~im a caterpie~

Started by lizardman November 21st, 2004 3:38 PM
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Age 30
In your dreams
Seen December 19th, 2006
Posted April 2nd, 2005
383 posts
18.8 Years
i'm a caterpie,but i want to become a butterfree.like u wanted me to be.im going to be a butterfree and thats right...the one who keeps u in my sight,soaring in to the night.im going to be a butterfree......

how do u like it???
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Seen March 30th, 2005
Posted March 11th, 2005
1,912 posts
18.6 Years
OK, the whole 'plot' of the poem is good, but you seriously have to wrok on spelling, and you poem should be in the format that I have it, and other people have it in their poem threads, it's just easier to pick out the flow that way. I'd say do a whole revision of the poem, then repost it here and we'll have another look at it. ^_~

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