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Old September 24th, 2004 (7:50 AM).
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    This is a poem my friend John wrote for me..it's about one side of my personality that i wish i didnt have, but he's written it in a flattering way
    He's a really incredible poet, so i thought i'd show one of his pieces (he's not part of this forum)

    The Heart
    A heart that sits in the moonlight,
    Awaiting the caress of the stars,
    Dreaming of their voices,
    Deep, unending, beautiful,
    Tempting to eye and mind.

    They bow down in adoration,
    Caressing her with their radiance,
    Silver, constant, and glorious,
    A lesser beacon to her own,
    The moon that bears her needs.

    The heart wavers, a tear is made,
    She lies prone in the darkness,
    Awaiting to be healed,
    Healed by the starlight,
    And all the stars obey her call.
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    Old September 24th, 2004 (9:59 PM).
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      0_0 I like it very interesting. Althoug I would like you to ask who he means by "they" in the second stanza as I found that part to be a bit unclear.

      "The heart wavers, a tear is made,
      She lies prone in the darkness,
      Awaiting to be healed,
      Healed by the starlight,
      And all the stars obey her call."

      -this last stanza really wrapped it up for me, the second stanza was not really cohesive, but this brought it all into persepctive. give John a pat on the back.
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      Old September 26th, 2004 (11:52 AM).
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        "they" refers to the stars -thats what most of the second stance is about.
        the moon is basically someone who is closer to me, and bears most of my needs

        yeah, i love the final stance -very moving
        im sure he'll be pleased you liked it
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        Old October 4th, 2004 (6:42 PM).
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          Thats a great Poem,very interesting.
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