Oh wow...
Um, first of all, you should really double-check the rules before posting. Your first post of your thread should contain part of your story, like the first chapter, not just notes.
Second of all, your third post has information that should be given in the story when appropriate, instead of in author notes separate from the actual story. The necessary information for a story, like what an important item actually is (for instance: the POKECOMP), should be in the actual story.
Third of all, your actual chapter is really difficult to read. Don't use a myriad of different colored fonts for the narration and each character's dialog. It makes the story difficult to follow and understand (my eyes are personally bad, so when I try to even look at your chapter on the dark red skin I'm using, it hurts) because you don't use actual words to tell who is talking and what is going on.
Your understanding of the English language also appears to be less than stellar, to be blunt. There's no proper capitalization or punctuation at all in your chapter, which again makes it difficult to read and follow. There's a sticky in the Writer's Lounge called the
Beta Thread where you can get someone to help you improve your chapter before you actually post it.
Unfortunately, right now, I'm going to have to close your thread for not meeting the standards of PFF&P.