Walking Through Shadows

Started by ShadowLeader April 2nd, 2009 11:48 PM
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ShadowLeader

because shadows follow...

Age 31
Above The Shadows
Seen February 9th, 2010
Posted August 1st, 2009
653 posts
14.2 Years
Tell me what u guys think about this poem! I wrote it...so pls be honest!

Walking Through Shadows
Each day of my life
I feel like I'm walking through shadows.
The way the world is
Darkness is all that I can see
It festers in the air

Hate and corruption
Are fuel for these shadows
Death feels welcome

I fear the world is ending
And everything I know with it
Who will save us?
The future looks Grim.

idk about this one...really let me know if its any good!
A small town ^^
Seen February 22nd, 2015
Posted October 26th, 2010
252 posts
15.2 Years
I like it, I think it can be written even better, but the whole idea and the words you use are quite good. Congrats!

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WriteThemWrong

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Age 31
Male
Tucson
Seen September 22nd, 2011
Posted June 19th, 2011
1,130 posts
14.3 Years
its ok imo.
Theres a hundred poems about the crap in the world, you have to make yours stand out. Instead of saying whats happening (like walking through the shadows) describe it to the reader, really develop and bring all the emotion out.
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