Tomorrow

Started by Jess November 7th, 2004 7:49 PM
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Age 33
New York
Seen March 23rd, 2012
Posted January 2nd, 2005
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19.2 Years
I got bored, And felt like writing junk..XD
I didn`t feel in the poetic mood, So the poem may seem a lil depressed. :(
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Looking at tomorrow,
As if it were crystal clear.
I can feel the sorrow,
But I can`t fight away my fear.
Help me fight the pain,
Hiding from the dove,
I donot feel sane,
Where is the love?
Days will pass forever,
Memories are forgotten.
Will we be together,
Or will our souls remain rotten?
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Age 62
Male
Melbourne, Australia
Seen April 26th, 2018
Posted June 9th, 2014
11,439 posts
19.7 Years
It all fits but the last line, the "rotten" bit... it kind of jumps out at you. ^^


"One reason why mathematics enjoys special esteem, above all other sciences, is that its laws are absolutely certain and indisputable, while those of other sciences are to some extent debatable and in constant danger of being overthrown by newly discovered facts."
Albert Einstein

"What science can there be more noble, more excellent, more useful for men, more admirably high and demonstrative than mathematics."
Benjamin Franklin

"Mathematics, rightly viewed, possesses not only truth, but supreme beauty – a beauty cold and austere, like that of sculpture, without appeal to any part of our weaker nature, without the gorgeous trappings of paintings or music, yet sublimely pure and capable of a stern perfection such as only the greatest art can show."
Bertrand Russell

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Seen March 30th, 2005
Posted March 11th, 2005
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^^;; Um, it was kinda threatening in a way. XD But still a nice poem nonetheless. I saw a few spelling errors and some diction that could be improved, but you said you weren't in a poem writin' mood anyhow. XD Good job on it! ^0^

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Age 62
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Melbourne, Australia
Seen April 26th, 2018
Posted June 9th, 2014
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XD There should be some website that tells you rhyming words...

You could use "begotten", but then that's rhyming -gotten with -gotten o_O


"One reason why mathematics enjoys special esteem, above all other sciences, is that its laws are absolutely certain and indisputable, while those of other sciences are to some extent debatable and in constant danger of being overthrown by newly discovered facts."
Albert Einstein

"What science can there be more noble, more excellent, more useful for men, more admirably high and demonstrative than mathematics."
Benjamin Franklin

"Mathematics, rightly viewed, possesses not only truth, but supreme beauty – a beauty cold and austere, like that of sculpture, without appeal to any part of our weaker nature, without the gorgeous trappings of paintings or music, yet sublimely pure and capable of a stern perfection such as only the greatest art can show."
Bertrand Russell

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