Pokemon: Just Pants

Started by .Tactic. September 13th, 2009 9:09 AM
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.Tactic.

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Seen October 7th, 2012
Posted January 28th, 2011
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Hello I am Codec,
I am making a sprite comic for my friends enjoyment and for the enjoyment of the pokecommunity members.

It is a PG-13 Comedy Comic that has no swearing and the rudest words on it are probably Dammit!

Credits:
Spriters Recource,
Google - lol
Kyledove - sprites
Serebii - Maps
I will take any help from a member

Co Authours:
Meryvn797

If you like my comics - please feel free to help me with my sprite comic - and thanks :)

Season 1
Ep 1 - Grrrrr....
Ep 2 - Mystery of the Game
Ep 3 - Gold and Chrome
Ep 4 - Relationship Problems
Ep 5 - Brock Vs Chrome
Ep 6 - Thats My Pokemon By Mervyn
Ep 7 - Thats My Pokemon Part 2
Ep 8 - A Few clues Make a Big Difference
Ep 9 - Dangerous Grounds
Ep 10 - Dangerous Grounds Part 2
Season 1 Special Episodes
Ep 5/6 - Mervyn the Evil Squirtle

Please rate
And Subscribe by Coming and helping as often as possible :)
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Fish Spaghetti Town
Seen May 18th, 2016
Posted September 17th, 2015
3,543 posts
17.7 Years
OoOo... another comic I see?

Well then, lets get this train wreck rolling! :D
I feel very section-y today, so I'll give you ratings and comments on different portions of your comic.

Key:
* = Star
* = Earned Star
* = No Star

Apperance: * * * * * * * * * *
There could definately be improvements, but I've seen much worse.
When I started, I did MUCH worse.
You could use some... more interesting panels.

Speech Bubbles: * * * * * * * * * *
Not much to look at, And I hope a character doesn't get some unlegiable color like Bright Bright Yellow, so nobody could read it.
They could be bigger, but,
I'm almost as blind as a bat, so, maybe it's just me. Maybe a enlargement could do the trick.

Humor: * * * * * * * * * *
It's not funny funny.
It's cheap laugh funny, but not worthwhile.
I suggest really putting effort into your jokes. Because if this is a comedy, it won't impress anyone. :/

Layout: * * * * * * * * * *
What the blast does the top of each one say?
You mixed Very Dark color with Very dark color!
DO NOT WANT!
As so far with the layout of the panels, Um...
Since each comic is not lengthy in any sort of way, I say do it Horozonal, not vertical.

There are my two cents.
If you want more clarifacation on a section or a completely different section I did not hit here, please just ask.
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Seen August 5th, 2010
Posted May 23rd, 2010
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Humor: * * * * * * * * * *
It's not funny funny.
It's cheap laugh funny, but not worthwhile.
I suggest really putting effort into your jokes. Because if this is a comedy, it won't impress anyone. :/
Really? I thought it was funny, funny.

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Seen May 18th, 2016
Posted September 17th, 2015
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Really? I thought it was funny, funny.
"Funny Funny" in my book is something that I will remember, something that will make me hold in a smile or laugh, just so I don't make huge uproar.
Or, just makes me ROFL.

"Cheap Funny" is the slight chuckle or smirk,
from something I've seen before, or from something that's noobish.
Collection DeviantART Pokemon

super epic credit to Cilerba and Calis for OW Bases,
make sure you check them out as well!
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Seen September 28th, 2013
Posted April 24th, 2010
84 posts
15.3 Years
Hey Crayon (mind if I call you that?), can you rate my comic in the same way you did here, only, keeping up with the progress I've made so far?

Anyway.

I've seen better, but I've seen much, MUCH worse.

If these are your first comics ever, then you're doing pretty good for a beginner. Especially visually. While there were some flaws, mostly with your attempts at resizing some stuff, it's decent.

The text bubbles are fine to me, but as Crayon said, never use, like, a bright yellow.

As for the humor... well, I wouldn't necessarily say the jokes themself are bad, but rather... the presentation is... well, below average. And the result is semi-decent jokes only worth a cheap laugh. If the joke's amazing but is presented shoddily, then it won't often be found funny. However, if a joke is mediocre but presented wonderfully, people find a laugh in it.

Really, I can't offer any advice in this department, as everyone has their own sense of humor. But... just keep trying, you'll get there.

