Legend of the Jewel

Started by Eliana October 24th, 2004 3:44 PM
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Eliana

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Eliana: Hey cool! Yet ANOTHER rewrite! WOOHOO! XD as many of you know, I've attempted to write this a million times! yet it never worked!
Lugia: You have serious problemsseriously
Eliana: Well, same goes to you. Well, I decided to skip to the important part of my struggling Fanfic. Hopefully this one will work. Here goes..

The Legend- The Jewel of the Sea
Chapter One

Im in an egg. Yes, you heard me correctly. Im in a freaking egg. No, dont ask my how I got in the egg. I dont know. Nor do I know why fate chose me out of all people to end up in the Pokemon World. I just dont know. I might as well explain my story.

My name is Eliana Frim. I am an ordinary human being

well, at least I used to be.

It all began with the disappearance of my best friend, Rachel. Then I found this Lugia card on the ground, and I started blacking out and seeing white eyes
then, one day, I woke up and I wasnt in Massachusetts. Thats for sure. I then discovered a rather interesting creature, a Totodile. I then made another discovery. I could speak Pokemon. This struck me surprising. Humans arent really supposed to speak Pokemon, in case you didnt know. But it gets creepier. Soon enough, I have Team Rocket on my tracks, after me for no apparent reason. I managed to evade them most of the time. Figuring Totodile would come with me, I thought I might as well start a Pokemon Journey for the heck of it. Along the way, I met some very interesting people, who I felt I met before.

During that time, I ended up touring a ruin. The ruin depicted a legend, stating that Lugia, the Guardian of the Sea, who also happens to be one of my favorite Pokemon, held a very important artifact- The Jewel of the Sea. It is said to possess great powers, which only Lugia can withstand. The Legend then states that if Lugia were going to be destroyed, it would pass the jewel on to one fated to have it.
As I left that ruin, I thought it was pretty weird. I still do.

I also picked up a rival during the journey. Her name was Jenna, and she was REALLY hotheaded. I ran into her many times, and she was just as bad each time. Apparently, she rivals with someone else.
This someone else is nicer.
Mia. I always think of her as a mysterious person, because she is. Shes actually very calm. I dont understand how she stays that way when talking to Jenna. We see each other from time to time.
Then there is Electra. Shes probably the friendliest of the bunch.
A little too friendlybut we all get like that I guess.

I guess I can mention the twins. Ryo and Ryu. They are younger then me, I cant seem to figure out their age. And they are total opposites. One has red hair, the other blue. One actually seems older, and the other seems younger. And the younger one- Ryu- she is a handful. Once, she totally went nuts at the Celadon Department store. It was actually sort of funny. She ran through the aisles and knocked all the pokeballs over. Her brother gets really concerned though.

Anyways, back to the point

Eventually, I got all 8 badges. This is another thing I have no clue how I did it, but I did. This is when it gets a little interesting.

Julie, my Feraligatr, decided she wanted to go sailing near Cinnabar (shes weird). So we did she then decided to go swimming right into a whirlpool, which wasnt JUST a whirlpool, but a transporting whirlpooland I thought those only existed in video gameshow wrong I was

When the whirlpoolwellhow do I say itstopped spinning, we ended up in Jhoto. After a great deal of confusion, we decided we were probably in Whirl Islands. Exploring time. I knew exactly which Island held Lugia.
Lets just skip a few hours into the cave

We reached a dead end on a high cliff, 50 feet above water. Just as we were turning back, we met an enemy of ours. John is his name. Member of Team Rocket. I had no time to react. None. I watched as the Golbat that I had defeated many times before create a gust of wind with its scarred wings. I felt myself swiftly begin to slip and fall off the cliff. I managed to hold on with one hand. I knew I was dead. I knew I would never get out of the cave. I knew what was going to happen as I heard him walk over to the edge of the cliff.

Before I continue, I just want to say I 65% expected him to whisper, long live the king and push me off. If youve watched the Lion King, youd understand why. Well, I was close. He didnt say, Long live the king but he did push me off the cliff.

