God's gift

Started by OmegaRuby and AlphaSapphire October 22nd, 2010 4:24 PM
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Age 28
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Oregon
Seen September 24th, 2018
Posted July 3rd, 2018
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Hey I'm new in this section of PC :)
This is my poem for the Poem contest thread (
http://www.pokecommunity.com/showthread.php?t=228837&page=4) I'll like to know what people think about it :):
God’s gift
God gave us life
He gave us the ability to love and to seek
This beautiful gift is too precious to waste
One must enjoy one’s life with the same grace as it was created from
Though one mustn’t forget the one who gave him life
With this gift I can build sky scrappers, go to the stars, and move about
This world full of god’s gifts
The bright light that makes us move
The ether that gives us the will to continue
In this hell of a world
I'm currently working on some novels. If you're interested you can read them here:
https://www.wattpad.com/user/ImperialSun
Age 28
Male
'.' Why would I say?
Seen January 4th, 2013
Posted December 25th, 2010
71 posts
12.6 Years
I love it. It may be more literal than most, but that doesn't necessarily make it bad, it makes it unconventional. It still flows well and shows the author's viewpoint well. You're a talented poet, MRAS(: If you aren't happy with it, though, practice makes perfect. There are a lot of guides in the stickies at the top of this section. It's kind of sad how inactive this part of the forum is, but with each person who starts posting poems, it gets a little more active ^.^
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