quite reckless. Teko dropped his head in shame, as Starly shot forward with a wuick attack. Shinx flinched, and was sent through the grass.

"Shinx.. LISTEN TO MEEEE!!!"Teko shouted. Shinx turned around, nodding slightly. The ind blew calmly, as Shinx finally snapped out of the trance.

"Shinx shin! (Just this once, Teko)"Shinx replied. Twko nodded.

"Tackle!"he ordered. Shinx blasted forward, as Starly shot forward with its own tackle. The two were about to collide when..

"Dodge!!"


Shinx feinted to the side, and then turned around, chortling at Starly. Starly flew into the tree. "Now Shinx, finish with tackle!"Teko ordered.

Shinx was ready to strike the final blow. Starly got up, but Shinx was too fast. Starly was sent crashing to the ground, beaten. Shinx jumped up happily, as Teko lifted his fist in the air, as the sun shone brightly, almost as if it was saying 'Congratulations!'

Shinx was returned to its pokeball, as Teko finally made it to Sandgem Town.

"Finally.."he muttered.

At the shuttle launch site..

Rocket completion 66%..

The thieves scattered around, their Pokemon standing around. Zubat, Geodude, Psyduck, the like. The scientists were helpless, as a few of the thieves grinned maliciously.

The computers were smashed, the rocket overflowing with the thieves. Then a deep voice boomed through the voiceover device.

"Team Dark Hole will conquer all worlds..."
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Sorry for not posting for a while guys. But chapter 4 is here!

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Chapter 4 Friends, and a Beach catastrophe!



Teko yawned slightly, staring at Shinx. Shinx growled, gritting its teeth at his air-headed trainer. Shinx began nudging Teko's leg, which soon turned into a fierce tackle. Teko wobbled out of control, and fell over. He rubbed his now bruised arm, staring at Shinx. Why did he always get the feisty ones?

Anyway, Teko had three days 'till the launch, he decided to spend the day in Sandgem Town. But he didn't know anything about the bustling town. He sighed, standing up again. First order of business was to find his friend, Mekora, and ask him to guide him through Sandgem.

Teko began making his way through the blazing sun. Honestly, one day it was too cold, the next day too warm. Shinx seemed to agree, as sweat dripped from the small electric Pokemon's blue fur. Just then, a resounding,

"To the beach!"

was heard. Teko grinned. There was only one voice he knew as loud, and as stupid sounding as that. It was without a shadow of a doubt, Mekora. Mekora had messy brown hair, that sometimes blinded his view. He usually wore a grey hoodie, and black trousers. He had emerald green eyes, and if you hadn't guessed by now, didn't really have any fashion sense.

"Mekora!!"Teko called, smiling. Mekora turned around, noticing his dear friend.

"Teko, dude, great to see ya!"he shouted, running over to Teko. He looked at the Shinx, laughing.

"So, you finally got a Pokemon?"Mekora asked, looking surprised. Both Teko and Mekora always dreamt of being Pokemon Teainers, but it seemed Teko had beaten him to the chase. Teko nodded happily, petting shinx's furry head. It wasn't long before Shinx tackled Teko to the ground again. Teko was outraged, as Mekora fell to the ground in fits of hysterical laughter.

Teko stood up again, Shinx grinning slyly.

"Anyway, Mekora, i need a tour around Sandgem, and a good place to relax, think you could help?"Teko asked, turning to his friend for help. Mekora thought for a moment, gazing into the cloudless sky.

"Sure thing pal, after the tour we'll head to the beach!"he replied. Teko jumped in delight, as the tour began. Mekora showed all the important stuff, and they stopped off at Mekora's house for a while. Then, they headed to the world renowned, sandy beach of Sandgem.

"Here we are!"Mekora announced, looking at the crystal clear waters. He turned to Teko, but by then him and Shinx were off to play in the sand. Mekora chased after them, as they all had a great time.

Shinx kicked sand in Teko's eyes a few times, and buried him in and twice, and pulled a few other pranks, but it wasn't long before they were off swimming.

Shinx at first was quite scared, but eventually got used to it. Teko and Mekora taught him how to move his paws, and even gave him an inflatable PokeTube to help.

After that, Mekora and Teko had volleyball tournament, Mekora winning 11-0. Shinx just laughed at Teko getting completely destroyed in the sport.

Now, it was time for them to relax, and eat of course. The nearby JFC - Johto fried chicken - certainly hit the spot.

Towels were then layed out, as the gang all lied down, and relaxed. Of course, the peace wasn't very long lived.

As Teko reached for the sun lotion, a giant splash of water soaked everyone on the beach. everyone looked up, to see a giant mech, with the initials 'DH' Splash out of the water.

It grabbed out with its robotic arms, grabbing a few Pokemon, and people in the process. Then, the mech kicked up a sandstorm, surrounding everyone.

"Teko, you ok-AAAHHHHH!"Mekora screamed. As the sandstorm disappeared, Teko was shocked. The mech had kidnapped Mekora.

Meanwhile...

Rocket Completion, 75%

The scientists groaned, they were deprived of oxygen, as they overheard one of the grunts talking.

"So, the beach assault has started? Great, our plan is almost complete.."