I don't quite get what you're asking us to do. You told us nothing of the plot, so I guess you just want critique on the set-up? If so, here's my thoughts: It's been done before. A lot. Plenty of people have come in promising a darker, more realistic look on the Pokémon world, and there's nothing particularly outstanding about this one except for the fact that Hoenn and Johto's events seem to be happening at the same time. Your story may be the best one in the world, but from here it just looks like another pitch at the Pokémon World as viewed through jade-tinted glasses. I can't give you any help, since you don't provide much to go off of except a bit of background information on the new law passed.