Extra! Extra! Rivals and Games! (Issue#2)

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So I edited the thread... And replaced the 2nd "Page 4" with page 5... Hope you Appreciate it! :0

Grammar Nazi Valentine corrected me again... "SHAME" :( Haha... Well, I need some Beta Readers right now to correct the grammar!

YES, I'M TALKING TO YOU, VALENTINE! ;)

Well, due to the lack of news, we dunno what to put in the 3rd issue, so any help will be appreciated. :)

-P.S.- Enjoy Reading Issue 2! :)-
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Well, I'm glad to see this still going, this new issue came out pretty fast :D A few constructive criticisms:

1, In the article on Platinum's release, you refer to "Abdomen fans". Am I being stupid or is this gibberish?

2, I question the survey by 'anonymous' regarding recognition of Pokemon vs recognition of animals. Perhaps the less common animals, but not things like a mouse.

3, You printed one page twice

4, There are several errors regarding grammar and occasionally spelling, as well as capitalisation. A beta-reader could add some real polish to the product :D

5, The FAQ seems a little, er, random. And hey, no crossword? D:


However, I can see a definite improvement on the first issue, the most obvious being the better image quality. I look forward to reading more issues :D

Keep it up!

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The issue came out really nice. I would like to see a new background in the future rather than plain white, but I can see a large improvement from Issue One :)

By the way, I really like the picture associated with the quote I offered. I'll make sure to stay in tune for the next issue. Keep up the good work. :)

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Thanks everyone for the commnents :) We should get a proof reader poke urs what do you think?
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Nice job on this one, seems clearer than the last issue to read. Enjoyable read too although like said some errors here and there but hey it's only the second issue it'll get better every issue. Keep this up it's a cool idea.



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A few things:

1. Personally, I think it'd be best if you went with a solid color or a white background. The reason why is because I found that the patterned ones you used for pages one and two made it difficult to read the text. The one on page one essentially was a dark background under dark text, and the one on two had bright colors that clashed with the color of the text (for me, at least). A good way to ensure that it's not difficult for the reader to read your text is by not using a patterned background. (Alternatively, use one with lighter colors.) This is, however, just me.

2. Again, you'll want a beta-reader, but you look like you're actively searching for one. However, I'd recommend holding off on production until you actually get one because otherwise, you'd end up with odd errors in every single issue from now until then. Like, yeah, "Abdomen Fans." (Not sure what you were trying to get at there.)

3. About your featurette, always, always, always do some fact-checking before actually putting something in a newsletter. First off, the article you found (which I had to Google because you spelled the URL incorrectly) was from about six or seven years ago. Secondly, it's from a website that also claims Pokémon is a tool of Satan. No, really.

4. However, the article that I managed to dig up concerning this (which you once again plagiarized, given that there's again no byline, and you probably didn't ask for the permission to take this story) is also not a reliable news source. While it states statistics, it's odd that this story isn't found on any other website but a dead one.
4a. Oh, and by the way, again, if you want to make a newsletter, you've got to write the articles yourself and cite the sources correctly. It's just not good form if you don't do that because it makes you look like you don't care enough about the newsletter to put effort into creating original, enlightening articles to catch a reader's attention. Also, if someone finds out you did that, you run a risk of ticking people off and getting trolled. (I know someone who stole article content from an active Pokémon fansite, and what happened after that? Flamewar between my friend and every single member involved with the project he stole his information from. Fun times.)

5. You also plagiarized Bulbanews (while giving the wrong credit at the bottom of the paper). Basically, if you didn't get permission to feature content someone else wrote for another website, don't use it. It's bad form.

6. The comment about negative feedback on the last page? I'm sorry, but sometimes, you've just got to take it. =/ We, the public, are trying to tell you the things that you could do to improve your paper and the things you just shouldn't do. Completely copying someone else's work without actually giving them credit, for example, is not only wrong, but it can get a lot of people in trouble. That and, I'm sorry, it's just not enjoyable to read something when you know it's someone else's work, when you know it's got a lot of errors that need to be fixed, et cetera. Yeah, you're in it to entertain, but from one writer/aspiring editor to another, when you entertain, you're doing it for the public. If the public don't like something about it, you can't just say, "STFU." You might as well just keep your newsletter private if you refuse to accept or listen to the opinions of your audience about your paper. You keep that up, and you'll end up with no readers at all.
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Valentine, how about a white texture? I'm thinking of that.

