They Came During the Night

Started by I Laugh at your Misfortune! April 4th, 2009 3:32 PM
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I Laugh at your Misfortune!

Normal is a synonym for boring

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YOUR MOTHER! (aka: England)
Seen August 1st, 2016
Posted August 22nd, 2011
2,629 posts
14.9 Years
Here's my craptacular first proper attempt at poetry. Please don't be too harsh when killing me for blinding you with its awfulness.


They came during the night,
Their engines whining like demonic insects,
Drawn to the lone flame flickering below,
A miniscule light surrounded by black.





The radio hisses in a flurry of static;
The order comes and they sweep to the right,
Wings almost touching, tempting a fiery crash,
As if they are taunting fate.





With an unholy precision,
They circle above that single gleam;
The uncovered window, spilling light,
Which will lead to so much pain.





Another shriek pierces the silent night,
And a volatile trail plummets to the ground.
Screams and sirens erupt from the streets,
As deadly black and orange flowers blossom below.





They turn in a sweeping arc,
Invisible to the ants scurrying beneath,
And impervious to the evil stench,
Of fear - drifting up from the hordes below.





Their pants of excitement rush over the wireless,
Men rejoicing in a job well done.
The wails of agony from the masses,
Are the reward for their first kill.

ShadowLeader

because shadows follow...

Age 31
Above The Shadows
Seen February 9th, 2010
Posted August 1st, 2009
653 posts
14.2 Years
i liked it.....the tone really suits me......i love the way it flows off the screen.....good imagery...i also love the first kill bit at the end......good poem man...now i admit i cant see as well as i could before...strange...no matter...
A small town ^^
Seen February 22nd, 2015
Posted October 26th, 2010
252 posts
15.2 Years
its quite good.. very descriptive..
BUT why did you pressed "enter" so many times between the paragraphs? :P

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I Laugh at your Misfortune!

Normal is a synonym for boring

Male
YOUR MOTHER! (aka: England)
Seen August 1st, 2016
Posted August 22nd, 2011
2,629 posts
14.9 Years
oh yeah, lol. The first time, I put one space and vBulletin forgot that there were any spaces and bunched it all together. So i did it again and put a space between each stanza and when I clicked done, vbulletin but a space between every line XD

It somehow worked when I did this, though.