The Recieving of Memories

Started by Starr Leonhart October 8th, 2010 12:28 PM
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Starr Leonhart

Summertime <3

Age 25
Female
Not at your house.
Seen August 8th, 2017
Posted June 24th, 2013
54 posts
14.5 Years
If you haven't guessed I wrote this poem about the book The Giver. It's a really good book if you haven't read it. This was written for a project in my Language Arts class at school.
Read and review, please!

The Recieving of Memories

His hands on my back,
My busy mind going slack.

A terrifing memory,
Started to fill me.

War and blood,
I would scream if I could.

His hands leave me,
I gasp, with labored breathing.

He looks at me with sad eyes,
This is leading to his demise.

With a tearful look,
He motions, I'm off the hook.

As I ride home,
I decide I want to be alone.

These memories I do hate,
But I recieve them,
Because the Giver's thirst I must sate.
I love Castle.

Starr Leonhart

Summertime <3

Age 25
Female
Not at your house.
Seen August 8th, 2017
Posted June 24th, 2013
54 posts
14.5 Years
Hmmm...The Giver doesn't seem to ring a bell.
The poem, however, is great. I really liked it!
Keep up the good work.
thank you ever so much!
that means a lot to me!
I love Castle.

Starr Leonhart

Summertime <3

Age 25
Female
Not at your house.
Seen August 8th, 2017
Posted June 24th, 2013
54 posts
14.5 Years
Neither to me. XD;

I don't think the poem is bad at all. It has a nice rhyme as well.
So.. have you described about the story of the book in this poem?
no. but i was describing a certain memory that the main charcater had.
it was a memory of the Civil War.
I love Castle.

Missingno.7-4468

The Kazuka Party is for curry!

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Posted July 14th, 2011
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Wow, I'm surprised more people haven't heard of/read the book. It even won a Newberry. 0.o

Anyway, I love the poem, and I remember this part in the book. I don't have anything bad to say about it, nice work on this one!

^ This one is 500 px long for sure >_>

Starr Leonhart

Summertime <3

Age 25
Female
Not at your house.
Seen August 8th, 2017
Posted June 24th, 2013
54 posts
14.5 Years
I remember The Giver, it was a very good story. I absolutely love this poem, it's so...emotional. Powerful in a subtle way. It's hard for me to explain, but I don't have any criticism of it.
thanks! i tried to make it as emotional as i could.
I love Castle.