[quote]The most little things that make us smile,[quote]
Instead of saying 'most little', I think 'littlest' would've flowed a lot better.
The tight hugs, and longer talks.
I didn't like how it was just 'tight' hugs for some reason. But that's just me.
And i been thinking of you since you left today.
I should be capitalized.
Tonight, ill be holding your hand tight,
I'll instead of ill.
And whisper i love you with my eyes open wide.
Again, I should be capitalized.
Well, not much more criticism I can offer. I'm not a poetry expert; it's not really my forte. But I love how you used free verse instead of the conventional rhyming stanzas.
I really hope I used those phrases correctly. .