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Seen September 20th, 2011
Posted September 20th, 2011
24 posts
13.8 Years
The journal is rather interesting but it shows some errors.

For one, It lacks punctuation D: (poor periods)!
I think it's kinda weird that every sentence has very little structure to it, I don't see a plot here anytime soon.

Although I could be wrong because some journal entry I read in the past reflects on modern world. I would think a Pokemon type journal entry would come around soon (not that I think Pokemon COULD reflect...but it could show those what-cha-call-it think at the end of Aesop fables...I don't know something like that).

The story itself really throws me off. I'm saying this because when I first saw it, I was confused whether it was a story or a poem. I can't see the veins within the writing.

Overall the story is competent, not too good, not too bad.


Hope this review help.
"Everyone seems to have a clear idea of how other people should lead their lives, but none about his or her own." ― Paulo Coelho, The Alchemist