Celebi Forest

Started by curiousnathan February 3rd, 2010 1:19 AM
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curiousnathan

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Australia
Seen October 18th, 2020
Posted October 5th, 2020
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A baby tree sapling glitters in the sun,
Hoping one day to be big like everyone,
Day after day it still doesn't grow,
we need a special friend to help it no?
Peacful and quiet
but quite energetic too,
cute green celebi comes to help...

That's so far it of my Celebi Forest Poem:
Please could some people give me honest criticsm.
Thankyou.
Age 29
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Seen October 13th, 2021
Posted February 2nd, 2017
1,093 posts
13.8 Years
I love to say that this piece of poetry is actually impressive.
The only three criticisms I have are as follows: 1) It's best to capitalize the first letter in every line in poetry 2) You mispelled peaceful, no big deal though 3) The last three lines don't seem to rhyme well.
Other than these, your poem is very well written.