Under The Same Sky

Started by Misheard Whisper March 14th, 2010 12:51 AM
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Misheard Whisper

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Age 28
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Seen October 3rd, 2022
Posted September 27th, 2022
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Well, for starters, this poem has such a darned random rhythm and rhyme scheme that I hesitate to call it a poem, but at least I think I managed to get it to kinda flow. I haven't done much poetry before, especially not in this vein (I much prefer writing prose), so please be nice.
Also, total noob in the whole romance field here, so this will probably be terrible in concept as well as execution! ^_^ Just a heads-up. To be perfectly honest, I feel really awkward writing this, but if I can do it now, I can try and do it again.

Under The Same Sky

I've been watching you for so, so long
Wanting you, though I know it's wrong
There's something preventing us being together
Isn't there?

You made me happy when you called my name
But somehow, it's just not the same
As I so would have loved it to be
Is it?

Years and years I've waited for you
Praying that you were waiting too
But I could never read your feelings
Could I?

I don't understand why it never could be
We've been together for so long, you and me
Breathing the same air, lit by the same light
Haven't we?

Our lives were so close, but somehow far
Every night, gazing at the same stars
I was longing for a love that could never be
Wasn't I?

Will it go on like this, together but apart?
Will there ever be a cure for a longing heart?
I'll just have to go on living, with you
Under the same sky -

~~~~~

Eueeee, that failed so hard. ^_^;;; You have no idea how tempted I am not to post this right now.


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It may not be your best, but it's absolutely not a failure. I actually found it somewhat soothing to read it.
Though it's not perfect, it's very good for one of your earlier works. Keep up the good work.


Also, I don't really think of it as being random at all; it has a unique pattern to my point of view.