mirror on the wall

Started by flame_chi October 16th, 2004 10:17 AM
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this is based on a picture that my friend did for me..
and this is my first story in a long time
n im not good at writting stories too


Have you ever looked in a mirror and been sucked into it. I have!
I was 16 when it happened, when it sucked me into it.
I live in a quiet place. In a little town called Agassiz
I was 16 at the time. Going to school everyday and hanging with friends and being a teenager. When it happened, I don't understand why it happened to me. Who knows? It happened around 4: 0opm, I went to school in the morning and got back home, no one was home. So I went to my bedroom to do my homework. When I looked in the mirror, I didnt know what was happening at the time. It looked to me as if it wanted out somehow. I didnt know what to do, and being the teen that I am I went to touch the mirror and it sucked me in. I dont know how long I was out for, but it seems like it was forever. I opened up my eyes to find that it was black everywhere. I didnt know where I was, but it was somewhere. I can see that there was a something that looked like a door coming towards me.
Then I saw it. It was the mirror. I was on the other side on the mirror, but how? It was clear first, and then started turning a bluish-green, and then I saw me. I was smiling. I thought to myself how can that be I, when Im here? Then I saw the look in my eyes it was a reddish-yellow and it had horns coming out of its head and then I saw it, it was the devil coming to take souls. I wish I didnt touch the mirror. Then I wouldnt be in this mess.


theres the picture that i based my story on





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I liked reading it, because it was interesting someone being sucked into a mirror and seeing somebody else who was the same person.... it would have been nicer if it was described a bit more and spaced out, but its good nonetheless.
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I really like the concept there. You should try rewriting it... this is the sort of story that should move very slowly, from a distance, and it should be a little more mysterious. Good for a first try though ^^


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I really like the concept there. You should try rewriting it... this is the sort of story that should move very slowly, from a distance, and it should be a little more mysterious. Good for a first try though ^^
i think its good for my first time
but right now im rewritting it.. and hopeful it gets better
everyone wants to know who the story ends ^_6





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I actually like the idea of leaving the ending where it is at the moment. Why? It's mysterious :P. It leaves it up to the imagination...


"One reason why mathematics enjoys special esteem, above all other sciences, is that its laws are absolutely certain and indisputable, while those of other sciences are to some extent debatable and in constant danger of being overthrown by newly discovered facts."
Albert Einstein

"What science can there be more noble, more excellent, more useful for men, more admirably high and demonstrative than mathematics."
Benjamin Franklin

"Mathematics, rightly viewed, possesses not only truth, but supreme beauty – a beauty cold and austere, like that of sculpture, without appeal to any part of our weaker nature, without the gorgeous trappings of paintings or music, yet sublimely pure and capable of a stern perfection such as only the greatest art can show."
Bertrand Russell

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I actually like the idea of leaving the ending where it is at the moment. Why? It's mysterious :P. It leaves it up to the imagination...
yup thats why i wrote the story





“Behavior is the mirror in which everyone shows their image”
- Johann Wolfgang von Goethe