You capture the state of confusion well, I don't have a clue what is going on, but I would like to find out which means I will continue reading. You're also good at writing in the first person (something I could never do.)
I do notice you use a lot of short, simple sentences though. They're effective when used sparingly, but I felt that you used just a little too many in this case. It would help it flow better if you used more connectives rather than starting a new sentence each time.
I hope to read the first chapter soon.