As for the slogan, how about : News written right. (since this is a newspaper, news, and written because you wrote the articles, and right as in you did it right).

Great job, but you printed a page twice, like Misfortune said. So it's actually five pages, not six. As for the plagiarizing, come on guys. Wrote your own stuff.

One question though, why is the logo so blurry?
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OK, I've made some research and I am gonna reccomend a few format things

P to the D to the F, what do you get? PDF

Sure, not everyone can open PDF, but you heard me, the quality will be so good, not even Naruto would believe it (actually kinda stupid :P). Plus, PDF reader is free. and you can upload a png version with it.

First, Google a few PDF converters and "print" the documents from GiMP

You are using GiMP like I said right?

Also, you may want to consider increasing the quality from the banner. It's kinda blurry.

If you don't know how to do it yourself, I can probably help you on structure. PM me if you're interested.

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Valentine, how about a white texture? I'm thinking of that.
White texture might actually work. Basically, scratch what I said about solids so long as you use anything that's light enough to make the text stand out well. (Sorry about that.)
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White texture might actually work. Basically, scratch what I said about solids so long as you use anything that's light enough to make the text stand out well. (Sorry about that.)
This pretty much sums up a good point I might have stated only a few minutes ago. xD
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White texture might actually work. Basically, scratch what I said about solids so long as you use anything that's light enough to make the text stand out well. (Sorry about that.)
Yeah, because just white seems too plain. I made this great texture for a project I'm working on that might really fit the newspaper. Should I upload it?
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This pretty much sums up a good point I might have stated only a few minutes ago. xD
If we're talking about your first comment, then my retraction isn't really saying go ahead with a background besides plain white. It's more saying use anything so long as the text stands out. Either way, if it doesn't look right with plain white, then sure, let's see how white texture looks. If it works, feel free to keep it. If it doesn't, you're still working on it.
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If we're talking about your first comment, then my retraction isn't really saying go ahead with a background besides plain white. It's more saying use anything so long as the text stands out. Either way, if it doesn't look right with plain white, then sure, let's see how white texture looks. If it works, feel free to keep it. If it doesn't, you're still working on it.
Yes, in the first issue I had also recommended a new background either it be colors, white, or whatever they choose, so long the text does stand out...so I believe we understood each other perfectly well. xD

Oh, I like the PDF suggestion by Godot, though it may be a little rough for those who can't open those files. xD

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Yes, in the first issue I had also recommended a new background either it be colors, white, or whatever they choose, so long the text does stand out...so I believe we understood each other perfectly well. xD
Sorry. I don't remember that.

Oh, I like the PDF suggestion by Godot, though it may be a little rough for those who can't open those files. xD
Agreed completely. On the other hand, PDFs would definitely be better organized, and a lot of computers come with Adobe Acrobat or a PDF reader already bundled in. Not to mention AdvancedK9's right about there being free PDF readers (by Adobe or otherwise) on the 'net.
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About the Background thingys...

Change the background color, and it's not a newspaper... :)

I would like to maintain it white, or else i'll be making a magazine. :)

P.S.
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I think part of it might be that Pokerus just uses stuff his supporters supply, but I don't know how much he goes and finds himself...
If he did get those articles sent into him, it's strange that he didn't provide bylines, added addresses at the bottom of the pages linking to the pages, and allowed excerpts from them to appear in his newsletter word-for-word. =/ Basically speaking, even if he received this from a contributor, allowing it to appear is still plagiarism.

Additionally, if we're talking about the grammatical errors, then part of an editor's job is to find a copyeditor to look over things before putting it in his paper.
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About the Background thingys...

Change the background color, and it's not a newspaper... :)

I would like to maintain it white, or else i'll be making a magazine. :)

P.S.
Why not a white texture? Wouldn't that be better?
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Hey everyone thanks for commenting, I'm going to ask poke urs to let me edit it when he is finished, I will fix it up in gimp, And i'll most likely make a new logo.
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