Peace.

.Tactic.

x.Paranoid's BackAlley.x

Age 26
Male
A Dark Abbyss...
Seen October 7th, 2012
Posted January 28th, 2011
1,309 posts
14.1 Years
OoOo... another comic I see?

Well then, lets get this train wreck rolling! :D
I feel very section-y today, so I'll give you ratings and comments on different portions of your comic.

Key:
* = Star
* = Earned Star
* = No Star

Apperance: * * * * * * * * * *
There could definately be improvements, but I've seen much worse.
When I started, I did MUCH worse.
You could use some... more interesting panels.

Speech Bubbles: * * * * * * * * * *
Not much to look at, And I hope a character doesn't get some unlegiable color like Bright Bright Yellow, so nobody could read it.
They could be bigger, but,
I'm almost as blind as a bat, so, maybe it's just me. Maybe a enlargement could do the trick.

Humor: * * * * * * * * * *
It's not funny funny.
It's cheap laugh funny, but not worthwhile.
I suggest really putting effort into your jokes. Because if this is a comedy, it won't impress anyone. :/

Layout: * * * * * * * * * *
What the blast does the top of each one say?
You mixed Very Dark color with Very dark color!
DO NOT WANT!
As so far with the layout of the panels, Um...
Since each comic is not lengthy in any sort of way, I say do it Horozonal, not vertical.

There are my two cents.
If you want more clarifacation on a section or a completely different section I did not hit here, please just ask.
I will try better in my next episode - which might take a while tho

Really? I thought it was funny, funny.
Thanks :)

"Funny Funny" in my book is something that I will remember, something that will make me hold in a smile or laugh, just so I don't make huge uproar.
Or, just makes me ROFL.

"Cheap Funny" is the slight chuckle or smirk,
from something I've seen before, or from something that's noobish.
If that is what Funny Funny means then nothing is funny funny!

Hey Crayon (mind if I call you that?), can you rate my comic in the same way you did here, only, keeping up with the progress I've made so far?

Anyway.

I've seen better, but I've seen much, MUCH worse.

If these are your first comics ever, then you're doing pretty good for a beginner. Especially visually. While there were some flaws, mostly with your attempts at resizing some stuff, it's decent.

The text bubbles are fine to me, but as Crayon said, never use, like, a bright yellow.

As for the humor... well, I wouldn't necessarily say the jokes themself are bad, but rather... the presentation is... well, below average. And the result is semi-decent jokes only worth a cheap laugh. If the joke's amazing but is presented shoddily, then it won't often be found funny. However, if a joke is mediocre but presented wonderfully, people find a laugh in it.

Really, I can't offer any advice in this department, as everyone has their own sense of humor. But... just keep trying, you'll get there.

Peace.
Thanks - I will try harder - infact you are the one who inspired me to make a comic - if you want.... I could use some help on presentation *lioke you said*
Wanna help?
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I will try better in my next episode - which might take a while tho
One other thing: practicing makes your ability to produce comics on a whim easier.

If that is what Funny Funny means then nothing is funny funny!
Not necessarily true. Many things on the 'net made me lol extremely hard, mostly YouTube Poop, and some of that stuff even helped inspire the humor I implement into Pogeymanz. Funny funny is what birthed every meme you see.

Thanks - I will try harder - infact you are the one who inspired me to make a comic - if you want.... I could use some help on presentation *lioke you said*
Wanna help?
Sure I could help you, the only problem is, presentation of jokes is nearly impossible to teach someone aside from the bare basics. It's something learned well over time, however, and the skill usually becomes easy to overcome after a bit of practice.

If anyone read my very first sprite comic (ARK, which nobody here has read unless you went to my author page on Smack Jeeves and went from there) and compared the humor to Pogeymanz, you'd see that in ARK, the comic is lined with potentially good humor, but in its early days, the presentation was not very good, so only the funniest jokes in that comic were able to stick out, even if they only elicited a very cheap laugh at best.

So yeah. I can PM some basics if you want.

is it my Pc ae is it verry bad quality
wat

.Tactic.

x.Paranoid's BackAlley.x

Age 26
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Seen October 7th, 2012
Posted January 28th, 2011
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New Episode...
Finally...
Isnt it funny that I chose when Spriters resource is down to make a third episode?
lol here it is.
Episode 3: Gold and Chrome
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Seen July 18th, 2012
Posted January 12th, 2010
73 posts
14.7 Years
Well I'll say this isn't very bad or good for that matter but I remember my first sprite comic and boy was it bad.Anyway I'll give a quick review.

