Bang! I woke up in a daze I had almost fallen of the bed; I heard a noise from the next room. I was still half asleep and I was really mad that I had been woken up in the middle of the night. I looked at my clock it was half two in the mourning, I started groaning it was almost impossible for me to go back to sleep now that I was fully awake. I couldn’t see anything so I waited for my eyes to adjust to the darkness. I got up, I didn’t bother turning the light on if I did it would of hurt my eyes, especially now that my eyes were adjusted to the darkness.
Here I'm wondering do you mean 2:30? Also there are a couple of run on sentences.
The light flickering made me think the owner didn’t pay the electric bills. There were some portraits on the ceiling, the lights flickering made the portraits look like they had eyes and as if they were looking at me and watching my every move. It was like an illusion the ones that you see when you’re at the Sahara Desert. I had doubt in my mind because it could be dangerous. I was wondering if I should go check it out or if I should just try and go back to sleep.
portraits on the ceiling? that's different! :D
My hand started trembling; I took a deep breath and forced the door. I stepped into the room and started searching the room. I tripped over something; I turned the lights on and found out that there was a dead body lying right before my eyes.
I soon as I saw the body my body stiffened I was as stiff as stone. I started searching my Pocket to get out my mobile and call 999 I then realised I had left my mobile in my room.
He took a deep breath and forced the door? did he force it open? Could have used a couple of commas and I saw only one spelling error. You could try tying your story up in microsoft word to catch some of those spelling errors
I don't want to nit pick your whole story. The general idea of your story is great IMO. To keep the reader's attention you might want to try a different list of words. I lot of the words you used, were found more and more in your story dulling it down a bit. hopefully you take from this criticism and the next part will be better than the first! Good luck! :D