Under the Bed

Started by Daydream March 31st, 2010 2:02 PM
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Daydream

Boo.

Age 29
Male
That thar Kingdom. The United one.
Seen July 2nd, 2020
Posted June 27th, 2018
702 posts
13.7 Years
Under the Bed

Into the night.
A fright, A fright.
Gone into night.
A fright.

On my door.
Under the floor.
Inwards it seeps.
Inwards creeps.

Into the night.
A fright, A fright.
Gone into the night.
A fright.

“Mother” , I call,
Before I fall.
“A monster in here,
And it gets near!”

Into the night.
A fright, A fright.
Gone into the night.
A fright.

“Father!” I shout,
“Make it get out!”
Still, so I lie.
I start to cry.

Into the night.
A fright, A fright.
Gone into the night.
A fright.

Soft warm glow and,
A smile does show.
A hug, with love,
Gives the demon a shove.

Into the night.
A fright, A fright.
Gone into the night.
A fright.

We all had monsters in our rooms right? This little poem is to express that. Any help is much appreciated, my wording on some of the lines may be a bit awkward.
Noble Magic
Courtly intrigue; may contain lightning bolts and necromancy.
Age 28
Female
Las Vegas, NV (No, it's not that great...)
Seen October 15th, 2014
Posted October 2nd, 2014
565 posts
13.3 Years
This is good! ^_^ I really liked the format and the way it rhymed. Everything was good, but I stumbled a bit where the father part comes in. Just the punctuation on "Still, so I lie" I think I paused too long ^^; Other than that, great work! I'd like to hear other poems from you later on =)


Daydream

Boo.

Age 29
Male
That thar Kingdom. The United one.
Seen July 2nd, 2020
Posted June 27th, 2018
702 posts
13.7 Years
It's good to know someone likes it. (: I actually struggled with the writing of "Still, so I Lie." I wanted to rhyme and still make some sense and that was the only way I could seem to make it fit really.

Thanks again for reading the poem. (:
Noble Magic
Courtly intrigue; may contain lightning bolts and necromancy.

Daydream

Boo.

Age 29
Male
That thar Kingdom. The United one.
Seen July 2nd, 2020
Posted June 27th, 2018
702 posts
13.7 Years
Aha. xD Poetry has lots of levels! But I wasn't even thinking Pokemon when I wrote this. o.o A poem about a Haunter, huh? Interesting...
Noble Magic
Courtly intrigue; may contain lightning bolts and necromancy.