The Tower

Started by ChronicEdge July 15th, 2009 8:12 PM
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Age 30
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Earth
Seen October 15th, 2012
Posted June 28th, 2010
404 posts
15.1 Years
Continuing in his Journey of spiritual awakening, the Fool comes upon a Tower set on a high cliff overlooking the sea. Hauntingly familiar this Tower seems to him, and as the Fool further inspects the daunting grandeur of this imposing edifice, he begins to realize that the Tower is far more familiar to him than he had thought originally; for indeed, it was the Fool himself who assisted in the Tower's construction, back when his sole concern in life was leaving his mark upon the world. How distant that man seemed to him; had he not left behind this hollow being at the onset of his Journey? But, as he looked inside of himself, the Fool discovered that he had not left this arrogant self behind him, and indeed there still lived in the top of the Tower a number of foolish, prideful men, who were to themselves high above all others; alone in their self-righteousness. This realization evoked a certain horror in the Fool, but at the same time, peace, for he now knew what he truly was. Opening his mouth to allow these new emotions to take form, the Fool let forth a tremendous shout. At the very instant that the sound escaped his lips, a jagged flash of light and a mighty explosion dominated the lanscape, and the Fool, upon gazing at the Tower, found it to be no more; smited, as was his former sense of false pride, and the rubble of it fallen into the sea, as if to show that nothing lasting had ever existed in that location at all. The Fool, at this awesome display, felt profound grief and agony, but at the same time, a certain clarity of mind, as if suddenly realizing that no deed man can accomplish shall ever prove eternal, and that a life devoted to such an act is a life thoroughly wasted. Even more importantly, the Fool had dissolved all false conceptions that he held of himself. Gone was everything that he had known, but still left to him was the pure, bare and absolute truth; the perfect platform upon which to rebuild his soul.

This is the story of the Tower Tarot card. I'm not a mystic person, and this really isn't the kind of **** that I go for. The actual story, however, has always appealed to me. Now, at this point in my life where I am desperate to find some point to my existence on this planet, this story helps to remind me that , though purpose is self-defined, it should not be a falsity.

So, please tell me what you think. At the bottom of the page will be a link to the place that I originally heard the story of the Tower from. I essentially re-wrote it from the story found there.

The Tower

EDIT: The first poster had a point.


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Esper

California
Seen June 30th, 2018
Posted June 30th, 2018
I like this story, too. It's kind of generic, but classic. I guess that's the appeal.

Looking at both versions I can say that yours is certainly more entertaining because you embellish the story with more detail, but the story itself doesn't depart much from the original.

You've even got some lines that are dangerously similar.

Yours:
[I]t was the Fool himself who assisted in the Tower's construction, back when his sole concern in life was leaving his mark upon the world.

The website's:
The Fool, himself, helped build this Tower back when the most important thing to him was making his mark on the world and proving himself better than other men.
Like I said, yours > theirs, but you should make it more your own with your own style or voice.
Age 30
Male
Earth
Seen October 15th, 2012
Posted June 28th, 2010
404 posts
15.1 Years
Yeah, I know. I plan on doing it, but today I was too lazy busy, and I really wanted to share the story. It also didn't help things that I read the web page like ten minutes before I submitted this. >_>

This was really an excercise more than anything else, though I do intend to do my own, actual, creative version of this. It's actually given me a few ideas; one for a sort of 'guest spot' in something that I'm currently dreaming up, and also as its own seperate comic book (if I can find anyone around here that has any artistic capacity to help my no-drawin' ass).


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Seen September 11th, 2015
Posted August 17th, 2010
363 posts
14.2 Years
I agree that it is "classic" yet I don't feel it's as generic as some other stories that I have read. It is a great story, nonetheless, though.
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