She Stands Alone

Started by Pikawolf September 22nd, 2004 5:14 PM
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Posted October 12th, 2004
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18.7 Years
She stood below the street light,
With no one but her thoughts.
And though she didn't show it,
A soul is what she sought.

She drifted in and out,
Never fearing her demise.
And though she longed for someone close,
She kept herself in disguise.

The people say she haunts this place,
Just looking for a friend.
Others say her broken heart,
Is one that she must mend.

They say her family now is gone,
And have withered to the bone.
And her journey still continues,
For she must stand alone.

I tried my best on this one. Please read & rate. I hope you enjoy this one. ^^

~Kelsey
Age 35
Band room
Seen December 26th, 2005
Posted November 10th, 2004
329 posts
18.8 Years
Beautiful pika. No criticisms on this one lol, just a hearty congratulations on a well written poem.

"She stood below the street light,
With no one but her thoughts.
And though she didn't show it,
A soul is what she sought"

I especially liked this first stanza. It flowed masterfully and it gave me a feeling of majestic isolation(if there is such a thing).
"We must carry war into every corner the enemy happens to carry it, to his home, to his centers of entertainment:a total war. It is neccesary to prevent him from having a moment of peace, a quiet moment outside his barracks or even inside; we must attack him wherever he may be, make him feel like a cornered beast wherever he may move. then his moral fiber shall begin to decline, but we shall notice how signs of decadence begin to disappear."- Che Guevara

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Seen October 24th, 2004
Posted October 24th, 2004
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19.1 Years
I really enjoyed this poem,pika.It's amazing.Oh I wish I could convince my poem loving friend to come to this site to see the amazing poems here!


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Age 35
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Seen December 26th, 2005
Posted November 10th, 2004
329 posts
18.8 Years
Thanks everyone. And I am truly surprised there were no critisizms, Finglonger! XD lol, j/k. I do like it when you tell me what to improve on. Weeeeeell, until next time! ^^
*goes off to write some more*

~Kelsey
wow well its nice to know that Im appreciated, er yeah didn't feel like doing a big criticism here. Usually when I go into those things its because I see some syntax or diction error then Im drawn in to point out other things. Didn't happen with this one, so yeah thats a good thing. = )
"We must carry war into every corner the enemy happens to carry it, to his home, to his centers of entertainment:a total war. It is neccesary to prevent him from having a moment of peace, a quiet moment outside his barracks or even inside; we must attack him wherever he may be, make him feel like a cornered beast wherever he may move. then his moral fiber shall begin to decline, but we shall notice how signs of decadence begin to disappear."- Che Guevara

"shoot, coward, you are only going to kill a man"-Ernesto "Che" Guevara