I'm gonna use your fic as a guinea pig for my new reviewing style. *cracks knuckles* Be honoured. ^_^
Problem #1: You can't change the name of the thread.
Problem #2: You like to capitalise things randomly, like Ninety Seven Percent and Wrong Experiment. I just don't get it.
Problem #3: Length. Short and sweet is not necessarily a bad thing, but at the moment your fic has the former sans the latter.
Problem #4: You have only dialogue. There is no description, no action, no emotion. What do the characters look like, where are they, what are they doing, feeling, seeing?
Problem #5: "Prof. Oak! I was a Pokemon Training School" Were you now, Ash? How on earth did you manage that?
Problem #6: "that it see's other objects and pokemon". 'see's' is not a word.
Problem #7: "-Oak". No, just no. Simply adding a nametag to tell us who's speaking isn't gonna cut it.
Problem #8:
Weekly Edition #1. I hope you're aware that that symbol means 'does not equal' rather than 'number'.
Solution #1: You could a) start over or b) PM Astinus to get her to change it for you.
Solution #2: Keep an eye on capitalisation. Proper nouns such as names, days and places only. And sentence starters, but that goes without saying.
Solution #3: I recommend expanding, which I'll touch on more in the next point.
Solution #4: OK. Add more. More what, you ask? More
everything.
Description - tell us what they're wearing.
Emotion - tell us what they're feeling.
Action - tell us what they're doing.
Detail - give us
everything, big and small. Just don't swamp us.
D.E.A.D. What a macabre acronym, lol.
Solution #5: Proofread. It helps avoid embarrassing mistakes like that one.
Solution #6: The word you are looking for is 'sees'. Apostrophes are helpful, but don't overuse them, as they have very specific guidelines as to where they go. I recommend you use the Internet to look up rules for usage.
Solution #7: At least use speechtags, maybe with a beat and/or some action. "Blah blah blah," said Oak, dancing the Macarena. You get the picture.
Solution #8: Use this - #. You get it by holding down the shift key and pressing '3' on the row of keys at the top of most keyboards.
Good bit #1: Uxie is so neglected; it needs more love in fanfiction. Props for that, although I have no idea where it was going.
General Suggestion #1:
Get a beta. They are amazing people.
Well, I hope that worked. Tell me, did you find this review helpful? Especially the format in which it was given? Or did that get in the way? And . . . did you use a word processor? (I ask that of everyone, don't worry.)