I fell. I said goodbye to the cruel harsh world and I fell. But the pain didnt come, the pain of the slapping of water, the impact of to much pressure colliding, the pain of suffocation, of death. Instead, from what I remember, I could have sworn I saw those eyes again, and I blacked out.

And here I am now. In an egg. How pleasant. Well, I THINK its an egg. How would I know? Does it look like I have been in an egg before? How about NO!
Wow. I never realized how boring something could be. No let me rephrase that-
I never realized anything could be more boring then that 2-hour lecture at school. I have probably been sitting here for an hour. It may not seem like much, but it is.


(Note: back to normal typing phew!)

~Elianas POV~
After sitting in the egg for a very long time, I noticed that my skin was turning white. I didnt panic, because I think it was because I was traumatized and my blood was doing strange things. At least my hair wasnt changing I thought as I held up a strand of hair.

I sighed as I felt the minutes pass by. A tingling feeling was shooting up my body. I gritted my teeth. I had a very itchy pain on my arm. I reached up to scratch it, only to result in screaming.

THE HECK?

My fingers were gone. They welded together! And one disappeared!

Oh my godIm turning into a freak!

I started panicking. What was happening to me?
I watched arms stretch out and get wider. My elbow practically disappeared. It actually looked like a wing. Same thing about the other arm. I dont know how much more I can take of this. Its creepy. Have YOUR arms ever turned into wings? I think not.

Oh and about my hair- I spoke way to soon.
Its gone now. All of it. I think Im turning into some Birdman.

I mean woman.
Back to the pointIm slowly drifting off into sleep
Goodbye, humanity. Its nice knowing you. I blacked out.


Eliana: Okay, a little short and boring, but its done. Thank you GOD! If all works now, I can now write INTERESTING THINGS! YES! XD
Lugia: I feel bad for you
Eliana: Why?
Lugia: Because youre a lost case
Eliana: Well if Im a lost case then youre a lost Suitcase! LOL! Get it? Case? Suitcase? LOL!
Lugia: UmEliana?
Eliana: *still laughing* Yeah?
Lugia: -_-;; That wasnt funny.
Eliana: What? *sigh* your right. XD
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Lily

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Interesting plot. o_O;

The main thing bothering me were those italicized words...>_>; Instead of..well...let's just say you basically summarized everything for me from first person POV, which I don't exactly agree on the style of the chapter. The first sentence, however or shall I say the first part, was interesting and urged me to continue, so you have my attention. As I read along, you mentioned you skipped parts? Not a good thing. XD Try not to summarize the entire thing, it would've been better if you had actually wrote it out.

Its nice knowing you.
One of the couple misuses of tenses and the commas. ;D Careful not to get them mixed up, I really dun like it if it's past to present then back to past, also the 'it's' and 'its.' 'IT's' basically means IT IS. XD It gets all confusing for Lily's poor corrupted mind, you see. Your details of the the 'bold' text were good, if not only for the shortage of length. x_X But otherwise, nice job. ^_^

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Eliana

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Thanks Lily Pichu ^^
And I know, But I had to get the chapter done.
What you saw in Italics was the reason I never finished my fanfics..and why I had to rewrite it so many times.
Dont worry now that I got it done I promise its gonna get better ^^
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[Sanity is not Statistical] --1984
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I don't follow. Is this a continuation of another FanFic, because it seems that way, given the summary introduction. That's ok, but I was just wondering...

Other than that, it's not bad.
If you spend too much time thinking about a thing, you will never get it done.

- Bruce Lee

The worst thing you can do in a business is blame the customer.

- Willie 'Jack' Degel

Eliana

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No, but I attempted to write it many times before, and I mixed the ways I tried to write it together. I know it seems terrible, but I promise you next chapter (whenever that will be) will be better!
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[Sanity is not Statistical] --1984
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OH MY GOD HOW FUNNY!!! I LOVE IT ELIANA, it reminds me of school girls gossipping (I can't spell...) Write some more I LOVE it!!!
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