FireRed hack: Pokemon Alumminium : Legend of Celebi

looks good but I seen a couple of tile errors. also your maps are a little blank.

Ok will fix that :D
Thanks for the constructive critisism :)

First off, there is no element called aluminium. There is; however, an element called aluminum. Which name did you mean?

TB Pro said:

First off, there is no element called aluminium. There is; however, an element called aluminum. Which name did you mean?

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Infact, i believe, that if he is from anywhere other than the US it's pronounced aluminium.

I did chemistry at College level last year and we called it that all year.

anyways, onto the hack. My main criticism would be the mapping. You need to fill more space, which, if you find challenging, you could solve by cutting them down in size?

Well, on the topic of the title, I think that you should at least try to keep it consistent within the thread. You've spelt it one way in the thread title, and a completely different way throughout the rest of the thread. Pressing enter after every line in the story is pretty annoying to read.

From what I can tell, something is wrong with the sprites. These shouldn't happen to the hero and the Grunt:


The mapping can use some work as well. They're really empty and I see a ton of tile errors. You should try to use all of the grass tiles, to make it look better. You could post some stuff in the Map rating and review thread to have it reviewed further.

Also, if you're going to rip the CSS from Celestium, at least take some effort in changing some of the content. I'm a bit annoyed that you kept some of the thread ideas I had for the original Celestium thread. It's a pretty clear rip off; not to be rude but it certainly is. I guess if Jesse's fine with it...

Well good luck with the hack. With a little map revamping and fixing some inaccuracies, we might have something more worth while ;D

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That grunt sprite error only happened because VBA slightly froze when i did a screen capture + That is an old screenshot
What happened to the heroine is because of the 32x32 OW will be fixed

This hack has to be one of the most with potential on this site, seriously, if you finish it, it will be great, but the mapping could use some work, try adding flowers and stuff to give it a natural feeling in-game, remember, it could look crowed in A-Map, but empty in game

KingCyndaquil said:

This hack has to be one of the most with potential on this site, seriously, if you finish it, it will be great, but the mapping could use some work, try adding flowers and stuff to give it a natural feeling in-game, remember, it could look crowed in A-Map, but empty in game

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:D Thanks very much,
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:D For those who want to learn the hidden plot PM and i will give you a sneek peak into it!

*bump* ok i've realised i'm gonna need a team,
So i need a mapper, a gfx hacker poible and definately an ASM hacker

I like the storyline. The beginning part is very similar to the beginning of my own hack, in that you wake up in a ruined town. I just think that maybe the mapping needs a little more work and this would be a very strong hack indeed.

Re-done the maps cant update right now or work :( Split my head open...
Long story wont be updates for a while

Nice Hack, nice storyline... however it does need improvement like what many others have said before I did. And yet there are so many tile errors and some of the tiles that need to be edited. Here, I'll circle the areas that need to be improved on:


First one is the tile in the top left part of the map, it has a shadow behind it, I believe that FireRed has these sort of trees to not have any shading on the top row of small trees

The second problem is non other than the corners of the rocky terrain area, the corners are pretty much the other way around, they should be fixed to make them look more like rocky corners.

The third problem is the bits of grass on the map, they look very much as if they don't have the correct colour on some of them, they have a more darker green on the ground than the one that matches the ground colour.

And finally last... but not at least, the area around where the stairs are... they look like they have a rocky surface, it's better if it the tile for it was changed to a grassy area with a bit of a rocky bit at the end, similar to what it would look like in Pokémon Diamond.


Edit: Oh and also, don't forget... maps and terrain should look more rounder than being so square, and adding some flowers wouldn't be a bad idea either like what KingCynderquil said, it would give a more natural feel to it.

Edit 2: Another problem that I've spotted but haven't circled, it's one part of the fence on the top right end that has a bit of wrong colouring for the grass.

^what was the point of that?

anyway
Look at the signs there is a small amount of discoloration around the bottom.


Also just a little irk why would the Lab have the word Lab on it? It would have Laboratory or a sign out front,and it looks like it was just written on there as if by a graffiti artist where as the letters should be straighter and neater. sorry it just bugged me.

It is looking good I hope you fix the mapping errors and finish the Hack,Best of Luck.

I've read a lot of criticisms in your maps. And you should really fix it. But other than that I think it's amazing.

TB Pro said:

First off, there is no element called aluminium. There is; however, an element called aluminum. Which name did you mean?

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Actually, both is correct. :P
It's not spelt with two 'm's, though. :\
You have Alumminium while it's Aluminium or Aluminum. But I'm sure that's just a typo since the main title on the pirst post is Aluminium, but the hack name is Alluminium. :P

The storyline seems OK, but you should really fix your tiles and your maps.

when will a alpha/beta of this hack be out by?

shadowfang57, please don't bump threads that haven't been posted in for over a month.

Elite Trainer Red, if you would like is thread to be reopened then just contact either giradialkia or myself.