untitled as of right now

Started by Finglonger October 2nd, 2004 12:07 PM
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Age 35
Band room
Seen December 26th, 2005
Posted November 10th, 2004
329 posts
18.8 Years
yeah just wrote this liek 5 minutes ago, did like a stream of conciousness sort of thing where I just wrote down what was on my mind. Its not very good, but I'm thinking of changing it around a bit for later uses. So any criticisms would be greatly appreciated.


we move.
red dancing with the dark.
she keeps her kings in the back.

I move.
My figure is her climax.
the kings are in the back.

She moves.
or does she?
kings held in the back.

Can she,
why?
however does she?
is her back really,
kept to my advances?

She keeps her kings in the back,
eluding my turn,
does she hope to do,
what she is doing?
Kings in the back I,
do not understand.

Ah I see,
she holds her force,
away from my delusions,
kings in the back, I cannot make a move,
I see her reservations.

would you please ask her?
If she remembers?
remembers that her kings are still in the back?
"We must carry war into every corner the enemy happens to carry it, to his home, to his centers of entertainment:a total war. It is neccesary to prevent him from having a moment of peace, a quiet moment outside his barracks or even inside; we must attack him wherever he may be, make him feel like a cornered beast wherever he may move. then his moral fiber shall begin to decline, but we shall notice how signs of decadence begin to disappear."- Che Guevara

"shoot, coward, you are only going to kill a man"-Ernesto "Che" Guevara
Age 35
Band room
Seen December 26th, 2005
Posted November 10th, 2004
329 posts
18.8 Years
What was that???????????????????????
lol, yeah that was the desired result. The metaphor was supposed to be somewhat confusing, and yeah thats all I really set out to do.
"We must carry war into every corner the enemy happens to carry it, to his home, to his centers of entertainment:a total war. It is neccesary to prevent him from having a moment of peace, a quiet moment outside his barracks or even inside; we must attack him wherever he may be, make him feel like a cornered beast wherever he may move. then his moral fiber shall begin to decline, but we shall notice how signs of decadence begin to disappear."- Che Guevara

"shoot, coward, you are only going to kill a man"-Ernesto "Che" Guevara