Inner hatred

Started by Kishijoten September 27th, 2009 7:04 AM
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Kishijoten

CEO of trouble making~

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Posted August 5th, 2013
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I hate her with all my heart
I hate her with all my strength
I hate her with every word
that is no lie.

I have no feeling amoung her
I have no kind words towards her
I have nothing to say to her.

My mind says "hate her"
my heart says "love her"
My mounth says "............"

My moments say nothing
My friends doe's nothing
My teacher hardly says anything.
and me? I say I don't know
why I say I hate her.

My feelings become sore
my head feels wrong
my hate list is messed up
and my life doesn't get what
I want and why she and I
don't connect like the
rest of PC.
.

>Current happiness level<
Low/Somewhat happy/Maxed out
My Pokemon White 2 FC: 4943-3337-1645
Art by: Midori Chi

Kishijoten

CEO of trouble making~

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Hong Kong
Seen July 5th, 2016
Posted August 5th, 2013
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cute! only what does amoung mean? and lye? or is it just misspellings?
thanks for the compliment.
and amoung means like upon i believe.

>Current happiness level<
Low/Somewhat happy/Maxed out
My Pokemon White 2 FC: 4943-3337-1645
Art by: Midori Chi

Kishijoten

CEO of trouble making~

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Seen July 5th, 2016
Posted August 5th, 2013
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Wow, is this a deep story of... broken friendship or something? 'Cause it moved me. :3
really? Thank you for the compliment. If the poem is deep that means it has some anger in it.

>Current happiness level<
Low/Somewhat happy/Maxed out
My Pokemon White 2 FC: 4943-3337-1645
Art by: Midori Chi

Alexithymia~

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Female
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Posted June 3rd, 2012
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This part here is contradictory.

I have no feeling amoung her
You say you have no feelings about her.. but all through the poem you say you hate her. That's a feeling. A very strong one, infact.

Something to chew on.

Kishijoten

CEO of trouble making~

Female
Hong Kong
Seen July 5th, 2016
Posted August 5th, 2013
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This part here is contradictory.



You say you have no feelings about her.. but all through the poem you say you hate her. That's a feeling. A very strong one, infact.

Something to chew on.

Hm, do I take this as a compliment or just a opinion?. Well thanks for pointing that out anyways.

>Current happiness level<
Low/Somewhat happy/Maxed out
My Pokemon White 2 FC: 4943-3337-1645
Art by: Midori Chi

aurevesque

My daddy's got a tazor.

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Posted March 11th, 2021
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This part here is contradictory.



You say you have no feelings about her.. but all through the poem you say you hate her. That's a feeling. A very strong one, infact.

Something to chew on.
but wouldn't that be the whole point? the inner conflict or whatever?

Alexithymia~

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UK
Seen January 10th, 2015
Posted June 3rd, 2012
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Hm, do I take this as a compliment or just a opinion?. Well thanks for pointing that out anyways.
You take that as an opinion and constructive crit.

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but wouldn't that be the whole point? the inner conflict or whatever?
.. This poem is about hatred. She says 'hate' in about every line. [yeah, that's something to work on..]
She's not confused about it.

I hate her with all my heart.
Yeah, she hates her with all her heart, and all her strength and every word. This doesn't imply conflict. This implies all out hatred.