1.You may be a beginner but you want your comic to be above the sea of sucky webcomics,don't you?If you do then read on,if you don't skip to part 3

2.Layout:
They layout is improving as you go along, though the sign saying Pokepants isn't very appealing, black text surrounded by red isn't very nice in my opinion.Use nicer colors when making the layout or even try to jazz it up,MS paint is a limited program but very easy to use and you can make many things in it.

3.Plot:
I can't really comment on this much due to the comic just starting up but by the looks of it it is one of those screwed up time traveling plots that is very overused and needs a lot of originality.

4.Appearance
The appearance is decent though never use sprites of two different generations in the same comic.Either redo the whole Kanto in D/P/P sprites or change the character's sprites into the GBA generation.

5.Speech Bubbles
The speech bubbles are decent but the colors are not very good.I recommend you keep the inside of the bubble white and making the outline and text the color of the character you want to talk.

6.Characters
Seems to me like you have just picked out your favorite characters and rushed the comic to put them into a group without giving them much originality which makes them just feel like robots you have also made some characters appear and disappear without getting a proper introduction.

7.Humour
This is where your comic really falls and this category also being one of the main reasons people read joke comics.
The humour and delivery are quite bad by themselves but put together they make a terrible combo.The jokes are rushed and very bad by themselves and only gave me a groan but something that makes me laugh is very hard to find anyway.The delivery is quite bad as well as I said it is rushed and the jokes just come out as random in most scenes.

An example of a joke with good delivery would be if a character was by the beach with friends and decides to go beachcombing with a metal detector he finds in another giggle-funny way then he searches and searches and finds a bottlecap then he searches again and after a while he finds a quarter then in he decides to go searching again and finds something big, he digs around and finds another metal detector!

That is a well delivered joke, first they start it normally as a day on the beach and then he supposedly gets bored and goes beachcombing with a metal detedctor he finds in a mini-joke.He soon finds two little objects which build up suspense for the oncoming joke and then he finds something big and BAM!It's a metal detector!The joke in itself is moderately funny but the good delivery bumps it up a few notches.

8.Overall
It is not bad as I said but it has lots of small flaws and a few major ones.All in all it can be a better comic if you put more work into it aswell as a bunch of originality.

9.You said no
Then just delete your comic as no one will enjoy it and it will be lost in the sea of webcomics forever.

That about wraps it up though it wasn't very short but I hope you know what to do now.
Ya I'm back!After a long time of being bored and doing nothing deh obLonG has returned.I hope all of you out there can forgive me for suddenly leaving like that.Again.

You can stand and pee.Sure just go ahead and tinkle.Have some fun.Knock yourself out for all I care.Heck,pee all over your bathroom if need be.Just don't stand and poop.

Who Am I?
I AM


Pokepark, my old comic. Is now dead. And it will stay dead. Instead I've moved on to a new project.



My new video series(demos available for feedback, click the link to go to the thread):


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.Tactic.

x.Paranoid's BackAlley.x

Age 26
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A Dark Abbyss...
Seen October 7th, 2012
Posted January 28th, 2011
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Hmm Thanks for that very long review, I will try to do what you have recommended.

New Comic
Episode 5 - Brock Vs Chrome
Please note: This ep is made before the previous review.
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x.Paranoid's BackAlley.x

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Posted January 28th, 2011
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Thats a great new ep..
Ok here is the first of the mini-sidequests...
http://i235.photobucket.com/albums/ee268/07harris/c1.png?t=1255173926
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I swear, you're getting better and better.

The one problem I have with the text boxes is the outlining. Thinning the lines makes them look better on a sprite comic, and that also gives you more room for text.

The humor has improved drastically once the third comic came about, and you're slowly getting better at presentation, as evidenced by the most recent comic.

However, with that said, even though you've bettered yourself in every field so far, you still have a ways to go. If you keep trying and making comics, you'll get better, then you can make an all new comic to show off your skills from the get-go.

I'd recommend downloading something like Paint.Net, though. I use that for motion blurs and text boxes; it makes them look better IMO.